@vietmykeGreat post! Was it weird I got a bit of a Grand Budapest Hotel vibe from Galahad's house? This giant empty manor on a mountain and two people having dinner in a massive dining room by themselves. :p
Funny thing about the gunblade you introduced. I was actually planning on introducing a similar weapon as the "traditional" Lanostran soldier's armament. The gunlance, which is supposed to be like a long polearm combined with a mid-range rifle kind of thing.
@Drakey I really liked your post! That line about the Grace being beautiful because it's functional was really cool and I feel like Deva would be overjoyed to hear that. I do have some questions about that blue wisp of ether that can allow him to see into the Karamzina. It seems a bit... much? Like can he just send that blue wisp anywhere and see what's inside that location? How does it work, exactly? It seems like it has to do with I-XVII's vision, which is cool, but from what I got out of the post it appears like it lets him convert things he sees in the physical realm into miniature models for him to move around and examine? That part I'm fine with. The part that I'm unsure about is this x-ray vision ability and him being able to spiritually manifest himself inside his workshop within the ark and see exactly what's in it without him ever being in there before. I don't think you mentioned him having this ability, and I don't get how it's supposed to work. I might ask you to change your post a bit.
Also, as much as I like the idea that the ark was being made with his own input, that can't really be the case, since Phoenix didn't know they were going to El until recently and so him having any say into what goes into the Karamzina wouldn't be in keeping with the timeframe. I'll allow him to maybe have sent word for them to include some quick customizations to the existing worskshop that cater to his needs (maybe he let them known as soon as he found out about the existence of the Karamzina), but any further Rodion-specific additions to the Karamzina wouldn't fit, at least at the onset.
Also, about the motorcycle, can't he only have one "construct" available to him at once? If he turns the motorcycle "on" will the Madrys float out of its wolf configuration and then go into his motorcycle?
@shylarahGood catch! Originally, the phoenix was the symbol for the Varyan empire itself, which is why I included it in the character descriptions part of the CS. I didn't really mean to highlight its attachment to fire as a thing, it was more the idea of rebirth that I wanted to convey, which was dumb on my part. I guess in my own mind the fire aspect of the phoenix was secondary to the rebirth aspect. Anyway, I changed the Varyan crest to a stark empty red circle-- the circle is a symbol for the concept of eternity, the empty space within it to signify uh... emptiness, and I guess the color red would signify "blood", which in Lord Varya's eyes, is the price to be paid.
Now this next bit is kinda inside baseball, but since I changed the phoenix emblem to act as the crest of our Warband, I had to make some changes to the story and certain characters. Phoenix Warband has been Father Creid's class since its inception a long time ago, and there's a reason why the emblem of his warband is a mythical creature that symbolizes rebirth. Remember his backstory, and how he survived something that took several of his limbs and made it so that he had to live wearing a mask all the time.
As for the fire aspect still being a weird connotation to have with Warband Phoenix's emblem-- you got me there! I honestly always did see it as secondary! But yeah, I think some of the suggestions that others have put forward could fix this bit of inconsistency. Maybe the phoenix in this universe is made of ether? I do like that one. That could work, maybe?
@DrakenAw, you're giving leviathans too little credit! They're primeval creatures from the ancient world. Literal sea dragons! And while the Karamzina might have Warband Phoenix's crest on its hull, its actual shape is modeled after a leviathan, so there's that. :p
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Working on writing stuff now! Will hopefully have stuff done in a few hours.
Funny thing about the gunblade you introduced. I was actually planning on introducing a similar weapon as the "traditional" Lanostran soldier's armament. The gunlance, which is supposed to be like a long polearm combined with a mid-range rifle kind of thing.
@Drakey I really liked your post! That line about the Grace being beautiful because it's functional was really cool and I feel like Deva would be overjoyed to hear that. I do have some questions about that blue wisp of ether that can allow him to see into the Karamzina. It seems a bit... much? Like can he just send that blue wisp anywhere and see what's inside that location? How does it work, exactly? It seems like it has to do with I-XVII's vision, which is cool, but from what I got out of the post it appears like it lets him convert things he sees in the physical realm into miniature models for him to move around and examine? That part I'm fine with. The part that I'm unsure about is this x-ray vision ability and him being able to spiritually manifest himself inside his workshop within the ark and see exactly what's in it without him ever being in there before. I don't think you mentioned him having this ability, and I don't get how it's supposed to work. I might ask you to change your post a bit.
Also, as much as I like the idea that the ark was being made with his own input, that can't really be the case, since Phoenix didn't know they were going to El until recently and so him having any say into what goes into the Karamzina wouldn't be in keeping with the timeframe. I'll allow him to maybe have sent word for them to include some quick customizations to the existing worskshop that cater to his needs (maybe he let them known as soon as he found out about the existence of the Karamzina), but any further Rodion-specific additions to the Karamzina wouldn't fit, at least at the onset.
Also, about the motorcycle, can't he only have one "construct" available to him at once? If he turns the motorcycle "on" will the Madrys float out of its wolf configuration and then go into his motorcycle?
@shylarahGood catch! Originally, the phoenix was the symbol for the Varyan empire itself, which is why I included it in the character descriptions part of the CS. I didn't really mean to highlight its attachment to fire as a thing, it was more the idea of rebirth that I wanted to convey, which was dumb on my part. I guess in my own mind the fire aspect of the phoenix was secondary to the rebirth aspect. Anyway, I changed the Varyan crest to a stark empty red circle-- the circle is a symbol for the concept of eternity, the empty space within it to signify uh... emptiness, and I guess the color red would signify "blood", which in Lord Varya's eyes, is the price to be paid.
Now this next bit is kinda inside baseball, but since I changed the phoenix emblem to act as the crest of our Warband, I had to make some changes to the story and certain characters. Phoenix Warband has been Father Creid's class since its inception a long time ago, and there's a reason why the emblem of his warband is a mythical creature that symbolizes rebirth. Remember his backstory, and how he survived something that took several of his limbs and made it so that he had to live wearing a mask all the time.
As for the fire aspect still being a weird connotation to have with Warband Phoenix's emblem-- you got me there! I honestly always did see it as secondary! But yeah, I think some of the suggestions that others have put forward could fix this bit of inconsistency. Maybe the phoenix in this universe is made of ether? I do like that one. That could work, maybe?
@DrakenAw, you're giving leviathans too little credit! They're primeval creatures from the ancient world. Literal sea dragons! And while the Karamzina might have Warband Phoenix's crest on its hull, its actual shape is modeled after a leviathan, so there's that. :p
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Working on writing stuff now! Will hopefully have stuff done in a few hours.
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