@Progenitus Oh! I see. So rather than an activated ability, her Edges are passives that are only manifested when the situation calls for it? Did I get that right?

@TheHangedMan
Well, most of them are passive "qualities" her transformed form acquires, but not all; and they all are tied to the Noble Arm activation, so they are there when she calls upon Magnanimous Unbound Sun and not there when she is not doing that(apart from the lingering effects of them on her body or mind - if her immune system acquires antibodies against particular toxin, those aren't going to suddenly vanish with the regeneration - they are completely normal part of her body, as is more dense bones and skin or golden eyes and hair).

@Progenitus Understood, she's definitely going to be an interesting addition. Alright, go ahead and post her in the Characters tab.

Any chance this will get rejected? Any 'critique' about the abilities?

"Juggernaut-Scouring Stars" will running into that feel more like hitting a prickly wall, or like running into a shredder?

Shredder, most certainly.

Assuming you're running fast enough.

Indeed. It's more of a repellent and personal defense than means of damaging a person - though the dust is indeed INCREDIBLY fine and as such one applies incredible pressure to his flesh when pressing against this mist. My primary attack is just encasing anyone who will come into my range.

@Keksalot Mind putting your _GIANT! cs in a hider in case I ever want to scroll below it?_{I jest, I jest :<}

No. The tower must stand tall.

Though actually i will.

I know appearance(of both the char and the noble arm) and bio are rather short, and personality is IMO a bit indescriptive too, but it's midnight and I am too tired to continue at the moment. I'll add to them tomorrow. The rest is more or less done, so critique is appreciated.

Name: Pablo Legazpi

Age: 16

Nationality: Filipino

Noble Arm Name & Appearance: Pag-Asa Ng Mundo (Hope of the World)



Noble Arm Abilities:

Hope Sense - Pablo can sense hope, despair, or even related emotions such as anticipation as long as he has his Noble Arm summoned. This power extends for ten meters in a 360 degree angle around him, allowing the boy to sense people sneaking up behind him.

Hope Manipulation - The Kalis can use Pablo's own hope to create hard-light constructs that are as strong as Pablo's willpower, forcefields which are the same, and of course, heal people. However, the weakness of this is that it uses up hope, meaning that if Pablo overuses it, not only does he get the normal effects of overexerting himself, but he also falls into deep depression caused by, well, emptying his reserves of hope.

Willing Gift of Hope - Pablo can take another person's hand, and, if said person is willing, take part of his or her hope in order to power his weapons. Can be used on multiple people.

List of Hope Manipulation Constructs:

This is by no means an extensive list; also, Pablo can choose what color his constructs are.

Basic Shield Aura - Pablo projects a basic shield around himself; said shield is a construct that he can move telekinetically and otherwise manipulate, allowing him to fly, float, or add speed and force to his movements. Color is most often Pink.

Wings of Light - Pablo manifests two Angel-like wings from his back, which can be used for additional flight, but are more often meant to intimidate, buffet objects like a blunt club, or sharpen themselves so that they can cut through steel. Colors are most often Pink, Purple, or Rainbow.

Rho Aias - Pablo can create a shield made up of seven flower petals made from light, which, again, is as strong as his willpower. You know the drill; it's colored Pink.

Bigsby's Giant Hand - A giant hand that can be used for punching, holding, and breaking things.

Imitation Object - Pablo can make a hard-light duplicate of an ordinary object, or even a Noble Arms, that has the same colors as the original, but upon touch, is easily detectable as a hard-light object. Useful for deception.

Enuma Eilish - Pablo can create a tornado of energy around his Kalis, and unleash said tornado as a blast of light at a target or group of targets. However, the power of said blast is dependent on 1.) how much hope Pablo has, and 2.) how much hope others are willing to give him with Willing Gift of Hope. Thus, depending on those two factors, Pablo's Enuma Eilish can be C+ Level or even A+. Again, depending on those two factors.

Personality: Pablo is a naturally reckless person who relies on his powers too often, but can take advice when needed. He also has a high opinion of himself and his intelligence, as well as a sense of self-loathing whenever this high opinion is proven to be wrong. Despite this, however, Pablo is a kind person, one who focuses on helping others as well as himself, and is aware of his flaws. He is someone who wants to have friends, and goes to great lengths to get people to like him and keep liking him.

*Likes: Sweets, Swordsmanship, History and Literature.

*Dislikes: Bullies, Spicy Food.

Fears: Showing his darker side to his peers.

Bio: Pablo's great-grandparents were migrant workers who came to the city of Manila in the Magsaysay Administration, looking for opportunity, and unlike many others, finding it. While said great-grandparents were menial workers, their children, Pablo's grandparents, were lowly clerks, while Pablo's mother became a lawyer and his father an Eskrima instructor. And so, Pablo grew into some wealth and affluence, despite his mother frequently taking on cases for free. Despite this, Pablo's life seemed normal, although he was more intelligent than his peers by a large margin, to the point where he took advanced classes. This made him feel isolated, and also the target of bullies. It became worse when he realized that he was bisexual early on.

He was afraid that if anyone found out, he would be expelled from his family and left out in the streets; he didn't want that. But at the same time, this was what he was born with, and he couldn't change it - he tried. The only people he can confide his secrets to, as well as doubts, were people on the Internet. Yes, foolish idea, but as long as he didn't reveal his name and personal details, he would be all right, right? Wrong, because eventually, one of those people, a woman, found out his personal details and tried to blackmail him for money.

Pablo had to make a choice; risk his secret coming out, or steal from what was not his? He chose the former, and he 'came out' to his mother that day. Surprisingly, his mother was understanding; not entirely approving, but not rejecting, either. And so they chose to confront the potential blackmailer together, Pablo's mother had a gun, just in case.

The blackmailer turned out to be one a former plaintiff that Pablo's mother had successfully prosecuted, and now sought to ruin the life of her family in response. She was also a Noble Arms master with the a Gauntlet that controlled darkness. Caught in a trap, Pablo and his mother risked death...until Pablo manifested his own Noble Arm, the Noble Arm of Hope. Taken by surprise, the blackmailer was defeated through a combination of quick moves and sucker punches by Pablo. And after that, the boy transferred to Trinindad Academy, rejecting offers from more reputable institutions because Trinidad Academy was both in his country and closer to home.

Besides, he wanted to see if the New Director can pull off what he promised...

*Current Goal: See if the New Director can make Trinidad Academy a place for heroes.

Student Rank: 1000

*Optional

For the latter one, you didn't really have to explain certain skills such as Juggernaut-Scouring Stars because you can already infer something like this is possible from the potential of your Noble Arm.

I'm pretty sure Juggernaut-Scouring Stars was made a specific sub-skill because it requires imagining extremely fine dust, which is hard and necessitates specific rote-training.

a Noble Arm which is capable of shooting any projectile strung on its string farther than any bow imaginable and with more force than any style of bow.

Does this cover only things specifically meant to be projectiles, or it's literally any projectile? Can you string a handful of water or sand? A blade of grass? A ray of sunlight? Some words?

(I have a good name for that, if the second one is true. Generalized Ammo Technique :3 )

Okay...should I make Pablo more powerful? If so, what levels are permitted?

@Letter Bee

I'd start with making him more extensive and well-defined, tbh. List half a dozen of hard-light constructs he uses the most, or something akin to that. Otherwise, I'd say he's fine.

I'm sure the GM would say the final word when he shows up, though.

Yeah, pablo is totally casul earth-tier weakling character, he won't last for TEN POSTS in this hardcore competitive game, you better step it up, fillipino boiiii

@Altasaire, Thanks, will edit.

@Keksalot, You serious, or sarcastic?

@Altasaire
It can shoot anything that can be normally strung, with the exception of the blood arrows cause... magic but yeah. Outside of the blood arrows, nothing else can fired that are that weird. So no instantaneous sniping with light arrows and all of those shenanigans, but swords, javelins, and anything else that can look like it can be strung can be loaded onto the bow (it's just not practical to shoot with, but if its a Noble Arms with an AoE watch out :P).

@Letter Bee
Do i look like a goddamn comedian to you, huh?
I'm DEAD serious about how horribly and incredibly unviable your character is like dang man i am at loss for words, Johnny Joestar was stronger and his damn power was SPINNING FINGERNAILS