Rejected, even without the history section. The equipment alone is trying to introduce a lot of world building elements into an established setting without having asked any of the GMs first. Neither of those swords fit, especially not whatever's going on about the "flames of the planet".

And the first one, as an example of elven craftsmanship, is just dismal, even if we're somehow willing to overlook the ordering going on where he apparently joined some other random order after joining the IR and relying on them to get his armour. Which apparently precedes having decent weapons.

Seriously, ask questions before trying to write in new even more exclusive groups with ancient weapons.

chat is this a bit

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Possibly. I mean..I can...show the conversation that was had with Vita.

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are you sure that will end well for you

@Taka: I asked for you to heavily discuss it with me to hash out any details, and you never really did.

I wanted to see you actually write up the backstory before you moved forward with anything approaching this idea, because it's crucial to actually make it make sense with already-established characters and Fanilly's character and backstory as well.

This, too, you never really did.

There was a reason I wanted this, so I could look at what you had in mind and detail and tell you what did or didn't work, especially since he would be one of multiple characters involved in Fanilly's training. One of her trainers already exists in the RP, so you'd need to be coordinated with that to work.

There's also stuff here you didn't mention to me, which is why I wanted you to give me a more completed bio to look at and talk about.