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"You dare challenge the might of the Devil?"

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Name: Satsuma Badou, the Devil of Iwagakure

Age: 33

Gender: Male

Birthplace: Unknown
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Personality: Satsuma is a man of zero tolerance. Things that earn his ire, such as weakness and defeat, are the things he has no tolerance for. Although he may seem to be the cruel and ruthless devil his reputation makes him out to be, that persona is, in his own words, "Reserved only for the enemy, and no one else." In truth, his frightening presence is meant to be a scare tactic to any who think they can threaten the village, for any who dare to do so would have to face the Devil himself in battle. For his fellow Iwagakure members, Satsuma is merely silent and indifferent, but still willing to fight and kill to protect them, and in fact has done so on several occasions. Satsuma values strength above all else, whether that be strength on the battlefield or simply strength of mind and heart, it matters not. For Satsuma, strength is the foundation for which all beliefs and philosophies stem, and without it, they will simply crumble and fall by the wayside.

History: While Satsuma's actual birthplace remains unknown, it is a known fact that his clan immigrated to the Land of Earth thirty years ago from parts unknown, making them one of the founding clans of Iwagakure. These people brought with them a style of Martial Arts that, back then, was called the Devil Fist. Interestingly, though, these wandering Devil Fist fighters were just that; fighters, as in not ninjas. It wasn't until they had helped found Iwagakure that their fighting style was integrated into certain parts of the village's ninja training, thus being reformed into what is now known as the Nine-Points Discipline. It was said that this reformation was mandated by the Tsuchikage because the original Devil Fist Technique was deemed too cruel for the ninja to be allowed to learn, hence certain techniques and stances were forbidden and the Nine-Points Discipline as it is now known was born.

As for Satsuma himself, he was only a small child when the village was first created and has very vague memories of those times. He does, however, remember full well the stories of his father, Akuma Badou, helping to forge the village into its current form with nothing but his strength alone. Naturally, Satsuma grew up idolizing his father and wanting nothing more than to emulate him in every way. Then he actually began his training, and things starting changing. His father, training anyway, seemed to transform into a cruel man who would beat his son at the slightest sign of failure. After all, Akuma himself was considered a hero of the village, so why shouldn't he expect any less of his son? The older Satsuma got, the more he started hating his father's treatment of him. One day, finally fed up with the abuse, Satsuma turned on his father and killed him in single combat. Akuma, dying in his son's arms, smiled and finally said, "Well done, my son. You're now ready..." and died.

After that, Satsuma himself was the one meant to take his father's place as the clan patriarch, but he refused the position, instead letting one of his cousins become the head of the clan in his place. Satsuma lived and trained alone for several years, until one day he happened to be passing by the academy and noticed a particular boy. The newly graduated Genin looked proud of himself, and Satsuma wondered if he himself had ever looked like that in his boyhood. But then one of the other students began mocking the Genin for reasons that, at the time, Satsuma wasn't aware of. Instead of cry or run away, the boy turned against his classmate in a rage and began beating him. Deciding not to let the altercation go any further, Satsuma intervened and stopped the fight, sending the injured boy to the village medic to be looked at. But that other boy, whose name Satsuma soon learned was Hiroto, there was something in him that Satsuma could clearly see. An inner rage of some kind, whose source Satsuma did not know, but something he knew could be dangerous if left unchecked. And so, with the hope of teaching the young Genin to control his rage and focus it into Taijutsu mastery, Satsuma took the boy as his pupil and began his training, hopefully without nearly as much cruelty as Satsuma himself suffered at the hands of his father.

Clan: Badou

Dreams and aspirations: None to speak of, really.

General strengths: Satsuma is strong, damn strong. A common story about him is that he once defeated an entire squad of ninja by himself with a single punch. The "single punch" part may be debatable, but absolutely no one questions Satsuma's ability to kick multiple asses all at once by himself.

General weaknesses: Satsuma's main weakness stems from the very fighting style he grew up practicing. Nine-Points techniques are criticized for their "lack of honor" but also because many of the advanced techniques tend to be very, very reckless, often causing just as much harm to the user as to the victim. It's also a known fact that the original Devil Fist techniques were also just as dangerous, if not more so. One technique (a Fire Release technique called Hell's Embrace) was said to guarantee the victim's death at the cost of the user's own life alongside them, in other words a suicide technique. Little wonder, then, why it was called the Devil Fist, and why the Tsuchikage forbade their use in the first place.
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DaDrummer676 said
How will each team get missions? I assume the Lost Ouppets mission is for Kami's team right? Do other teams get introductory missions also?


I mean, I guess others can do it, too. I just figured it'd be a cool introductory mission for my team so I wrote it.

I'll grade some characters when I get back from my exams. Looking pretty good so far tho. Drummer, being a super hero and for instance schizophrenic can be considered a gimmick. Something that makes a character unique.
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Nightrunner said



Captain Boomerang, I see. ;)

Will grade and move the IC along later today. A few team changes are inbound, sadly.
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Beep
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Alright, again, that was just my opinion.
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Sorry if I appeared hostile.

When I was a GM in Naruto Rp's I couldn't stand random users taking such initiatives. It's really troublesome if every member starts putting in their opinion. The GM's are good enough to find the flaws by their own.
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I agree. If we need input we will ask it. If you have something you MUST say to someone use PM's. I am on my way home, gonna grade it as soon as I get home. I know Drummer meant it well but if random members started commenting on your cs you'd be like 'wtf?!' as well.
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Okay. I didn't mean anything by it, so I apologize.
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@Savato

First things first. While I don't see a particular problem with the schizophrenia since I've seen characters with similar setup the bulimia thing worries me. We're not a slice-of-life RP where you try and make a character as dramatic as you can to awaken empathy among the readers or other RPers. I don't see the bulimia thing adding anything to her character besides a 'gimmick' that doesn't really affect her day-to-day (yes I know bulimia does affect you day to day but we're shinobi, we're not gonna be RPing about breakfast or stuff, it'll be missions, awesome plots, deceit and power battles.) I'm unsure of your relationship with bulimia but personally I don't handle those kind of 'diseases' well and I usually find myself getting into arguments with people about it.

I'm not saying it's necesarily bad. I'm just asking and saying that.. how do you see this fitting into the RP and your character? Because I don't see it. There's a reason you wrote a lot about the schizophrenia (it's an important aspect of your character) and meanwhile the bulimia was merely worthy of.. what. 2 sentences?
Moving on.

-Absolutely fearless, a hero never cowers from dangers!

-It's impossible to break her will. Without specific training, torturing her is useless. Her mind is capable of such ridiculous mental gymnastics that she's even able to convince herself she doesn't know the information she's supposed to protect that she needs a specific kind of hypnosis from her employers to make her remember it.

-Pain is not limiting factor for a hero! ... Unless it's that bad!

-Her thin body and slim look make her pretty damn quick on her feet.

-Her chakra is huge because of her Prophet status (however control isn't there yet)


5 very powerful and useful strengths. Alright.

-Pretentious, arrogant and reckless. She's extremely impulsive in everything she does.

-Her pride is that bad.

-Low level of endurance. Her bulimia deprives her of enough energy to keep up for too long, and this endangers her teammates in the process.

-Relatively feeble. Her body is pretty damn frail with such a thin silhouette. .


4 weaknesses.. If you want to balance it well it should be 5, or these 4 should be considerately REALLY big weaknesses. So let's see. 2 personality weaknesses that can be considered pro/con weaknesses (they have good and bad aspects to them).

Pride is that bad. How is this a weakness for example? You can say 'never knows when to give up' or you can say 'persistent until victorious'. I just don't see this being a good, balancing weakness. Same goes for your first weakness. These are traits. Not weaknesses.

A trait is something usually to do with personality and that might have good/bad aspects. Weaknesses are purely negative and might be about body or maaaaaaybe a certain attitude, as long as you can prove it's negative. In this case you can't.

Last two are alright. Feeble should mean she gets thrown around easily etc which is all perfectly fine and a good example of a good weakness.

Your kekkei genkai.. not sure. I like the idea but that's just in my head so I need clarification: these are not specifically passive abilities that you listed in the KG description, right? This is just what it entails? Because you list for example: even completely alters its reality all together. Wow. What? You can /change/ reality? Or is this just a possibility for only the greatest users of the KG (basically, the founder of the family)?

As for jutsu, if these are the things she are capable of regarding her KG and just these things then I think it might be alright. I just need to get some things straight:

X axis. Does this just mean that you won't be affected by hard punches in the manner of pushback/whatever? Like, if you are moving and have a cheek puffed, someone rams you in the face, you stop dead in your tracks instead of flying back, but still take full damage and every respective effect of the hit such as unconsciousness (which would dispell the technique anyway) or a dislocated/broken jaw?

Y axis I like. A good, simple genjutsu which is easy to dispell cause you will notice that everything is mirrored quickly, but not so simple that you can notice instantly.

Z axis. I don't mind flying, but 20 meters is too much. And I don't find time an effective weakness. Time is incredibly hard to measure in RP, especially in naruto where everything happens really fast and you have to keep that in mind. Also time is a limit and not a weakness. Add something like, wind is extremely effective when she is flying because she will get blown away. Or the flying weakens her bone structure because of lightening her body, thus making her even more frail and will take more damage from hits.

Weakness: It's not that strong yet, calm your titties.


You've been saying this a lot -- this is not a weakness. This is a limit of the techniques strength. And since it's not a basic technique, a set-up technique or a gimmick technique I wouldn't say it doesn't need a weakness.
@Nightrunner

I just wish you'd link the Bashoshen to a narutopedia page, but that aside it looks fine. Jutsu are well balanced, you have a weaker form of my jutsu which is fine. I think your weakness on the spinning technique is a really good example of a weakness.

His three older brothers were used to harden him, often sneaking him along on their own missions as Genin.


?? You think this would work if there was a jonin?

I think maybe the history of beating every opponent is a bit too much as I kinda envisioned it like 10 guys standing around your character in a courtyard, then attacking him. There wouldn't be room for maneuvering a lot (guerilla tactics) so he'd be kinda forced to take it defensively. He probably wouldn't last because he'd be up against jonin and other such ranked characters. If you still imagine him winning this then he has to be a genius of some sorts, like a genius of defense. I'd be okay with that. Not sure if the others are.

He fits the Hanamoto characteristics really well. I guess you could consider him accepted on my end, if you ignore the comments about history.
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Okay. I didn't mean anything by it, so I apologize.


Don't fret, my friend. Now you know, it's a common mistake so I don't hold you responsible for jackshit. :P I'm just happy you're willing to invest time into the RP and actually read other peoples stuff. Good on you!
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Actually the bulimia thing is to justify the weak stamina and weak physical condition. The only reason I took this is because I have a clearer idea as to how it functions because I do see it in my every day life. The goal isn't to have drama, just to strongly limit her. Also the reason why it isn't so detailed is because of its lack of visibility by others. Her schizophrenia is what everyone notices ever, while bulimia is easily concealed. I thought that made sense. But I digress, I suppose it isn't required either.

Now for the power stuff, I can take off the pain resistance as I really don't care about it. It was just the hero thing. That makes two personality/psyche strengths and weaknesses (Impulsive can take en entire slot along with being Not so smart, is that alright?) and two physical/combat strengths and weaknesses. She's quick but severely limited, high chakra but one or two well placed hits beat her.

So Dumbed down is: Pros: She doesn't cower out of insanity, it's impossible to interrogate her without hardcore drugs or whatever, she's quick because she's light and I'll reduce from HUGE to above average chakra, but it should evolved as her KG evolves.
Cons: Reckless/highly provocative/arrogant are the typical cons of personality, She isn't very intelligent and thus she often acts on impulse (similar to reckless but low intelligence), weak stamina and yeah her body's frail and gets thrown around easy.

Altering reality in this case would be like, the mirrored field would actually be mirrored for about 20 seconds and this only applies on very strong Y users as you said. This is not Izanagi class power. Altering reality is also the act of making measure values useless when Z is used for advanced techniques for instance.But yeah, that's some high level stuff.

X: Yes, she gets all the damage and all the effects, she just doesn't budge (unless of course her body is too damaged to move or her arm explodes or something).

Z: Five meters? I'm okay with low flying. Also I can understand the difficulties of time scaling. It's never been an issue for me, personally, but it's perfectly acceptable. I suppose we can have chakra consumption be more and more powerful as she stays longer in the air. After all she needs to get back on the ground to land a hit with her current abilities.

For the weakness with the strength. Well it's no where as strong as chakra enhanced strength with is C rank and barely is on par with Hard fist style. Sending more punches makes her tired faster because low stamina?

Is everything alright with the solutions I've found?
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The power limitation is fine.

My personal issue lies in the gimmick. The superhero gimmick ain't gonna work in this setting. We're constantly in war, the village is not a particularly safe place, even if it is safer than most other places in the world. Being brave and helping people is fine, being schizophrenic is also "fine", it would lead to her being less relied on by well everyone. Putting on a costume and claiming to be a superhero is bizarre and doesn't fit into the setting at all and would only break immersion. Remember that this is 100+ years before the dawn of the actual series. This is a time when everyone is clad in what looks similar to samurai armor and clan wars are always breaking out. World politics are much too shaky and unsafe to justify there being a superhero running around.
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Alright, I wouldn't want to break immersion. So I'll probably make a new character, later.
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Aight, cook up something cool bud.
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I hope you suffer Hillan and you burn like the self-righteous meat ball you are. You and your endless resources of Ikea.
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Edited, Partisan. So nothin' else, then?
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Posted IC.

Will post again, making the one-day timeskip tomorrow, Friday. If you have any interaction you want to do in the IC, I would suggest get on that.
All Granite Guards should make sure to have posted by then. Also, there's still one jounin slot open, should anyone want it.
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I'm quite curios how the new teams will be laid out.
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Edited, Partisan. So nothin' else, then?


Yep. We can collab a post together through pm or titanpad, if it pleased you. Kanajiro vs. Daisuke? Would be a good fight, considering they're both sorta geniuses.
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