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Things took a bit longer to take care of than I expected - this guy need any changes?


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Monster Fighting Abilities:
Deficit: This ability can seal a single ability of a single opponent, rendering it unusable. The effect lasts as long as Ken is able to focus, but can be broken by things like an attack or extremely distracting stimuli like illusions. While extremely potent against a single opponent, swarms or groups completely remove its use.

Supply: With a decent chunk of magical energy, Ken is capable of fixing a person's most important possession - themselves. Ken can heal wounds, with the cost being based on the level of damage - a scratch or flesh wound could be healed for almost nothing, while life-threatening injuries would need an entire night's worth of magical energy, and still leave Ken drained for the next few days.

Demand: Manifesting as a red tendril, this ability can be used as a somewhat poor method of maneuverability by launching the user off of a surface or connecting them to a wall. It's main use, however, is its ability to forcibly activate other creature's abilities. Upon piercing an enemy, the User can temporarily activate one of the victim's abilities, as well as choose things like the direction it is used in and how much force is used. This ability costs as much as the ability being used and while potent, it usually ineffective against highly durable opponents. The tendril is only moderately sharp, making monsters resistant to piercing essentially immune.

Savings: Ken is capable of forming barriers of green light. These barriers are able to take several weak hits without shattering, with strength directly proportional to how small the barrier is. These barriers can theoretically be used offensively, such as by forming a wall while an enemy is punching, but they cannot be formed inside of things, making it only useful for defense and as a counter. Surprisingly this is Ken's least costly ability and can be used very liberally.


I appreciated the naming sense of the abilities but here is where I have some problems with the character. Supply and Savings are fine as is, I see no problem there; Deficit and Demand are a bit problematic however.

Deficit is a problem in that I feel it directly interferes with the monster in a way that could cause confusion. First we would have to specific what specifically is a monster ability and what is just the monster's natural talents and frankly I think they are too tied together to bother even trying. Secondly, since he is sealing a monster ability, if it lasts into another's post there is the possibility someone could easily forget which one and mess up in their post. I feel that a sealing ability would be more of a hinderance to the writing than a boon even if that would be a powerful ability to have in any RPG. So I think this one will have to be scraped entirely or just totally remade.

Surprisingly after I thought about it, I have a less problems with Demand. It has some versatility which is nice and certainly has quite a few instances where it wouldn't work very well. Being able to force a monster to use any ability and in any direction is quite game changing, even if its cost is rather high. I appreciate the effort to try and 'weaken' the ability but even then the ability to 'hijack' a monster even for a bit I feel could cause some problems. While you can control the monsters as you fight them for better fighting scenes this power has me a bit skeptical, perhaps going a tad too far. I'm semi-open to it in its limited state, but not enough to give the go ahead.

Oh and if you could get the ability names to pop out some more too that would make the sheet look nicer.
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Got it, those are pretty reasonable concerns. How about this instead:

The Invisible Hand: A variation of Telekinesis, this is by far Ken's most complex ability. The Invisible Hand is controlled by Ken's unconscious desires and obeys it with an animalistic intellect. If he is hungry it will bring something edible to him, and if he is tired it will pull him somewhere quiet and comfortable. The Invisible Hand has a massive range of half a kilometer, and has an extremely low mana cost at its weakest levels, but is very weak and cannot be directed to do something that Ken doesn't really want to do. At it's worst, it could even pull him away from situations he thinks is too dangerous, or try to prevent him from doing something that stresses him.

At its usual strength, The Invisible Hand can use 5 pounds of force. It could be pumped up to a higher strength with mana, but this is horribly inefficient - using a day's worth of mana would only boost the strength to 50 pounds, for a few seconds. The Invisible Hand is aware of things that are happening within its range, such as the presence of monsters or the location of easily seen objects, but it is nowhere near Omniscient and can only find things that a normal person would be able to see at a glance - it cannot actively search for things. And, while it knows many things in its range, it can't communicate with Ken outside of pulling and pushing him - and even then, would only do so if Ken wanted something The Invisible Hand knew about.



A little complex, but I was really fascinated with the concept when I was taking my economics elective. I could also go with just normal telekinesis if you think this is a bit vague/weird, but I feel controllable Telekinesis might be a little overpowered considering its versatility. The awareness thing is mostly because no one else has any sensory ability and that might make things difficult, but I'd understand if you feel that is pushing it a bit far.
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@Duoya Hmm, certainly unique. With the way you described it, it seems kind of like a force bubble that tries to nudge things he wants toward him. Reminds me a little bit of like echolation yet with some force added to it.

I think this would work easily enough and could add some interesting dynamics. Ok, make the necessary adjustments and I think it should be good to go for the character tab.

Accepted.
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Apologies for the radio silence, it's been a long week. But hey, I brought a tank.

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@Saltwater Thief Interesting backstory, nice set of powers, tried to find something I didn't like, couldn't really come up with anything. The tank is accepted.

@LukasVolkov Hmm well a decent enough concept but with the acceptance of Saltwater's character that puts me at a rather large number of participants. Also your bio is a little bit incomplete in the abilities section I see. Unfortunately I will have to cut off applicants at this point, at least until I can get confident I can juggle more.

Character not accepted. But thanks for applying.
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First IC post is up. The Entity has decided to act as a beacon to show everyone where the first major Monster Phase will begin. This is to let everyone have an easy excuse to find the monster and meet the other players for the first [or not first] time.
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Just for clarification, were we all told to meet here or are we all to be here by coincidence? Just to know how I should word my post.
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Just for clarification, were we all told to meet here or are we all to be here by coincidence? Just to know how I should word my post.


There is no plan, The Entity is just giving everyone a heads up as to the location of the next Monster emergence. Basically it's just being nice by highlighting the general location with a light show only those magically inclined can see. Your character might not realize what is giving off the signal but they would at least understand it isn't something natural.

In the end it doesn't matter too much if your characters arrive there before or not, but if they manage to get there first they could meet up with other fighters beforehand. Could prove advantageous to get there before the monster shows up.

My next post will be the emergence of the monster and the destruction that follows, starting off the first in game fight.
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@IceHeart posted, hope that works well for 'I'm being guided by something but I don't know what it is however I've felt it before'
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Making the 0th post where the monster catalogs are so it's easy to look up the current monster you're facing.

@IceHeart posted, hope that works well for 'I'm being guided by something but I don't know what it is however I've felt it before'


Works for me.
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I'll be posting tomorrow. Work's been hell the past couple of days.
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I've also been pretty busy thanks to Midterms - post will be out tomorrow, Sunday at the latest.

Edit: Got about halfway through my post after a pretty hectic day, but it's really late where I'm at right now and I have classes tomorrow. I will probably finish the other half of my post when I get off work tomorrow.
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Will have my post done tomorrow! :-)
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Post up, Taunt is deployed.
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I'll wait for everyone to get at least one post in before I make another
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Hope It's ok :-)
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My post is up as well. It's shorter than what I would've liked, but I believe it'll have to do for now.
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@AdmrlStalfos19 Afraid your post is...well quite a bit off. The girls were watching a bunch of guys playing Frisbee who were the first ones to be attacked. So the monster appeared by the the guys who were close by, and the Frisbee was their's not the girl's. The girls were just enjoying their picnic dinner and checking out the boys, until the monster appeared of course which caused three of them to leave the one behind.

Best get it fixed before it can cause some misunderstandings.
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