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@VizRiel: Going to be honest, there's a lot of problems here.

The biggest ones are the fact that contracted entities are based in mythology and folklore, and the one you went with simply isn't at all.

Aside from that, his backstory has issues too. There's no real randomly-occurring undead, and there's no real explanation for how he was recruited into the DDF and ended up in Japan, just that they discovered he had a contract.

To be honest, it kind of comes across as taking a pre-existing OC and trying to make them fit the RP. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing, except this one needed a lot more work for that to make sense.
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@VizRiel He also seems quite powerful in that he has a lot of abilities (albeit cool and distinctive ones, I'll give you that) that seem like they add up to A-rank, while also having really useful skills. Whereas the other characters are mostly balanced around a trade-off between those two things. In fact, he kind of has a summon contract and possession contract in one, both of which I'd estimate to be B-rank on their own.
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I may be interested in joining this assuming it's still accepting. I have a vague idea to either use Lucifer in a possession contract, or Bartzabel (a planetary spirit/demon and also the spirit of Mars). The latter could be a summon if you don't already have enough of those. As for character concepts, I'll need to mull that over a bit more. I'm trying to think of things that would interest either of those entities, let alone draw them to a human being of all things.
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@Havoccultist: I'd like to try and avoid overlapping two demons in one DDF office, for both IC and OOC reasons.
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@Havoccultist: I'd like to try and avoid overlapping two demons in one DDF office, for both IC and OOC reasons.


That's understandable. For Lucifer I'd classify him as a fallen angel, but I can understand not wanting a second one in either case.
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@Sanity43217: Oh god I'm so sorry I haven't gotten to this yet.

I'll give it another look-over and my verdict tomorrow. Sorry again!
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@Sanity43217: Oh my god you've been so patient I am so sorry.

After a quick look I think he's good to go. So, so sorry for how long this took.
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