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@Ruler Inc wym

Also do u want me to change anything else or nah
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@eclecticwitch So I have quite a few problems with this character. If I were to be entirely honest, I was totally fine with her until I got to the backstory section. Her backstory is really... over the top, don't you think? I know I kind of have the worst habit of giving my characters the worst backstories ever, but hers doesn't make any sense. And by that I mean her past is so bad that it doesn't line up with her personality, and to match up with her personality... I imagine she'd be some PTSD riddled wreck that probably wouldn't function in society (or look good as she does). I kinda get what you were going for, but I don't think it all adds up. I do so the potential of fixing her backstory so that it does add up, but it requires removing a lot of her sexual trauma and all the friends dying to ODing. I mean, seriously, this shit leads to lifetimes of mental trauma.

Also how does she really look so good? Even former heroine addicts look like shit.

Now, onto her power... which probably isn't as much of sticking point for me as her backstory but still has a few problems. My big thing is that it sounds like a Contrivance Superpower which is one thing I want to avoid in the RP, especially this one. I'm okay with her being able to pull a set of clearly defined weapons out of her space (Though I'm wondering where she gets them from? lol) but basically being able to pull whatever she wants out? Yeah, no. One way to do this is that she's able to transport objects in the same plane as her through time and space itself to herself and the closer it is, the faster she can do it. Her super strength is literally just tacked onto the rest of her powerset and I don't think, with how strong and versatile her power is right.

Her weaknesses and limits are also kind of... eh. Basically, for her weakness, that her power has a chance to be inconsistent? But what decides when it's inconsistent? Weaknesses like that are usually never really a detriment I observed. I mean you can give me control over it, but idk if you want do that. And I mean, her power has the potential to be pretty broken so I want some solid limits and weaknesses. Also being able to keep an object in this universe for two hours isn't long enough to make a difference lol
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Creating this RP was a horrible decision we will all suffer from.

God help us.
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@ayzrules Why did I know you liked it before I even hit the view all button?
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@ayzrules Why did I know you liked it before I even hit the view all button?


idk cuz ive been telling u it's edgy since day 1??????? duh
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<Snipped quote by Ruler Inc>

idk cuz ive been telling u it's edgy since day 1??????? duh


you like the word edgy
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you like the word edgy


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Creating this RP was a horrible decision we will all suffer from.

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Creating this RP was a horrible decision we will all suffer from.

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@Ruler Inc Okay, I added and changed things. Please let me know what else I can do! I have just put it in my previous post. I can repost if you like. :)

EDIT Actually, I made her a bit younger too.

Another edit: This is in regards to a point you made in your corrections statement. Sexual abuse in childhood can manifest in a few different ways. Her proclivity for sexual activity is one of those ways.

Final edit, promise: I am more than happy to let you dictate what comes through the Void! it will make it more fun for me that way. That is if you are willing.

There, I hope I addressed everything!
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@Ruler Inc Okay. I think I, hopefully, finally did it. I have done some re-vamping. Please look at Bobbi again as I have worked at getting her better suited. With the opinions of another lovely person. Please let me know what else I can work out or what might need explanation.
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