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Two teams would probably be sufficient, given the division of characters that we currently appear to possess.
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With everything as it is now, I don't believe there really is a good division of different positions, I could be wrong. Honestly, I'm not all that sure what role Atlas would fulfill at this point.
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Just saying this to specify I'm here
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What a crispy nugget of shit that has landed upon the IC. I take it there is no way to remove posts?
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What a crispy nugget of shit that has landed upon the IC. I take it there is no way to remove posts?


Mods delete spam posts entirely so people who haven't seen it won't know it happened, just wait for a mod to get on.
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Well that's a relief, don't know if I could handle having to scroll through so much just to get to the next post.
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Aw, I missed the spammer? Boo. Anyway I'll be looking at applications today to see what I like so far. I'll probably edit the space below with reviews for completed CS's only:

@King Kindred
I’m going to have to see abilities & techniques finished before I go into a full review, but there is some awkward bits I probably should address prematurely. My biggest curiosities with Taroga is his backstory: I’d like to know how he went to possible prisoner to a member of the ISF, because I doubt that if he was arrested that they’d be like “instead of a jail cell he should be given a badge!” – the backstory feels incomplete, but I think it has potential and merit. Show me more and of course show me his techniques and I’ll probably be okay with it!

@Unraveller
I know Arlian’s can be big and your major selling point I suppose is playing an “over-sized cockroach”, but how necessary is it to make him over seven feet? This is not a demand but rather a question since I feel curious about his size. As for the second point of discussion with your character: in this continuity, Vegeta and Nappa did not travel to Earth so considering (if my memory is correct) that their planet was only visited as a pit stop on the duo’s travel to the planet, would it not be still existent at this point in time?

@Hillan
Since I imagine Konats was aided by the ISF in this continuity and by proxy would not be destroyed by Hirudegarn, the prospect of a Konatsian is fine. Moving on the only issue I can possibly see if I’m being nitpicky is the fact is “he never bends the rules” – if that is so why has he been assigned to a secret off-the-books taskforce that is pretty unorthodox itself when it comes to legality and such?

@Kal-El
Not any observations on this one or problems with it, I'm tempted to accept you already.

@Karl Kadaver
Perhaps touch up Evim’s development, and some insight into Dr. Zadra. Other than that I’d say adding in a few sentences or two throughout the sheet would be preferable but not really required. I think I’ll have little issues in making it work, though with two android sheets I will have to be a bit creative.

@Dead Cruiser
I think my biggest issues is that Borea seems to excel at all schools of psionic power, which is… worrying. Of which I’m most concerned with is telepathy. If you are going to be competent with telekinesis, ESP, and illusions I’m going to have to request that this be completely cut down or nerfed because as it stands it is the one thing that I feel is a bit off. I like the characterization and goals, but let’s work on the powers so our co-writers aren’t offset yeah?

@ChronoBovino
The backstory feels like cliff notes and seem not really developed, the CS isn’t very descriptive, and I’m not completely sure it’s at the level I feel comfortably criticizing and accepting for the game. If it were to be brought to standards of the rest of the playerbase perhaps it could be malleable but as it stands I’m not sure about it at all.

@TheUnknowable
Probably going to have to work on equipment (ISF has their own ships and our characters will be assigned undercover vessels for this mission), abilities could be detailed similarly to other sheets though I don’t mind the innate tech abilities or the telekinesis as it seems fairly balanced, but there are some awkward bits with the backstory such as him hacking WTO servers? If it was that easy I imagine the ISF would have a lot more information on the WTO. Though his vigilantism is an interesting angle, I find it obtuse that the ISF would just recruit as implied. Could use some work around the edges.

I'm still waiting for posted applications from @Rin, my AGM @dblade26, @clanjos and others.
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"Probably going to have to work on equipment (ISF has their own ships and our characters will be assigned undercover vessels for this mission), abilities could be detailed similarly to other sheets though I don’t mind the innate tech abilities or the telekinesis as it seems fairly balanced, but there are some awkward bits with the backstory such as him hacking WTO servers? If it was that easy I imagine the ISF would have a lot more information on the WTO. Though his vigilantism is an interesting angle, I find it obtuse that the ISF would just recruit as implied. Could use some work around the edges."

Actually, he hacked their clients, not them. Example. Space Microsoft is building Xbox Ones on Freeza Planet 617, AKA Sonata, using slave labor. The police can't look too deeply into it because Space Bill Gates made some generous campaign donations, but I don't care. I find evidence of not only that, but that he spent 1 million Spacedollars on an Arlien prostitute, and the news agency learns about it.

I could turn it into a kind of "build insect camera and have it follow them." thing, like Dr. Gero, though.

If he turned over his info/tech to them, would that be enough to earn their trust?
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@Unraveller
I know Arlian’s can be big and your major selling point I suppose is playing an “over-sized cockroach”, but how necessary is it to make him over seven feet? This is not a demand but rather a question since I feel curious about his size. As for the second point of discussion with your character: in this continuity, Vegeta and Nappa did not travel to Earth so considering (if my memory is correct) that their planet was only visited as a pit stop on the duo’s travel to the planet, would it not be still existent at this point in time?


Well for starters there is absolutely no necessity in having be large. And honestly I hadn't even considered 7 feet to be all THAT large. And yes, my whole thing was imagining this 'gentle giant' of a cockroach, with that said, I can easily modify it to anything you'd prefer.

As for the second part, I had it in my mind (And I'm not sure how accurate it is) that Vegeta and Nappa had stopped on Arlia because they were supposed to scout the planet and such for trade, which they deemed it not fit for. It was either that or they simply went there because they were bored, probably the later. Again, that is a pretty easy thing to change as it isn't so integral to Atlas's story.

Any other outstanding issues with the backstory, or perhaps techniques?
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@King Kindred
I’m going to have to see abilities & techniques finished before I go into a full review, but there is some awkward bits I probably should address prematurely. My biggest curiosities with Taroga is his backstory: I’d like to know how he went to possible prisoner to a member of the ISF, because I doubt that if he was arrested that they’d be like “instead of a jail cell he should be given a badge!” – the backstory feels incomplete, but I think it has potential and merit. Show me more and of course show me his techniques and I’ll probably be okay with it!


Yeah, I can edit the backstory to fix that. What do you think would be the best time frame for him being a prisoner to being a member?
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It 's nice to see the troll is gone.
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Telepathy was the power for Borea that I was going to have him develop and rely on most. What can I cut or nerf other than that to work it in less worryingly?

I didn't really see a place to emphasize it in the CS, but Borea is 100% squishy wizard. Battle is far from his forte, and in it, he requires a lot of support in order to pull his weight. He's far more focused on utility outside of combat.
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@Gowi I see well I see no way but to agree with your standards my CS should have lived up to your capabilities which it did not therefore since that was the best of my abilities I'm afraid I will have to drop out

Sry GOOD LUCK :D
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@Gowi

Duly noted. I'll try to come up with something, I just need a little time.
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Can people join this still or? what?
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Can people join this still or? what?


I think I should lock down applications at this time considering I have a big potential group.
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I'm still waiting for posted applications from @Rin, my AGM @dblade26, @clanjos and others.


Me?
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<Snipped quote>

Me?


I don't think you've posted it in the OOC yet, I've seen a early version in PM sure but I cannot exactly count that can I?
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<Snipped quote by Javier>

I don't think you've posted it in the OOC yet, I've seen a early version in PM sure but I cannot exactly count that can I?


I suppose I'll post that since there have been no edits requested
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