[OOC] God's Shattering [Concluded]

[Lonewolf685]

There is no god here, only the Imperator, who is the unofficial goddess of Yuri. Her private Dungeon is...astonishing.

[FrozenPhoenix]

I don't know what Yuri means, except I know a guy named Yuri. Great guy.

[Awesomoman64]

There is no god here, only the Imperator, who is the unofficial goddess of Yuri. Her private Dungeon is...astonishing.

@Lonewolf685

I'm beginning to understand why this sites color pallet is different shades of gray.

[KoL]

I don't know what Yuri means, except I know a guy named Yuri. Great guy.

@FrozenPhoenix

Well... Yuri means lily in Japanese, if that's what you were thinking about. But the kind of flower it refers to is another completely different one, if you know what I mean. >:)

This video might happen elucidate your thoughts:

[TheWendil]

@KoL

At what point did you turn my RP into a smut fest? ಠ_ಠ

_{Not that this is a bad thing.}

[TheWendil]

Welp here's my sacrifice. I had so many ideas for the tome just to see them taken by other users xD and I'd hate to be a copycat.

Kana

Kana

Age:

137

Allegiance:

In the now

History:

One hundred thirty seven years is a long time to live and still be just a kid. Time really means nothing to her anymore, and she's forgotten most of her past. Sure she's had a mother and father once, maybe even a couple of siblings. But as time went forward, she essentially did not. She outlived all her family and friends, her real name forgotten a long time ago. She's learned to just live from day to day, doing as she pleases as nothing was really much of a consequence for her, not that she went out of the way to abuse her free time.

Personality:

Kana is quite lazy. Always in the 'do it tomorrow' type mood. She didn't care what day it was or any 'obligations' others put on her. If she was hungry, she ate. If she was tired, she slept. Though her people skills were a bit weary. She could go on being acquaintances with just about anyone, but not much longer than a year or two as they'd for sure notice her youth. She didn't care if it was accepted by anyone, to her it was unnatural and unfair. She preferring to live out in the woods than to live with the population and bring notice to her condition. Which honestly sucked. She loves love, and people have many times captured her hearts at near first glance alone. Being with people is probably the greatest joy she knows as of now.

Tome:

Her tome has been embedded within her, appearing as runes engraved into her legs. All she really has to do to activate it, is speak it and the corresponding runes will begin to glow a soft aquamarine. However each word can only be spoken twice per day, resetting itself at midnight each night.

Her tome power is that dealing with time, or mainly how time affects the objects her and the world around her. There are six words of power associated with her tome, each yielding a different result. Targets must be in touch when the ability is activated or otherwise nullified.

• Eins
  For the next 5 minutes, target is caught in a stasis field, denying any change to, from, or within.
• Zwei
  Fast forward the age of a target non-living object, weakening it's structural bonds.
• Drei
  Rewind the position of the world back 10 minutes, keeping in affect all current statuses.
• Vier
  Slow the world around her, momentarily giving her super speed and reflexes.
• Fünf
  Can know the past of any target object or person.
• Sechs
  Can Change the physical appearance of any target person to that of any age.

Other:

Fun quirks here and there when dealing with people. Nothing set in stone and hardly ever the same thing twice. Looks to have fun where she can.

@Unlucky0013

Hmm. Time is a tricky business. Is time what keeps her looking young? Also, you might have to get rid of one or two of those abilities. Wait for what KoL has to say.

[The 42nd Gecko]

I wrote down my opinions on the time powers, but I'm not a GM, so this entirely side commentary.

Timey Wimey Stuff

Talking about the time powers, I'm fine with Zwei, Vier, and Fünf. I'm a lot more iffy about Eins and Sechs, and reaaaaly don't like Drei.

Zwei is just anti-normal stuff, and tomes don't age, so she can't blow up your tome with that.

Vier is just another explanation for super speed, which, although it's one of the stronger powers, is fine.

Fünf, maybe with some nebulous "you only receive hints and the important bits instead of the entire 100% history", is a power about on par with the secondary abilities of that blue guardian guy.

Eins. Well, 5 minutes is pretty much long enough to resolve any fight or run away. Or set up a giant pack of explosives around the person to detonate the second they come out of stasis. In D&D, if you get stasis'd for five rounds, you're effectively dead, because the combat will be over, all your friends will be dead, and the enemy will have healed up and readied action to instagib you as soon as you come out of stasis. And five rounds in D&D is what, 30 seconds?

Sechs is this just their appearance or also their physical state? Cause if the latter, this is a one shot kill ability against anyone without immortality (and I age you to one second before your natural death). If it's just appearance, oh, that's a nifty ability.

Drei, I would be perfectly fine with this ability if it was the opposite of what it is. If it let you revert your physical state to how it was 10 minutes ago, cool. Nifty time-based healing, and doesn't prevent you from being hit with mental statuses (because otherwise you'd forget everything in the last 10 minutes). But as it is, rewinding actual time 10 minutes... That's the kind of power entire plotlines can revolve around because the protagonist has it and can use it to completely upset the balance of the world. But, the thing I'm worried about most is having to replay sequences of the roleplay because you Drei'd them, and we move slowly enough as it is without someone with the ability to rewind.

[Unlucky0013]

@The 42nd Gecko

Oh, those are some good suggestions. Thanks for the criticism. I actually just got tired. this was like my 4th or 5th tome power to go through. I originally had 12 because of the twelve numbers on a clock, but i didn't want to be totally overpowered. So i sorta just deleted and let be.

Zewi - right. mainly used, say, against locks and doors and food. Anything that would decay naturally via time.

Vier - yup, though it isn't constant, only for a reaction or like halve a post.

Fünf - i'm fine with just the important bits, but define important. It is just a Retrocognition, opposite of precognition, that i was going for.

Eins - Yeah, youre right about that i guess. Sorta was looking for an offensive power, but i could easily just swap it out.

Sechs is mainly just appearance. I mean its only 5 years a shot, and technically speaking people cant die of old age. its something thats wrong with them that kills them.

Drei - i actually kinda like yours better, and thought about, but i've had DM/GM say that your idea was the more broken one; completely restoring one's state.

[The 42nd Gecko]

@Unlucky0013

More Timey Wimey

Fünf, important IS tough to define. One of those things you just have to leave up to the GM's. For example, if you managed to touch Imperator... Huuuuh..

Eins, yeah, it is a very thematic power and gives you a decent offensive option, I'm just not sure how I'd balance it. You'll notice I had it in my "iffy" list, and didn't really have a suggestion on what to do with it.

Drei, matter of opinion I suppose. I was viewing it as balanced for two reasons, it's only twice a day, and it's not necessarily a full heal. If you were exhausted the whole fight because there was a chase scene for an hour beforehand, rewinding 10 minutes will still probably leave you exhausted. Besides, if whoever nearly killed you the first time is still around, they can probably do it again. :P

[Awesomoman64]

@Unlucky0013

What if for Eins instead of holding a single target, you create a sort of dome that encloses you and a target in a sort of time stasis. Everything inside would move in real time while to those outside it would seem to happen in an instant.
Combine that with Vier and you've essentially trapped your opponent in a one on one with a super fast attacker.

[The 42nd Gecko]

I kinda wanna make a gun-mage, but I imagine that would be too OP against some people and completely UP against others.

[Awesomoman64]

I kinda wanna make a gun-mage, but I imagine that would be too OP against some people and completely UP against others.

@The 42nd Gecko

You just summed up Overwatch in one sentence.

[The 42nd Gecko]

<Snipped quote by The 42nd Gecko>

You just summed up Overwatch in one sentence.

@Awesomoman64

Well, considering D. Va crossed with a technomancer was my primary inspiration... Thats.. uh.. huh.

[Unlucky0013]

@Awesomoman64 OOh, thats a good suggestion, thanks ^-^

[FrozenPhoenix]

Well... Yuri means lily in Japanese, if that's what you were thinking about. But the kind of flower it refers to is another completely different one, if you know what I mean. >:)

@KoL

Oh my God... and not the good kind of oh my God. Well I mean kinda is, but not like... Oh you know what I mean dammit!

Also I know I'm kinda new so my standing and opinion probably won't be taken into too much consideration, but on the topic of time... I'm honestly ok with most of the powers. We constantly think to teh worst of the worst that each power can do but really think about it. If my character could teleport I could just grab an enemy teleport a mile into teh sky knock them away and teleport safely to the ground as I watch them turn into a red smear on the ground. Or teleport into the middle of a deep sea abyss and teleport out letting them drown. And teleportaion is a MOBILITY power, yet it can have hundreds of ways to insta-gib a person.

My only say so is that Eins is a literal death sentence. The time for the effect is way to long. Like Gecko said most battles last mere seconds and to drop a person like that would be vicious.

Similarly, Drei I have the same issue as Gecko though maybe a little less for it... If you can rewind the whole world back 10 minutes that's an incredible power. If there is a twist or specific event she could rewind time for the whole world and either stop it or cause it. Though I like the idea of time reversal, I don't like how it just takes everything back just 'cause. Though if it's more targeted... Perhaps she lays hands on somebody and rewind them back 10 minutes in time. Having that temporal healing and ability to have a sort of future sense without literally making us repeat parts of the RP time and time again.

Last bit to talk about is Funf. Again this is an idea I like but see it being terrifying without knowing more. Does she just touch somebody and see their whole life? Or is it like a vision where she sees their past but it's vague, foggy, and mixed up like a vision for the future.

Beyond that I like all the other powers with what you've given and made on clarifications.

[Awesomoman64]

@The 42nd Gecko

I propose your gun-mage also have a time power and that is they can make it be High Noon whenever they want.

[The 42nd Gecko]

@Awesomoman64

:(

[KoL]

Ok, sorry for the delay, here goes my opinion:

@KoL

At what point did you turn my RP into a smut fest? ಠ_ಠ

_{Not that this is a bad thing.}

@TheWindel

I don't know... maybe, ever since you created it? After it's your RP and we all know how evil and depraved you are, not?

_{Let none know I'm every bit as corrupted.}

Welp here's my sacrifice. I had so many ideas for the tome just to see them taken by other users xD and I'd hate to be a copycat.

Kana

Kana

Age:

137

Allegiance:

In the now

History:

One hundred thirty seven years is a long time to live and still be just a kid. Time really means nothing to her anymore, and she's forgotten most of her past. Sure she's had a mother and father once, maybe even a couple of siblings. But as time went forward, she essentially did not. She outlived all her family and friends, her real name forgotten a long time ago. She's learned to just live from day to day, doing as she pleases as nothing was really much of a consequence for her, not that she went out of the way to abuse her free time.

Personality:

Kana is quite lazy. Always in the 'do it tomorrow' type mood. She didn't care what day it was or any 'obligations' others put on her. If she was hungry, she ate. If she was tired, she slept. Though her people skills were a bit weary. She could go on being acquaintances with just about anyone, but not much longer than a year or two as they'd for sure notice her youth. She didn't care if it was accepted by anyone, to her it was unnatural and unfair. She preferring to live out in the woods than to live with the population and bring notice to her condition. Which honestly sucked. She loves love, and people have many times captured her hearts at near first glance alone. Being with people is probably the greatest joy she knows as of now.

Tome:

Her tome has been embedded within her, appearing as runes engraved into her legs. All she really has to do to activate it, is speak it and the corresponding runes will begin to glow a soft aquamarine. However each word can only be spoken twice per day, resetting itself at midnight each night.

Her tome power is that dealing with time, or mainly how time affects the objects her and the world around her. There are six words of power associated with her tome, each yielding a different result. Targets must be in touch when the ability is activated or otherwise nullified.

• Eins
  For the next 5 minutes, target is caught in a stasis field, denying any change to, from, or within.
• Zwei
  Fast forward the age of a target non-living object, weakening it's structural bonds.
• Drei
  Rewind the position of the world back 10 minutes, keeping in affect all current statuses.
• Vier
  Slow the world around her, momentarily giving her super speed and reflexes.
• Fünf
  Can know the past of any target object or person.
• Sechs
  Can Change the physical appearance of any target person to that of any age.

Other:

Fun quirks here and there when dealing with people. Nothing set in stone and hardly ever the same thing twice. Looks to have fun where she can.

@Unlucky0013

Well, first, I have to say that she isn't so very old from an IC view point, people who have tomes (pretty much everyone) age slower than RL humans anyway. And elves are down right immortal, but you won't be seeing a true elf so soon unless people realize Linea's and Sienna's family tree. About twice as slow, though they only start to go slower after a certain age is reached (generally around the early 20's), probably a lot of the people she knew are still alive, old like an 80/90 years old person, but alive. The only weird thing is her looks, if you want a background like that she would have to be at least 300 years old or so.

Now, for the core of the issue that seems to be her powers, let me say what I think. Zwei, Sechs and Vier are good the way they are, but the other three all have issues with power.

- Eins: It lasts for too long, maybe around a minute, or 30 seconds? All you need to milk the most of it is creativity.

- Drei: I don't think that this is the kind of power that should be at a player's hand, without really heavy regulation, it can screw the whole RP. Another way of portraying this effect should be possible, or maybe you have to scrap this power. Time travel, even if it's to a minute back/forward in time, is an OP thing.

- Fünf: Another power that can ruin the RP, but this one can also be good, if a few changes are made. First, there must be a limit of how far back she can get info of things, otherwise a touch on someone as old as Yggdrasil would fry her brain with info. 24 hours, at the most, a week should be good enough for any relevant place where it can be of use. Second, the information she gathers should be both subjected to GM's will and somehow enigmatic in nature, this makes it a plot device power that can create interesting scenarios, instead of a solve one solve all mysteries in the world power, because you could just have her touch the ground the way it's written and know everything that happened in the world since it was created. Third this power can be activated without conscious effort of her, if the story would benefit from it.

Other than this she's good.

[GamerXZ]

Hey, felt I should ask, are you still accepting?

[TheWendil]

Hey, felt I should ask, are you still accepting?

@GamerXZ

We are.