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    1. Spanner 8 yrs ago

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6 yrs ago
Ho, my writing is so advanced that people can't even see it. Literally the Emperor’s new clothes of collaborative writing.
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7 yrs ago
See ya next time.
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7 yrs ago
K.
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7 yrs ago
@Grim excuse me? I know people in the 1x1 area that slept with 57 girls (auto-declared). They're also specialists in relationship studies.
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7 yrs ago
P.s. gotta love how my typo made the already fairly dank status even danker... Well, at least I ain't trying to be the side bar's white knight.
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*coughs*Already making one*coughs*


Meh. If you want to do one, it isn't something I would bother with disputing.
Hope it is a good character tho, as I plan to do a kiri'nin.
And suddenly, we have a bunch of Naruto RPs... Still, I'm interested in the RP and mildly interested in the role of mizukage (as I have a former character that suits it).
@Spanner Shit, I misread, thought that was an A rank jutsu. Sorry, ignore what I said then.


Well, it was supposed to be an A Rank before to be honest. Thought it was a little bit too strong and changed to S.
@Spanner Oh, actually. I just realized you don't have an S rank. While I'm okay with you not having one, I think he should have one. Maybe something related to his swift release would be cool. Combine it with an element, or his sword, maybe?


I have one tho? Custom Jutsu.
@Buddha

And here is the edited version. Please tell me your thoughts for anything that still need correction, as I'm pretty sure there will be some mistakes somewhere - especially because I'm editing it by cellphone and in the middle of class that i felt like ignoring.

@Spanner Eh, the actual reasons for the war are much larger than that, and serve as a better trigger for war to begin with. It'll be explained in due time. Having him be a trigger wouldn't really work that well.

I'm fine with him having swift release as long as we have a mutual understanding that he just uses it to be faster, but that it isn't like body flicker as in instantaneous movement to the point where he might as well be teleporting. As long as that's clear I don't think it'll be a problem.


That's fine. I'll just change this part of his history as a whole and put it in a more generic way, without making reference to villages.
As for the swift release, that was pretty much what I meant for it to be anyway.
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Alright, first off, some of my comments are not meant to be 100% serious. I don't really care about the callsign for instance, so that it's a mouthful doesn't really matter.

That was pretty clear tho? I wasn't really answering seriously, even felt tempted to insert a shush in the end.
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True, but there's a reason they're at war. I could've clarified it but opted to do it in the IC, because otherwise I'd have to give away the main antagonist already and I'd prefer not to do that.

But in short; there's a war between Kirigakure and Konohagakure at the moment, however that only started some.. one year ago? So it's possible that he's from Kirigakure. However, them being allied after the first war seems unlikely to me. I'd also opt to change the villages (or just leave the alliance bit out? Whether you're allied or not, during peacetime you'd want to avoid killing shinobi of another village, especially in an exam). A single shinobi being the reason for a war seems a bit much, especially if he went rogue anyway.

Rather than the reason, I thought about having him as one of the triggers to the war. Like, there was already a reason but he acted to give a justification to the start of the war. Franz Ferdinand's Shinobi version.

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There are plenty of strong shinobi in Amegakure though, and for a village that is relatively small and has been the underdog for a long time (and thus at risk of invasion) I'd say that taking in a wanted criminal is more of a reason to get invaded than a reason to strengthen herself. I see where you are coming from but I don't think the con's would outweigh the pro's in this case.

Fair enough. I'll go ahead and change this specific part to make him more suitable for the role.

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Which is a bit too much. In practice, it's too much like body flicker. In fact, it's unknown currently how swift release is even different from body flicker;

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I'm not against him being really speedy, but there's something about instant movement that is cheesy in a fight.

Also, having a jonin going around zooming between enemies finishing them all off seems like it'd force the students to just kinda.. sit back and watch. Cool in theory, but for an RP, it's not that good.


Well, i Don't see him as being that active to start with. Going around killing weaklings with cowardly attacks hardly suits a battle addict like him - there's nk thrill on it. Still, I can take out this technique and make him an user of se form of chakra strengthening or some variation of the eight gates of wonder.
@Buddha

Since I've been craving for a Naruto RP since a while ago and you're searching for players, I could as well submit a character that I've been wanting to use since a while ago.

Review in red
Answer to clarify some stuff in blue, just cause it seems fitting


Please take a look at my criticism/review. Take it as constructive,I'll surely do so... I guess.


@Buddha Can you please clarify your opinions about the justifications/questions made as an answer to your corrections? It'll make the correction of the sheet considerably easier.
@Buddha

Since I've been craving for a Naruto RP since a while ago and you're searching for players, I could as well submit a character that I've been wanting to use since a while ago.

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