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@Pirouette I like it, interesting Quirk and backstory there, once you get the approval of SimpleWriter and Heartfillia, move her to the Characters section!
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I approve @Pirouette sorry I forgot to say
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I approve @Pirouette sorry I forgot to say
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@Pirouette Well, for reasons, SimpleWriter has handed over judging responsibility to me and Heartfillia. So, you're officially accepted :)
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I'm considering joining this, but I am usually reluctant to join an RP that's already hundreds of posts in. I saw mention that a new story arc was beginning making it easier for new people to jump in. That being the case, I just want to know the specifics of that. Is it a new year? What is the justification for the sudden influx of new students?

Also, are any villain slots open?
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@Stern Algorithm new arc in same year. We are just starting team battles in both hero and villans stories. so if you want to jump in now is the time. Just join the class and we can work you in like you've always been in the class. You can easily join villians as it's a perfect time to intro duce a new charactr.

There is villian spots open and a few student spots open

Edit it's only been like one and half months since school started.
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@Stern Algorithm Yep, what Heart said, it's still early days IC. You can act like you've always been there, that or a few transfer students would be plausible to fill the gaps left by people who quit.

We do particularly need villains though, more so than we need other students.
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@Pirouette Loving the symbolism there in that intro post! I'll gladly accept him, now to wait for Heartfillia's approval.
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@Pirouetteinsta approve. Aboslutly love it. Feel free to post to the villans side.

I would put your new character in the same post ad your last one in the cs section.
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@Heartfillia

Thanks for the hearty welcome! Is there 'required reading' (for example, the last GM post and all posts that follow) or something that is recommended for newbies without having to read through the entire thread (I know, I'm kind of lazy)?

Anyways, here are my characters:


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@Stern Algorithm youre welcome. ould recommend just reading from the last gm post to present. I can give a summery later when I'm not about to drive. I'll read your cs when I get home.

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@Stern Algorithm Don't worry, you don't have to read through the entire thread, although yep I recommend looking over the current arc from the last GM post. We can give you a summary of events so far if you'd like.

Anyway, on to the characters...

While your shrimp girl looks fun, some things need toning down a little. Since the sound attack is based on a pistol shrimp's snapping, a sudden burst of sound seems more likely than a Gang Orca-like paralysing ultrasound move. If it were more like Jiro's attacks, that'd be fine. Also, at this stage, smashing through concrete (at least with one blow) seems a bit much. I know you based that on a mantis shrimp's strength, but if you're going with her shell isn't tough enough to stop bullets, I say she should be able to crack concrete, only smashing it after several punches. Also doing this too much in succession would probably damage her shell, which of course would grow back, but that'd be a drawback in a fight. She could build up her strength over time.

Other than that, the way her Quirk affects her day-to-day life sounds interesting, and that sample post made me laugh. That clumsiness has good comedy potential.

As for your villain... Hmm, that Quirk would likely have more drawbacks than that, I've got to say. For one, all those staples and constant bio-rejection, wouldn't that be painful? Also, the peanut allergic reaction would set in faster than that, if it's bad enough for her to pass out after five minutes. She could get a very short boost of strength, like a minute or two, but if her throat swelled and her stomach cramped up in agony, that'd hinder her ability to fight.

Also have to say, not sure about the blood armour, since her Quirk is a side effect of immune reactions, not the ability to control the reactions themselves. At age 37 and as an experienced villain, it'd be unlikely for her to discover new uses of her Quirk anyway, and she already has regular armour so she wouldn't need it.

I don't know about the name of the Quirk either. Quirk names are usually snappy and to-the-point, whereas this one doesn't describe much except that it has to do with the lymphatic system.

I do like the backstory, though, and her loyalty being mostly elsewhere would make for some interesting conflict within the League of Villains.

If you make a few edits to both character sheets, I'll be happy to look over them again, and Heartfillia will give her input soon.
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@Stern AlgorithmI agree with all that @LuckyBlackCat said. Then to expand upon the villian. I would say causing a reaction in the middle of a battle would be not the best choice because her jumping around and fighting would only deplete her limited air that much faster. I would say doing this would be a last-ditch effort when she has no other option.

Also thinking about it, with best Staples which are not even remotely part of the original quirk. Your character's body is probably not designed to be at maximum strength all the time especially with the Staples getting infected or can gangrene. I just don't see how someone going to be at max strength all the time and not burn out because it only comes out when there's a foreign antigen in her body.

I would recommend that she has enhanced strength kind of like Captain America levels normally. Because there's always white blood cells in the body. When she introduces an antigen to herself she can get even stronger. And again the allergic reaction being a last-ditch effort
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I've been on a bit of an MHA kick lately, so I'm wondering if you guys have any spots open? :o
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@TruthHurts22we have a villans spot open for sure and possibly a student

Edit: for sure a student spot open
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Ooh. Is there a sorta limit on how, like, big we make our villains? Metaphorically, I mean, their notoriety or the scale of their deeds before joining this League of Villains?
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@TruthHurts22Depends, if you come up with a reasonable story and Cat and I like it. However we do have a set boss and bigger boss. so those roles will not be taken. everyone is on the same level in the league for this rp. You can be a big baddie outside the league though who just joined.

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I hope Orson works out. I'm a bit worried about introducing an aspect into the setting, and I'm not sure how much that's encouraged here... especially months after the RP started.
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@TruthHurts22thats fine. I like world building with other rpers. if it doesn't work we can figure it out And make something we can agree on.

Initial look over they seem to be fine with me. But it is almost 2am here.soim going to wait for @LuckyBlackCat and discuss them with her when I wake up and get fresh eyes on them.
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