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I still need to flesh out the magic and write a little bit about clothing and such, but here is the first sketch. Maybe that helps some others.


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So I still need two more items(which I'm drawing a blank for), and pictures for the weapons but otherwise I think I"m done. Would appreciate some feeback on the weapons and what needs to be changed.
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Her character history is hardly fitting of a hero. She's a essentially a time space hopper who died because she did something silly. I don't want to spoil the lightning brawler's ending but the ranger died after stopping a criminal syndicate from stopping a world war for profit. She has no qualifications, or reason to be called a hero which this place is specifically made to call to. She has had an adventure but not one that has been done out of anything but selfishness, or personal gain. Nor is there any notes on how they changed anything for the better unintentionally or not. She doesn't need to be as grandiose as my npc ranger, or what have you but she needs at least some qualification the entity isn't calling for treasure hunters he's calling for people with the talent to realign worlds and needs the reputation to not screw with it further (Though he can stop that from happening).

The gloves of Belephor are a bit much apparently they're capable of doing physical damage to a deity of an unspecific level, or nature meaning there's theoretically no limit. I find that to be a bit much. Lucifer is still called Excalibur in the description. And apparently it can ignore personal/biological armor but not material armor like steel, Kevlar, and ebony?
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@vancexentan Hm... I've got two characters I'm thinking of using. One uses nanomachines to transmute things into other things, think Fullmetal Alchemist. The other would be a brawler with deadpool levels of regen and the ability to bypass/hit things they'd normally not be able to hit/break through like ghosts. Which do you think would fit better?
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Deadpool levels of regen is a bit ridiculous he literally regens from a puddle of blood, and as long as the nanomachines aren't too advanced (I'm aiming for modern not ultra future with the fire arms.) I'd suggest the first character.
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So here's the CS finally, I've been fighting with the backstory which didn't want to come out right at all. I ended up shaving quite a few details out since it was getting long. I realize the power is a bit of a stretch, but I thought it would be neat, along with the idea that Claire always thought she was a hero, even if she kind of wasn't until the last minute. The spirit of it burns in her!

As an aside, I was mostly done the CS when I realized you didn't want too high-tech. Therefore the only advanced equipment Claire has is her arm. Hopefully that's acceptable, but if this entire idea just doesn't fit let me know!
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You weren't kidding about the long backstory. Since the arm in question isn't too much of a big thing I'll accept the character.
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Should be ready for review. Apologies it took me a while to do.

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Since your character has mostly ranged based offense I'd like for you to add the general range length from the CS to the abilities he does.
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I understand that the Himeros Mk. IV is very powerful (though still below continent buster, per the rules), but I intended it to be something that could eventually be worked towards. An end-game sort of weapon due to its really long construction time and high material requirements. The Pothos Mk. IV Backpack is her standard equipment and is more along the lines of a Sentai hero.

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I'm sorry she's a good character but not fit for this roleplay. I have said multiple times that this is for less futuristic machines. Though not gundam styled advanced the majority of the settings we will find ourselves in will either ill suit a 30 foot mech, and quantum technology. Most setting will be taking place in cities, or in castles, or what have you. There will be more open areas but the vast majority of people will be fighting on foot, and that is what I intended for this roleplay. Maybe the occasional car chase, or whatever in a modern world. In short the conflicts that I have in plan are either in too small a setting for such a massive machine, or alienates the other characters. Giant monsters like dragons will show up as bosses on the off chance but not often. This is more shonen then sentai.

The most advanced character like I said is carrying some hand grenades, a pistol, and a machine gun on the occasion he feels he needs heavier weapons as he is mostly an advanced fighter. There will be no killer robots, hover boards, and or laser rifles.
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@vancexentan Ahh, gotcha! My bad, I didn't see that. I mainly made her a tech heroine to differentiate her from all the magically inclined ones I was seeing, but I guess magic is the theme here! I can try again with a more magic character in that case. Or, another idea--what about psychokinesis?
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Its fine and magic specifically isn't the theme per say more of a mix between real life, and magic as players can come from either a magical world, a normal world, or a mix of the two.
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So that is finally done - sorry it took a while we had a big family birthday and magical powers are not that easy.

I guess I will be playing with some kind of "mana" system just to handel what she can still and can not do anymore (at least not without hurting herself).
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Adjusted.

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I'll accept the character I see little else wrong with it.
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I don't see much issues with the character I'll pass it.
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I might have overlooked it but any comments on my character
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@Finrisso far she seems fine but a lot of your spells are missing description
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