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I think I'm good here! @Gowi If you've got anything you think I need to edit, I'm on discord. Yeah, she seems slightly divergent on what you gave me information wise, though given how vague it was I enjoyed designing her.
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I'm probably going to get my character posted tomorrow.
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I think I'm good here! @Gowi If you've got anything you think I need to edit, I'm on discord. Yeah, she seems slightly divergent on what you gave me information wise, though given how vague it was I enjoyed designing her.

I think so too outside of some formatting blips I've already mentioned to you in the chat.
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C H A R A C T E R



"I sleep with both eyes open."

[ ♚ ] N A M E
Princess Nikalai Sandsdri Lothlahr of Kingdom Lothloryen

[ ♚ ] A G E
17.

[ ♚ ] G E N D E R
Female

[ ♚ ] I D E N T I T Y
Ethnicity: Zkreli

[ ♚ ] A P P E A R A N C E
A prime example of warrior breeding, Nikalai easily reaches 6 feet in height (and still growing), with long legs and strong arms. Her pale blonde hair is well past her shoulders in length and almost always kept up in intricate braids that serve as fashionable and practical. One’s long hair can get in the way of more important things. But one does want to look their best when beheading a goblin.

Fair skin and a pointed nose, sharp blue eyes with strong brows, Nikalai is an imposing figure. Luckily her full mouth is more often barred in a grin rather than a snarl.

While she is attractive she might not be considered beautiful or pretty. More…Intimidatingly stunning?

[ ♚ ] P E R S O N A L I T Y
Bold, strong willed, opinionated. Just a few words to describe Nikalai. In a world where the strong and fearless rule and the weak don’t make it long Nikalai was raised to be a resilient ruler.

Cunning and swift with her tongue Nikalai can be sharp with her words and a brute when angry. She works often to control her temper and while she is one to act quickly, has learned that patience is key. Watch your prey, know your enemy.

But Nikalai is not all fight and hunter. She is also good humored and quick to laugh (almost as quick she is to anger). While being a Princess has led her to enjoy a more genteel life, she by no means is delicate. She is just as likely to punch a friend in the arm as she is to ‘giggle’ at their witty banter. And she is not above pranks. Not at all.

While it is difficult to make friends with Nikalai, and even more so to gain her trust or respect, once that relationship is gained Nikalai is loyal almost to a fault.

[ ♚ ] C H I L D H O O D
Nikalai had a normal childhood. You know…Learning to hunt down orcs and goblins, learning to throw a spear before she could properly walk. Knife play at the dinner table. The usual.

With an older brother leading by example Nikalai learned quickly and enthusiastically. Her parents encouraged her studies and it was always understood that she would go off to school one day.

Forever the dare devil and feeling the need to keep up with the older boys and squires Nikalai had a tremendous amount of hope and tenacity. And luck seemed to be on her sides, regularly getting out of situations that were down right dangerous with little more than a scraped knee or a bloodied nose.

When her brother went missing (Nikalai was rather young at the time) she never lost hope that he would return. And much to the families shock and joy he did. This magical return of her beloved sibling further instilled Nikalai with the belief that if you wanted something bad enough it would come true.


[ ♚ ] M O T I V E S
With Nikalai’s propensity for stealth and cunning it was clear she could benefit from a higher level of education. Additionally it is tradition to send the heirs off to school. So off she went. While it was annoying to be removed from her life in the cliffs, her adventures and thrills decreased, Nikalai knows her family only want what is best for her and so begrudgingly is going with the plan.

[ ♚ ] C R E D E N T I A L S


Diplomacy: While Nikalai is charming in a blunt sort of way, she has never been considered one to mince her words.

Faith: Her faith is more in her own abilities than anything else.

Intrigue: She does love knowing secrets, figuring out what makes other people tick. While she is not diplomatic, she is cunning.

Magic: She’ll leave that to her brother.

Martial: Now you’re talking! Skilled in combat and in tactics Nikalai already excels in this topic and will continue to do so.

Stewardship: While trained to understand mathematics, there is no great passion for those sorts of things.

[ ♚ ] C O M P A N I O N S
A few servants, nothing particularly notable.

[ ♚ ] R E L A T I O N S

Uncle Alaric Lothlahr, Marshal of The Conclave and Instructor of Martial Studies
Prometheus Artemis Lothlahr (older brother)

Several acquaintances from here and there, other Princes and Princesses from neighboring Kingdoms. You know, Social things.

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This one is going for the minimalistic approach, huh? Haha, anyway the few things that I notice is that outside of the brevity is that you used Katherine Winnick as a faceclaim— though I was not expecting someone to use a faceclaim outside of the breadth of anime and while I prefer it I can understand difference of preferences. I just think keeping the style uniform would be excellent if you could. It’s not a big deal if you don’t want to, though.

I’d also like you to expand on some of your descriptions of childhood, personality, and credentials. Perhaps elaborate on some childhood events of personality traits like the other sheets have done so currently— once this is done I can probably contently accept it and get the ball rolling. Is that alright?

I also fixed some of the formatting in the reviewed CS.
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@Polaris North Makes sense, send me any shared history you and Sterling come up with
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Oh hey look a rudimentary timeline.
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When is our RP starting again? I mean... what year on that timeline?
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When is our RP starting again? I mean... what year on that timeline?

567 AR, right after Patriarch Theodoric kicks it (several weeks). Honestly I might lead up from the school following a funeral procession but I'm not sure.
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Currently working on a princess from House Hahra!
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Currently working on a princess from House Hahra!

Be sure to collaborate with @Cupertino!
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<Snipped quote by Jay Kalton>
Be sure to collaborate with @Cupertino!


Yup, yup. PM me when you can @Jay Kalton.
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I've updated both my characters relations.
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Oh shit, peasant rebellions! That actually works pretty well with Seldo's philosophy. Also, @Gowi, updated Seldo's relationship to Anareliea.
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Okay, so I am so super inspired for this I will have three (or four) GMPC's which will be challenging indeed. I'll cap myself off with Kingdom POVs to be fair to any other players as this RP is not just going to be the Gowi-land super show. I hope nobody feels this too intrusive of me as a GM and as a player, I'm just so...



...pumped!

Oh and the map is wrong so Gowi will fix.
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Ah, I was out and didn't get a chance to work on my bio. ^^; I'll post tomorrow.
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@Gowi


I understand that some of this may need some work, so feel free to point out what's wrong and what you need me to do. Sorry if it's quite short, I have a more minimalistic writing style.
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As far as I have noticed there’s only real one typo to correct here, so I did that with red font like all the others. Also I would like to mention vizier is more of a thing in The Three Sands rather than in the northlands. Just as a thing to know. The rest is pretty good to go and I like how you came to the conclusion of the dark knights concept with me forgetting to mention that the aladori tend to paint their crafted armor generally black. I ought to get the aladori knightly orders up on the wiki sometime soon.

Oh, pagan gods pretty much (for humans) are not really a thing. There were varied beliefs and interpetations of Gaea pre-imperium, but they were all uniquely originative towards The Goddess, Gaea.

But yeah go ahead and transfer it over.

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I understand that some of this may need some work, so feel free to point out what's wrong and what you need me to do. Sorry if it's quite short, I have a more minimalistic writing style.

A minimalist writing style makes it easier for me to review, I think. I've marked corrections in red font that I noticed; adjust accordingly.

The first thing I should probably ask about is the given name, Prometheus. Given the zkreli are a warrior culture at their heart and are the least frivolous culture group in the entire realm I’m having struggles figuring out how the King of Lothloryen would name his son Prometheus. I could see a forloni lord naming him as such, but yeah. So once we figure that out we could probably move forward. Additionally given the least financially viable options and his family’s likely concerns over magic how would he get his hand on magical mentors to instruct him in the art? I could have some alternate ideas in this regard but I’m curious how you justify such.

Everything else seems fine outside of the age being a bit on the older scale of things and I would prefer folks to be in the academy’s average area of admittance (16-17 being on the higher end).

You may also have the option (if you want to) to have been at The Conclave prior to the RP start so that you are already a dedicated student.

Also unless I'm mistaken, pretty sure humankind has only had the one god, Gaea, not many. So the plural text strikes me as odd.

Hope that is all helpful inquiries regarding it!

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