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Hidden 10 yrs ago 10 yrs ago Post by Zero Hex
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Well, I like to discuss things OOC for transparency's sake so everyone can see things as they are and comment or offer suggestions if they feel so inclined. Anyway, you need someone to stand and fight for you, Ajax's your guy. Who else is gonna run up to the murderbeast to try and choke it for you? For free? If you're getting into a mess, Ajax is the buddy you want at your side.

As for his beliefs, striving to be greater than you are is being strong and the strong rule the weak. The nobility who rule entirely by virtue of birth and have an order that favors them are strong, they rule right now, they have control over the people and they are weak for accepting this. Of course it's not a strength, a power as pure as Ajax's but they're there, they have control. If they were to be overthrown, then whoever did so clearly deserves the power and position they get because the nobility couldn't retain control. Once again the strong come to rule over the weak.

From that very top to the bottom. If a murderer gets you, you were weak and he was strong. You could've been stronger, Ajax got stronger. Physically ideally, but with magic, with weapons, by having allies to protect you, money, influence, people should always strive to stand on top and it's inevitable that there will be those that wind up underneath, they should in turn also strive to stand on top. It's a wholly egalitarian outlook, no one has anything granted ever and they should always try to be the most they can be.
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I've rustled up a character sheet.










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Updated CS.

Ehh, I'll post it here again I guess.

Well, I finished my CS
I'll post it here.


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Telling me not to do something only makes me want to do it more!!!!
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@Inertia - Much better! Now he seems more like his own character. Though a couple things should be fixed first - the legend. Shouldn't it reflect his more swordsman nature now instead of arrows? I mean, if you'd rather leave it like that, it's fine.

Second in his back story, it still mentions that surpassed everyone in archery, when it's not even a mentioned skill anymore. Probably fix that so everything matches. ^.^

@Earnest Evans - Hm... honestly, it doesn't seem like the character has much sustenance. Besides the fact that you didn't mention anything about a romance or having children in his back story (but you did in his flaws?), why would a father of three children ever think of possibly risking his life on adventures?
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Ah, that's right. I should have mentioned the family he raised on his travels in more detail. To put it simply, the wife and kids are camp followers, and Asher "sired" them during a lull in the unceasing action of tending to refugees and lepers.

However, I felt these were extraneous details to be revealed in-character, and didn't want to take up more space in the Background. If you want, I can add it in.
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@lydyn I think Mylisant is finished! Look over her and tell me if there are anymore problems
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Guess thats a no then? lol
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Bit late but you can think of Ajax as a kind of extreme disciple of Jergal in his mentality, if you will. Resolve and determination, use your own hands to carve your way through life no matter what may come, always strive stand at the top of it all. And what purer way is there than to discard any artificial construct like money or social standing in favor of relying on nothing but your body? He's not religious but the credo is similar, if taken to a certain extreme.
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Guess thats a no then? lol


I never said no, silly. Go right ahead with making a CS!~ Only 2 characters have been accepted so far (probably going to be three soon).

@Earnest Evans - That seems like an important detail. Even just adopting a family to keep them safe or something seems like a big deal. His back story in general just seems to be lacking though... what is the Marquis? Why did he feel the need to protect people? I just don't see any major motivation or character in what he's doing or why he's doing it.

@Zero Hex - I asked you to PM me and you didn't, so there isn't much else to discuss. If you're afraid I'm going to come back to the OOC and talk bad about you, I'm sure you can report me or perhaps I'm not a GM for you. I'm not going to fill the OOC when you keep trying to find a way to justify that a "might means right" is a good fit for this adventure. I'm sorry. Please do not continue this in the OOC. It's even against one of my rules.
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I never said no, silly. Go right ahead with making a CS!~ Only 2 characters have been accepted so far (probably going to be three soon).

@Earnest Evans - That seems like an important detail. Even just adopting a family to keep them safe or something seems like a big deal. His back story in general just seems to be lacking though... what is the Marquis? Why did he feel the need to protect people? I just don't see any major motivation or character in what he's doing or why he's doing it.

@Zero Hex - I asked you to PM me and you didn't, so there isn't much else to discuss. If you're afraid I'm going to come back to the OOC and talk bad about you, I'm sure you can report me or perhaps I'm not a GM for you. I'm not going to fill the OOC when you keep trying to find a way to justify that a "might means right" is a good fit for this adventure. I'm sorry. Please do not continue this in the OOC. It's even against one of my rules.


Wonderful. It's a little late but I'll get started on it now and hopefully have it finished later on in the day.
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@lydyn I think Mylisant is finished! Look over her and tell me if there are anymore problems


I think I'll count her as accepted as well. She's a very well done character, I like her. I think her abilities might be a tad on the low end, however her ability to hit so well with throwing objects is a pretty awesome too. I think the eyesight can be bumped, but only if you want - it's really not a big deal. We'll find her a place in the group for sure!~ <3 So go ahead and post her in the character's tab!~

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Wonderful. It's a little late but I'll get started on it now and hopefully have it finished later on in the day.


Sounds good!~
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@lydyn

CS is done!! I might have gone a little overboard with the background, but hey.

I will now finish the Kingdom app
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@lydyn

CS is done!! I might have gone a little overboard with the background, but hey.

I will now finish the Kingdom app


He's actually extremely well done~ I'm impressed. Especially since the WIP wasn't much to look at, honestly, haha. ^.^ The only thing you need to fix is the updated flaws in the revised character sheet (combat and personality flaws). Though there is a note here as well - a good friend of mine was thinking of making a 'tower defense' type of character as well. I can send him your way to maybe make a history with them or maybe be super duper extra nice and find other strengths for your amazing knight. Either way, I am not going to force you or guilt you into changing anything (except the flaws, haha).
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He's actually extremely well done~ I'm impressed. Especially since the WIP wasn't much to look at, honestly, haha. ^.^ The only thing you need to fix is the updated flaws in the revised character sheet (combat and personality flaws). Though there is a note here as well - a good friend of mine was thinking of making a 'tower defense' type of character as well. I can send him your way to maybe make a history with them or maybe be super duper extra nice and find other strengths for your amazing knight. Either way, I am not going to force you or guilt you into changing anything (except the flaws, haha).


Hhah, alright will get to that right away!
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So, just in case someone thinks I might be posting in haste into the Character section, I pm'd Lydyn about my character and got it approved through there. So, excuse me XD
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@lydynI've reached the character limit on my DS, so I'll finish the CS tomorrow, but if you could take a look at what I have so far, that'd be great.
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@LydynI've reached the character limit on my DS, so I'll finish the CS tomorrow, but if you could take a look at what I have so far, that'd be great.


Good start, though you'll want to define the skills a bit better probably and definitely stay away from acronyms. Besides that, as long as you know dragons don't actually exist (as far as we know) outside of myths then we're good (i.e. you can keep the dragon in the legend, but it's definitely not true, haha).
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I've fleshed out my character's Backstory quite a bit, and added some to the information presented through the kingdom of Ybella. I figured that there's no better place for a member of a mercantile-army than in the economic powerhouse of the world.
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