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Hey @Scarifar, you didn't happen to come from the old PMC forums, did you? Your name looks awfully familiar...
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Hey @Scarifar, you didn't happen to come from the old PMC forums, did you? Your name looks awfully familiar...


I was once a PMC roleplayer, yes.
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@Vongola_Hasayo you said you need help with an idea for semblance, right? What about something that exemplifies his wild attacks? Like something along the lines of making temporary duplicates of himself that can easily be destroyed (one or two hits) but their power is in numbers and overwhelming opponents. They will probably be a lot weaker than the original Leaf and are wild cards. This means they will and can attack anything, except their other clones and Leaf himself. Leaf has no control over how any of them act and can attack any without repercussion to himself. Probably have five to ten at once and depending on how many they are x times weaker than Leaf (ex. ten Leafs would mean their attacks would be 10x weaker). Maybe call it Pack Mentality?

That's my recommendation. I would say to iron it out if you wish to choose it as it's rather... rough from my viewpoint and might not be balanced.

On a side note, gonna try and get thirty minutes in to review more, but once that's up I'm out for an hour or so.
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@Savo
Hey, I'm working on my CS, and was wondering if you and your Co-GM decided to let me substitute a weapon for a stronger semblance! If you'd like, I can finish it all up and post it here, and if you deem it too OP, I can just change it! ^_^
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@Savo
Hey, I'm working on my CS, and was wondering if you and your Co-GM decided to let me substitute a weapon for a stronger semblance! If you'd like, I can finish it all up and post it here, and if you deem it too OP, I can just change it! ^_^


You're good to go on this, though I hope it isn't too overpowering.
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Welp, here are my reviews! Hopefully I'm not too much of a hardass ><

@Raijinslayer
Erm, so basing her attack on thought will denote whether or not her invisibility breaks... or is it when she is about to attack? I feel this can be sort of a loophole abuse since she doesn't have to think I'm going to attack but just attack without a single thought... or am I getting this wrong somewhat?

I also feel like the CQC isn't much of a weakness since she has a shotgun to off put this flaw. Since she can maneuver around with her briskness and acrobatic abilities, it nullifies this part of her weakness. Also, never missing a shot... It looks like she can cover long and short range rather well.

Anyways, figure out a way to nerf her appropriately and then I'll judge her again.

@Rekaigan
Alright, so far I have no complaints nor any qualms about her so far, other than the name. Can you explain to me what part of it is a color as I might not understand it and be completely oblivious to it.

@Leslie Hall
I wonder how he came to afford the expenses for living outside of Atlas... or was he like 16-17ish when he fled? If that seems to be the case, I can only hope that he found a job because I'm gonna assume his parents aren't sending him money xP

Once you answer the above, your character can enter stage right, he can bask in the limelight of being one of the characters in the roleplay.

@tanderbolt
Thanks for the explaining the significance of that name, it makes my life a lot easier. Also, that is one old as hell looking student :P

Ozpin wants Mr. Adkins to join Beacon Academy! Sign up today at your local character tab today!

@floodtalon
I hope everyone isn't just going to use a basic name for their chary.

Anyways, the Midas Steel kid is good to go for now.

@NecroKnight
Even with the emotional reactions and constant focus, she feels somewhat overpowering. Quick hard attacks, speed isn't inhibited, and can easily close the distance if she can move briskly. While this does make her lack any ranged options, all she just needs to do is concentrate on keeping her semblance up and watch her allies in a group fight. While some semblances are stronger in singular combat or against multiple opponents, I feel there will be no tangible weakness unless you know her secrets or if she watches someone she loves get hurt. The latter can be nullified since she is strong and fast, along with nullifying damage.

If I'm incorrect on any of these, please correct me. Until then, I would say to nerf this semblance.

@Mr Allen J
No. And I mean no in a serious way. I mean, you copied and pasted the story that was in the previous roleplay you used him in and certain characters won't exactly exist during this time, i.e. Amber Echo, Jing-Que Xue, and Bran Brass. Along with that, it's Beacon xP

I know these details are minuscule but if you could correct these, he should be good to go.

@gohKamikaze
You have some of the same problems as Allen involving the backstory. I'll start with the minor part involving the minor name of the antagonist in your charys story. Is Felix Princeton a name based on color some how or no? If the answer is yes, ignore this bit. If the answer is no, could you change it to something a little more fitting?

One of the more major parts is him graduating from the Shade Huntsman Academy. I would say get rid of the part where he decided to attend Shade and rework it so he ends up attending Beacon since that's the setting of the story.

Fix those, and you should be alright.

@TheWindel
Just a minor thing you need to fix to be well off, though I am still questioning the "Not-Kirito" nickname. It feels forced in my opinion, but that's not part of this judgement. The roleplay setting is taking place in Beacon Academy, not Atlas.

I should probably add that statement somewhere in the op... Anyways, fix that, and you should be good to go.
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@TheWindel
Just a minor thing you need to fix to be well off, though I am still questioning the "Not-Kirito" nickname. It feels forced in my opinion, but that's not part of this judgement. The roleplay setting is taking place in Beacon Academy, not Atlas.

I should probably add that statement somewhere in the op... Anyways, fix that, and you should be good to go.


The nickname is an inside joke. You're not supposed to get it, regardless if you feel it's forced. In any case, I edited his bio to say Beacon instead of Atlas.
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@Savo

I could nerf her speed - making her a walking glacier instead. And I mentioned she has to concentrate - like the almost monk-type.

And with her short temper, it won't be up for long - until she gets training on it. I'd wager currently, she could hold it for five secs maybe ten. Not longer.
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<Snipped quote by Savo>

The nickname is an inside joke. You're not supposed to get it, regardless if you feel it's forced. In any case, I edited his bio to say Beacon instead of Atlas.


Alright, you are good to go. Hopefully Not-Asuna doesn't show up :P

@Savo

I could nerf her speed - making her a walking glacier instead. And I mentioned she has to concentrate - like the almost monk-type.

And with her short temper, it won't be up for long - until she gets training on it. I'd wager currently, she could hold it for five secs maybe ten. Not longer.


I'm good with the speed part and thank you for correcting me on the 5 - 10 seconds part. This part looks good to me.
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@Savo

So I can post my char?

Minus speed and with semblance nerf?
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@SavoDeciding on the action of attacking is what cause her to reform, so while she can target someone, like through a scope, and can prep for it(charging sequence), the moment she decides to go through with the act of attacking is when the ability starts to fade away.

As for weakness bit, I'll concede to that. I think a good weakness for her would be that her Aura is weaker than average due to her lack of properly training it, or that after using her semblance, she sometimes has episodes of out of character excitability and recklessness(which could be determined via Dice roll), causing her to put herself in more danger for the thrill of it?(not feeling the latter, really). As for the bit of her never missing, that was more of an exaggerated way if saying she's a good shot then an actual fact, and more applicable to her long range game then short. Dealing with a highly mobile foe, especially at Close range, will mean that she has a low chance of hitting them without back up. She really avoids 1v1 fights where she is facing another person, preferring to run away rather than risk getting taken down because she tried to play frontline.
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@Savo

So I can post my char?

Minus speed and with semblance nerf?


I was ok with everything you put down in your post, the nerf included. So add the nerfs and you should be good to go on posting.
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@Savo Princeton is a colour; it's an obscure trademarked shade of Orange :P As for the Shade bit, I've edited it to indicate that he earned a transfer from Shade to Beacon early on - but I've raised his age to 18, if that's okay.

Also, just on the Oasis stuff: There's no formal prep college for Shade in the RWBY EU, so I created Oasis as a sort of Vacuo counterpart to Signal in Vale.

@Scarifar I thought so; I used to RP a lot over there with Rabiez, Mdaddy, Nymus - that group. I'm pretty sure I've RP'd with you at one point or another.
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@Scarifar I thought so; I used to RP a lot over there with Rabiez, Mdaddy, Nymus - that group. I'm pretty sure I've RP'd with you at one point or another.


The only person I still remember is Rabiez, but oh my god is that a trip down memory lane. Sorry I don't remember you, though.
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@Savo

'Layla' means 'night' in Arabic. 'Semara' usually means 'guardian', but is also associated with 'night'.
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@Scarifar All good; I just read your name and went 'Why does that sound familiar?'

I haven't spoken to Rabiez in a while but I'm pretty sure he's still floating around somewhere.
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@Savo

When we starting this party?
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I will edit my sheet when I get a chance tomorrow, @Savo
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