@PURRfect93
The traits Kent is described with are
- Naive
- Keen
- Mature
- Prankster
- Pitiful
- Amazing
- Outcast
- Inspires fear and horror (the same thing, really)
- Inspires shame
- Slow to anger
- Uncompromisingly honest
I'd like to see more cohesion in his sheet. I'm not asking for a two dimensional caricature or single archetype, but I don't really read Kent's sheet and get an idea of what he's like, because there are so many unrelated and sometimes contradictory details. There doesn't really feel like there's anything bad about Kent aside from his albinism, of which I think you might've played the superstition up a bit. Albinos and black mice are more like left-handed people and redheads than the social leprosy Kent seems to have. Nicknames should be for obvious traits, and I don't really get why he has a nickname befitting an especially stealthy mouse. While I'm on the subject of his nickname, please fix the compound word caps in SilentFur and DarkPelt.
Another question I have is the ears -- It seems kind of like an arbitrary mutilation. If I'm a rat who's captured a Greenband who I don't want to kill and eat for some reason, ears seem like a weird trophy. I feel like they'd get dried up and crunchy. Why not a tail, or a paw?
My final gripe is that he lives by the Valley of Bones. Not something you could have known, but I have plans for that particular area, so I'd like you to come up with a different place for him to be from. You can keep him as a Westercroft mouse by all means.
The traits Kent is described with are
- Naive
- Keen
- Mature
- Prankster
- Pitiful
- Amazing
- Outcast
- Inspires fear and horror (the same thing, really)
- Inspires shame
- Slow to anger
- Uncompromisingly honest
I'd like to see more cohesion in his sheet. I'm not asking for a two dimensional caricature or single archetype, but I don't really read Kent's sheet and get an idea of what he's like, because there are so many unrelated and sometimes contradictory details. There doesn't really feel like there's anything bad about Kent aside from his albinism, of which I think you might've played the superstition up a bit. Albinos and black mice are more like left-handed people and redheads than the social leprosy Kent seems to have. Nicknames should be for obvious traits, and I don't really get why he has a nickname befitting an especially stealthy mouse. While I'm on the subject of his nickname, please fix the compound word caps in SilentFur and DarkPelt.
Another question I have is the ears -- It seems kind of like an arbitrary mutilation. If I'm a rat who's captured a Greenband who I don't want to kill and eat for some reason, ears seem like a weird trophy. I feel like they'd get dried up and crunchy. Why not a tail, or a paw?
My final gripe is that he lives by the Valley of Bones. Not something you could have known, but I have plans for that particular area, so I'd like you to come up with a different place for him to be from. You can keep him as a Westercroft mouse by all means.