@sakurasanI literally just skimmed it and I don't think you understood my problem despite the five paragraph essay I provided. I looked at your update sheet specifically for things I expected you to fix, and somehow you updated your sheet without improving it on things I pointed out and made the case even worse. I didn't even read the bio yet and I kind of feel like I know you didn't hold back on being OP on that either. Considering I am still at work and I don't want to put everyone else through another ridiculous tirade, I'll keep it at this for now. Look to others for guidance of you need to, be it asking them personally or just looking through how not overpowered their sheets are. Expect a more thorough and detailed PM after work.

Please don't shoot me if the picture is "too stolen" or what have you. I'm super willing to use a different picture if there's something wrong with this one. It's literally just some rando-ass cute trap I google-image-searched and I have no idea what the character is like AAAAAAAAAAAAA

Also the fukn bio is not done yet because I require some feedback on the monstrosity I made thus far cuz if I have to rewrite large parts of it or if it gets rejected super hard then I need to change the way I go about the bio as well asdlj7kashdk

@Traitor AHh h HHAHH AHAHLALASDh I m SH I tT ING,, , i LovE ThiS K ID-- -and uH,, , that is ninomiya rui from gatchaman crowds bUT, , i only foudn that out thru my in dep th weeby research,, , i dont think he wore that outfit more than once, ,, mayb, , , shURg,, , it doesnt seem 2 b as like,,, obvious bc the brand is not popular so i will let it slid e but if u want 2 look 4 other pics,, , , zerochan.net/trap%2C+solo?s=fav :'0

u h h h hh h h rega r d i ng
e v e r y t h i n g e l s e
it l o o ks G O O D n the restrai nt s made me think of that one vine
u all kno whcih vine im tlkain abt

OK
u h h h h considerin its the weeken d, , ,, im gonna get my shIT together n finish my profile, , ,,s, ,,

A L S O
i m sorry, ,, i realize now that me psotin th e 2 like, ,, long things publicly, , might make me see m like a dick but,, , i swe a r, ,, im not,, ,, lies down, ,, i post ed them bc my sleepy ass thought "mayb someone will need this 4 reference" , , but i realize now that m ig ht js not b,,, wanted, , so sorry ,, i will discu s s such matters priv8ly from now on,, ,, AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

N O W THAT T H A T S D O N E W I T H---
i hav draw n so mcuh silly fanart, ,, n we havent even started,, , or finished my app ,, FUCK,, , i will get 2 that i promISe AHHHHH

@LetterA omg nerd stop drawing its like ur a fuckin artist or smthing

eat ass

finish ur charact e r s N E RD

@Liriia

i m w o r k i n g o n i t
i found a picture of jsutice, ,, from like last time i was gonna do this rp, , ,,
bu t fuck art is so old
and u n iforms,, , , different

it s ok i will fix this
pls stan d b y

FU CK EVERYO N E C ALM DO WN, , , SoRRY I HAveNT BEEN rePL Y IGN as M Uh c its finals season n i am a TRASHy art stude nt and basically i got like fifty paintings i decided 2 push off last seco ND AN D IM

GO NN A D IE

but its ok bc its only one week fam we gon do this
let me get m y beari NGs , ,,, , i will try 2 at least finish my apps, ,, ,

and ry o m ig ht join, ,, mayb, ,, nOt streSSin HIm or Nothin, ,, s w e TAs,,,
sasa ill look over ur app more thorouhhghly bUT so far it is a mAJOR improvement from ur first draft and i didnt even pm u the thing abt ur second app!!!!!! this was all you!!!!! you should b proud!!!! aga in, , ill look over it more throoughly when i am not as s deep in acrylic b ut !!!!!!!1!!

I added a terrible shitty bio to my CS. Really not very proud of it. Ugh. Fuck mondays.
Also made a minor adjustment to the ability, but it's more of flair polish than anything else really.

@Traitor i like 2 think theres a bear trap pawn shop in space somewhere js tradin his shit 4 whatevr pat turns in2 a bear trap but also yes good accepteepd

@sakurasan considerin she got thrown in 4 makin a copy of her teacher, ,, giv her like a restraint stoppin her from takin pictures of people, , ,, like she can try 2 do it but they come out lookin like, ,,, ,

except clearly not paper jam bc she takes photos so somethin involvin photo mistakes like, ,, , always a glare of light or always in shitty filters I DK

also if possible can u shift everythin but the picture part to the left its hard 2 read when its all centered esp the weaknesses part ))))))': sorry 4 bein a butt 2 ur creative process but b4 i was writin three essays at the same time i could read it fine, , , ,,, wEH so rRy

Hi there! This looks crazy fun ;)



EDIT: Should he be restrained, or no? I couldn't decide...

Name: Arjuna Sonozaki
Age: Eighteen
Height; Weight: 6’3” ; 170 lb
Stripes: Twelve
Reason for Admission: While Arjuna was, in fact, a fairly violent character at his old school, the straw that broke the camel’s back was his attempt to “execute” a delinquent from one of the surrounding schools for “conspiring against the king”.
Years Admitted:
New Transfer~

Special Abilities:
Emperor’s Hunting Companion: A phenomena Arjuna refers to as his “beast”. Arjuna is capable of manifesting a strange sort of ethereal chimaera. Appearing like a silvery, shimmering wolf with draconic horns, tracks of scales, the mane of a lion, and a devil-like tail, the creature’s almost flame-like appearance and large frame cuts an intimidating figure. The beast, which Arjuna named Sascha, can operate up to thirty feet away from its master. The beast is incredibly fast and strong, but the most dangerous things about it are its more exotic abilities. Arjuna is capable of summoning individual parts of the beast from his own body instead of Sascha’s entire form. And, most oddly, Sascha is capable of “consuming” concepts. For example, Sascha can “eat” the distance between itself or Arjuna and an object as a way to teleport.
Physical Strength:
Arjuna himself is an impressive specimen. Possessing top class strength, speed, reflexes and stamina as a result of years of physical fitness training and schoolyard brawls, it would be hard not to assume that his monstrous physical prowess wasn’t granted by superhuman powers.
Mental Strength:
Despite coming off like a brute, Arjuna is actually quite sharp. Though, his intelligence is tempered by large levels of impetuousness and a tendency to have his head up in the clouds. When he actually decides to focus and use his brain, combined with his strength and willpower, he’s practically a force of nature.
Weaknesses:
-Arjuna’s arrogance tends to cause him to underestimate those that he might consider weaker than himself. This leads to a certain level of gullibility on his part when surrounded by those who pledge fealty to him.
-Summoning Sascha takes up a lot of Arjuna’s energy, which only allows him to maintain Sascha’s full form for only three minutes before he’s drained. Furthermore, difficult though it might be, damage to Sascha reflects onto Arjuna himself.
-Has to eat a lot to make up for energy consumed by the use of his power.
-Tends to rush into things without considering the consequences.
-Arjuna’s wholehearted belief in his “destiny” to become a king has manifested into full-blown delusion as he’s grown older, leading one to assume that properly shattering his firmly held dream may put him into a rather bad place. As an extension of this, being unable to gain “subjects” leads to Arjuna becoming morose.

Restrained?: Yes

Details:
As if to make room for Sascha’s “meals”, Arjuna vomits any time that his beast devours anything. Particularly large consumption on Sascha’s part causes Arjuna to projectile vomit golden sand along with his own stomach contents. Furthermore, Arjuna’s restraint restricts him from summoning Sascha of his own volition, the beast’s form instead manifesting in mostly harmless forms on Arjuna’s person, mostly ears or a tail, in accordance with the wannabe king’s emotional state.

Background Info:
-Former banchou of Koryu Highschool and surrounding territories.
-Parents are both high ranking businessfolk, thus leaving them with little time for young Arjuna. He’s gotten over it, though. They gotta do what they gotta do, right?
-Was a children’s clothing model at one point, though it’s a bit embarrassing for him to look back on.
-Having consumed loads of tales of kings and warriors in his youth, from a very young age Arjuna had decided that his future occupation would be that of “King”. What that means in a post-monarchy world is a question Arjuna neither has the answer for, nor cares about in any way. Regardless, Arjuna sees schools as a good practice ground for a ruler, though he’s always drawn to the wilder side of delinquent brawling instead of an upstanding position as student council president or something. After all, the kings in the stories earned everything through battle!
-The incident that managed to land Arjuna a trip to Greenwing occurred as a result of a supposed plot against him by the former bancho of one of the schools Arjuna had conquered. Sources close to Arjuna said that the vengeful delinquent offered to pay some local gangsters to put him six feet under, which angered Arjuna enough to confront the “traitor” and attempt to put an end to him. Whether said information was true or not, Arjuna still doesn’t know, but he’s at least temporarily resigned himself to building up a new “kingdom” at Greenwing.

Interests:
-While not necessarily an interest, Arjuna is very good at domestic things like cooking and the likes. Though, he finds gardening to be a particularly zen hobby.
-Enjoys myths and stories about kings and knights and quests and all of that good stuff.
-Pretty well-trained in both boxing and Muay Thai, having taken them up when he was younger as an emotional outlet.
-Which would lead one to assume he derives quite a bit of enjoyment out of busting heads as a hobby.
-Spends a solid amount of his day trying to keep fit.
-On the flipside, he’s also a verrrry big fan of napping.
-Boobies

Other:
-Actually quite nice as long as you’re one of his “subjects” and aren’t blatantly bad at feigning respect.
-Rather proud of his name, which means that giving the king a nickname is frowned upon.
-Multilingual (Japanese, English, Spanish and French)

@RyoRyoRyoken Sadist? Do I spot a little sadist~? :D

Haha, nah. Though, maybe it comes out a little when June's dealing with dissenters to his would-be lordsship.

@RyoRyoRyoken Ohhh xD Wh-what? I don't like sadists... What? My prof pic? What about it? Shhhh... Shhhhh~

@RyoRyoRyoken accepTEd !!!! thank u 4 the changes (((((': i cant w8 2 get doki over duMb woLf EaRS feeL frEE 2 POSt iT IN THE CHARACTR THREAD

ALSO oK dANG WE GOT A TON OF PEOPLE ILL TRY ANd BIRtH AN INTRO iN th E MIDdLE OF DROWNI NG IN HELL
I STILL GOTTA makE LIKE 2 NPCs I kEEP ForGETTING ABOUT
b UT Yeah ill kick thi s party off n itll b shit yall will love it

@LetterA Woo! Glad it worked to your liking. I'm just excited to have a fun group RP afterxall this time. We've got a pretty solid cast so far.

@LetterA Did you miss mine? :)

@Chicogal WHo A h!!!! SoRRY it was in a hider and i missed in in my
S P E E D S C R O L L I N G
bU T UHM!!!!!! i Like it a Lot!!!! just one thing--- the restrained part should b a total "Yes" and I feel iffy abt him still bein able 2 transform freely but I LOOOOOOOVE the idea of him turnin blue so what if
wh a T I F
any time he transformed he turned blue???? no shocky shocky, though that can still b a weakness, but like, , ,, its js super obvious and kinda hilarious bc he's blue

or maybe u have another idea im jus throwin fun stuff out there!!!! i rly like his concept n ur overal execution tho!!!!!

FUCK I TYPED UP A WHOLE POST AND LOST IT-

@LetterA Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you like him. Just need to work on the powers then~

I'm not too keen on him always turning blue when he shifts, because it means he's not really a, 'threat,'???

My other idea, which I like due to his personality, it some sort of charm/persuasion ability. Like he can make people like him, or convince them to do things. It'd be restrained of course, and he'd be there more for the potential to be evil than the petty crime stuff. If he tried to use his powers, the restraint would make him turn blue. Which would be funny and a little awkward for him, especially since he'd sometimes unintentionally try to use his powers. Like he's trying to get in a girl's pants, and accidentally says something in the heat of the moment, and turns blue... "What the fuck, are you trying to like molest me?" "N-no, I can't help it!" -obviously blue-

EDIT: Here's an edited form with this power:



Name: Copen Thorsen

Age: 17

Height; Weight: 6,4”, 160lbs

Stripes: 11

Reason for Admission:
- Numerous incidents of theft. He was eventually caught when trailed after stealing a cellphone off of a display. The security guard couldn’t believe the tape that showed him letting the boy just walk past after a short confrontation. After he was caught, a stash of stolen items was found in Copen’s bedroom by the police, who were now aware of his powers.
- Taking advantage. Copen never had much trouble talking to girls and getting dates, but once his powers came into being, he wanted to see what they could do. To his delight, it made it easy for him to get some action. He didn't realise how his powers faded with time, quicker with distance, and soon enough there were some serious accusations coming his way. It was then that the police realised just what they were dealing with and, instead of juvie, sent him to Greenwing Academy.

Years Admitted: 3

Special Abilities: Copen has the gift of the gab - literally. He can charm anyone, man and woman alike, to like him and want to do things for him. He can't force them to do things they would be completely opposed to - such as murder - but it allows him to convince people to let him go places he shouldn't, and to get things that are theirs.

Physical Strength:
In his normal form, Copen isn’t strong. He’s quite slender and has coltish limbs that he’s slightly self-conscious of. However, he isn’t really bothered to put the work in to become stronger – he prefers to run. Copen is quite cardio fit, and has nicely toned legs despite them being slim.

Mental Strength:
Copen isn’t clever. He really isn’t. He’s a bit of an airhead, to be honest – it’s why he was caught so easily. Who could resist the looks on people’s faces when they found out about him? He’s a bit narcissistic, too. He’s forever fixing his hair and straightening his clothes. Underneath this though, he does care about other people and has a soft heart.
Copen is happy-go-lucky, tending not to worry about ‘unimportant,’ things. He’s usually smiling that slight-too-big-for-his-face smile, and laughing rather loudly. He’s also flirtatious and open to hook-ups – but occasionally obsessive over a girl he really likes.

Weaknesses:
- With his good looks and charm getting him most of the way in life, Copen sometimes finds himself very stuck when it doesn’t work on people. He gets frustrated quite easily and isn’t exactly a problem solver so much as a problem maker.
- His narcissism can sometimes blind him to how he appears to others – usually along the lines of annoying.
- Distance and time will lessen the charm that he has put onto people. It generally wears off in around an hour, quicker if he is further away.

Restrained?: Yes

Details: Copen is restrained with the typical band around his neck - they really couldn't risk him convincing teachers to let him out of the school. In the event that he tries to use his powers, his entire skin turns blue. The unfortunate thing about this is that he doesn't always intend to use his powers. He could be chatting with a girl, and turn blue - and of course, this can raise suspicions... It makes him a bit sad, really.

Background Info:
~ Raised by average, ‘normal,’ family in the rather boring suburbs. Only child. Boring boring boring. Mother and father are skilled Danish immigrants.
~ Popular, well-liked at school amongst peers, not so much amongst teachers – caused mischief.
~ Powers came into being at around age 12. Mucked around with them for innocent fun and attention.
~ Things got boring again, he decided to start doing more daring stunts. Convincing teachers at school ("school’s out for the day!"), stealing and more nefarious persuasion for ‘action’ he wouldn’t otherwise get.
~ Caught at age 14 with numerous crimes against his name. Decided that he should go to the school for rehabilitation.

Interests:
~ Himself
~ Beer (alcohol in general, really)
~ Girls
~ Parties
~ Dancing. This boy has the skills to foxtrot and waltz his way into a girl’s heart, weirdly enough. It's a passion of his.

Other: He speaks both Danish and English fluently due to his heritage – although the Danish doesn’t come in too useful. The glasses are just for show; he doesn't need them.

Looks like we've got another addition to "Team Tall Boiz". And yet another potential rival for the "throne".