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Fantasy, Adventure, Action, Horror, Classics Retold / PG-13
Random readers are very much welcome!


Note: I've been told that various aspects of this RPs backstory bears resemblance to Beddor's The Looking Glass Wars. To the best of my knowledge, the vague concepts of an evil "Red" invading Wonderland, escaping/lost heirs, a spelling of "Alyce," and the unfortunate similarity of "Madrail" to his "Madigan" are as far as these resemblances go.
This story is very much an original tale not based on Beddor's series. However, inspiration has come from Carroll's classics, and even a touch of the show Once Upon A Time.
**Disclaimers:** The name Absolem was "borrowed" from Tim Burton's film adaptation, because I was lazy in the moment and didn't want to think up a different name. Plus, it's a cool name. And not the blue caterpillar in this RPs case. Lastly, pictures used for places and characters are neither my nor Polarize's work, unless marked as such under the "Fan Art" section in the next post.

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Because it's always nice to know what the heck we're talking about.
Note: Each of these terms have been added here because they've been mentioned or explained in IC.
It's just nice to have reminders somewhere.








Where applicable, click the odd colored text for a picture reference.
Note: As with above, each entry here was added because they've been mentioned or visited in IC.







Being a tricky thing to grasp, a guide on using magic may come in handy.
Note: These rules apply to every world, not just Wonderland.

SPOILER ALERT!
This section contains some information not previously covered in IC.
Since Ghent has acquired a journal on magic in IC, the following would be found in that for him.
Also, this is still a work in progress. And likely often contradicts itself since kinks haven't been worked out.








For some lucky few, focus words aren't needed to direct magic. But for the rest, here's a list of ones used so far.


> Clyesco—Dispels most of the occasional false walls found almost randomly—but strategically—in Wonderland. False walls were created in various caves and structures during the very first rise of the Red Sorceress many centuries ago by her enemies as a means of hiding. While not all remained after their casters died, many were strong enough to survive the years. Cast first on page one.

> Conrare—Used to unlock locks. First cast: page eight.

> Extinguo—Extinguishes fire. Necessary for most fire-related magic, especially when cast by a beginner. Not currently used, but has been mentioned.

> Igniculus—Officially spoken on page eleven. Creates a small flame. Good for a tad bit of light, or to light something else on fire. Extinguo is not always necessary with its use.

> Inexus—Causes a surge of energy somewhere between wind and a magical force to rush from the caster. It is more of a close-combat spell, its strength fading over distance. Uses: pages five and seven.

> Tuito—Creates a magical barrier. Depending on where it is directed, it also makes a nice umbrella. Does not usually need another word to dispel it, simply a thought of needing it gone, or a lack of concentration. One of the easiest things to request of magic. Mentioned on page five.

> Tuteao—As Ghent proved on page five, apparently capable of creating and shooting off multiple electric sparks from the caster. An accidental focus word, that may or may not work again. Only time and use will tell.




Because apparently, this gets fan art! ^.^ Many thanks to the contributors!













Gather 'round the fire, oh eager listeners! For a tale have I for thee.
A section for side and/or background stories for Wonderland and other characters of this RP as written by me or Polarize.


Death Wears Red
The tale of how Drust escaped with Elayra and Ghent from the Red Sorceress' onslaught of Heart Palace, and how Ghent got separated from the other Wonderlanders.
~~Completed Story!~~
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Finally posted my character info! I had intended to post sooner, though Thanksgiving and Black Friday were much crazier than anticipated. .__.

If you see anything that you believe should be edited or added, please let me know!
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He's fantastic! :-D No worries. I understand completely. I have my own game of catch-up to do with roleplays and PMs here thanks to the holiday and whatnot. I'll get to work on an IC post for this either this weekend or sometime next week, if you're good with that!

Just one thing to keep in mind: Earth is modern-day, and the story, as of the moment, based long after the inspiration of Carroll's book, so Wonderland would be known to the world through that. Of course, that's all up for change if you would like!
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Absolutely! No rush at all; take all the time you need!

Oops; sorry about the confusion! I did figure that but I wasn't 100%. I'll tweak a few things in the bio as soon as I get to my computer. :D
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Woo! First IC post! Thank you so much for your patience. I greatly appreciate it! Hope you don't mind that it's a bit lengthy. I'll probably be editing the second OOC post to add a list of terms, if you're okay with that. With my luck, I'll forget them otherwise. Heh.
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Ahh! That was a joy to read! I absolutely love the amount of detail and description you put into your writing; I am already quietly fangirling over the characters. :'3 Please do not apologize! I still haven't edited my character post, after all. I'll be working on that and my first in character post right now. Things are finally starting to slow down here, so I can have a moment to actually think for once. :P
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{Also, I am completely fine with that. :D}
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Thank you! That's high praise, there! ^.^ I've been told that I can get a little too detailed, and don't be shy to give any pointers or suggestions with my writings. Feedback is a fantastic thing. :-)

Your post is wonderful! :-D I love the allusions to his past in Wonderland. Glad things are starting to slow down for you. It's always nice to be capable of having room to breathe, even a little.
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Oh no, I love detail. It's something that I need to include more often -- I have a feeling this will help me with my writing! The same goes for you of course. Feedback is always welcome. And thank you so much; that makes me really happy! Admittedly, I am a touch rusty so I was nervous.

I was thinking a bit, and I was wondering if it'd be alright if I hold out just a littleee bit longer on editing his character sheet -- I am feeling out his character more through the next few posts. I will keep him close to the same, of course, but I just want to make sure I won't contradict myself when I write for him and his history. When I wrote his intro post I was rethinking a few things I had put on his sheet. :'P
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I hope it succeeds in helping! I will be sure to keep your willingness for feedback in mind. :-)

Oh, yeah, of course! Character profiles--in my opinion and in this case, anyway--are more general guidelines for them, anyway, not set-in-stone characteristics. Characters sometimes end up being slightly different than their profiles once a story gets going and the writer gets to know them a bit better, gets to see how they'll actually end up reacting to things (because sometimes, characters totally do things their writer didn't intend or expect).

I had an idea about the magic in Wonderland, and thought I would run it by you. Because it's always good to get technical. It would better explain why Drust would not have put as much effort into Elayra's magical capabilities, since it's a sorceress she and Ghent would have to go up against in the end.

My Thoughts: The Curse didn't just mess with people and animals, but with the flow of magic itself, interrupting how--and who--it obeys those capable of accessing it. Of course, the Red Sorceress would be capable of altering that, allowing those who serve her to not be effected. However, with everyone else (with a couple exceptions I'm sure we'll meet *Grins mischievously*), including Elayra and Drust, it only worked once to block others, and is ongoing, like a disease, passing to those born into Wonderland. Which means that Ghent would be neither recognized nor hindered by this aspect of the Curse since he escaped before it hit, allowing him full access to any magical abilities. Yea? Nay?
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Excellent! Thank you so much for that; it makes things so much easier. :) I definitely agree! I have a feeling I will be editing quite a bit. I am so intrigued by Drust's current condition -- in two posts you've developed your characters so much! <3 Also, I am also totally amused by how opposite the lives of Elayra and Ghent are.

As for the magic idea, I love that! It makes perfect sense to me, and it would add another interesting aspect to his entering the world of Wonderland. This will be a lot to take in. I can't help but fear for all involved. x'D
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Okay, longest post yet. xD I REALLY wanted to get them through the portal this post. Do you mind that I keep making them kinda fancy? I won’t do it as much once we get into close character interaction. Only as necessary. Let me know, though, if I guestimated the time on Earth with Ghent close to correctly. I assumed it was evening-ish and that small bookstores like that might close somewhere between five and six. Want the times to line up, here, since my guys have world-jumped! And because I can get a little OCD with details. xD

Edit away, my friend! Honestly, I’m likely to be tweaking story and world aspects along the way, just as much as character traits. And thank you for the compliment! :-D By the way, do you care that I’ve taken point with the plot? It just kind of ended up happening that way. I can’t recall if I’ve asked that or not already. Also, what would you say to a couple sort of mini-adventures toward a quest to retrieve parts of something they would need to either bring down or just get to the Sorceress?

Muhahaha! It’s going to be so much fun trying to get Ghent to go back with them, as well as introducing him to this dark Wonderland. I’m excited about getting to some of the other iconic characters.

Bit of feedback for you, if you’re up for it! One joy of practically writing chapters per post: you can potentially get a feel for someone’s writing style in fewer posts than with shorter ones.

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No, not at all! As a matter of fact, I enjoy it. Your posts are lovely; I'm really digging the images you've used, too! I know I've said it before, but I really appreciate the thought you put into your writing. Thoughts as I read your post;


And you were correct in presuming that (I had forgotten to mention a time! x'D) I'd say it closed around 6:00, and by now it's nearing 7-ish.

In regards to the plot, I do not mind at all -- actually, I feel a bit guilty for having gotten off so easily! x'D Over the years I've usually "winged it" for plots (doesn't usually end well) but this is all so detailed and fascinating. I will try to help pull my weight, so it isn't a burden on you or anything like that. ^^' Eventually, I'd love to make some fan art of this!

I am all for the side-quest idea! Hm...perhaps like the Horcruxes in Harry Potter? They wouldn't have to destroy those-said objects, of course...not unless we wished them to. :'D They could be something to help bring her down, as you said. They could be weapons, or...pieces of one larger object...heart pieces? *Zelda moment* Just tossing ideas out there!

Thank you so very much for the feedback! I must say, this has opened my eyes. First, thank you very much for the compliments. I really do enjoy writing different personalities, so I am touched that you liked them. Secondly, I will definitely keep myself aware of that! I am so guilty of being unclear at times...and that doesn't just go for my writing, either. Heheh. I'll improve! *determined face* And I will try to improve my paragraph-skills as well. :D Can't wait to get started on my reply!! I already have some ideas.

I'm seriously excited to see when everyone meets. xD
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Awesome sauce. And thank you, really! :-) I’m glad you appreciate and enjoy it. That’s the true pay-off of writing, there! :-D And I like your thoughts. So fun, and thank you! ^.^

Pfft, please, don’t feel guilty! I LOVE GMing and putting together plots that hopefully leave players wondering. Heck, I was feeling guilty for taking over the way I have. I’ve noticed I do that a lot when I get excited about something... So, it’s no burden in the least! Plotting, world-building, creating characters--it’s not just a hobby, but a passion for me. If you’re okay with me taking on the overall motion of things for this, I have enough ideas for it, in all honesty. xD Though, I should ask: do you like supernatural-style horror and the macabre to some extent?

Ah! Fan art! That would be flippin’ amazing!

I like the ideas! Ha, Zelda. Awesome. xD I was thinking the object itself could be an ancient relic of the Heart family crest (where they would have gotten the crest from in the first place), broken and separated, since it would have been a symbol of everything the Red Sorceress hates. I like the idea of something kind of like the Horcruxes... but something they would have to piece back together. Three parts, perhaps, the body of the heart and rose, and the two swords? Maybe with multiple uses once whole... A relic that had aided in binding the Red Queen long ago, thus taken apart once she found it and spread through the land, so the magic it held couldn’t be used against her. But taking it apart used a good deal of her own magic, and trapped it inside, the combination inadvertently increasing her powers so long as it remains apart, and making it impossible to fully destroy her. Maybe it could double as a key of sorts in the Heart Palace, where the Red Queen now dwells. And maybe Elayra’s necklace could have a connection to it, so they would know if they were near the pieces. OR! Ghent’s race could have its own connection to the relic’s magic, and those remaining after being hunted down having been a large part in locking the Sorceress away (by making the relic?), thus making him a living relic-detector, since his magic abilities were unaffected by the Curse.
This is what happens when I think... I should probably stop for now. What say you on all that?

Yeah! I enjoyed giving it, so thanks for being open to it! It’s neigh impossible to know where improvements must be made without someone else pointing them out, since the one making them is used to them. You know, I’ve always felt that I explain things so much better in writing, than I do vocally. Ask me to talk, and I’m a bumbling idiot. Give me a pen and paper, and I’ll make it sing. Which totally sounds modest... Anyway. You’ll definitely improve the more you try! You’re a pretty good writer as is. Paragraphs are difficult little things, to be sure. Like the comma… *Grumbles,* Stupid commas. Anyway, let me know if I can be of help at all!

This is gonna be good. *Grins.*
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I'm relieved to hear that! I was concerned that I unintentionally hoisted off the most difficult part on you. If you're certain it is not a burden -- I do not mind at all -- but just let me know if you need any help later on. I don't want to make it a chore for you or anything! ^^'
As for supernatural-style horror and the macabre, yes!! That sounds awesome, actually. :D Haven't gotten to have that in any past RP's.

I adore the relic idea, too! Gah. This is all so perfect. I am so on board for everything. I really love all of that -- Elayra's locket, Ghent's connection to the relic...yes x100! This is gonna be amazing.

Ok, finally posted! I figured he might as well look like an idiot.
I was keeping your feedback in mind: I tried to make this post more clear, and hopefully I did the paragraphs properly. I am having trouble with creating indentations, however. It worked on Word, but would not transfer over here. So it's a bit more spread out than your posts. D:

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Nope! I am 150% sure it’s not a burden! So, that’s all good and settled, yeah? And I will be doing just that! Feel free add in your own ideas, of course!

Yay!

Awesome. Glad to have you on board! Do you want to do just one, then, or both?

Ha! That was fun to read. You definitely did a lot better with the paragraphs! Good job! To hopefully put it simply with paragraphs, it’s with a new topic, time, place, speaker (or otherwise long dialogue broken with actions, for the sake of readability and to prevent an unwieldy long paragraph), or for dramatic effect. A single word could be in its own paragraph, and still be considered a paragraph!



Regarding the indentation issue (though I really don’t mind double returns, if that’s easier):
I use Word for most of my replies. The tab button works the same on the site as it does in Word. The most I can offer as to a reason it didn’t transfer is that the auto indent is set, which the site won’t register. Check the ruler at the top of your document, and make sure both the arrows up there are at the zero mark. The top one is the auto indent. If that’s pushed over, then it won’t register that you pressed “tab,” just that you started a new paragraph, and automatically indent it the desired space. If the top triangle pops back over once you hit “tab” in the body of the document, backspace so the curser is left-flushed and the triangle back at zero, tap that space bar, then press “tab.” That and all the following paragraphs should then let you manually enter the indentation. Keep an eye on it, though. I know it still pops over to the half-inch mark upon occasion for me. I use 2016, but that’s worked on previous versions I’ve used as well. Hope that helps!
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Absolutely! I will try to keep an open mind for any future possibilities. :D

Thank you so much! You're very kind -- I am keeping all of your feedback in my notes for writing.
As for one, or both...gosh, that's difficult to say so early on. Did you have a preference? I am completely fine with one or both.

I absolutely loved reading your thoughts!! Makes me very happy, and I am so glad that you liked it! I think there's a bit of Axel's personality in all of us...
& You can totally add that to your book of quotes! I'd be honored.

Now, for yours: your post kept me on the edge of my seat! Me, being my naive self, actually believed that Elayra may have hurt Drust's feelings by the remark of him losing his mind. When she started to apologize, I wondered if that was because he was sensitive about the topic...instead, he totally lashed out! That was awesome! (I was worried for Elayra, but I had hope that she could hold her own!)

This scene/line:

Her eyebrows rose in a mix of mockery and pity when the boy slipped and landed in a mud puddle. “You’re sure that’s Hatter’s son?”
“The evidence points to it.”


That totally cracked me up! I love the dialog of these two.

I also really like how you wrote the fight scenes between them. I could see all of it within my head.

Another thing your post made me realize is how strange modern Earth must be for them. Not only for the world itself, but the things we would take for granted (such as when you wrote that Elayra did not know what Java was).

Thank you for the indentation tips!! I'll give it a shot for my next post. If all else fails, I'll fall back on the double returns.
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Writing notes! Fantastic! :-D

A preference? No, not really. Just Ghent could make it a tad bit more difficult and interesting since it would depend solely on him, then both would be intriguing in its own right, and make sense since the aspects are connected. Eh, we can decide closer to when it’s actually important, yeah?

Woo! It has officially been added. Thanks!

^.^ Thank you, thank you! Glad you enjoyed the fight scene and whatnot. :-)

I like Ghent’s perspective of Elayra and his overall reactions, as well as your descriptions. “Hopelessly fragmented,” “eerily familiar,” “didn't fancy the idea of being mugged” (okay, not so much a description as a narration, but it made me grin), “dangerously quiet,” “ridiculous imagination.” I love adjectives. So very much.

Grammar tip: “That” is a word easily overused. If a sentence still makes sense without its use, then get rid of it. Otherwise, it’s more of a filler word than anything. Other than with dialogue, of course. People constantly use filler words in dialogue. You don’t use it excessively or anything, I’ve just noticed it a couple times, so thought I would mention that for the heck of it. I’m equally as guilty of using it unnecessarily every now and again.

I take it the indentations didn’t work? Heh. Sorry it didn’t help! I only use them because I already try to italicize, underline, and bold text in my personal writings using BBC upon occasion; I don’t need to add double returns to those habits!
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Sounds good to me!

Aww thank you! Hah! Yeah, he does not know what to think of her. I'm so amused by how their meeting is going.
I just love Elayra's personality along with Drust (seriously, I can't get over these two!) ...oh dear, Ghent's not met him yet...*snort* Hopefully this ends well.
I am so interested to see how (and if!) they all get along during the misadventures to come.

Another handy tip, thank you! I tried to keep 'that' to a minimum in this post, and I will keep that in mind for future posts too. Oops. There I go again... I have a terrible habit of repeating myself -- sometimes I have to go through and reword an entire post so I don't use the same word 3-4 times. xD

Admittedly, I didn't try to use the indentations in my last post since I wasn't using Word. :'( Let me know if the indentations worked! I can see them on my computer, I just hope it works on your end, too!
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