If she has no current master, we expect this to be well-explained in the bio.

Could you please move the picture down here?

Firstly, look on this list for Force powers. Those are the ones pre-approved for aftermath. Any powers not specified there needs GM approval and good reasoning. The more powerful it is (and we know you love those really powerful ones), the better the reasoning has to be.

Does she have any skills not directly relevant to interactions with prisoners/sith?

How skilled is she at the various skills? What fields within alchemy has she specialized in? (mechanical, biological, static, etc.)

First of all:
The disagreement… Is it with the (war) policies of the empire, or is it with Sith training methods?

If the former:
Why are they even in the empire still? There’s no laws keeping them there. Sith who have such disagreements with the empire tend to withdraw to some world to play with their own things.
While its preferred that they do, Sith are not required to directly contribute to the War effort. Nyiss, for example, spent a good number of years not doing anything for the war.

If the latter:
While all Force-sensitives must be trained in the Empire, there is no rule saying that they have to be trained at the Korriban academy. Its perfectly acceptable for a master to train his (or her) own apprentices in private. Its more work, but it provides extra control over the regimen. Force-sensitive Dynastic families are quite common in the empire.
It would not be a bad fit for aftermath to have a Sith in there that isn’t academy trained. It would provide potential friction, which makes for fun times.

If its about being trained in the Force at all:
Have you truly read up on Sith purebloods? Being Sith and using the Force is a core aspect of this species.

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Sith training is not as restricted at the academy. The only real restrictions as to what an apprentice can learn is the lore (s)he can get hands upon. Some will focus on things like esoteric uses, some will take combat, some will be things like interrogation, etc. There is no single field that “everyone” or “most” focuses upon.

Force-users are harder to poison, and with training, they can learn to neutralize virtually all forms of venom and poison. Mind you, alchemy can create “impossible” ones that are far harder to counter, though these will naturally be tied to the dark side, and may thus be more effective upon non-Sith (i.e. Jedi). But that’s a digression.

Any Sith who has risen above neophyte/acolyte, but has not been granted the rank of Sith Lord / Darth is by definition an Apprentice. There is no “technically surpassed” someone of a higher rank. Two apprentices can be of wildly differing power levels, but they are still both apprentices.
A lord (or darth) typically has a quite considerable number of apprentices, but that does not mean they are equally relevant or valued.

Overall, I think there needs to be more here. I suggest reading the Sith Guide - it may inspire some things that are yet to be touched on by any Sith.

I assume when she was taken into the academy, she would already be considered talented with the force and so that statement is a little strange to have in there. Is there a specific talent or something that she displayed that would’ve attracted or had her assigned to the Inquisitor? From my understanding, much later down the road the students are exposed to the darker forms of the Empire/Sith culture like torture to front line combat, even ordering soldiers around. What did Zanna have that interested them enough to single her out to point out that she was to be assigned to that Sith? All is stated is the fact she showed she was Force talented but nothing to detail how or what with.

Some of my fellow apprentices died from the training , even before the cut throat murder to be the 'one' the master delivered all of his secrets to began. - This sentence reads a bit off to me. It might be because I don’t fully understand the subject. Namely as you jumped from your fellow apprentices dying to cut throat murder, do you mean the favorite apprentice? I might suggest going into a bit more depth with her relationship with other apprentices or how they interacted with each and any incidents that stood out to her from other apprentices.

When she has to fight (which she clearly prefers not to do) how does she combine using the Force (or alchemy) with the use of the the lightsaber?

Could you try to fit in relations to some of the other apprentices? Say, some more of the Sith?

Nice try with the strikethroughed section, Rtron. Nice try.

Otherwise ok.

The only thing of note here is related to the stuff about bio higher up. If you change things there, the personality will need modifications to match. Otherwise ‘tis good.

See personality point. Same commentary as that.

This section feels a bit unclear. Is there anything that will get her to trust someone?

Nice and cruel… nice and cruel.

There’s some necessary work, but it could’ve been a lot worse than it is.

Firstly, look on this list for Force powers. Those are the ones pre-approved for aftermath. Even so, several of them have restrictions, as noted there.

Both Force Stealth and Psychometry are powers that require GM approval to have.

In the case of Psychometry, it is not a particularly common power, but its presence is not something that goes unnoticed. How much it affects a user depends on both how much innate talent is present and on level of training. But even more than those two factors, it is affected by the objects touched. The Jedi Councils especially disapprove of those with a talent for this touching weapons of war, corpses and objects of the Dark Side, as using it upon such, even unwittingly, means running a very high risk of touching upon the Dark Side of the Force.

Someone who expresses a talent for this will be put through extra training simply to have control over when to use it. An untrained raw talent for psychometry can be even more crippling than the loss of a limb or even a complete sense. Jedi with this skill would quite possibly be kept away from the front lines simply to avoid putting them into danger until they have learnt control. It is also a potential point against becoming a Shadow, as while it is useful in investigation, it is dangerous when handling dark side artifacts.

As for Force Stealth, that power is considered a fairly rare power. It is not considered a necessary power for Jedi, and so not taught as part of any standard curriculum. Its also rare for a Padawans master to have it, much less teach it. In order to have this, she will have had to seek out tutelage at a Jedi temple from either a resident master or a holocron (both of these generally require some kind of proving that you are ready to learn). Such a thing is unique enough to elaborate on in the Bio.

It is not necessarily a required skill to become a Shadow, however knowing it will certainly be a significant point in her favor on her quest to acquire this title.

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We would appreciate it if you could move the descriptions of Force powers up to the relevant section, as there is no point in having them listed twice. The section down in the OoC section is for her general potential, not specifics like force power training.

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If you have any desire for Shiri to be considered (by the Jedi Councils) for a specialization like Shadow, any talent for Psychometry will not work out. Jedi with that talent are automatically excluded from consideration for this. Touching an object of the Dark side, or a dead body, or weapons of war, means a high risk of touching upon the dark side for someone with Psychometry. A Shadow is likely to deal with at least two of those three, as well as countless other things problematic to combine with psychometry.


Would you kindly break this section up into several paragraphs? Right now, it feels rather like a text wall and it is hard to spot individual skills.

Any skills related to using the lightsaber do not belong in this section, as skill with that is more than a little related to the Force. It has its own section further down.

In situations that will come up in Aftermath, No Jedi will truly be without the Force. The Force is a part of all Jedi (and Sith). Its as much as part of them as their limbs, their eyes or their lungs, but where the latter two can be cut away, the Force is not focused within any single part of their bodies. The Force is everywhere.

The rest of this section seems to delve into personality, not skills. By the way, people generally can’t choose to be strong-willed. That is typically a binary thing (either you are it, or you aren’t).

So it would be appreciated if you could continue describing her skills rather than her personality there. Remember, you need to cover more than what is relevant to direct conflict with the Sith/empire.


Think of this as her speaking to a jedi master she trusts. It certainly ain’t an interview with a Sith. Thus, secrets are unnecessary here.

You claim she knows nothing of her first 7-8 years of life. It's common for people not to remember events of the first one to four years, but this seems rather excessive. If you wish to have this be a fact, you’d better have a good explanation of why she remembers virtually nothing of that time. Severe trauma to the head could be a cause, but any trauma sufficient to cause such severe loss of memory would affect her still. It would also mean slower development later, as numerous basic skills would have to be learned all over again.

If however this is merely an excuse for not fleshing out those years, we have an alternate solution that will not affect her as much later in life. Simply put it as a standard childhood, specify when she was recruited to the Jedi order and do a quick description of a fairly standard time as an initiate. The years as a padawan, especially the last years of this, however, will need more detail.

These vague mutterings about slavery need one of two things:
Much, much more detail.
Complete removal.

A child slave doesn’t just “happen” to escape from slavers. They will lack both the training, skills and tools to do so. The typical slaver may not be a genius, but he (or she) isn’t an idiot either. Having been a slave will marks someone for life, potentially both physically (scars, brands, tattoos, etc) and mentally. “We didn’t dwell on it” is quite simply utterly implausible. For the vast majority of slaves, life is terrible.

There is a significant issue with the speed at which she progressed through the Jedi ranks. The time spent as an initiate is long intentionally, as it is as much about patience and ensuring the initiate has truly taken to heart the Jedi values as it is about the practical skills taught. As mentioned in the Jedi guide, this period typically lasts five to six years. I could see this going as low as three for a particularly dedicated initiate (by dedicated I mean not only dedicated to learning but dedicated to the philosophical, semi-religious aspects as well. A True Believer if you like.)

A three year Padawan is technically possible but rare. In order to achieve this, she must have run into some extraordinary circumstances that resulted in all five of her trials being passed in the field. Such circumstances would be very much worthy of detailed mention in the Bio. Otherwise, it is more likely she would be a Padawan for at least four to six years.

You are left with a number of options (feel free to think of more we haven’t mentioned - but these are the more likely ones i think).

• Keep the slavery, elaborate on it, but make her older in order to account for the extra years. This allows her to keep her current skill set entirely.
• Get rid of slavery, become a jedi much earlier, stay 19. This allows her to keep all her force skills, but gets rid of the skills gained as a slave (though she could learn them from a Jedi if she chose to).
• Keep the current timeline, but become a padawan much later and never become a knight. This will mean dropping many of her Force skills.
  UTTERLY UNBIASED SUGGESTION: GO WITH OPTION #1 AND GIVE XID TO LEA!

Could you break this text wall up a bit?

How is “high pain tolerance” a flaw? What has given her this?
Willingness to sacrifice herself (when she shouldn’t) for others - That is a flaw.
How does she have a criminal mindset? How is this a flaw.

Remember that a true flaw does not include a description of how it doesn’t really affect the character after all. A flaw isn’t full countered.

Again, this section is a delve into her personality, not her flaws. You’ve got far more about her personality in section that should cover other things.


Though nice, the current info is rather useless. It’d be nice to see the more pertinent info, in particular what happens when a Lekku is damaged. The Sith will probably do that at some point, after all.


Why is she good at this? What makes her so? Simply saying she’s good at it is insufficient. Provide reasons and explanations.


There’s far too little about her personality here. Fill it out, like with pieces like those you’ve put in sections not meant to cover personality and motivations.

What are her long-term hopes and wishes doing here (ideas for future specialization)?


This section does not add up. On one hand, you want her to escape. On the other, you clearly state that she won’t do so if any prisoners remain in the prison. The odds of them all being able to escape are near-zero. That setup would not fit with the purpose of Aftermath (to explore the nuances of the light and dark sides, as well as the differences between the Republic and the Empire).


Shiri as a whole doesn’t add up. It seems to us like you’ve tried to make her fit too many concepts at once. We suggest reading the Jedi Training and Life Guide again, and sticking more to what it tells you.

Ok, I just realized that I never actually sent the PM to you guys about Shiri, which I shall do now, but I'm sorry about some things not adding up because of that.

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I am aware that Psychometry and Force Stealth are higher-level skills and I did seek approval for them in the discussion on discord, only Echo really said anything about them to me though.

In the case of Psychometry, it is not a particularly common power, but its presence is not something that goes unnoticed. How much it affects a user depends on both how much innate talent is present and on level of training. But even more than those two factors, it is affected by the objects touched. The Jedi Councils especially disapprove of those with a talent for this touching weapons of war, corpses and objects of the Dark Side, as using it upon such, even unwittingly, means running a very high risk of touching upon the Dark Side of the Force.

Someone who expresses a talent for this will be put through extra training simply to have control over when to use it. An untrained raw talent for psychometry can be even more crippling than the loss of a limb or even a complete sense. Jedi with this skill would quite possibly be kept away from the front lines simply to avoid putting them into danger until they have learnt control. It is also a potential point against becoming a Shadow, as while it is useful in investigation, it is dangerous when handling dark side artifacts.

As for Force Stealth, that power is considered a fairly rare power. It is not considered a necessary power for Jedi, and so not taught as part of any standard curriculum. Its also rare for a Padawans master to have it, much less teach it. In order to have this, she will have had to seek out tutelage at a Jedi temple from either a resident master or a holocron (both of these generally require some kind of proving that you are ready to learn). Such a thing is unique enough to elaborate on in the Bio.

It is not necessarily a required skill to become a Shadow, however knowing it will certainly be a significant point in her favor on her quest to acquire this title.

After I've sent the PM to you guys and I get your opinions on that stuff, I may just drop psychometry altogether depending on the potential impact it would have on my plans for her secrets and future. As for Force Stealth, that's one I really would like to keep, and am willing to write into her bio that she studied it from a holocron or from one of the masters at a temple, and will specify whatever she had to go through to prove she was ready to learn if you all feel it's necessary.

We would appreciate it if you could move the descriptions of Force powers up to the relevant section, as there is no point in having them listed twice. The section down in the OoC section is for her general potential, not specifics like force power training.

I don't understand what you mean here. would you prefer I move everything that's currently in the OOC section to the IC? What exactly goes in the OOC then?

In situations that will come up in Aftermath, No Jedi will truly be without the Force. The Force is a part of all Jedi (and Sith). It's as much as part of them as their limbs, their eyes or their lungs, but where the latter two can be cut away, the Force is not focused within any single part of their bodies. The Force is everywhere.

why is this here? what do you mean? I don't understand what I wrote that would prompt this little bit of (what seems to be) musing.

Remember that a true flaw does not include a description of how it doesn’t really affect the character after all. A flaw isn’t fully countered.

Which flaws do you feel are countered?

What are her long-term hopes and wishes doing here (ideas for future specialization)?

Well, from my own experiences in life, a goal is also a motivation isn't it? Her wish to one day be a Jedi Shadow is a driving force in a lot of her behavioral/social decisions, and she's made changes to her personality and the way she thinks to accommodate that wish.

This section does not add up. On one hand, you want her to escape. On the other, you clearly state that she won’t do so if any prisoners remain in the prison. The odds of them all being able to escape are near-zero. That setup would not fit with the purpose of Aftermath (to explore the nuances of the light and dark sides, as well as the differences between the Republic and the Empire).

I do want her to possibly escape, however in my own plans she most likely won't. If a prisoner turns, she's not going to stay behind just for them, though if every other prisoner is able to leave, before she leaves she will attempt to drag those who turned back to the light.

That bit about not leaving unless everyone can could be showing my optimism and hope for the prisoners in this , or you could see it as 'yeah she's not leaving this place, EVER'. I do have plans where escape for her is possible, but they involve her breaking this "no-one gets left behind" mentality of hers. I'll change the cs so this is more apparent.

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The bio will be discussed in the PM, but I will completely rewrite it due to the fact that I suppose secrets are bad and she should sound a little more open when talking about her past to people. I thought I made it clear enough that she does have amnesia though? anyway, that's PM stuff.

UTTERLY UNBIASED SUGGESTION: GO WITH OPTION #1 AND GIVE XID TO LEA!

NEVER!

To make the sheet easier to work out, we think we’ll recommend dropping Psychometry, since you’re fairly clearly set on Force Stealth.

But we will ask this one small set of questions about it, which we’d like to see a response from the mindset of Shiri on:
What use is Force Stealth to Shiri at the present (pre-sacking Coruscant)? What made her want to learn it, and how did she get access to one of the holocrons with the relevant knowledge on it?

While it would have been easy for her to get this knowledge from a Sith Holocron, had she gotten hold of one, Jedi Holocron gatekeepers are notoriously stubborn and not known for sharing lore without reason. We can easily see how you as a player find it very useful for your character to know, but we’d like the above As Shiri sees it.

Note, this is not a denial of the power, but rather that we want to be sure that this is something Shiri wants, not just something you want for Shiri. A request for her justifications, one might say.

These two sections can be confusing at times to keep apart. You’re not the only one who has asked, nor do we think you will be the last.

Force Powers section is in the IC format, as that asks the character to explain what he can do with the Force, both in general range of varied powers and in level of skill. You can of course edit this later as the character develops further IC.

Force Potential is in OoC format and deals with how much raw power your character has, how much (s)he can learn. These limits are far harder than those found in the Force Powers section. Whereas a Jedi (or Sith) can learn to use new powers, his or her raw power is usually not something that can be changed. It is what it was at birth. Does that make some sort of sense?

Here you might also put elements she herself does not know about in relation to her force abilities. Latent powers, forgotten powers, things requiring more self-insight than she has, etc… Unknown flaws (like Obi-wan having terrible telekinetic barriers)

In situations that will come up in Aftermath, No Jedi will truly be without the Force. The Force is a part of all Jedi (and Sith). It's as much as part of them as their limbs, their eyes or their lungs, but where the latter two can be cut away, the Force is not focused within any single part of their bodies. The Force is everywhere.

why is this here? what do you mean? I don't understand what I wrote that would prompt this little bit of (what seems to be) musing.

This is the trigger segment:

I specialize in the Ataru form of Lightsaber combat, but I’m light and quick in a fight even without a lightsaber or the force with me.

Right now, the flaws section is too squeezed-together to make it easy to spot individual flaws. There’s not all that many flaws there currently that are hers personally and that are directly problematic for her. Most of her flaws are species-based, self-sacrificial tendencies and lack of trust for turned Sith (should that happen). That last bit is hardly a flaw at all. Its plain prudence.

If you could spread them out a bit, it’d be very helpful for both spotting flaws and fleshing them out so that they affect her more. Also, it might be wise to consider adding some flaws related to skills and physical capacity.

What has made her want to become a shadow in the future? Its a fairly specialized “job”, so something must’ve happened to push her onto this path, right?

Rephrasing that section to say more like you put in your commentary should help fix that.

Name: Zanna

Species: Sith Pureblood

Age: 31

Gender: Female

Faction: Sith Empire

Rank: Untitled Apprentice

Master: N/A

Former master(s): Delarus Surn.







I stand at 5 feet 5 inches, with bright golden eyes typical of my race and hair as black as shadows, and can usually be seen wearing form fitting black clothes and my Sith robes. In addition to the jewelry you see on my face I wear two rings on each finger, one on the index and one on the ring finger. I have a scar going down the right side of my face from the bottom of my eye to my jaw. The palms of my hands are covered in old burn scars.



(Zanna’s powers can be ranked in three categories. Weak, she can use it but only as a last resort as she’s not very good at it. Average, she’s not bad or particularly good at it. Strong, she’s very good at it and it’s one of her best abilities.)

-I am strong in the basics of the Force all Sith are taught..(Strong)
-Force fear, fear is a wonderful motivator of self survival instincts. (Strong)
-Sith Alchemy, it is something I have studied for most of my life. I am very good at it. (Strong, particularly in the effects on and creations of inanimate objects)
-Drain Knowledge, sometimes even I don't possess the patience to learn knowledge the easy way. (Weak. It takes a lot longer than she’d like)
-Tutaminis(adv), I like to block blaster bolts before they hit me in the chest, even if I don't have my lightsaber.(Weak, she can block blaster shots but deflecting lightsabers would result in severe damage)
-Protection Bubble, I have to remain stationary to keep this shield going around me or my opponent, and it is draining, but in desperate situations I can do it (Essentially Protection Bubble is a dome shield Zanna conjures through the Force that stops anything from entering it, as long as Zanna has the energy to keep it going). (Weak)
-Telekinetic Whirlwind, distance is best in combat. (Average)
-Force Lightning, honestly is there a true Sith that doesn't know how to use this? (Average)
-Force Maelstorm, combining three different talents is extremely tiring, and takes time. Due to it being based on a Protection Bubble, I must be stationary (She casts Protection bubble, then starts drawing everything around her in a 5 yard radius towards her with Telekinesis, then as it's all floating around her she launches it all outward violently with Force Lightning aiding both it's velocity and damage) . (Average)



Alchemy and the Force are my two strongest skills. Making up for my lacking combat talents. It is because all the time I could have spent training my lightsaber forms, I spent straining my Force skills, mastering the basics quickly. And as my previous master was an Alchemist, I learned most of his skills and expanded upon my already considerable talents. I'm very good at the game we Sith play amongst ourselves. I say game, even though it's at times more lethal than the battlefield. Certainly, it's more ruthless. But I'm skilled at hiding my true intentions, misleading others, etc.

What the Force cannot do, my Alchemical skills will make up for.



I was born in the Sith Empire, to the remnants Kissai caste. The Dark Side of the Force was in my blood, and from a young age I studied it and the practical uses of Alchemy. Before I was taken to the Academy (at age 12), I was with my family. They disagreed with the way the Empire was heading heedlessly into war, the way it was brutally creating murderers and warriors rather than craftsmen and researchers. They felt that the Force was to be wielded like a scalpel and researched, not flailed about like a mace and used for purely power reasons. This stance made them rather unpopular, and they lost any protections their status as Purebloods gave them. (granted, it was voluntary. They left the Empire before I was born, heading to the outskirts of the Empire, just outside their borders)

They did their best to keep my younger brother and I a secret. They still had enemies and rivals, even though they had withdrawn from the politics of the Empire. For twelve years they succeeded, beginning to teach me when I was six. The Force was meant to be researched, to be finessed, especially the Dark Side. Only fools flailed about with their negative emotions alone, hating and being angry at everything, especially their enemies and dubious allies. ‘An Alliance of Hatred is a fragile one at best, doomed to break apart. They are fools, Iunoks Chwuq. No group, no matter how large, can stand without trust.’ Those were just a few of the lessons I was taught. Cherished memories.

It didn’t last, of course. Hatred is one of the few things that can burn forever and over any distance without losing any of it’s heat. It was a human Lord and his apprentice. I remember their filthy impure faces perfectly. The Lord had golden eyes, perfect teeth, flaming red hair, a chisled chin, and a slightly perfect nose. There was a scar going down the right side of his face. I assume he thought it dashing and roguish, given how obviously the rest of him was enhanced by surgery. The apprentice was much more plain. Crooked nose, brown eyes and brown hair. No scars though.

They were here to both kill our parents and take us, turn us into the things we were raised to hate, that my parents hated. A last insult and revenge. My parents fought magnificently, but were overwhelmed. My brother and I were forcibly taken, our parent’s blood soaking the ground and our home burning behind us.

Power is everything in this galaxy. Without it, you will simply be conquered by those who do have it.

My brother was my first lesson in strength. He wasn’t strong enough for the Academy, and I watched out for him, protected him. The other students, and the Overseers, saw this and knew it to be a weakness. So they attacked us. Again, and again and again. I lost count of the beatings, the mockings, the defiance I spat back. Their ways were not our ways. Their brutality was not the way of the Dark Side. The true Dark Side. Funnily enough, it wasn’t even our fellow students or the Overseers that did him in the end. I dragged him all the way to Acolytes, and a damn beast killed him. The weak die and trying to save them results only in your own pain and weakening.

While most of my fellow students preferred to use their study of the nature of the Dark Side itself and it’s applications to make them more powerful, I was far more interested in using my studies to learn the of the effect of the Dark Side, or alchemy, on the mind. Could it break people's minds? Could we use it to force false memories onto people? Could it even be used to corrupt their perception of reality? That's what set me on the track I am today. Studying the affects of the Force on the minds of sentient beings, and how it could be used. I've already developed a method of breaking into someone's mind and reliving the memories they are reliving, seeing what their mind is conjuring. It's...fascinating. It’s also the safest way I can still continue my parent’s teaching.

I continued to display an increased talent for using Force powers, and alchemy as I entered the Acolyte stage. Unfortunately, that also made my weakness in physical combat all that more apparent. Those bastards who only get enjoyment from setting up dramas among their charges, the Overseers, would spread rumors and rankle pride among my more idiotic or impure peers. Fools, all of them. Brutes would be convinced I was tearing them down. Idiotic girls, or boys, would be sure I was the reason their lovers left them, and so on so forth. I don’t remember how many eyes were blinded with powders, heads smashed against walls with the Force, or limbs broken with surgical precision.

But for every victory, I had two defeats. For every time I was grinding my heel on my enemies neck, there were more times I was beaten into the ground, covered with bruises, and only barely saved by running away after a distraction arose (either caused by me or luck). Or, if I was particularly unfortunate and lost a task, brutally beaten or thrown around by the Overseers. They only tried to best me in the Force only once, and after I used Tuatminus to throw the Force back in their faces, I left those idiots crippled for life. Eventually, as my time as an Acolyte went on, it came down to another Acolyte being my main antagonist.

He was a filthy impure human, of course. Fraste was his name. We were both the strongest in our class, that was undeniable. But I was stronger than him, and he hated for it. Who he hated, himself or me, I was unsure of. But he hated. I could feel it, like an oppressive darkness around him at all times. With a little nudging from the Overseers, as I despised them and their games and instead focused on researching in the forgotten ways of the Dark Side and it’s many applications, he began making moves against me. Turning our peers to hate me as well. He gained a following, and they made it their goal to ruin or kill me. Surprise beatings. Trying to sabotage my tasks. Releasing animals against me. So on so forth. The Overseers encouraged all of it.

They wanted hatred, and they got it. Though it was quiet. Subtle. Only fools reveal their full strength before the time was right. When that time would come...that was the question. One thing was certain, I was not strong enough to win this war on my own, so I need allies. Or, more preferably, underlings. Despite my disgust of it, I had to play the Overseer’s game.

So I started putting my social skills to work. I flattered, bullied, coerced, enraged, anything and everything to gain allies, loyalty, or at the very least lose an enemy. Slowly, the tide began to turn. I received less and less beatings, and retaliated more and more successfully. He began to lose his followers, while mine only grew. The despicable fools were drawn to power like insects to light, and my power was shining brighter than his.

Finally our rivalry came to a bloody end. We were both tasked to some forgotten jungle on Dromund Kaas, where minor Sith had gone to recluse on with his holocron. The order was simple. The one who returned to the shuttle with the holocron won. The loser would be punished, as per usual.

We raced off, heading through the jungle towards where the tomb was. We were neck and neck, as trying to trip each other up with the Force and physical contact failed, and we settled on trying to best one another. Reaching the site of the tomb at the same time, we both skidded to a stop.

A Gundark. The bastards had released a Gundark in the tomb. A Burskan Gundark, thankfully. (as I figured I would be at odds with arena creatures frequently, I made a study of the most deadly and the most often used. The Gundark species were particularly interesting, if only because they were so viciously deadly.) I didn’t know if the Overseers were merely stupid for not just sending us towards an area with Gundarks already native to Dromund Kaas in it, or if they were testing our intelligence as well as our martial skills. Regardless, the thing was merely looking at us, it’s attention brought to us by our running.

I began moving cautiously around it, looking for another way into the tomb. It would tear the two of us and our vibroswords apart. Fraste did the same. Either he had also studied them, or he was smart enough to know that if I was being cautious, there was a reason. We went our separate ways, each circling separate directions.

I found a hole in the tomb, whether from nature or another holocron seeker, I didn’t know or care. Dropping into the tomb I carefully made my way through, feeling every inch of the way with the Force. I didn’t want to stumble upon a nasty surprise.

It took a long while(for a minor Sith, he must have hoarded quite the pile of credits to afford a large tomb like this), but I managed to make my way to the center of the tomb. The good news was that the Holocron was right there. The bad news was that directly in front of it was a pile of soft things. Fur, silk, etc etc. The Gundark’s hoard. Lovely. Still, I could see the Holocron. I reached out with the Force, and carefully lifted it from it’s pedestal. Right then, as it was floating back to me, Fraste walked in from another entrance. He took one look at what I was doing, and knowing that I would win a struggle between our Force powers, did something very stupid.

He threw his vibrosword at me. I dodged to the side, hissing as it sliced part of my arm, and then froze as I heard it clang against the wall behind me. Lumbering footsteps rapidly approached. I retreated farther into my entrance, hurriedly yanking the holocron towards me. Fraste moved equally hurriedly towards it, kicking the pile as he tried to snatch it before I could bring it to me.

It was his last mistake.

The Gundark walked into the room just as Fraste was in the middle of it’s hoard and with a terrible roar, it leapt at him. Lightning sparked from his terrified fingers, a last act of defiance, before the powerful limbs hands closed around him and ripped him limb from limb. I yanked the holocron into my hand and tried to run. The Gundark heard me and, tossing Fraste’s corpse away, followed.

I couldn’t outrun it, and I certainly couldn’t outfight it. So I hurriedly ripped a large part of the silk clothing I was wearing and tossed my sword aside. Cautiously I held out the silk towards the Gundark while attempting to make myself look as unthreatening as possible. With snuffling breaths, raising my terror levels immensely, it hurriedly took the silk from me and lumbered away.

I ran as fast as I could, the Force fueing my limbs and my terror fueling the Force, and made it back with the Holocron. With that, serious threats from my peers ended.

The pureblood that would later become my master visited frequently. He would often watch during our alchemy and Force tests. I watched him whisper to our Overseer and have specific Acolytes pulled for tasks from him. It happened to me more and more often as I displayed my competence with the Force and alchemy. I wasn’t foolish. I knew what to do. Figured out what he liked in apprentices, and acted like it. Earned his favor.

after the Academy I was given over to my old Master for training. It was...harsh. Brutal. Not physically, but mentally, especially when it came to using the force. Some of my fellow apprentices (My old master had a dozen) died from the training , even before we started trying to kill one another to be his favorite.. I nearly died when this began, poisons being cured just in time, fighting off the mental attacks of my fellows. I always responded in kind and I always was victorious in the end. Of course, this could never be proven, but there was no doubt in anyone's mind. I was the strongest. I was the most determined. I deserved the secrets our master could deliver. Those who didn’t want to die got out of the way.

Once I became the favored apprentice, my old master began teaching me his secrets. Information I didn't even have an inkling of he taught me, and I was grateful. It's why he's still alive. He's the reason I've gotten as far as I have and he's realized that his life was worth much more than trying to kill me. So, my studies began in earnest, and while my title was still that of Apprentice, I had surpassed my master in Force and Alchemical skill. I am now looking to further increase my powers. That's partly why I'm here, to garner Darth Nyiss's favor and become her apprentice, while also helping her with her experiments. My skills, and experiments, in the area of mental manipulation and essentially torture reaching even her ears. Officially, I’m on a mission from my Master to ‘learn as much as possible from other sources’.

I will become her apprentice, even if I have to poison and kill all of those who would get in my way.



I am proficient in form VI Niman. Just enough to avoid being killed by your average thug or adept. Force Speed to help my flamboyant, by necessity, moves with the double bladed lightsaber. Force Whirlwind or Force Pushes and Pulls to control the movements of my opponents, and so on so forth.

During combat I also employ various alchemical substances to aid me. Gas, acid, smoke, etc etc. I typically have various vials on my person, ready to be used. I have none right now, having left my labs behind.



Lord Sish is a brute and a fool, the one who gave me my scar.

His apprentice is far more interesting. Such hatred can easily be turned.

(Other relationships will be available as Sith sheets are approved)





Zanna is powerful enough to rival the Darth herself average in the Force for her race and rank. Not insanely talented, but neither is she surprisingly weak. Her true skills lie in finesse and gentle touches of it, and being able to combine and manage multiple powers at once.



No.



Ambitious. That would be the one word to describe her. She wants to be more than just a Sith. She wants to be more than a Lord. She wants power. And if that power comes with enemies, so be it. Enemies can be slain or subjugated. Ruthless, Driven. Both are also accurate words to describe her. Also paranoid and arrogant. Unsurprising, given her upbringing.

Beneath the shell that the Sith Academy forced her to craft there is resentment, hatred. The Sith took her away from her family. All of them. She hates what they’ve done but knows that without it she would be dead. They taught her the ways of Power, the Force, and Strength, but she hates for them for trying to tear away her last connection to her family;The training they gave.. Having left the Academy and her past years ago she is no longer sure who her hatred is directed at, but she knows it is always there, waiting to be drawn upon.

She trusts no one that reminds her of those days (typically physical brutes, humans, and people who are sadistic for the sake of it) and would happily kill any and all of them. This resentment is buried deep within, however, and she often ignores it. This is also what drives her desperate desire to climb the Sith ranks, to become ever more powerful. The more power she has, the more the chances of that ever happening to her again decreases.



Zanna is terrible at fighting. She can kill a thug or an adept, but anyone remotely proficient in combat and able to nullify her Force abilities will find that she's not a threat at all.

As a combination of this and her time getting brutally beaten in the Academy by her peers, Zanna has an intense fear of being beaten. If she is overpowered and helpless she might resort to a more animalistic survival state, seeking escape by any means necessary.

She's also terribly arrogant. She'll underestimate non-purebloods and Jedi, but only once. She isn't stupid. Going hand in hand with that is her paranoia. She automatically assumes that, unless they're securely under her thumb, whoever is around her is an enemy. Even if she has them under control she still doesn't fully trust them. This, of course, leads to her seeing everyone as a threat even when they aren’t which could lead to rash decisions.

As mentioned in her personality, she irrationally distrusts if not outright despises people who remind her of the events leading her to and the events during her Academy days. (Brutish and/or Sadistic people and humans.)

Given the brutal way the Sith took her family and forced her to shape as they desired, to chose power and strength over everything, and the six years of custom training her parents gave her, Zanna occasionally finds herself wondering what it would be like to have been trained by the Jedi rather than the Sith and if it is not better on their side.

Having to never worry about your so called allies stabbing you in the back, your food being poisoned in the base supposed to be safe, to be constantly grabbing and clawing at power. She tells no one of these thoughts, and often immediately latches onto whatever is at hand to distract herself from those stray thoughts and pretend they never happened.



Zanna is a social Sith, though only because she wants to get a feel of those around her. She’ll chat and dine and any number of things with the other Sith to get to know them better. It's best to know your enemies before making a move against them.



There's probably something, but I haven't thought of it. Unless I say otherwise, assume everything is a go.



Drugs and the Force to play upon their emotions and make them question their creed. Nothing physical. Zanna detests physical torture.



Of course! If they play their cards right, they may even turn her.



Drug induced romances, is a bad thing really that bad if both parties are in love? Emotional play upon the Jedi and others. Basically a lot of mind games if I can get them to go properly.

Misc: Zanna still has a stuffed Bantha from her childhood, named Sosu.