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All right. Grumpy former Karate champ is done. Please let me know if there are any concerns or suggestions you guys have to improve on the CS.

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@ghastlyInc Your fontmeme link is broken, and I do feel that there is a bit of overlap with some of the characters that have recently been accepted, but I'd wait to see what @Inkarnate and @Hero think. Also, it might be best to resize your picture you have for Shun.
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@Euphonium Thanks for the feedback, its much appreciated! I reduced the image by 30%, which is hopefully enough. Didn't realize the font meme was broken as I guess the image was still in cache on my computer, so I've moved it to an image host for the moment.

As for the overlap: I fully understand. I had looked at @LordVoldemort's character but it somehow it completely fell out of my mind while writing my CS up. I'm willing to rework the background from an injury to something else (say performance anxiety or his temper causing him to get a ban?). This goes doubly so if the player in question feels like I might be robbing their character of a fun element to explore.

The only thing I want to preserve is the dream of going to the Olympics in 2020 in Karate. If only because its both culturally important and an extremely rare opportunity for practitioners (Karate is weirdly not a normal Olympic event.)
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I was talking to Ink about this last week or the week before, but I'd be interested in coming back with Yujiro in the near future if possible. My life is stabilizing after a bit of a rough spell, and I'm ready to come back fresh and ready to RP him out.
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@webboysurf I can ask a mod to unhide your post if you want.
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I think I'll try to post tomorrow. Show everyone the true meaning of Christmas by locking myself in my room away from my family to play on my computer.
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@webboysurf I can ask a mod to unhide your post if you want.


That would be ideal, thanks.
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<Snipped quote by Euphonium>

That would be ideal, thanks.


Okay, it should be fixed now. I'll add you back to the roster in a second.
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And finally tossed a post up, hopefully to help get the ball rolling again.
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Interested, is signups still open, if I may ask ? ~
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Interested, is signups still open, if I may ask ? ~


Yes, we're still open.

@ghastlyInc GMs are still reviewing.
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EYYY, look at that! It's a Christmas miracle!
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Worked out a CS, wasn't familiar with Japanese names, so I just put together the names from a few friends ~


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Apologies for the silence. Ink and I been sucked into the world of Azeroth the past few days, but I'll try poking him a bit to see if we can get things caught up here.
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So, my laptop is probably completely dead at this point. I'll still be active and able to check RPG, but I'm not sure how frequently I'll be able to respond to people until I get a fix or a new laptop.
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So, my laptop is probably completely dead at this point. I'll still be active and able to check RPG, but I'm not sure how frequently I'll be able to respond to people until I get a fix or a new laptop.

Which falls to me to stop procrastinating and having my co-GM monitor my own RP for me. I understand I've been a bit slow to get back into the shake of things with few exceptions, but I'm putting 200% forward to get this and my other projects back on track. I underestimated how de-energized I was in writing after getting my PC fixed around Christmas. But it's a new year and a better me. Not a newer me, but the old model has gotten some driver updates.

I will start subsequent updates soon.
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just a heads up that i am still alive, january has just been a pain in the arse to deal with lately
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Right; so, @Inkarnate put me in charge of reviews while he works on pushing out the time skip post. These reviews do not mean you're accepted, rather, they're what I think could be fixed or improved on.

@ghastlyInc First and foremost, there is the issue of Shun's height and weight. Normally, I wouldn't be so frisked in regards to such matters, yet Shun is well... to put it bluntly, a rarity in Japan. This link and this link may be of assistance to you.

Secondly, as mentioned before, there is somewhat of an overlap with recently accepted characters, however, I do think that either of the ideas you suggested earlier in this thread could be a fix for why he stopped karate. That being said, him being in karate and liking roleplaying games is a bit too close to Manami, another recently accepted character, though I suppose the two of you could probably work something out regarding that.

Finally, regarding his backstory (the party girl/stepfather/uncle/aunt/etc segments), I do feel that you could add more regarding how Shun feels about it. Incidents such as stepparents/children/siblings and party girls/boys are rather taboo in Japan, more so than they would be in a western country like the US.

@Noodles For Keisuke, however, there wasn't much that I had issue with.

For starters, I do need you to trim down his list of hobbies. The defining hobby section means 1 (one) hobby that shines over all, and having talked with Inkarnate, smoking wouldn't fit as a hobby. That would leave you with either Basketball or the Arcade to choose from, unless you decide on something different.

Regarding his parents' work, I'm somewhat confused as to where they work. Throughout the sheet, you mention three different places: a) a drink stall, b) a convenience stall, and c) a cigarette stall. Which one is it? A drink stall is likely a convenience stall (or store, it's a little odd that they manage a stall rather than a store). I'm not sure convenience stalls/stores in Japan sell cigarettes, however, but I did find some information that they have specialized stores (and even vending machines, though you need a special card for them) that you can buy tobacco products from.

Other than that, whilst I do feel it is a bit barebones in terms of content, I do feel that it could potentially be accepted, depending on what Inkarnate sees of it.

EDIT: I did forget something--if you could choose a color hexcode for Keisuke, that would be appreciated.

Now, for a thing not related to reviews:

@Pandapolio@Alexfangtalon Not to bother you two or anything, but I was curious on your status in this roleplay. I know that we're waiting on Inkarnate to post the time skip, but the two of you haven't really said much as of late in the OOC and the Discord, and I wanted to know if the two of you were still here for this.
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@Euphonium Yo, sorry about not posting yet. I wrote a post a couple days ago, I just need to do the code for it. I'll get it up as soon as possible
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@Euphonium ~ Rightt, I was late but edited that part to make it less ambiguous. Changed it to convenience store, andd on the stall/store part, my English isn't very good, so I thought they're the same word, but tweaked that one too ^^;
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