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Height: 6'2" while in enforcement form, 9'4" in judgement form
Weight: 206 lbs always
Appearance:
Backstory: Colith has always stood for Justice, turning away from crueler ideals of most demons in the chance for order. He is persecuted for such thoughts, but none dare confront him over it. He thinks all have the right to fair trial. Many demons think him insane, but he thinks everybody is a criminal to some degree. Even the angels are not innocent. He has caused trouble for chaos demons, for they wish him dead, and he wishes to obliterate them, but he controls himself. He has also had an affinity for crafting in a forge. He made his own weapon, the Gavel, for he was tired of using his bare hands.
Many higher demons have seen his usefulness, his fanaticism for order also causes him to be more of a vengeance demon, but he will mostly do justice. His abilities allow him to see one's sins, and he punishes them respectively. The many battles he has been apart of have brought him some peaceful recognition among the demons, but his hunger for punishment of ones sins keeps him on the prowl for new prey...
Powers: -Innocent's Bane; Colith can sense who is innocent and who isn't. Those who are wronged and are innocent fuel his strength and rage, and the more it happens around him, the stronger he gets. -Hell's Punishment; Colith can use fire based magic to attack. It gets stronger with the passive ability's use, but he is destructive all the same. -Glare of Evidence; Colith can see into one's soul and use it against them. If they have done sins of the deadly sort, he will torment them with a bombard of illiusions they can't dispell, but they won't harm them. This can be useful to single out his targets.
Resistances & Immunities: Fire immunity. Resistant to unholy magic and armored in Judgement form.
Weaknesses: Give him a riddle that doesn't make sense or a paradox, and he will stop attacking completely. Few know this, but it is a good way to get him out of a battle for hours and strike him. Holy magic will put him unconscious and do what it was intended to do. Also he will not do a particularly nasty attack if the innocent are near. Tears burn him.
Skills: Agility while in enforcement, strength and armor during judgement.
Weapons & Equipment: The Gavel; Coliths made a weapon of from his own flesh and the souls of innocent deceased. It became apart of him, and is so versatile it can have any form he wishes, but only as strong as he is at that moment. He can throw the weapon while it is materialized, but it will dissipate after it hits it's mark. Sample Post:
Colith was watching the humans below. They were guards, he was sure, but he saw them as thugs all the same. He was waiting for them to slip up, so he could crush them like criminals and the strong fist of the law. He was ordered to capture this scientist human, and he accepted. He couldn't go home empty handed. Then the guards did exactly what he wanted. One by one, the four guards eventually went to doing things less boring than guarding. One even fell asleep! "They make it just too easy..." he muttered. Gavel became a sword in his hand. he jumped down and slammed into the one sleeping, cracking his skull. The other guards were still looking away, not caring at what they heard. Gavel turned into a crossbow in his hand, and he put all of them to sleep permanently. He dusted himself off from the landing. "The jury has reached a verdict. Guilty on all charges. Sentence; execution." and he walked over to the door.
He heard machines inside. He shifted to Judgement. He slammed his hands around the door and pulled it off it's hinges. He shifted back the Enforcement and walked in. Inside was a lab, and a engineer was on the ground trying to recover. Colith walked over and kicked the man down. "Who are you?! What do you what?!" the man screamed. Colith grinned devilishly. "Who said I'm the one wanting something?" he said picking the man up. Fire started to engulf them, then with a blast, they were gone.
Now it seems to be way better. I can't see any problem immediately so he is ok on my end. Just wait t see if the others have anything else to add before moving your character to the CS tab.
I'll be quite frank here. Your quality of writing is not up to par with what we expect around here, this character is a carbon copy of Ghost Rider, your grammar is terrible, you apparently think separating paragraphs is bad, and you did not make a good impression when you decided to submit a OC from Invader Zim. Furthermore, not only is your character a carbon copy of Ghost Rider, it's a bad one at it. You are being rejected.
