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KaelRavenheart said
Mia Lane is accepted. I feel I should tell you that milk is a liquid that does not have water in it, so you cannot control it. Blood, on the other hand, as well as any other liquid composed of a mix of water and something else, can be controlled so long as it retains liquid form. Only water and blood are able to be frozen or evaporated. Also, I'd like a more detailed explanation as to how she retains "vast amounts of knowledge.


I guess I've joked one too many times that skim milk is white water. I'll change it. And have you ever met someone, or maybe you are like this yourself, that anything they hear once they can recall later? Like they're a sponge? That's all I meant by that. She forgets hardly anything at all.
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So, an eidetic memory?
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So, an eidetic memory?


Never heard the term before, but after looking it up, yes I suppose so :) I'm basing it on a guy I know in person.
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The Warlock's reality manipulation normally affects laws and rules of the universe, rather than a specific kind of object or medium. I can't really go into specifics, as it can be utilized in many ways, but it's safe to say that anything resembling elemental magic is not likely to be in the Warlock's repertoire.

Damien Graves is accepted, but needs quite a bit of nerfing. First, he cannot be a lich unless he looks like a lich. He would definitely be undead, so he would look like an undead, decayed or shriveled. The phylactery is almost always a small container with certain elements in it, rather than a solid piece. I like your death knights, but the female will not be able to do any magic besides minor necromancy.

Marianna Delacroix is accepted. I have no real critiques for this character. She is well put together and manages to also be non-stereotypical. I'm impressed. ^_^

Khor Karakas is accepted. His abilities aren't quite how I'd laid them out, but they are similar enough and balanced enough that I have no objections for now.
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Whirlwind, I understand what you mean, but I feel you should specify whether the things she remembers is what she sees or what she hears. I think she'd be a bit too powerful if she remembered everything she'd ever seen or heard. I think an eidetic memory is remembering what you've seen. So, choose either sight or sound, and that I'll allow.
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Whirlwind, I understand what you mean, but I feel you should specify whether the things she remembers is what she sees or what she hears. I think she'd be a bit too powerful if she remembered everything she'd ever seen or heard. I think an eidetic memory is remembering what you've seen. So, choose either sight or sound, and that I'll allow.


Seen is fine
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KaelRavenheart said Damien Graves is accepted, but needs quite a bit of nerfing. First, he cannot be a lich unless he looks like a lich. He would definitely be undead, so he would look like an undead, decayed or shriveled. The phylactery is almost always a small container with certain elements in it, rather than a solid piece. I like your death knights, but the female will not be able to do any magic besides minor necromancy.


Figured lich wouldn't encompass it. Something akin to the Soul Gems of Madoka or Horcruxes from Harry Potter would probably be more accurate to describe it. He isn't so much Undead as his soul possesses and manipulates his body from within the phylactery. If that's unacceptable, than yeah, I'll change it.
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I see what you mean, Kael. Thanks for elaborating.

Viktor would probably have met Marianna before. Somehow, after reading her personality, I don't think they'll get on well.What do you suppose?
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Just Quick update on my part, ignore if you want:

I have updated my sheet, though I still haven't gotten round to fluffing up his bio a bit. No worries though, I will get round to that later this day.
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"... Stop and listen, even a King knows how to plea."


Name: Silas Greer
Gender: Male
Age: 19
Magic User Type: Air Mage

Appearance: A pale skinned youth whose dark hair is a stark contrast to his background, all except the utter darkness. His chocolate brown eyes are narrow and sharp, discerning the fear out of most opponents. His slim figure appears skeleton underneath his clothes but he's exceptionally fit in reality, not at all muscular but he lacks excessive body fat. He is usually seen in a menacing rustic armor that projects the idea of an abysmal and worn knight, iron chain-mail is worn underneath, and to hide his facial features is a helmet that appears to depict the devil's likeness; from off his back flows a tattered black cape. He stands at an above average height of six foot one, his body is decorated with white scars.


Personality: Cruel and silent, Silas is often depicted as a fearless and intimidating figure in the land of Pantos. He has vowed allegiance to no one and sees himself as force to reckon with. In other words, he believes himself to be superior. He has few words for even the most worthy of opponents and rarely greets those that deserve it with a proper greeting. His selflessness is just a small positive in his overall armament of negatives, though he sees himself as a villain, he finds it difficult to deny those that are in true need of help. He fights for what he believes to be right and just, not what the world believes to be true.

Powers: Manipulating and controlling the air/ sound. He utilizes this power with his lance and other weapons but if he must, than he unleash the full bulk of it by dropping his weapons and attacking with all the force of a merciless gale.

Skills/Talents:
>> Exceptional Lancer
>> Archer
>> Quick thinker
>> Horseman
>> Farmer
>> Mildly educated

Equipment/Weapons:
>> Enchanted Lance - The ability to by-pass armor has been bestow on this lance's entire blade. Its indestructible by normal means.
>> Armor
>> Maps
>> Gilgamesh the horse

Bio: Abandoned as a infant by a disgruntled father, whose wife passed giving birth to him, Silas was found a by a enchantress known simply as Sky Maiden. She hoped that he would be the child that she could never have and waited patiently for him to show results. However, as he grew older, it became apparent that somewhere deep inside, he was broken. She searched his mind and realized that he had a vivid memory of the hardship that had transpired that day. She could had healed his mind, living on a cloud was easy, so surely healing his memories would be child's play. However, she found it indecent to erase such a large part of him, so she allowed to stay the same.

Eventually, he grew up and became a lone knight, a being meant solely for the people. Through his upbringings with the Sky Maiden he learned several self-sustaining skills, including how to fight and hunt. Throughout his time in the Kingdom of Pantos, he made a small name for himself by enforcing peace on small skirmishes and the like. He walks the land of Pantos, going where whispers of war, evil, and other confrontations may spawn. However, he'll always return to his hidden abode deep in the forest, where a small farm grows near a stream, and the land provides all that he'll ever need.
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Zombehs- I'll allow the horcrux like object under the following condition. Unlike a horcrux, if someone else gains possession of it, they have the power over his life, causing him pain or even killing him if they wish. This could also be used as a means of controlling him. If you don't want that condition, then you can make it a phylactery, which is a small container that holds his life force, but grants no power to anyone who holds it beyond the fact that if it is destroyed, so is your character.

Black Wizards- I agree about the clash of personality, but whether they've met before should be decided between you and Harine.

Renny- Silas needs some work. I can't accept the character quite yet, as he is a bit overpowered as he stands. I like the idea of an air mage who is also a warrior, especially the lance. However, there is no basis for your character to be so old and have eternal youth. Your character should be a reasonable number of years old and age normally. Also, his credentials don't quite fit with backstory. I think he should focus mainly on one weapon type and have a second as back up, but not a third. Right now you have lance, bow, and sword. I'll let you keep your lance, but it's enchantment is too powerful. Dumb that down a bit. I'll accept your character being a horseman, farmer, quick thinker, and even being educated. Once you've made the appropriate changes, let me know and I'll look it over again.
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KaelRavenheart said Zombehs- I'll allow the horcrux like object under the following condition. Unlike a horcrux, if someone else gains possession of it, they have the power over his life, causing him pain or even killing him if they wish. This could also be used as a means of controlling him. If you don't want that condition, then you can make it a phylactery, which is a small container that holds his life force, but grants no power to anyone who holds it beyond the fact that if it is destroyed, so is your character.


But a phylactery would mean he's a full Lich with the appearance and what not? Cause even with the Soul Gem (I'm settling on this cause they function exactly the same way), he's still limited to only controlling his own body. It's not like he'd be able to hop around to any vacant body he finds.
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I can make an exception on the appearance. If you don't refer to yourself as lich, you may have the phylactery and not be undead. Your soul would be tied to it and it would have to remain on you, or at least close by, because if it is destroyed, then so are you. It can be destroyed by any magical damage, but is immune to normal damage.
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I can make an exception on the appearance. If you don't refer to yourself as lich, you may have the phylactery and not be undead. Your soul would be tied to it and it would have to remain on you, or at least close by, because if it is destroyed, then so are you. It can be destroyed by any magical damage, but is immune to normal damage.

Okay, that's exactly what I was going for, so perfect.
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Yeah. I was kind of hoping Harine would comment on that. Poor communication on my part, I guess.
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Bio: [Unfinished/Insert Rich Girl Story Here] Fiona who was born from a family who makes a living off the Earth itself seems to be a very profitable business. Having control of several mines mean the selling of jewelry meaning big money from the other rich people. It also meant the control of the fuel for the people who used it aka coal. It also granted the deposit of ores to the family allowing metal craft to also begin and soon the family started to diverge into two different halves, one half made up of Smithers and the other made up of jewelers. There was an obvious gap of wealth between the two halves of the family but the Smithing side of the Family always seemed to stay strong even during famine where they managed to hold themselves up. The Jewelers on the other had didn't sell much during famines but was able to live relatively well due to previous profit of selling jewelry to nobles. The two sides also kept a archives of their art, the Smithing Archives and the Jewelry Archives which also included the Minerals, Stones, Metals and other things.

Her life was a relatively peaceful one born into the Jeweler side of the family living in luxury with her family being supported by the gems that they sold. But it didn't go out so well when her family died to a robbery and she moved in with her uncle at the age of 6 who was on the other half of the family. At the time Fiona was unused to the style of living her Uncle was living in. But got used to it as she grew up with him. Her uncle who was too old to marry and have children decided to teach Fiona the art of Smithing an unthinkable thing to teach to a girl everyone had thought, but Fiona proved to be one of the better smithers even though she had came from the jeweler side of the family. And if she had remembered right, she preferred smithing to watching shiny stones all day just watching them. Smithing on the other hand for her was fun in it way being able to see how everything was formed and made for the soldiers and other people to use when she was done with her object she made.
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If you wish to have your Swords of Judgement Pirece my Character Sheet then do so! Cause Im done for the most part... besides my history >.< Im also willing to do any tweaks to my character as long as Im not confused xD
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I'm ready for judgement again :) I toned him down a bit and just barely added in a reason for him to know his skills. My problem was I had started on a different type of magic earlier but after seeing it taken, decided to quickly switch it to a different one. I ended up mixing up a few stuff.
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I am the Black Wizards said
Yeah. I was kind of hoping Harine would comment on that. Poor communication on my part, I guess.


I've already said so in a PM but Marianne and Viktor can have a brief prior history together. Their personalities will most definitely clash. xD

As I have more time, I'll be going over to add more substance to Marianne's CS by writing more detailed content. Any major alterations I make I'll be sure to let y'all know.
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I've added a substantial amount of detail to nearly every part of her CS and made changes for easier reading. Y'all give her another look-over and tell me what you think. All critisicim is invited and accepted. xD
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