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@Eyelid

Accepted.

Good we got a medic so at least our crew have someone to help them when the core explodes and everyone gets intense radiation poisoning.

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@datadogie

Shit, it's all chiller the the north winds fart, sister.

Nah, you can have an image to rerpesent your A.I if you like on computer screens but you can function without it. Your ship will very unlikely have holograms installed.

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@Voltus_Ventus

Accepted. You can move him into the characters thread.

@officaz

Your appearence section needs a quick clean up in general.

If niagara a place on earth, then treat it as a station named after it. The chance of anyone below 500 seeing earth in this universe is nill.

Your recommendation letter is really indepth about his treatment but skirt him and his reason to be sent to zelta crew. Unless the indication is he was sent to ZELTA simply because the desk jocky party member in charge of that area got tired to wasting resources on him and sent him off to be someone elses problem-or no one if he dies-

If your [img] link here [/img] isn't working then it's most likely your links to the site that holds the image and not the image itself.

Put the link in here.

Give your sheet a once over, when you feel it's finished I'll handle all the code for you. But I feel relatively comfortable with accepting it if you give it a final proof read/ clean up to sentences and stuff. Maybe add a very small clarifyer for being sent to ZELTA crew.

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@sassy1085

It's up, sister.

roleplayerguild.com/topics/178293-you…

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@6slyboy6

shit, I have a,motherfucking, brain wave misbehave that causes me to sort of scramble when running words. I was talking more normally because as GM I didn't want miscommunication to navigate the nucli of this coming action tide off beat.

Now I'm relaxing and writing in a manner that helps me focus.

Motherfucking is just my stop light. Helps me think clearly.

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Well, I think this may be the most amount of people we're goint to be getting. I would of liked to have all roles filled at least once.

But I shilled harder than an shik in the,motherfucking, rich part of town and a looming debt shark on his shoulder. So the only advertising tactic I got left is to start the RP and try my best to make it fun as fuck so when we do crew rotate to 02 people see what they're missing.

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@6slyboy6

No, voltus has started a sheet for captain. I just forgot to change the reserve. So OS is open. Medic has a lot of uses too and is open.

So, either one is your choice, brother.

Most people have never been to Earth. That's a long, long place away. If you told anyone in this universe "hey there was a big war on earth ages back" they'd probably say "Who gives a shit about Earth?"

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@datadogie

You're in storage. Precisely, you've been uninstalled from whatever big system you were in prior and had your chip put in an enevelope and that put in a dusty cabinent with a bunch of other A.I stored away. You are re-inserted and "wake up" when the crew pick their ship(they will get to vote for one off a list).

@6slyboy6

shit, success in the scribery check, comrade. Each ship will have an A.I player with its own hidden laws and commands. Welcome to the warzone. We sort of short of a skeleton crew but when everyone in we can wing it slightly under.

The needed roles are medical or OS. Keep in mind you'll probably have you brain mutate into mush no matter who you pick. The chance of mot people surviving is very low.

@Voltus_Ventus

Looks great.

Only thing to I'd say is split up the recommendations paragraph a little bit to make it easier to read but I like the idea of showing a conversation, it still delivers the point.

If you're going to go down that route. It might make more sense if there was a coliation or something of merchants paying the party a lot to help them with that. The party itself would just make up some bullshit to fine you for.

"Hey, notice no more than 25% of your liquid currency has left your account this year. Spending is what a party patron would do. Your deviant behavour has been fined 60% of your current account" or something.

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@officaz

Well, there's some questions. What IS our officer perspective on him. Because in this we just have a very formal psych report, we don't know his liabilities or personality by the view of our seargent. Why is being sent to ZELTA crew when the party could rope anyone with impunity to do this?

The officer doing this is most likely recommending him with full knowledge as to lethality-and length- of the job

Let me qoute @Starlance recommendation.

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Recommendations Officers Personality Observations:

Former co-workers describe Ms. Tangeman as practical, work-oriented and straightforward with no social life. Her mother described her as stubborn. Subject has a tendency to voice her mind whether it’s appropriate or not. Combined with her stubborn nature, this has led to disciplinary action in the past, but may be used to the Party’s advantage, as the subject will not back down when challenged, allowing overseers to manipulate her into doing something she herself thought impossible.

I’m recommending the subject for an engineering role due to her vast experience with ship maintenance, but her troubling attitude makes her unfit for further stay at her current post. It should be noted the suspect and her mother never got along and she has no other family.

- Dr. Richard Franklin, Party appointed psychologist, Silaris shipyards.

From this we short piece we know that:

Key parts of her personality. She was probably tolerated and treated with a soft contempt by her managers. Reason why she's being pushed out of her current position

(from the general demeanor of this whole thing they seem to of got sick of her so they shoveled her off to ZELTA crew but they don't expressly say it)

It's a good way to build your character indirectly and their sort of relationship with the universe. Kind of gives you lore via implication.

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@officaz

Conceptually he's fine, brother but there are some things I'd like to see revised before I accept it.

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1: You lost the code to the sheet. This is stuff that was in it like [hider] [color=antique white][/color] ectr. Please include this as it makes it look nicer. Or at least the hider since it makes browsing multiple sheets down the line easier.

2: I'd like a picture in the ID area. The picture can be of any style or medium.

3: There are some typos.

4: Traits are sort not phrased and explained in the way I showed in my example character-Michal Warrant- You can add a little to traits like Starlance's character did if you keep it very, very brief.

5: I'd maybe like a little more personality to the recommendations. Remember that in the context of the sheet we're getting a sort of officer perspective on him and as to why they're being put forward to ZELTA crew. The person doing this is most likely very aware that anyone going on this crew is going to die or be lost in space for a very long time and as such is being shifted about as expendable. Unless said officer is very niave/optimistic about the world he is

Officer in this case can be anyone from a parole officer, military, psychologist, human resources or security ectr.

I'd suggest you take a quick look at starlances or my example character before you make any changes