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I was wondering about that myself. Jackson Cer and Nate are still in the lobby.


Actually they seem to be in a pretty good spot to jump cut to tomarrow morning. Like, you'd have the camera focus in on Jacks face after Cer gives him that dressing down then cut to credits before the next episode opens with him dealing with her ultimatum.
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Actually they seem to be in a pretty good spot to jump cut to tomarrow morning. Like, you'd have the camera focus in on Jacks face after Cer gives him that dressing down then cut to credits before the next episode opens with him dealing with her ultimatum.


It works... I guess... Just be very careful with day skips. Talk to the GMs or something if your doing one. Everyone can sorta handle it, what with a few people going across the world and all, but yeah, careful with 'em, just so we don't have time hiccups. :P.
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Right guys, I should have included enough to get everyone active! Anyone else need any help with things to do?


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Did I miss something?


Olivia, NP's character, wants to talk to you and has sent Spectrum, Weird Tales' character, to come and fetch Elijah. Here's the relevant passage:

Finally, she took a visit to the war room which required a full retina scan to enter. It featured a massive holographic table with the location of every Reformist meta in LA which could be expanded out to the entire country as well. "Who is that?" Olivia questioned one of the operators after a second, pointing to a dot that was ducking and gliding far above the city on the holographic layout. "That would be... Spectrum, Miss." The operator finally revealed, their eyes not leaving the profile that came up when the buzzing dot was pressed. "Excellent!" Olivia chirped, smiling brightly. "Tell them that I have a very special job for them. I want them to find Elijah Craigh and take him in so I can speak to him. Please inform Spectrum that I have no intentions to arrest Mr Craigh so try not to take him forcibly. Could you also remind him to point out my looks to Mr Craigh if he's hesitant."
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It works... I guess... Just be very careful with day skips. Talk to the GMs or something if your doing one. Everyone can sorta handle it, what with a few people going across the world and all, but yeah, careful with 'em, just so we don't have time hiccups. :P.


I just figured if a GM starts a new day that's sort of a signal to find a way to wrap up what you're doing now in a little bow and finish it on the new day.

Was I mistaken in this case?
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I just figured if a GM starts a new day that's sort of a signal to find a way to wrap up what you're doing now in a little bow and finish it on the new day.

Was I mistaken in this case?


Not really, sometimes, that's the case, other times, we can afford to be more lenient. But, still, it is best to finish what you're doing as quickly as possible.
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I just figured if a GM starts a new day that's sort of a signal to find a way to wrap up what you're doing now in a little bow and finish it on the new day.

Was I mistaken in this case?


oh well if the GM said to end the day, thats fine. I skim the super long posts because I find them a hassle to read. For those people, I'd recommend you read On Writing by Stephen King or other books to help with writing. Theres very little point to put in unnecessary details. You can put in details to try to point out important things or details that spell out bits of the character without them doing said things in dialog, or details for important actions, but details for the sake of details isn't that good.

Example (My god this is going to be hard...).
Light walks down a sunny street slowly, the sun blazing in the sky as the temperature was hotter than the weatherman had predicted that day. She was moving her head from side to side noticing the people near her as she looked for someone who had committed a crime. She noticed a person with a white sports hat, sunglasses, a blue cacky top, and red jeans. She also noticed a woman wearing a green tanktop, blue jeans and carrying a grocery bag. One person she saw wore a black trenchcoat, a black fedora, and carried a black briefcase. Light follows this man...

Right there, most of that sentience is irrelevant or can be summarized. Also by pointing out all the fine details, I leave very little to the imagination of the reader. (I could've made it more detailed, but I was lazy and I'd just make it a huge madlib if I did anyway.) Now if I removed or summarized this paragraph, we'd get...

Light walks down a street, searching for a criminal who had just recently committed a crime. The people she passed by wore various types of summer cloths with sunglasses and were doing everyday things. One person looked out of the norm though wearing a trenchcoat and a fedora, and was carrying a breifcase. Light followed this man...

There, more left to the imagination of the reader, unnecessary details left out, and it gets to the point quick. I could also remove the line "who had just recently committed a crime" if I wanted to, as there is no pretext to this paragraph, but if there was pretext, it would make sense to use, so that one is in a grey area. It also removes the adverbs, which just sound wrong when used and aren't needed unless you can't convey what the adverb was inside the scene you've set. I can make more examples, but they'll mostly be adlibs xD.

Just saying how and why I write the way I do.
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Problem is that super-long posts are, well, said to be a mark of merit in most 'serious' RPing sites, especially Casual and Advanced ones.
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Problem is that super-long posts are, well, said to be a mark of merit in most 'serious' RPing sites, especially Casual and Advanced ones.


Thats a fair assessment. Just stating things that I learned in school about writing.
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Fun fact: Rofls counted how many page downs it took to get to the bottom of our IC pages, and I think page 3 or 4 took something like 40 page downs
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Page downs?
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How many times you have to press the page down button before you reach the bottom.
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Ah, I see.
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Fun fact: Rofls counted how many page downs it took to get to the bottom of our IC pages, and I think page 3 or 4 took something like 40 page downs


Doesn't surprise me at all.

Problem is that super-long posts are, well, said to be a mark of merit in most 'serious' RPing sites, especially Casual and Advanced ones.


I find that trend rather annoying because there are times when I write super long posts that suck and really belong in the free section. Length does not equal quality and it's hard to always remember that.
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Who is spectrum?
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I guess I'm waiting on him them?
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Yep; sorry for the delay.
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Want Light to bump into owlman, or do you want Owlman to bump into Light?
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I was under the impression that we were all onto the next day but apparently not! That's ok, though, I'm just using Olivia to push you guys along and give you something to do so you still have time to catch up!

In reference to post length, I don't really look at post lengths unless they're massive. Mostly, I think that I include just what I need to without dragging it on so I don't think I have a filler problem. Maybe I do? Who knows? Anyways, everyone should feel free to write as much as they see fit, assuming it's all relevant material. Granted, you'll have people who won't read it because it doesn't apply to their character but to the people who it does apply to, it can be extremely helpful! Like @RoflsMazoy's Ruby's Extraction Squad posts! Speaking of which, you there, Rofls?
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