@BlackRose, here here's a quick tip: start a new paragraph whenever a different character speaks.
For example, instead of:
You could use:
It's easier to read and it also helps identify who is supposed to be speaking.
For example, instead of:
Sena checked the wagon before sighing "yes i see the immense amount of harm that poor child would of caused by stealing a single fruit from our supplies... he was likely starving Rin you needed be so cruel!". Rin tried to retort when one of the merchants with dark hair spoke up "Not at all my little lady the urchins around here are a constant annoyance!, if you allow them an inch they'll take a mile! i am always complaining to the guards to increase the security here but alas my words fall on deaf ears every time!" an an older graying merchant looks to the other "if it were up to you Alric half the city would be locked in the dungeons and only nobility allowed to walk the markets".
You could use:
Sena checked the wagon before sighing "yes i see the immense amount of harm that poor child would of caused by stealing a single fruit from our supplies... he was likely starving Rin you needed be so cruel!"
Rin tried to retort when one of the merchants with dark hair spoke up "Not at all my little lady the urchins around here are a constant annoyance!, if you allow them an inch they'll take a mile! i am always complaining to the guards to increase the security here but alas my words fall on deaf ears every time!"
An older graying merchant looks to the other "if it were up to you Alric half the city would be locked in the dungeons and only nobility allowed to walk the markets".
It's easier to read and it also helps identify who is supposed to be speaking.