Rejected, even without the history section. The equipment alone is trying to introduce a lot of world building elements into an established setting without having asked any of the GMs first. Neither of those swords fit, especially not whatever's going on about the "flames of the planet".
And the first one, as an example of elven craftsmanship, is just dismal, even if we're somehow willing to overlook the ordering going on where he apparently joined some other random order after joining the IR and relying on them to get his armour. Which apparently precedes having decent weapons.
Seriously, ask questions before trying to write in new even more exclusive groups with ancient weapons.
Sure. I'll rewrite it. But he was supposed to be posted last year. Alot happened last year and I didn't post the backstory cause he was supposed to be Fanilly's former teacher of swordsmanship but, wanted to ask first since things definitely could've changed.