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@OddApproved This is already looks great! No changes needed as far as I'm concerned. Thanks for the submission!


I appreciate those words, thank you.
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As long as you're aware of that, I think a type of character like this would really work well with what the story needs.

Before this dissuades you, I think I'd really like to see what you're wanting to make.

The lower ring is an absolutely perfect place for radicalization. You have unwashed masses of poverty-stricken laborers and workers - the poorest of the poor. What I envision my character being is a self-educated factory worker that peddles radical ideology while also organizing the means to commit revolution against the Republic for a better future.
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Ah, I see, we've finally acquired-

Yuan: PUPPIES!

Kicks Yuan into a trunk and locks it.

Ahem. As I was saying. Firebender acquired. It's all coming together. And, as is appropriate, he's a rich, suave looking bastard. Gotta love it.
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The lower ring is an absolutely perfect place for radicalization. You have unwashed masses of poverty-stricken laborers and workers - the poorest of the poor. What I envision my character being is a self-educated factory worker that peddles radical ideology while also organizing the means to commit revolution against the Republic for a better future.


I totally agree. There is plenty in place in the Lower Ring to push this and plenty the City has to fight back to create a nice environment of political unrest that would reach all the way to the palace in the Central Ring. I would definitely be interested in seeing this character brought to life.
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Here she is! Still partially a WIP (as in, I might change some things), but this is all pretty permanent. I'd love some feedback, even if it's just on characterization and stuff. Fingers crossed! Also, imagine stickball as a universe equivalent to lacrosse.

EDIT, 7/8: Just edited some timeline information in the bending section.
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@canaryrose incidentally, in a small group rp I was doing off site, my character had a daughter named Chu Hua! It's a pretty name!
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@vietmyke It's such a pretty name. A little feminine for my character, but I was going for a bit of irony.
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Ah, I see, we've finally acquired-

Yuan: PUPPIES!

Kicks Yuan into a trunk and locks it.

Ahem. As I was saying. Firebender acquired. It's all coming together. And, as is appropriate, he's a rich, suave looking bastard. Gotta love it.


I like this stereotype coming to light. The suave-looking bastard that is rich and a fire bender. Lol
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@canaryrose I absolutely love her and the way she thinks. She fits perfectly in the world and even better, from what you've provided, I can really get a sense for how she feels about living in it. Her fears as a Bender but also the need to burn brightly while also trying to avoid getting killed. It translates perfectly. Wonderful addition of the sport as well.

I know you may still edit a few items but the sheet so far needs no changes. Very very nice job!

@OddApproved I'd missed this earlier (I apologize, it's been a long weekend), but Katakuri is only missing an NPC. Also wanted to tell you now that I'm less busy that he drips Upper Ring and I do love the goodest bois.
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@canaryrose

Suddenly, from no fire to lots of fire. I had to think for a minute, but I find the idea of an upper class character who isn't a "corpo" type quite intriguing. Instead, a sports celebrity. I really like the whole guilty pleasure angle with how they view bending as well. Not a rebel or sympathizer, but not a hardcore conformist either, and yet still (seemingly?) firmly in one camp over the other. She's got a nice amount of nuance from what I can see so far. Definitely a pleasant surprise I'd say.

Also it was getting a bit lopsided in the gender department... XD
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@KillamriX88 Thank you so much! I'm really happy about how much everyone likes her. I didn't mention it in the CS, only lightly implied it, because it was dialogue-based and it didn't quite seem organic for her to monologue about her origins, but Chu Hua actually grew up on the lower end of the middle class in the Middle Ring. She bought her and her family into the Upper Ring with the money and status earned from sports. I thought it added a lot to her motivation and also the amount she has to lose.

EDIT: Woops, sent this out too quick. Thank you Exit, too. I really appreciate all the compliments, aaaaa
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@OddApproved I'd missed this earlier (I apologize, it's been a long weekend), but Katakuri is only missing an NPC. Also wanted to tell you now that I'm less busy that he drips Upper Ring and I do love the goodest bois.[/color]
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Oh, I can add more onto Mazu Soran. I'll add it into the extras really quickly, thank you! I was really feeling the Upper Ring or Underground while writing him as a character, I decided to go Upper class last minute.
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@canaryrose Canary rn:


@Dog

I personally appreciate the idea of an older character to shake things up! My unsolicited and next to weightless opinion is that so far his "who are you" section tells us a good bit about what he does and how he thinks, but yet not a terrible amount about who he actually is. Maybe wait for the actual GM to chime in before I accidentally steer you wrong, though... Just my initial impression.

Basically what I'm saying is that it reads like one of his soap box speeches that a person could go up to, but that person wouldn't really know much about the guy beyond that, and I'd imagine for CS purposes we might want to dig at least a little deeper.

Also, Exit, I realize in my boredom I've been getting very chatty. Feel free to tell me to shut up... >_>;
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@Exit I added a quick NPC paragraph at the end of Katakuri's bio. Tell me if I need to put more or less info into it! Thank you.
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@Dog I like the fact that this is the very real result of what the Republic is creating and why I appreciate characters like this. I believe it is still a WIP? So far it's looking great and I can't wait to see it when its done. Other comments aside, if it were the final submission I would agree with sentiments on the "Who Are You?", but you've got three days worth of time to make @KillamriX88 stop talking.

That being said, I actually don't talk enough so you're fine, Killamri. Just hold the comments until they're done.

Oh, I can add more onto Mazu Soran. I'll add it into the extras really quickly, thank you! I was really feeling the Upper Ring or Underground while writing him as a character, I decided to go Upper class last minute.

That's my fault for not being very clear with some of my instructions, especially the NPC part and how much I wanted. I thought I knew exactly what I needed to start the game, especially after having run it before, but every time I do and people start coming through, new eyes tell me what I'm not seeing. Thanks for expanding on his lore!

EDIT: I'm too damn slow with replies. Let me check it out Odd.

EDIT 2: Looks good! Thanks for the addition!

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@Exit you're completely fine! I understand how hard it is to keep up with all the comments and communication going on in a single thread. You're just popular!

Thank you and you're welcome. I'm glad the lack of my understanding with the NPC reference was able to advance the overall need of NPC requirements and was able to put a scandal in the family.
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I believe it is still a WIP?

That it is. And how important can the NPC be?
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@Dog Importance to the character or in regards to their power in the City?
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Importance to the character or in regards to their power in the City?

Both.
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