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Shoot, I was really diving into my character's relationship with Anubis and realized he was already chosen.

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alright, I think I finally managed to get the spells juuuust right and explain them in a decent fashion. Also cleaned up the Abilities section a little bit.

Have a few ideas for more spells...but I think it'd be best to wait until If get accepted, and some character development to happen~

Do tell if there are any problems with them~

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@Jinxer Everything looks good with Qar. His spells, at least compared to my character and @Rune_Alchemist's character, are a little lacking. Maybe do give him one or two offensive spells or some buff/debuff spells? You can keep his spells as is though.

@Leoven Maybe explain in more detail how Nailah came to work for the royal court? Perhaps she first held a position of treasurer or whatever (because she's good with money) before being selected to become a Vizier because going from a famous merchant to a Vizier seems a little too forced.

@Rune_Alchemist Great looking spells. Only thing I want to know is if she needs to make direct contact with flesh for the Judgment of the Sinful curse to activate.

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Eeeh...hadn't really given it much thought. Lets go with yes, simply because it has the potential to be quite powerful. The blade and the flames both must make contact with flesh. Armor will protect one against it. The rest though, one only needs to be burned by the flames.

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Eeeh...hadn't really given it much thought. Lets go with yes, simply because it has the potential to be quite powerful. The blade and the flames both must make contact with flesh. Armor will protect one against it. The rest though, one only needs to be burned by the flames.@Rune_Alchemist

Okay I was hoping for that to be the case because without making contact, it would be extremely powerful.

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Alrighty then - I was thinking something similar myself but wanted your verdict first.  I've added a couple of more aggressive abilities in to his mix, it makes sense for him to have access to them even if he is reluctant to use them.

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@Leoven Maybe explain in more detail how Nailah came to work for the royal court? Perhaps she first held a position of treasurer or whatever (because she's good with money) before being selected to become a Vizier because going from a famous merchant to a Vizier seems a little too forced.@Blu
I actually kept that part vague because I wasn't sure exactly how Viziers were chosen, but having her be the Overseer of Treasury before working her way up to Vizier is actually a great idea. I'll add it to her bio later.

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I'll probably start this RP after the weekend, so those who still need to finish their CS, please do so by Monday. @Acid Hippie @Spanner

@Hammerman Tagging you because you expressed interest in making a CS but I'm not sure if you are making one currently.

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Yeah, still thinking up my character's backstory.

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Same. Backstory is killing me.

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@Blu Will do! I already have my character concept, just need to type it up. If I don't finish it tonight, I will tomorrow.

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Finally, here's my CS. Decided not to really change her appearance and just make her part of a wandering tribe that wears their exotic clothing.

[Layla]


Height: 160 cm
Personal Information

Name: Layla
Alias: The Lute Mistress
Sex: Female
Age: 22
Date of Birth: 26 August
Appearance: Wearing her tribe's traditional clothes everywhere, she easily stands out from the crowd, which is exactly what she wants as she is a wandering performer. She has an immensely long braided hair that reached to her knees, just adding to her exoticness. And her appearance wouldn't be complete without the beautiful smile that she always wears.
Personality: 
She is a kind and motherly person, guiding the Pharaoh with her gentle wisdom. She gives off the impression of an older sister to everyone she met, even to the Pharaoh himself. She is mostly a quiet person, preferring to stay in the background instead of being the center attention.

However, even thought she was quite a patient person, able to handle crying children with a calm smile, her sensitive point was if someone were to make a disturbance when she was playing her lute. She would give the culprit quite the glare. She was also quite shy about her voice, as she refused to take up singing like her mother did. She believed her voice wasn't up to par, though many disagreed considering how melodious it was when they talked to her. 

Biography: 
Born to the tribe of Q'ur, she always wandered around the many cities and villages of Egypt, as the tribe was a nomadic one. Her family was a band of performers, with her father playing the lute and her mother singing. She was taught in the ways of the lute ever since she was little as her father saw great potential in her, and thus made sure she would be able to bring it to her full potential.

However, as she grew up, she began to take interest in matters other than her performance. She started to take interest in the state of Egypt, and how it was now fractured between many Pharaohs. Reading history and mythological books, she discovered how Egypt used to be one, and in time, she agreed that it would be best for it to be so once again. And here she learned about the goddess Hathor, where she decided to devote her worship to her.

But nothing last forever, and one day, a plague claimed the lives of her father and mother. It would have killed her too, if not for Hator's intervention. And from that day on, she became a mage, as her lute-playing now gained power to affect the material realm as well.

Now, she was currently staying in Thebes, as she played nightly in the biggest inn in the city, The Oasis. She was paid quite handsomely to do so, so she might stay there for quite some time.

Combat Information

Magician: Yes
Deity: Hathor
Equipment: She traveled with only a single backpack that she carried herself. Her trusty lute she carried with her on all times, slung to her body with a little string. The inside of the backpack consisted of her spare ethnic clothes (she pretty much only wore her ethnic clothes at all times), a thin white nightgown that had become quite flimsy and well-worn due to her having wore it for years, and then her undergarments. She also carried some soap with her as her travels often made her quite sweaty and not all inns provided one. A performer needed to be presentable after all.

Ability:Playing lute, the knowledge to read hard books even though she had never be educated officially, singing

Spells/Techniques:
1. Good Night and Have A Beautiful Dream
Everyone who hears her lute-playing would immediately feel really sleepy. Strong-willed people may be able to resist for a while, but ordinary people would just fall asleep right away. Of course, she can exempt her allies from the effect.

2. Wish For A Peaceful Life
Everyone who hears her lute-playing would become sluggish, as their mind became clouded. They would have difficulty thinking and their awareness lowered. Of course, she also can exempt her allies from this effect.

3. March of The God-King
Any ally would feel refreshed and strengthened as they hear her playing. Any wounds they may have will stop being painful for as long as they can hear her lute.

4. A Plucked Heart
Every time Layla plucks a string from her lute, an invisible blade flies towards the enemy. It's quite tiny, only causing a scratch if it connects. However, seeing how she can do it many times in just a second, it can immediately overwhelm a non-heavily armored enemy. This spell is necessary for her as it allows her to fight bandits and raiders she meets on her travels.

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Essence: 4 / 5 
Attunement: 4 / 5 
Magic: 3 / 5 
Strength: 2 / 5 
Speed: 2 / 5 
Body: 2 / 5 
Wisdom: 5 / 5

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@Hammerman The only issue I see is with the last part of her Biography where she encounters Amen. The RP actually begins with Amen returning to Thebes to assume his new role as Pharaoh. So you would need to change it so that they have their meeting before in a different city/town/whatever. As to how they'll meet in Thebes and she becoming a Vizier, we can save that discussion if Layla is accepted. Everything else looks good.

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I added one semi-debuff (or buff, depending on how it's used) spell to Qar's profile for variety  I was trying to think of something that meshed with both him and Thoth's supposed natures but found it difficult to come up with an ability he would willingly use to inflict illness/disability on someone else.

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@Jinxer The new spell looks good. I think you've succeeded in keeping with Thoth's theme so that's nice to see.

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I see. How about making it so they haven't met yet?

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@Hammerman Sorry for the late reply. Of course that works too.

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Fixed at the CS.

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@Hammerman Alright everything is good now. If there are any changes, implement them by tomorrow.

@Spanner @Acid Hippie Everything going well? If you need any help, let me know.

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I'll be posting it on the CS tab then.

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