[OOC] Dragon Ball: Leviathan

[TheUnknowable]

Ok, I updated my CS. Hopefully it will meet your guidelines. If not, just tell me what's wrong and I'll fix it.

[Unraveller]

Yes! You must not leave us in the unbearable SUSPENSE!

[Gowi]

@Karl Kadaver
Not a problem, we’ll have plenty of time to get our squad(s) in order. Looking forward to it.

@ChronoBovino
I wish you the best of luck in your role-playing interests!

@Dead Cruiser
As you can imagine telepathy is a very worrying power, as it can be easily abused in RP’s such as this. It encourages taking control of other characters and predicting their actions effortlessly. That said, I have allowed telepaths in other RP’s of mine before. As stated you have a lot of combat capacity: psionic blasts, telekinesis, and that sort of divination you hinted at with your ESP. Even with those nerfed there would be a worrying precedent if I accepted someone who can effortlessly:

“may even simply tear apart an enemy's mind with the sheer power of his own, leaving them a drooling, mindless wreck.” and “read minds and communicate telepathically as easily as he can fly” and “can even control the mind of his enemies, turning them into his puppets” – all of which puts up the character up for extreme analysis and concern.

@King Kindred
Well it wouldn’t be as simple as “was prisoner for a few years then became cop” – I recommend finding a story hook between where you left off with the backstory. Your character could’ve fled the planet to avoid local incarceration or circumstances led the planet being attacked (not necessarily by Freiza). If you were paramount in stopping an invasion the locals would exonerate you and perhaps the ISF might take notice of the character or alternatively your character seeing the threat of a conquest face to face believed he could help others if he joined the ISF? I don’t know, just spitballing to help you.

@Unraveller
Unbearable suspense indeed. Anyway back to your follow-up question about the application, right. I’ve done some thinking and whilst it seems a bit out there, the height isn’t exactly obtuse (Recoome is roughly 7’5” for example) for the squadron angle that we’re going for. I’m just trying to visualize the arrests your character probably issued previously—the criminals were probably petrified out of fear. Plus I’m sure we’ll have some comedic lines shot your way.

Your backstory is fine outside of your planet’s destruction since the only reason the Saiyan’s were in that sector of galactic space were because it was conveniently on the way to Earth and that sort’ve didn’t happen in this go which we’ve already covered, lol. As for your techniques, I see no issue that I can see right now so you’re pretty much ready to go.

@TheUnknowable
It is possible if alternatively instead of being branded a vigilante the ISF considered you an “informant”, thus opens up the door to directly work in the ISF. Maybe. Wouldn’t hurt if there was another small paragraph for the backstory, but given the age of your character it’s not really required.

@Javier
Some grammatical errors, but nothing too big. I like the ‘adopted’ angle a decent amount and think it’ll contrast other Saiyan’s in the ISF greatly. Techniques are described a little odd, but they don’t seem too powerful to abuse. Should be okay.

[Javier]

@Javier
Some grammatical errors, but nothing too big. I like the ‘adopted’ angle a decent amount and think it’ll contrast other Saiyan’s in the ISF greatly. Techniques are described a little odd, but they don’t seem too powerful to abuse. Should be okay.

So can I post in the CS or fix the grammar first? Sorry about that btw, wrote the whole thing down on my phone outside my house so couldn't pay that much attention to it at the time.

[Unraveller]

@Gowi

Excellent! I'm glad to hear that his size isn't all that much of a problem. There's something really lost when a couple of feet are taken off of an over sized insect's height ya know?

I'll go right ahead and edit out the last bit, glad to hear everything is in working order. Shall I post to the characters tab after wards?

[Gowi]

@Kal-El@Unraveller@Javier
May indeed transfer their CS's to the characters tab.

[Unraveller]

Yipee! Any clue on how many people you would like to join at this point?

[Dead Cruiser]

Okay, I should clarify some things.

The offensive applications of Borea's telepathy are not easy to use, and cannot be used in conjunction with any of his other abilities. Reading of surface thoughts and telepathic communication are the only telepathic powers he can use while using any other power, possibly even including flight. Mind-breaking someone requires solid minutes of concentrated effort, and mind-controlling someone is a lengthy and inefficient process that is really impractical in the midst of battle.

His other abilities, similarly, require concentration that cannot usually be afforded in battle. To properly utilize any of these seemingly-overpowered abilities, he would need either near-complete protection from enemy attacks, or a highly effective diversion or suppression of some kind. In a combat role, he serves best as a "mezzer" or "debuffer," confusing and weakening enemies as his allies dish out the real damage.

I realize now how my CS reads, with that laundry list of powers, and I acknowledge that it was my failing for not emphasizing how inefficient most of the powers actually are, in terms of the effort and urgency that they require.

[Gowi]

Yipee! Any clue on how many people you would like to join at this point?

@Unraveller

I'm giving all previously submitted applications a chance to be up to "code" per ce. I'll also allow previously interested parties such as @Rin and @Clanjos to apply if they are still interested at any time before launch or if I can work it out- during launch.

[TheUnknowable]

@Gowiok, I'll have him feed them info while he's doing it so that they concider him an informant.
edit: fixed it.

[Gowi]

@TheUnknowable
I think it's malleable enough, yeah, you're good.

@Dead Cruiser
I'm a bit cautious, but I have no reason not to trust you regarding it. Personally, I'd prefer the mind-breaking to be significantly (or cut) nerfed, but within reason that's about it.

[Dblade26]

Apologies for my absence, but here's my character.

Violin, Squad healer and doctor

Name: Violin

Age: Adult

Species: Namekian

Attribute

Healing and Ki Manipulation-while his healing abilities make him one of the team’s primary field medics, Violin trains himself in ki manipulation and martial arts constantly in order to better protect himself and his allies.

Personality & Appearance

The most noticeable thing about Violin's appearance-at least to anyone who might be able to recognize it-is his striking similarity to his creator and father, the planetary conqueror known as Lord Slug. While the resemblance is not absolute, Violin is similar enough to easily pass for a younger version of Lord Slug unless under extremely close scrutiny.

While he’ll change clothes to suit the situation, Violin often wears a dark green hooded and face-concealing cloak mainly to hide his resemblance to the often hated and feared Lord Slug although he also wears it because he likes the look of it though he would never admit it. Apart from the hooded cloak he wears the brown pointed shoes common to most Namekians and a weighted belt or waistwrap worn mainly for training purposes.

Personality-wise Violin considers himself a healer and guardian of the innocent first and a warrior second despite his skill at fighting. In fact as a deserter from Lord Slug’s forces, he detests having to take up violence and much prefers his role as a doctor to his fellow ISF members though, he still trains to retain his skills. Since he lost his only other 'family' when he abandoned the psychotic Slug, Violin considers the ISF to be a substitute family of sorts and primarily volunteered to try to ensure that the so-called suicide mission had a slightly higher survival rate than it otherwise would. His other motivations have more to do with preventing the sort of large-scale destruction that the PTO and Freeza’s organization are capable of wreaking, having served under a tyrannical planet conqueror himself and learned firsthand of the atrocities such men are capable of committing.

Weaponry & Equipment

Violin does not have much in the way of equipment, though as part of his training his cloak and a belt wrapped around his waist are both extremely heavy so that even his everyday activities are a part of strengthening himself. Other than that, he’s familiar enough with various kinds of medical equipment and medical/surgical treatments requiring them throughout the galaxy though he usually carries a more portable field surgery and treatment kit instead.

Abilities & Techniques

Healing powers-Violin can heal living beings of even things that would otherwise be fatal wounds though the more severe the wounds the more time and energy it takes for him to heal the being in question. He needs to be able to touch the being he wants to effect in order to heal them and due to the concentration required for healing he is often vulnerable to attack during this time.

Namekian Physiology-As a Namekian, Violin’s body has a number of unusual physical properties. Noticeably he is capable of regenerating his body so long as his head is intact and he has enough energy and focus to do so. His limbs are also capable of stretching to extreme lengths and with enough focus he can even grow to giant size. His hearing is also incredibly sensitive to an almost supernatural degree, and he can sense the nature of the hearts or intentions of others if he focuses on them.

Scalpel Overdrive-A technique Violin often uses if a scalpel isn't at hand involving solidifying a small blade out of ki. However in combat he is capable of extending it much farther out into a sort of energy sword enveloping his arm and extending further outward. The flaw is of course that the technique is primarily one for close combat.

Energy Shield-A shield of ki capable of blocking smaller energy attacks, though if Violin pours more ki into it it can hold up against larger and larger techniques and/or increase in size to protect people nearby him. Because of his generally nonviolent nature this is one of the techniques he's trained with most heavily since leaving Lord Slug's service.

'ssault Cannon-Violin's Ultimate technique when he was in service to Lord Slug, he presses both palms together until they almost touch and then charges energy between them, condensing it more and more before firing it out in a single beam of white energy. The longer he's able to charge and condense the energy the stronger the resulting beam will be.

Backstory

Violin was once a top soldier in the service of Lord Slug, the Namekian planetary conqueror. In fact he was specifically created by Lord Slug to help lead and maintain the well-being of his troops. Though Violin was a competent warrior, the cruelty his service to the Super Namekian required of him began to sicken him as the years passed. It seemed that there was no end to his master’s desire for conquest, that they would turn world after world into Planet Cruisers more out of a blind lust for destruction than for any truly useful purpose. As he slowly came to the realization that Lord Slug was more than likely just insane and his brothers-in-arms were too blind to see it, he began planning his eventual escape.

It wasn’t easy for Violin to find opportunities to break free, as his combination of personal strength and healing powers meant that he was doubly valuable for the planet-conquering soldiers of Lord Slug’s crew and was rarely kept far from the frontline fighting at any time. However, fate or luck eventually intervened and during one attempt at planetary conquest Slug’s forces were successfully violently repulsed. As a result Violin was able to stay behind during Lord Slug’s second attempt at a Planet Cruiser-making foray under the guise of healing the wounds his fellow soldiers had sustained during their last failed attack. Seizing on the moment, he stole a smaller ship and deserted from Lord Slug’s army, and at first just to keep from being killed, pleaded with the ISF for asylum in exchange for his full cooperation and all of the information he had on Lord Slug’s operations.

Gradually Violin became trusted enough to begin using his healing abilities to aid the ISF. He found that though he no longer had the desire to fight, he still enjoyed healing others and made it his mission to serve as a medic for the ISF to make up for some of the evil he had caused in his past. Over time he came to terms with his past and moved back into the field on occasion, though he remained primarily a member of the Green Sector of the ISF.

[Gowi]

Yeah, you are sort of the AGM so it should be no surprise to say you can just plop it on the tab.

[King Kindred]

Finished the bio part of my CS yesterday. Should work on the abilities/techniques in an hour. Long day.

Edited: Done unless I need to add his strength and how fast he is.

[Gowi]

@King Kindred
With this in mind the ISF officers decided to offer him a spot in their Academy. It was either that or be arrested

I'd take this out and replace it with: "Given his heroic actions the ISF offered him an official pardon and offered him the opportunity to join their ranks in the ISF Academy if he wished to join them defeating other planetary and interstellar threats like the men he had defeated." Otherwise it's pretty solid and I have no issues with it!

[King Kindred]

@Gowi
Sweet. Thank you and edited. Should I post it in the characters tab?

[Gowi]

Yes, that's fine.

[Hillan]

@Gowi: You are absolutely correct. You'll have to forgive me, as I submitted the app in quite a rush and I just wanted to put my idea down. When I wrote 'Won't break the rules' I meant 'Morally incorruptible.' He's lawfully good, he doesn't tolerate 'evil', so those who walks the gray zone is going to probably find themselves at the edge of his sword, sooner or later.

And, actually, I was thinking that the Konatsian's are connected to the spiritual world of the Kaioshin's, due to their obvious similarities in appearance. That the shin's were all from Konats, alternatively they created the Konatsians in their own image. What is the canon idea behind the Kaioshins these days? Are they gods of creation or just wankers with their own plane of existence?

[Sloth]

What is the canon idea behind the Kaioshins these days? Are they gods of creation or just wankers with their own plane of existence?

@Hillan

Supposedly they come from a base race of "God-People" grown from magic trees and whenever one of them decides to kick the bucket (IE: Get killed, because immortality) members of the race just draw lots to determine which one of them gets to ascend to Kai-ship. Or something, it's stupid. As for whether they have their own plane of existence....maybe? I presumed "Other World" just equated to "The Kai Realm" or something, where each main Kai, aka the ones that represent the four cardinal directions/entire galaxies oversee the universe and shit while the big bad booty daddy Kai just kinda sits around on Planet Kaioshin waiting for Beerus/A God of Destruction to wake up and blow stuff up, and subsequently let Goku and Vegeta handle that problem. I'm not up to date on Dragon Ball Super, so whether each universe has their own version of Kais or they're exclusive to the "main" universe, I don't know.

Though from what I can infer (and this is purely my theory) the chain of command, so to speak, goes something like this:

Grand Supreme Kai - Universal if not Multiversal Overseer
The Supreme Kais - Universal stuff, may have powers over crap like Space-Time if video games are taken into account, typically keep the Four kais in check.
The Four Kais - Galactic Guardians, occasionally train badass mortals on how to turn red and throw giant balls at people.
Minor Deities - Planetary Guardians a la Kami who report to their local congressman. I mean Kai.
"The Help" - Popo

Mortal Champions are obviously variable, since Goku and the Super Saiyan Squad can pretty much walk up to most Kais and make them piss themselves, so, whatever.

But hey, if they made Konatsians in their own image, then some prick Kai made the Saiyans to outshine everyone else's favorite race.

[Hillan]

I mostly figured it would make sense for Konatsians to either actually have a connection to the Kai's, or to believe they do ala religious beliefs, as they are very similar looking.