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The typos are in Red. There are some that aren't entirely necessary. Most are spelling things.
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@OneWayOut edits done. Thanks again :)
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@OneWayOut your organization has been added to the second post ^_^
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@Dazsos your character is accepted. I'll be keeping an eye out though. You're too clever for your own good haha. Granted so am I...and Tuuj...and Tear....

Yeah.
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@Dazsos your character is accepted. I'll be keeping an eye out though. You're too clever for your own good haha. Granted so am I...and Tuuj...and Tear....

Yeah.


I'm deeply offended by this.

Also you may add me to the Skype convo.
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@Innue I had forgotten as you've only said two things in the thread. Three now. I would've mentioned you, but yeah. Aforementioned thing.
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Jikangai, Yūhi

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@Innue I had forgotten as you've only said two things in the thread. Three now. I would've mentioned you, but yeah. Aforementioned thing.


*cries* Everyone forgets about me.

And it's fine. Just being silly in the airport.
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<Snipped quote by yoshua171>

*cries* Everyone forgets about me.

And it's fine. Just being silly in the airport.


You still in that airport m8? Where in the hell are you trying to go?
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Where is everyone? o.o School?
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@Tuujaimaa

EDIT: Changes made.

Accepted.
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Yup my university classes are kind of keeping me busy.
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My sheet is finished.
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@MonkeyBusiness

While there is no real issue as you didn't use any hard numbers in Hiroshi's history, I'd like to note that the Shinobi war was 10 years ago and that the war itself lasted 15 years. This is in the OP, but it is a very small part of said OP, so I understand if you missed it or forgot. The reason I'm mentioning it is because it means that your 23 year old Hiroshi did not experience a time in his early life where there wasn't war. So this line, "This prevented the puppet user from progressing for several years as the First Shinobi War drew closer," is not terribly accurate in regards to how history has played out. It's a minor change you may have to make either to his history or to his age. Your choice.

Aside from that indiscrepency, the only thing I see that needs a very slight alteration is the fact that you left in the KG/Hiden section in combat data. Since he does not have one, you can remove that from the CS :)

In basic info there's a section that says "Clan/KG" you can remove the part that says "kekkei genkai," and just put his last name in that spot. If his clan isn't terribly relevant/important in the village you don't have to do a clan sheet, no worries :)

Beyond those VERY small issues, you are accepted my friend and may begin posting ICly.

Notify me once your edits are made and you have posted the CS in the character bin so I can add Hiroshi to the roster ^_^
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went ahead and bumped the int check cause im awesome :)
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Edits have been finished.
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Sorry that I haven't finished any character sheets. I'm just debating in my head. Um, question, are samurai allowed?

Edit: HOLY SHIT! AN ORGANISATION WHERE SAMURAI AND SHINOBI COME TOGETHER AND LIVE IN HARMONY AND FIGHT SHIT FOR THE GREATER GOOD!!! *mind explosion*
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Sorry that I haven't finished any character sheets. I'm just debating in my head. Um, question, are samurai allowed?

Edit: HOLY SHIT! AN ORGANISATION WHERE SAMURAI AND SHINOBI COME TOGETHER AND LIVE IN HARMONY AND FIGHT SHIT FOR THE GREATER GOOD!!! *mind explosion*

Yes samurai are allowed. Also lol.
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