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@The Wild West Looking good. Barkeep would probably take pity on the poor guy and give him some hand-me-down tech, if Kritch is willing to accept the charity. Nothing much, just a pistol and an old dataslab probably. Weaver will probably also get along well with him, assuming she's made aware of where he's from.

I'll probably move this to an actual thread either at the end of today, or tomorrow. People are still free to join once that happens though.
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Name: Toby Skinner
Sex: Male
Greatest Sin: Greed
Motivation: To possibly escape hell.
Biography: Born to parents who soon left him because they financially and emotionally couldn’t raise a child. Toby was taken in by a member of a thieves guild and was raised and trained to be a thief. As he grew, he became very close to the leader of the guild and received the best training and teaching. Trained in persuasion and slight-of-hand pick-pocketing he began stealing what he could from unsuspecting victims. All he has ever known was thievery and greed. Never caught in the act, he continued to steal whatever he wanted. With nothing but his wits and sticky fingers, he got by quite well.
One day he was doing his daily rounds, pickpocketing anyone he wanted. Just walking about town. Then decided to swipe some jewels from the jewelers. Just like normal. A quick job with little risk, having been done maybe fifty times. Walking in and selecting a target to go home with, he decided upon what seemed to be the biggest rock in the store. Has to be at least worth one million. Waiting for an opening to get close to the target. There seemed to be some commotion out in the street. So out of curiosity, he went to go see what was going on. Smoke began to disperse across the street and he soon realized that a riot broke out. He had to get out of here quickly before it got any worse.
So he quickly ran back into the store, smashed the glass case surrounding the jewel and grabbed it, expecting everyone to be distracted by the riot. He began to make his escape. But soon after leaving the store, he was met by an officer armed with a shotgun who saw him steal the jewel. When he frantically tried to escape, the officer fired his gun. In a extreme spike of pain, his right arm was gone, completely gone. In extreme pain and fear, he ran. Running as fast as his body would take him before collapsing from pain and blood loss.
When he woke up, he was back in his home. He was groggy and sore. Looking around, he saw his master and a few of his other companions in the room. As he let out a painful groan he attempted to stand. His companions quickly rushing to his aid, helping him stand. He realized that every part of his body but his right arm. Looking over to his arm, he realized that it wasn’t his arm. It was cybernetic! He started freaking out, asking what happened and why his arm was like this. When they finally calmed him down enough to try to explain what happened. They told him everything about how the riot started and how he lost his arm. Then he asked how they were able to afford this. They responded by telling him that they sold the jewel he stole and used the money to get it.
They soon began to teach him how to use the arm and retaught him his skills and how to function. Not too much time had passed before he was out in the field again, doing small jobs and working his way up.
Then he caught word of a huge job coming up and he automatically wanted to have it. Trying to get his reputation back and climb back to his rank. But this job was more than he thought.
He was attempting to steal very valuable jewelry from Royalty. It went don quickly when one of his companions tripped an alarm. When he was caught, he tried escaping, but failed. After a few more attempts, they were tired of his little games and the guards beat him to death.
When he woke up in hell, he had a massive headache. Not realizing where he was, he began walking around, looking for people so he could ask where he was. He didn’t remember being beaten to death, he didn’t remember anything! All he knew was his name and very few things about himself.
While he was walking around, he saw a tavern. So he walked in and saw Barkeep…

Skills: Thievery, stealth, persuasion.
Gear: Cybernetic arm (due to a major accident causing him to lose his right arm), One Revolver, One small teddy bear.

Theme Song: Eye of the Tiger by Survivor.
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Theme Song: Eye of the Tiger by Kansas.


Uuuuuh......

en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eye_of_the_Tiger
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Thanks for correcting me!
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You are most welcome.
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@Skinner35 For a first attempt, it's pretty damn good. I only have two major issues with it.

1. You seem to have forgotten the "Personality" section, should be simple enough to fix.

2. Cybernetics wouldn't be carried over from Earth to Hell, once Toby was in hell he would need to get cybernetics from a mechanist. Also, what time, exactly, does Toby's life take place? A Thieves Guild is mentioned but there are shotguns and stuff.
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@ProPro Good shit, nice. I have only one complaint.
but if push comes to shove he can make something different.

Spirit's can't go out of their set spell, even when just enchanting. Everything else is fine though (even if I prefer the other FN@F 3 Rap I'll admit this one fits him better.) And I love the way you wrote the memories. Pretty much exactly how I wanted them to feel, better than I could ever put it. Oh, and that "Other" section is real interesting. I urge the others to check it out. Get real close to the screen first though, it's kind of small.
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Taken care of.
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And with that, the official thread is up!

Again, still accepting characters and the such, just wanted to make a full thread to stop clutter. Feel free to move anything over, including accepted characters into the characters tab.
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@ProPro@The Wild West@sassy1085@Skinner35@Banana@BCTheEntity@Gareth
Fuckin, forgot to mention everyone. Yeah, check it out, thread, yes.
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Name: Toby Skinner
Sex: Male
Greatest Sin: Greed
Motivation: To possibly escape hell.
Personality: Optimistic, Tries to be funny, Kind.
Biography: Born in the early 1990's to parents who soon left him because they financially and emotionally couldn’t raise a child. Toby was taken in by a member of a thieves guild and was raised and trained to be a thief. As he grew, he became very close to the leader of the guild and received the best training and teaching. Trained in persuasion and slight-of-hand pick-pocketing he began stealing what he could from unsuspecting victims. All he has ever known was thievery and greed. Never caught in the act, he continued to steal whatever he wanted. With nothing but his wits and sticky fingers, he got by quite well.
One day he was doing his daily rounds, pick pocketing anyone he wanted. Just walking about town. Then decided to swipe some jewels from the jewelers. Just like normal. A quick job with little risk, having been done maybe fifty times. Walking in and selecting a target to go home with, he decided upon what seemed to be the biggest rock in the store. Has to be at least worth one million. Waiting for an opening to get close to the target. There seemed to be some commotion out in the street. So out of curiosity, he went to go see what was going on. Smoke began to disperse across the street and he soon realized that a riot broke out. He had to get out of here quickly before it got any worse.
So he quickly ran back into the store, smashed the glass case surrounding the jewel and grabbed it, expecting everyone to be distracted by the riot. He began to make his escape. But soon after leaving the store, he was met by an officer armed with a shotgun who saw him steal the jewel. When he frantically tried to escape, the officer fired his gun. In a extreme spike of pain, his right arm was gone, completely gone. In extreme pain and fear, he ran. Running as fast as his body would take him before collapsing from pain and blood loss.
When he woke up, he was back in his home. He was groggy and sore. Looking around, he saw his master and a few of his other companions in the room. As he let out a painful groan he attempted to stand. His companions quickly rushing to his aid, helping him stand. He realized that every part of his body but his right arm. Looking over to his arm, he realized that it wasn’t his arm. It was cybernetic! He started freaking out, asking what happened and why his arm was like this. When they finally calmed him down enough to try to explain what happened. They told him everything about how the riot started and how he lost his arm. Then he asked how they were able to afford this. They responded by telling him that they sold the jewel he stole and used the money to get it.
They soon began to teach him how to use the arm and retaught him his skills and how to function. Not too much time had passed before he was out in the field again, doing small jobs and working his way up.
Then he caught word of a huge job coming up and he automatically wanted to have it. Trying to get his reputation back and climb back to his rank. But this job was more than he thought.
He was attempting to steal very valuable jewelry from Royalty. It went don quickly when one of his companions tripped an alarm. When he was caught, he tried escaping, but failed. After a few more attempts, they were tired of his little games and the guards beat him to death.
When he woke up in hell, his arm was gone and he had a massive headache. Not realizing where he was, he began walking around, looking for people so he could ask where he was. He didn’t remember being beaten to death, he didn’t remember anything! All he knew was his name and very few things about himself.
While he was walking around, he saw a tavern. So he walked in and saw Barkeep…

Skills: Thievery, stealth, persuasion.
Gear: Cybernetic arm (due to a major accident causing him to lose his right arm), One Revolver, One small teddy bear.

Theme Song: Eye of the Tiger by Kansas.
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