@Neo Is Delight
I have already fixed it, is that ok

@Neo Is Delight
I have already fixed it, is that ok

Okay, great! You fixed the major issues I had, and I appreciate that.
I just have a slight concern.
Grammar.
Now, I'm not a huge Grammar Nazi, and I don't mind an error here and there. But there's more than a little error here and there, and I'd like to politely request you clean it up a bit.

@Neo Is Delight
Yeah well, i'm not so good at english so can you help me with my grammar problem

Name: Victor Lionstone

Age: 24

Gender: Male

Apperance: {removed to take up less space}

Guild mark: blue, on hand

Personality:
Victor is quite quiet when in battle because he is used to working with someone who knew him very well. But when he's at the guild bar or on the street, you cant do anything to stop him from talking, and he would never feel tired talking about himself. However, he isn't good at teamwork and the word 'plan' is never in his mind. He always wants everyone else to pay attention to him and he thinks everything happening is about him. He is caring, and has a great spirit, knowing how to cheer other people up rather well.

History:
No one knows where he came from. 2 years ago, he appeared in Fiore with a friend. He used a magic staff while his friend used a transformable umbrella. This team traveled around Fiore and fought with a bad guy everywhere they visited. Unfortunately, during a fight Victor's friend was killed while trying to save a kid from being killed in the crossfire. After that day, Victor used both his staff and the umbrella to kill all the bad guys he met. As his friend's last will, he went and joined in the tournament to show everyone the power of this weapon.

Magic: Moonlight magic and Enhance weapon magic
-Moon Blast: Shoots a magic bullet that explodes when it touches the enemy.
-Moon Shadow: Casts a strong magic to help increase its user's speed and weapon. But this skill require a lot of magic energy from the moon to cast.
-Moon Arrow: Casts a magic that generates two magic circles that shoot light arrows to the user's target (each circle can only shoot 3 arrows)
-Moonlight armor: Cast a magic that generate a light armor help its user to remove dark effect and have chance to negate physical attack. (This skill spend very much energy from moon)
-Transform: the umbrella has 3 forms; A spear, magic gun, and a shield.
-Moonlight cannon: only in magic gun form; Shoots a cannon ball made from moonlight.
-Moonlight spear: only in spear form; Enhances the spear and allows it to attack from a longer range.
-Moonlight Shield: only in shield form; Enhances the shield and allows it to protect the user from 1 attack.

Magical items carried:
-Staff of Moonlight
-Shadow Umbrella
-Moonlight dragon claw

Extra information: Maybe nothing

Okay, so everything's fixed.
So, do know I will expect better grammar in character. Using language barriers is a valid excuse, however there is auto correct, so there shouldn't have been as many errors as there were, unless you ignored the squiggly red line.

Now, with that out of the way. I have to ask you describe the magical items.
We do not know what the dragon claw is, and at the moment, it seems irrelevant without description.

@Neo Is Delight
Thank you so much, I'll describe it when i'm free, I'm currently quite busy.

Well shoot, @Rune_Alchemist, our dragon slayers are like...two opposite sides of the same coin. While this could be very fun to play up, I do also understand in terms story there are certain similaties. Perhaps to similare...

Well I'll go ahead and give ya'll Klisa's CS, and if you Rune or @Neo Is Delight think that my character is to similar to your already accepted one I'll construct a new one.

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Kids were so eager these days to prove themselves worthy. They all seemed to be growing too fast and not staying kids for very long. And this kid? Well he looks like a hoity toity rich kid with a stick up his ass. That or the stick went so far up it gave him permanent brain damage as he’s walking into the arena dropping out a name like it’s supposed to mean something.

Two colored irises, that’s very interesting. One the color of gold, it sparkles in the sun like a poorly polished metal piece. The other a deep aquamarine, there’s something about that eye, the way it shimmers, you could almost submerge your thoughts into it. But that outfit had to go. A black and red coat with a frillery shirt underneath, the leather wristbands were already enough to throw your gawdy censors off.



Wait is this kid dressed like that idol character AlucaSoldis? You had to be kidding, this scrawny, willowy, kid standing at 5’9”, was cosplaying at a time like this? Was he lost? Did he go to the wrong competition? He sure seemed fired up though.

His voice was husky, he had the voice of a handsome young man, smooth, and velvet tones that was attractive to the ear. Completely wasted because he was yelling most of the time and making eager, haughty remarks.



His guild mark is emerald green, and is on his right wrist palm side down, not knuckles up.

+ Personality:

Persistent -

Rivule doesn’t give up, he doesn’t know how to give up. And while this may seem like a negative in reality it is his best benefit. He eagerly motivates those around him to do more and better things. To never give up and continue fighting and standing up for what they believe in. He is often is more or less inspiring than he is annoying or overbearing about it. Rivule doesn’t give up a good fight unless he truly knows there is no way of winning. His motto though is how do you know till you even tried?

Loyal -

Rivule will always have your back no matter the circumstances. No matter what it could be, through thick and thin if you need his help you have his help. He won’t let you down. He won’t fail you. And if you both fail he often is resilient enough to not let it get to him and make him worry or sweat about it. So why should you? He’s eager to try again. But if you succeed prepare for a victory party because he enjoys celebrating the good moments in life instead of being dragged down by the negative ones.

Eager -

While he may not be an optimist, Rivule is always eagers. Fail or success he is always eager for more, to learn more, do more, be better and more than what he is or was. He is always seeking to reaffirm that he can be more and be more. He flies head on first into any circumstance with little regard of the consequences because he doesn’t dwell on the consequences much. He will just do as much as he can in his power.

- Personality:

Obnoxious -

Let’s face it, he might not be overbearing on what he believes, but by god Rivule can be obnoxious. He is irresponsible and can be a slacker. Actually if he can avoid doing it he will, by asking Veilios to do it for him. He’s loud and he doesn’t know the difference between an outside voice and inside voice. He’s always high strung and loud about something. Even the tiniest things become big problems for him and he’s yelling at the top of his lungs about it.

He can also be whiny and start a fit if he doesn’t get his way. He may be motivating when he wants to be, but the other half is a sore loser who doesn’t like losing and doesn’t like not getting his way.

Haughty -

Born with a bent silver spoon in his hand, despite not being treated very special, he still lived a special and easy life compared to others. He doesn’t know hardship or pain in the same way someone who has been through war may know hardship and pain, but that doesn’t mean Rivule hasn’t been through hardship and pain. But he acts higher than thou, more so than the brother he claims does so more than him. He acts hoity toity and he flaunts the things he owns around as if they will gain him some status. Even dropping his family name once in awhile to get better treatment.

Envious -

With the way Rivule grew up, it’s no wonder he adopted some of his mother’s jealous tendencies. His eldest brother and youngest sister were favored more than him. While him and Ebon sat at the side lines demanding attention. Though he never realized how little attention the favorites even got because he’s so one sided and blinded.

Rivule main motivation to join The Guild was because of his own rivalry against his brother. Who he believes or claims that he believes he is better than him. Rivule demands attention. He demands to show off and be liked and he craves the attention he rarely got when he was a kid. And so if anyone else gets more attention than him, then he gets irritating and whiny about it.

Or does something completely over the top to win the favor. It’s the reason he will challenge people clearly better than him in terms of league in order to earn some kind of approval or praise from others. He shows off. He’s envious when others do better than him and he goes on crazy rivalry schemes in order to quench his feelings of his own inadequacy.

Eye Illusion Magic

Is it you or are his eyes more captivating than others? Two colored eyes seem to capture your natural curiosity as you stare into them. But what is this under that gaze? A magic circle glowing in his eyes? How did you fall for the oldest trick in the book?

Rivule’s father Manos used a form of Eye Magic known as Figure Eyes Magic, and his mother Lumina used an Illusionary magic. While Rivule kept some pieces of the Figure Eye Magic he combines it with an illusionary magic with various effects based on the gaze alone.

Traditional Figure Eye movement takes the souls of living individuals and manipulates them as living dolls. But Illusion Eye Magic takes control of the victims neural pathways and visual centers creating unusual results.

The spell is easy to break through if you’re an experienced fighter, you may simply close your eyes to break free from his Illusionary gaze. But for those inexperienced in fighting or those who have never fought against this type of magic before may find themselves in a difficult position.

The Path is Through the Eyes - Self Image Replacement

Tier 1

You go in for a swing of your weapon or cast some magic, he’s staring you down. A lot good that’s going to do when you have the upperhand. He’s not even fighting. Get out of here kid? Was that a magic circle in his eye? Whatever he’ll be defeated before you know it and you’ll go out to get some lunch.

What is this? You hit a pillar? How? Where did he go? Did he teleport? Now that can’t be. He can’t have teleportation magic? What exactly is going on.

It appears that if Rivule holds onto your gaze he can place a copy of himself inside of your mind. When an enemy goes for an attack, they attack what they still think is Rivule standing, but he’s already moved out of the way allowing himself to swap places with a nearby object instead.

A Distant Freedom - Eye Gaze Teleportation
Tier 1

It appears that Rivule can teleport himself to whatever he is directly look at. The catch is that he has to be looking at it and cannot go any further than his own distant vision allows him to go to. If he cannot make out the details and visualize the object he wants to teleport to, he simply cannot teleport to it.

A Window to the Soul - Gaze Mimicry

Tier 2

Why is he staring at you like that? Damn it you have to get out of his range of vision. The last time he did that, he was able to swap his place with an object. What is he doing now. If that’s the case you must get to his blind side. You step to the left side. Suddenly he steps to the left as well. What the hell is he think. You take a step forward, he takes a step forward. Is he reading your movements?

With great concentration when Rivule locks eyes with his enemies, he may be able to see into their next range of movement. Except that he cannot completely mimicry a complex set of movements. If someone is super faster they can lose his gaze, if someone closes their eyes he cannot see into their next movement, or if someone moves too complicated for him to repeat a step then the spell is broken.

A Mirroring Future - Self Projection
Tier 3

Looking directly at you he suddenly charges forward. What an incomprehensible move. Why would he charge you like that? No matter, you’ll land a blow and knock him back and snatch defeat from his over confidence. You go in for the swing, what the he vanishes? No he never vanished. He’s below you.

It appears that he can project an idea into someone’s field of vision. Like an illusion or a hallucination of a “projected” future. He can project himself doing different basic task. But those who do not look into his gaze or already know his abilities are within the range of illusion it is easy to see through the spell because his mirror hallucinations of himself can only do basic movements, like running forward, or a simple attack.

Magical Items:

When Rivule ran from the house to prove that he was better than his Eldest brother he took something with him that he should not have taken. That item would be;

The Nightfall Family Crest as a Pendant -

The Nightfall Family Crest represents unity and bonds. It was crafted at the hands of the families three most powerful Casters. Who were once also one of the three strongest in an old guild that fell from power, the Arcanium Guild served the people for 18 years and all that was left was an amulet of power, the Nightfall family who took in the stragglers who had no home and their family magics.

The Crest Carries the three unique spells from Disas, Manos, and Cerulea. Rivule may cast these spells, but he can only cast one. The amulet is a giant trump card, one spell uses up a whole entire charge of the amulet and it is useless for the rest of the day. That and the spell locked away in the amulet disappears and only the original owner of the spell can replace what was lost.

It also leaves Rivule with no mana of his own left because the spells are quite above his level and the pendant takes quite a bit of mana to activate.



Disas Possession Magic - Sinner’s Delight

Tier 10

A dark royal blue spell burst from the necklace, the color of the red shard fades as mana burst from it. The sky turns hollow and dark, and a storm begins to brew. What is this dark rain? A storm? Suddenly erupting from the ground are a thousand hungry phantoms all pouring out from what could be considered the gates of hell.

They laugh devilishly. They are hungry for a weak minded and pathetic soul and you just happened to be the one they want. This isn’t like possession as they grab onto you and dig into your deeper desires. This is something even far more worse than that.
It takes over your mind. Nestle deeply into your thoughts and tugs. Tugs at your temptations and desires, and possess you with your inner subconscious sin. The spell takes the user mind corrupting them into their baseless desires you embody deeply.

If you are a greedy person you see money everywhere. You dig your nails into the dirt, grabbing at money not there. If you are a slob, you begin to eat the dirt at your feet seeing a bountiful feast. If you are lustful being you begin to cling onto your allies or search for the one you have affections for, but this love is not yourself and you will eventually break their heart with pervish sensibilities. If you are a wrathful person you rampage through the streets.

If left to this. You die either of starvation. Or I have seen someone so wrathful they ran themselves off of a cliff.

Manos Eye Magic - A Warped Dimension
Tier 10

The users eye manifest in the sky. Or something like that. You are trapped within their gaze and as you are trapped by their gaze a portal open ups in their eye. It acts like a black hole which then sucks everything up within its path.

Those who are sucked in the Eye Dimension are forever trapped there in a purgatory state. No one is sure whether or not how many people are trapped in there. Or how any one actually gets out of the spell. Some suspect on the user deaths.

No one is quite for certain.

Cerulea’s Shadow Magic - Shadow Dancers

Tier 10

Cerulea’s shadow magic far surpassed child’s play as she called it. Children who wielded their shadows to merely pull or immobilize their enemies. When she started working with Disas and saw the way he used his magic it gave her an idea.

The hell is this as you saw a deep crimson magic circle form. As the shadows from buildings and the shadows of people began to form, three perfected silhouetted beings. Shadow puppets, woman in metal faulds, and chest plates. Swords and shields in their hands, they stood at an amazonian size of 6’3” and moved like shadow dancers.

They whipped and whirled when they attacked you with their blades. They were stronger than anything you faced before. How could someone form a shade from shadows? The perfect soldiers that felt no pain. They could be broken by spells to banish, light if they were stuck by it, but otherwise they were fast, danced in on the battlefield and she didn’t have to lift a finger beside maintaining them on the battlefield.

This was insane. This couple had an insane amount of creativity and innovation.

Enchanted Short Sword -

Rivule mixes utility magic with efficient sword play. His enchanted sword is his offensive counter. While his eye is a defensive utility to gain a better advantage in battle. Enchanted to keep it from breaking easily in battle it appears to be no more than ordinary sword, Rivule’s inexperience shows.



Extra Information:

Both Rivule and Veilios come from the Nightfall family. They are cousins. Here is the family information;

Father - Manos Nightfall - Eye Magic - 53 - Alive

He worked eighteen years in the Arcanium and dedicated his life to the guild. Though dedication isn't necessarily the right word. As Manos is described as being an irresponsible slacker, who often liked to dodge responsibility and throw it all on his younger brother. He liked to go adventuring rather than dealing with family manners. Him and Disas his brother earned quite a bit of money after the fall of the Arcanium Guild and have lived decently off of luxury and wealth their children have inherited by name alone.

Mother - Lumina Nightfall - Illusion Magic - 49 - Deceased

Lumina was not a sorceress of the Arcanium Guild. In fact she completely avoided such a duty merely because she was greatly jealous of her middle sister Cerulea who often received more praise and admiration for beauty, her innovation, her creativity. She stepped away from her family, Galvan, duty and walked her own path. It was what actually started the attraction between her and Manos. He was spontaneous and could not be bound by simply responsible alone and she was fiercely independent who walked her own path and did what she believed was in her future. Unfortunately Manos also had the habit of attracting other woman to his side, which made her bitter and resentful towards him.

Eldest Brother - Adum Nightfall - Kaleidoscope Magic - 27 - Alive

Voted Number 4 most popular male sorcerer in Sorcerer Fashion Weekly and voted hottest male sorcerer of all time last year. If anyone remembers the name Nightfall its because Adum has been on more than few magazines of Sorcerer Fashion Weekly, ever since his mother put him out to the world like he's some pretty trophy on their viewing shelf. Like his father he seems to attract a mass of woman, it is rumored as well the idol Fiye is fond of him as well. Unlike his father he doesn't seem to recognize the woman or care. And if the men think they have a shot, he also doesn't care. He is suspected to actually be the more powerful out of his siblings, which is what caused the boiling rivalry between Rivule and Adum. But Adum just thinks that Rivule is in competition with himself because he also doesn't care that Rivule wants to fight him or be better than him.

Second Eldest - Ebon Nightfall - Figure Eye Magic - 23 - Alive

While Rivule has his eyes out for Adum, he doesn't seem to recognize his second eldest brother's rivalry with him. Ebon like Rivule was shut out by their own mother's cold embrace long before he came into the picture. And while it is both him and Rivule that were not special enough to be cared for by their mother, Rivule's loud mouth is what got Ebon's eyes on him. He wants to bitterly destroy his siblings, except their sister Luminious. He wants Adums position, he wants Adum's attention that he seems to ignore, while his face is plastered all over magazines. And he wants to shut Rivule's mouth up.

Little Sister - Luminious Nightfall - Mirror Magic - 15 - Alive

Luminious is the spitting image of their mother. That's the reason Luminia always wanted a daughter, to make her exactly like her. To have a little doll she could pamper and do her hair. Luminious was only loved by Luminia when she was doing things the way her mother wanted them to be done. Because of this Luminious is always eager to please others and make them happy. She does whatever they want. She will stop at nothing to make sure they are taken care of. She doesn't choose her own clothes, she ask Adum, or her brothers or servants. She doesn't do her own hair either, preferring someone else to do it. And often shows great loneliness when someone hasn't taken care of her.

Uncle - Disas Nightfall - Possession Magic - 48 - Alive

Disas out of the two was always the more responsible brother. he actually did his work and took his duty as one of the members of the Arcanium seriously. He wasn't a slacker. He was sort of always sort of described as being a little too serious at times and people were uncertain if he had a sense of humor, Disas tells some terrible jokes. He often forgets the punchlines and dismisses the joke entirely when he does. He was always faithfully devoted to those he loved and even so he was faithfully devoted to Cerulea. He loved her. It's the few times you will see Disas smile and take down some of his iron defense shield he has a personality. Disas has always been the dedicated and devoted husband. Even when his wife fell into an emotional catatonic coma he was still there for her. Did everything he could for her. Disas is the type of person who has had 100% intensity to everything he does.

Aunt - Cerulea Nightfall - Shadow Magic - 45 - Alive [Coma]

Cerulea was loved by all. She was more beautiful than Lumina her actually middle sister, they both had a much older sister. Cerulea was kind hearted and a soft spoken woman, but underlying it all despite her homey photo now. She was a strong caster, and a protective woman. She would throw herself out there for anyone and accepted anyone under her wing. For example, everyone of her servants were not really servants, but the leftover guild members with no home or nowhere to go she took them in as family and welcomed them with open arms. She was a very warming woman. And it is said she was the perfect woman for Disas. If she were to be expressed the warming spring that melts snow, he was the breezy wintering breeze that brought in frost. But together they created a balmy weather. She was a loving, trusting woman. But do not double cross her. She may be loving and trusting, and kind. But if you betrayed her, hurt the people she loved, you'd be in for a reckoning.

Cousin - Veilios Nightfall - Ghost Magic - 25 - Alive

The son of Disas and Cerulea

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@Neo Is Delight
I have editted.

Well shoot, @Rune_Alchemist, our dragon slayers are like...two opposite sides of the same coin. While this could be very fun to play up, I do also understand in terms story there are certain similaties. Perhaps to similare...

Well I'll go ahead and give ya'll Klisa's CS, and if you Rune or @Neo Is Delight think that my character is to similar to your already accepted one I'll construct a new one.

Klisa Bay, the timid dragon [+]

Guild mark is sea green upon her left palm
~Name~
Klisa Bay

~Age~
19

~Gender~
Female

~Personality~
Compassionate, patient, hardworking, unsure, socially awkward, lacks self confidence.

Klisa, while not quite a wallflower, is kind of timid for lack of a better description. It would be best to say that she does not have a very strong personality. She is pleasant and outgoing enough in familiar settings or around those she trusts, but outside the walls of the guild or interacting with loud strangers she can quickly wilt into a speechless and fidgety state of nervousness. It not conflict she shy away from, given that she will always find her voice and courage for a friend in need. She when chips are down and the battle is on she seems as stalwart and ready to fight as anyone. It is the social things that seem to unnerve her. Anytime she finds herself in a spot like she will find herself having trouble breathing and feel an overwhelming desire to run away. She has always been better at defending other rather than herself. In fact she will go to great lengths for others even stepping well out of her comfort zone without seeming to realize that is what she is doing. It is more of a reflex than anything else it seems.

~History~

deep breath [+]

lisa is the illegitimate child of a peasant woman and a business tycoon turned nobleman through marriage and success. She lived the first few years with her mother, who passed due to a sickness in her lungs. An only child, she had no other family that anyone knew. But instead of being a child left to die in the streets her father, Sir Hightower, took her in to his home. Despite that he did not openly recognize her as his child in any official form and rarely even in private. To this day she does not truly know if her father ever held any real feelings for her or her mother to inspire him into saving her from a certain death on the streets, or if it was simply because he wanted her out of the public spotlight, where his bastard child could be easily kept under wraps and would not harm his public image. She lived, more or less, as a maid-servant in his house hold. Most of her raising and caring was given to her by the others servants of the house. She was a diligent worker, hoping that being so would garner attention from her father, and perhaps even praise. But Sir Hightower was a very busy man dealing with both politics and business kept him off the estate most of the time.

She was not the only child in the house, the other was her fathers and his noble lady wife's son. A boy only a year or so younger than herself. This had her interacting quite often with him as well as Sir Hightower's wife, who knew of Klisa's scandalous origins. She was the kind of prideful noble lady that had a hard enough time dealing with the blow to her honor that her husband would conceive a child with a commoner, much less the unforgivable insult of bringing that child into their home. The woman didn't make life easy on Klisa. She was a talent mage and schemer, and did many things to make Klisa's life hard and treat her with disdain and contempt. Klisa and the son had started out as something close to friends, but children are known to imitate the parents and it wasn't to long before the boy was just as spiteful to her as the mother was.

While doing her best to keep tabs on her father, around the time she turned 10, she noted a pattern of sorts. She had heard her mother had been a magic user of some sort, a humble but respect specialist among the local guilds. Her father's Wife was a talented magic user from a long family of highborn, well bred, mages. Much of the time he was home was spent admiring his sons progress in developing magical skills. Clearly her father loved magic, she thought if she could use magic as well, perhaps she could get the attention and love she craved from her distant father.

She took to studying under one of the servants, the one who had most closely raised and cared for her. He was an elderly man, but had studied magic in his youth and had enough know-how to teach her the basics. Klisa's natural affinity seemed to be with water magic. 5 years passed and though her skills steadily grew, especially given she had taken to sneaking into Lady Hightowers library and reading some of her magic books, she felt she paled in comparison to her half brother who had a more proper teacher, more time to focus on training, and had been practicing longer.

Then one day, she heard some servant talking about some sort of major purchase the Hightower family had made. Of some sort of rare and powerful magical item. A Larcime filled a lost kind of magic. She felt this was her chance to do something incredible and get her fathers approval and acceptance. If she could make it so she could use the lost magic in that Larcime she'd surely prove to be a good enough mage for her father's attention. She snuck into the storage room late one night and after much searching found what she was looking for.

It hadn't quite been like other Larcime she had seen before. It was more rough shaped, jagged and more opaque. It was the most brilliant green-blue she had ever seen, as if someone had turned the sea into a shard of glass. Gingerly she reached out to take hold of it, but as soon as her fingers touched it she blacked out. She wasn't sure what happened, but she remembered a great deal of pain.

Next thing she knew, she had woken up in a bed, and most of the household standing about it, including her father, his wife, and her half-brother. She was informed that she had stolen something meant for her half-brother, and such theft could not be tolerated, not even from her. So as punishment, as soon as she was well, she was to leave the household and never return. Delirious, in pain, and utterly heartbroken by this news Klisa could do little other than weep in response. Her Father, his wife, her-half brother as well as many of the servants left her alone. Those servant closest to her and most like her family remained to care and comfort her. Eventually it was just her and the servant who had acted as her magic teacher.

When they were alone, he asked her to try to use magic. While it took some coaxing for her to even attempt she got a very unique surprise. Her magic type before had been a water casting type, but she ended up producing was something like a claw of swirling, green-blue, salt water about her hand rather than the clear blue little ball she had tried to make. It seems she had successfully absorbed the Larcime of the Sea Dragon. He told her not everyone could have done such a thing, and that doing so meant that she was a great mage indeed.

The praise felt like a hollow victory to her at this point, she asked him where could she go or what she could do. All she had ever known was living in this estate with him and the other servants.

He told her that when he was younger he had studied magic so that he may one day join a guild, specifically a guild in a few cities over. He had always admired the guild and it members and if he was her, with this new power and nothing to hold her down here anymore, he'd at least go check it out, perhaps she'd like it there. Around others who would see her as equals, as comrades, as family. They were always good about family.

Apprehensive and nervous, but with no other real option she did just that. Once she recovered and was discharged from the Hightower estate she made her way to the home of Dragon Cry. And, much to her surprise she felt like she discovered what she was looking for all those years among the hightwoer estate. A real family. 3 years later and she had never felt more at home anywhere in her life.

Magic
Sea Dragon Slayer Magic

Description
Considered the 'mirror' of sky dragon slayer magic. While the user can demonstrate the ability to attack by generating sea water, as the Sky dragon slayer is able to enhance their allies abilities, the Sea dragon slayer is more suited to weakening and disabling opponents.

These 'de-buffing' spells are still an imperfect aft of hers, having had been a self taught slayer.. She can only cast one de-buffing spell on one target, she is unable to double down her debuffs on one person. She can cast each spells on as many individual targets as her stamina allows, but it would drain her magic significantly and rapidly.

~Known Spells~
Offensive Spells
Sea Dragon Roar ( of course )
A massive, whirling torrent of sea water is spelled forth from the users mouth, like a whirlpool, tidal wave, and a riptide all at once, it is by far her most powerful spell, though she can only seem to use it about once a day at the moment, even with an abundant of amount of water to 'eat' afterwards.

Sea Dragon Fang
A fierce swipe of her hand is followed closely by a forceful rush of water that can connect with her foe with all the force of a hammer blow. Her go to close range, offensive attack. By no means an overtly impressive form of attack, it is strong enough to give the young girl claws to keep foes weary of approach.

Sea Dragon Claw
Much like the fang attack, but it is a kick instead, much stronger and more 'sharp' where the fang is more blunt in nature. With a greater deal of force, and a keener edge she can use this move to slice through thick, hard wood, or inflict greater damage on a foe; but likewise it has a much more significant effect on her stamina.

De-buffs

Draining Low Tide
The spell, while active will drain the foe of strength and endurance, making them feel as if their power is being drawn away from them. It is far from spell that would instantly reduce a man to complete weakness, and the stronger the foe the longer it would take for them to have visible effects on there power, but in the heat of combat and apply well it is a good way to have a foe's endurance being spent twice as fast and to gradually reduce them to being breathless and weak. As soon as she stops maintaining the spell there endurance will began to trickle back in, quicker than it left, so its best for this move to be released once the foe is incapacitated or otherwise unable to fight.

Heavy High Tide
The spell, while active, will force an impressive amount of pressure on the foe, making there body weight feel as if has increased and give them the sensation that they are moving as if they were at the bottom of the sea. A good technique for slowing down a foe. How much pressure is actually applied to the enemy is based on how much power she puts into it. At most she can make them feel as if their weight is increased times 5, and while that can force many foes to their knees, she will quickly burn through her stamina trying to maintain such a force.

Withering Red Tide
A spell that can be inflicted on only one foe at a time. The spell, while active, significantly drains the offensive power of spells. This only effects spell power and only very externally offensive spells. This will have no effect on the targets physical strength or abilities that augment the physical power. But if your foe is trying to roast you with a raging inferno or deadly shadow spear, while under this spell he is more likely to produce a minor fireball or harmless shade.

~Extra information~

Klisa always has a pouch of salt about her. While she can replenish her strength by consuming freshwater, she finds salt water is much more effective and agreeable to her pallet.

Klisa does not have an over abundance of magic, big spells and long fights are very draining on her. She will try to end things quickly or stay to the support roles in a fight in order to keep herself from running out of steam before battle is done.

Klisa has only be a dragon slayer for 5 years, and is mostly self taught in this form of magic. She believes there is much she doesn't yet know about her powers and feels she has yet to plumb the depths of her abilities.

As mentioned in her Bio she is a Second generation dragon slayer, and often feels...troubled by this. She wonders is she deserves to call herself a dragon slayer, as one who has never met a dragon, much less slayed one.

Looking over everything, I have to say there's a few too many similarities. Sorry. ^.^"

Okay, so, I'm an awful GM. Bunnies are not made for such powerful roles. We are meant to be adorable, not all powerful bunny overlords, as much as I love such a title. xD
So, I've elected to promote @AngelofOctober to Co-Gm, because they help me with stuff in discord anyways, so it might as well be official.

While this is a Casual Roleplay, we are still looking for quality. @vn2202 Welcome to my domain. I will not excuse language barrier for adequate quality or adequate writing skills.

Personality:
Victor is quite quiet when in battle because he is used to working with someone who knew him very well. But when he's at the guild bar or on the street, you cant do anything to stop him from talking, and he would never feel tired talking about himself. However, he isn't good at teamwork and the word 'plan' is never in his mind. He always wants everyone else to pay attention to him and he thinks everything happening is about him. He is caring, and has a great spirit, knowing how to cheer other people up rather well.

Thank you. You fixed the grammar. However, it is still poorly structured. None of the sentences actually work together and they seem to contradict themselves a little bit, don't they? You also still have failed to put the personality in the format we asked you, which is to separate the negatives and positives. This will help you define the traits you need and for this to be more clearly understood and we actually get a feel for the character.

History:
No one knows where he came from. 2 years ago, he appeared in Fiore with a friend. He used a magic staff while his friend used a transformable umbrella. This team traveled around Fiore and fought with a bad guy everywhere they visited. Unfortunately, during a fight Victor's friend was killed while trying to save a kid from being killed in the crossfire. After that day, Victor used both his staff and the umbrella to kill all the bad guys he met. As his friend's last will, he went and joined in the tournament to show everyone the power of this weapon.

Same criticism as above. Poor sentence structure and poor sentence flow. Beyond the fact that history is lacking any important information. This may be a Casual RP, but mind your who, what, where's, why's and hows when writing a history. Where did his friend comes from? Where did he come from? How did he learn his magic, etc.

Magic: Moonlight magic and Enhance weapon magic
-Moon Blast: Shoots a magic bullet that explodes when it touches the enemy.
-Moon Shadow: Casts a strong magic to help increase its user's speed and weapon. But this skill require a lot of magic energy from the moon to cast.
-Moon Arrow: Casts a magic that generates two magic circles that shoot light arrows to the user's target (each circle can only shoot 3 arrows)
-Moonlight armor: Cast a magic that generate a light armor help its user to remove dark effect and have chance to negate physical attack. (This skill spend very much energy from moon)
-Transform: the umbrella has 3 forms; A spear, magic gun, and a shield.
-Moonlight cannon: only in magic gun form; Shoots a cannon ball made from moonlight.
-Moonlight spear: only in spear form; Enhances the spear and allows it to attack from a longer range.
-Moonlight Shield: only in shield form; Enhances the shield and allows it to protect the user from 1 attack.

This needs more detail and description.

Magical items carried:
-Staff of Moonlight
-Shadow Umbrella
-Moonlight dragon claw

Again we asked you to define these. You have not done so. What are these items? What do they do?

Extra information:
Victor friend's name is Kochi Dragun, a magic handicrafter. Kochi and Victor had found the skeleton of the Moonlight dragon and Kochi used it to craft the Staff of Moonlight and the Shadow Umbrella. When Kochi was dying, he used his last power to made a necklace from the last dragon claw they found so that a part of Kochi's soul is stored inside the necklace and help Victor when he needs. The Moonlight dragon claw can cast some simple protection and enhance defend spell.

While I admit I put some history in my extra information, I also am putting it in my history as well.

As for right now your application is denied, a second time. You have one more chance to address the things we have addressed. Or you will not be accepted into this RP. Thank you.

Started writing up a character, should be with you guys by days end.

@Neo Is Delight

No worries neo :3 I totally understand. I'll whip up a new slayer asap.

@KiltmanBagz

Oh my goodness, kilt!

I am so sorry. I feel kind of bad that you won't get to use Klisa for this.

If I would have known you were going to be around for this, I would have used a certain timid bunny instead. I do think it would have been neat to see how Eira and Klisa interact though...ah well, not my call.

_{And we could ship the two of them again like always}

Couldn't resist resurrecting an old character for this RP. Guess I'm still somehow addicted to FT RPs after all... Sigh

Anyway, here's the sheet for my not-so-new character. Still somehow lacking in length (especially for the history, that I've decided to mostly hide due to lacking a proper bio since his old one isn't adequate liking to slowly reveal things IC) but is mostly complete.

@Spanner

Okay, small question since I'm curious and I haven't read Fairy Tail in awhile and I'm not really actively a part of the community, and this is the first time I'm hearing of it.

But why can't second gen slayers enter/use Dragon Force? Is it because of the Lacrima instead of being taught by an actual dragon?

@Spanner

Okay, small question since I'm curious and I haven't read Fairy Tail in awhile and I'm not really actively a part of the community, and this is the first time I'm hearing of it.

But why can't second gen slayers enter/use Dragon Force? Is it because of the Lacrima instead of being taught by an actual dragon?

No idea, it wasn't explained in the manga. They often enter a state similar to dragon force when fighting as far as we can see (with cobra going as far as growing scales) but no second generation slayer ever demonstrated possessing the ability to enter Dragon Force, be it by themselves or assisted by something external.

@Spanner

See, I just always thought that was because they were the main characters so there was really no need to explore the fact they were using Dragon Force in the main story. Maybe a little...silly on my part, but eh. It's rather disappointing if they can't, though. I always assumed they could. It just wasn't ever really shown because it wasn't really needed.

I would argue that because third gen can do it at will with the help of the Lacrima that they can do it...it might just take a bit more of a shove. What exactly is the difference from being taught by a dragon and the Lacrima, after all?

Unless those with a Lacrima's magic isn't actually 'Dragon Slayer' magic, but then they can't really be called 'Dragon Slayers' or be users of 'Dragon Slayer' magic in that case, could they?

@Rune_Alchemist To be fair, fairy tail is such a mess that even if someone were to create a second gen using dragon force no one would be able to criticize saying that it's impossible. After all it was never stated that it is impossible, just implied.

@Spanner

True true.

I still dunno where it was implied unless it was implied somewhere after I quit watching or reading it. Fairy Tail has...well, a lot of plot holes in some areas. Especially when it comes to some lost magics, I think.

But eh, it is Fairy Tail. Probably thinking about it far too much xD

@Spanner

We'll look over the sheet in a moment. I just awoke. I need coffee and an active brain to do so properly