Something that is minor spoiler to the contents of my entry [+]

And I just found out there's a Marvel character called "Speed Demon" within 24 hours of sending that because I decided to watch the Wolverine VS Raiden death battle. I had no idea. Oh, well. That makes me wonder... *googles*

And "Apocalypse Maiden" is a trope, I had no idea. "Soul Surgeon" was a band. "Mirror Witch" is some boss in some games and "Undertaker" I expected already to have been in use everywhere anyway. It would appear "Gunpowder Fairy" is pretty unique, though. Hahaha.

Apocalypse Maiden [+]

That's more like it. Although this entry did still have a lot in the way of awkward grammar and the occasional typo, it was much less profuse than in prior entries. I would say that 'Little Guardian' had better makeup overall, but this is nearly on the same level - and is a bit longer. By this point all I can do is comment that while the problem does not seem to be getting worse, it does not seem to be abating. Next time, you may many to consider a different approach to proof-reading. I know you said you submitted this rather hastily before you had a chance to go through it thoroughly, so a thought: After writing a section, go through the whole thing for errors before continuing. Your plot will wait for you, and it shouldn't require any schedule juggling.

I do like the commitment to the setup. One thing you've firmly established is your knack for internal plot details, and the circumstances that led to the Maiden's destructive rise made for an entertaining read. You did take a while to get to the crux of the story, but as I have said before: There is no substitute for taking the time to write out the entirety of what is needed for the story to work, and that is precisely what you did.

Visiting the combat scene, we finally come across the story's real problem. The battle between our magicians was, in my opinion at least, much more engaging than your previous battle scenes. It had greater tactical aspect to it, and although we don't get a great description of any of the characters' appearances or that of their attacks, the narrative does an excellent job of relaying the actions and consequences in a natural way. The problem though is that you keep getting ahead of yourself - throughout the whole story (the battle in particular is just the point where it occurs most prominently), you bombard the reader with narrative exposition. The exposition is not a bad thing, but you spend almost more time explaining parts of the story than telling it, continuously introducing new details - which is sort of detrimental to the engaging aspects of the experience. My suggestion here is to show, not tell. Don't cut or scale back the exposition entirely, but space it out a bit more appropriately allow the readers to interpret and infer some of it on their own with the actions in the story and the behavior of the characters.

As for how you handled the challenge itself, you neatly nailed it right on the head, capturing both the positive and detrimental aspects of such a dramatic change in a manner which perfectly meets what I was looking for - Awesome, horrific, grand in scale, and not something that the individual in question would have envisioned themselves doing prior - with far reaching consequences. The double-take Judith has at the very end after she 'rescues' Min was particularly well executed.

Congratulations, and keep at it.

There's no way I'm going to be dethroned in round eight or any of the other rounds. Challenge accepted!

I can't begin to explain where the awkward grammar and typos came from, the spellchecker didn't seem to pick up on any and I didn't see them either. I did read through it several times though :/ I will do my best to get back to the former quality of story telling in my other entries.

Basically with the new system clearing every labour doesn't do more than give more lives? And winning every labour until the final hazard will be more of a personal accomplishment instead of something that will be rewarded in a way? Because I was rather proud of being 1 out of 2 clearing everything so far XD

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I suppose there will be something in it for those who are Twelve Times the Victor...

But you don't need to fret about that, since Eight is going to break your streak if six and seven don't. ;)

Labor 2 and 5 should count because they didn't count for Herakles.

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Except this is called the Twelve Labors. He was only supposed to do ten, here I expect you at minimum to do twelve. If you would like, I could discount those same two and rack it up to fourteen.

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It was just a little joke. Herakles did Twelve Labors instead ten because two of the original labors did not count, so in order to have ten labors that did count, Herakles needed to do two additional labors. :D

Wait, is it December already?

And here I am already behind schedule. Tsk tsk.

Of course, recalling one of my earlier posts, I cannot actually be certain that the next Labour will be starting yet. If anybody is paying attention and would care to chime in: Should I run the Sixth Labour during December, or wait until after the New Year?

If nobody answers I will default to the presumption of delay due to holiday-induced apathy.