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Sooooo, Not today I guess? Tomorrow at the very latest I hope?
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@alexfangtalon Sadie Hill - Sadie is more or less accepted, but before we give your character the full green light, we needed some confirmation. Although depression and mental illnesses are very real, we are hoping to keep the IC environment of this roleplay very happy, young, and free. It would put a damper on the entire mood of the roleplay to have a character that is frequently down. As long as Sadie isn’t continually somber or reliving her dark past as a character theme, this shouldn’t be a problem. Please get back to us on this and we will revise our decision accordingly.

@BrutalBx Sami Alejandro - You indicate in the appearance section that Sami has multiple tattoos. As a 16 year old in small town USA, this doesn’t seem very realistic. Most shops don’t tattoo until you’re 18 unless you have crazy amounts of parental permission and sign offs on it - even then, it is rare. As such, we ask that you either make it so your character doesn’t have tattoos, or indicate how they got them exactly - i.e. parents made the drive out to Denver and signed off (perhaps one high quality tatt), or they got their cousin to secretly do it in a back alley using pen ink and the ‘stick and poke’ method (maybe one or two really shitty quality tatts).

@mskennedy615 Jocelyn Fields - We have the same comments about tattoos as we indicated above, please adjust Jocelyn’s appearance section accordingly. Also, we see that Jocelyn is from NYC. Our vision for this roleplay was for most students to be from Westworth and the surrounding areas, or to have lived there for a very long time - this is good for having a sociable, tight knit cast. We would ask that if you wish to have Jocelyn be from Brooklyn, that she would have moved to Westworth with her family at a much younger age than Sophomore year - perhaps elementary school? Lastly, you indicate that her father is a principal of a local school. We already have the Westworth principal written out in character, we recommend that Jocelyn’s father be the principal of a nearby school district, like Littleton, if that is okay with you.

@Drazah Jack Talbott - Arms dealerships aren’t too much of a thing in Colorado, in fact they verge on illegal. A suggestion that the GM team has that fits the flavor of small town USA might be a local hunting shop? Think like a low scale Gander Mountain or Dick’s Sporting Goods, would that work? This shop would likely be located in Littleton or some other small city on the outskirts of Westworth. Additionally, the personality section of Jack’s CS is a little too short. Please expand upon his character more, what is Jack really like inside and out? Sell his personality to us. Also, as we have mentioned about characters being from out of town - we really want our cast to have been members of the Westworth area and community for a long time to avoid the ‘loner’ character archetype. Please modify Jack’s history so that he and his family have been located in the area for a longer amount of time. Also, Jack’s family appears to be wealthy if they make frequent trips to Europe. Can you please clarify where this money comes from? Only a few select families in Westworth are above middle class, and the reason for wealth is expanded upon in their background. Lastly, you indicate that Jack is a lacrosse star. Unfortunately, Westworth High is tiny, and the sports opportunities are limited (for both cost and lack of participation reasons) to: Football | Cheerleading | Baseball | Softball | Boy’s Basketball | Girl’s Basketball | Boy's Soccer. Please exchange lax for one of the other available options.
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Apologies. I shall clarify. This is something that rarely affects her. She takes medicine everyday and hardly ever forgets because her parents always make sure to ask her if she had taken them that day. Only MAJOR things will cause her to go into a depressive state. What happens is say(hopefully this doesn't happen, just a hypothetical) someone in the class dies. While most would probably mourn right when they learn of what happened, Sadie will become depersonalized with her emotions. It's like she's there but not really fully comprehending anything. It will then hit her and she'll just break down. And usually if she just has a normal attack it only tends to happen at night and she is much closer to her medicine then and takes it much sooner. She has two sets of medicine. 1. The stuff she takes everyday that are suppose to keep everything bad down. 2. The stuff she ends up taking probably once every other three months because of built-up stress.
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@alexfangtalon

In that case...



Sadie Hill

... P.S. - No characters will be dying, nor having any near death experiences, in Free Pass. So, no worries there!
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Best image I could find for a character saying, "Just a hypothetical."

EDIT : Now for my third favorite part. DISCUSSING RELATIONS!
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@alexfangtalonDiscord is the best place to do this. Feel free to DM me whenever.
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@Universorum @lovely complex @Silent Observer
PS: Grim's Aiden will be up soon enough. He's changing his FC.



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@Dirty Pretty Lies HOLD UP

DOES THIS MEAN RYLAH IS BACK
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@QueenOfTheBee If I'm accepted I don't see why not.
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Amendment made; got rid of the tattoo's. Sorry, I didn't check the age limit for getting a tattoo, a little bit of missed research on my part. I only added them because they were on my FC claim anyway.
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@BrutalBx OMG YOU'RE HERE TOO!!!! <3
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@Dirty Pretty LiesI'm everywhere, I'm like Wally. You just gonna find me.
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@BrutalBx Wally?
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@BrutalBx Wally?


It's the English equivalent to Where's Waldo?
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@BrutalBx Oh, but wait if your Waldo shouldn't it be hard to find you?
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@alexfangtalon you know that is a very valid point? Bad analogy Brutal, bad analogy.
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I'm so excited with how many cheerleaders there are this round SHAKE IT GIRLS
I like cheerleaders

@Dirty Pretty Lies Angie I'll check out your sheets probably while I'm at work (gotta refresh my noggin) so that's why there's a wait. Probably won't get back till later on in the day.

@BrutalBx you get the green light. Thanks man! I would put the kitty seal of approval but I'm on my phone... And that's a lot of effort. Just imagine the cat playing with toilet paper lol

... i need to start making the character list lol

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I'm so excited with how many cheerleaders there are this round SHAKE IT GIRLS
I like cheerleaders

@Dirty Pretty Lies Angie I'll check out your sheets probably while I'm at work (gotta refresh my noggin) so that's why there's a wait. Probably won't get back till later on in the day.

@BrutalBx you get the green light. Thanks man! I would put the kitty seal of approval but I'm on my phone... And that's a lot of effort. Just imagine the cat playing with toilet paper lol

... i need to start making the character list lol


Thank you kindly, moved him over to the CS tab
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@lovely complex No problem! Take your time. I'll be around. :)
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@Universorum @lovely complex @Silent Observer
PS: Grim's Aiden will be up soon enough. He's changing his FC.





So, Sierra looks fine to me, you can move her over. Delilah, I'll wait until my friends are here to talk about her. That being said, I would change her from "public relationsist," which I don't think is a really thing, to maybe just putting her on a dance committee.
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