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Ye, das good.
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Ok, I need to sleep now as I have QTS tomorrow but until then, my CS :).
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@Nosuchthing It's a good start, but I'd like to know more. You didn't describe Eleuril's abilities at all. Like, I have no idea what kind of magic he is capable of using. If you'd like, PM me and I can answer any questions that you have about what kind of magic he could use. I'd also like to see more of exactly how Eleuril projects his magic through Underfoot. Like, does he overshadow her, or is she in control? As he is a being with his own personality, maybe you should add a personality section for him. it doesn't have to be long at all. Just let me understand how this guy acts.

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@Maxx i shall start writing in the morning good sir.
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Dang it. I'll need to cancel out of this for now. In the future if there's openings let me know. Apologies @Maxx
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@boomloverAwesome! I await your sheet! If you have any lore questions, don't hesitate to ask.

@POOHEAD189Sorry to hear, man. I understand, sometimes lots of stuff just happens all at once. There will be another opportunity to join in the near future. Best of luck.
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Tag me when it does! (if you remember. If not, no hard feelings lol. It happens)
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@Nosuchthing It's a good start, but I'd like to know more. You didn't describe Eleuril's abilities at all. Like, I have no idea what kind of magic he is capable of using. If you'd like, PM me and I can answer any questions that you have about what kind of magic he could use. I'd also like to see more of exactly how Eleuril projects his magic through Underfoot. Like, does he overshadow her, or is she in control? As he is a being with his own personality, maybe you should add a personality section for him. it doesn't have to be long at all. Just let me understand how this guy acts.


Off to work again I'm afraid, but I will PM you on my return :)
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@NosuchthingAlright, there's no rush. The IC will go up either tonight or early tomorrow. Depends on how much stuff I have to do.
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Sorry I couldn't get this in yesterday. Military life can be obnoxious sometimes. The backstory isn't as in depth or detailed as I would have liked, but it does give a reference point for the milestones in Royce's career. This is the longest CS I've ever written ever, by the way.



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lol

It's good, I'd accept it. The only thing I'd press is to mention what age he was at different points through his history so that the timeline is easily read (with him being 37 now, I just think I'd be interested to see exactly how far back these events took place), but that's not a serious issue by any means - it just stems from my own curiosity. Only other thing that I noticed - and it's not your fault - a time frame wasn't mentioned regarding how long it takes to be a squire. When I wrote my sheet, I did some research on historical knighthood back in the medieval era, and squires usually held their position for 7 years before knighthood. You put down 5 years. This is neither of our faults, it's just an inconsistency in the lore that should be corrected and I want to wait for Maxx to get back to us - but the detail is so minor that I wouldn't let that stop you from posting it in the character tab. After all, one of us can edit our sheets later after we get an answer.

This is not in my power, but I would close any Ram Knight submissions from here on out after Royce.

In any case, this is not a requirement, just something of my own personal interest: what is Royce doing, or what are his thoughts on the current invasion? We've got hordes of wights walking into Maceron at the moment (and more selfishly, what are his thoughts of the attempted coup three months back by four of the Ram Knights and one of their squires?).
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His thoughts on the current invasion are the same as everyone else's, I'd imagine. It's scary. Skeletons are swarming through walls. But he also knows that he can do something about it; he has men at his back, magical armor, and a sword. The rest of the populace isn't nearly so lucky. He doesn't like the king, but that's not important. The king is asking him to defend the kingdom against an invasion of the undead. That's not a mission you refuse out of spite.

The King ordered all Knights of the Ram to the capital. He's out on patrol, keeping the king's roads clear of bandits. He'll ride at his best speed to meet the king's demand, and likely order the slower common infantry of his host to follow after in their own time. He'll reach the capital with his knights alone.

As for the coup... He's been around the block. He knows the nobility is rotten, and more than half the Knights of the Ram are too. But he also knows that Kane's decision was one of monumental idiocy. Knights aren't statesmen. They don't know how to run a kingdom. Their duty is to protect the people, not rule them. The system sucks, but it works. He'd rather wait for the current king to die and let another house take over than have the Knights of the Ram permanently destroy their credibility by killing their way out of a crappy leader.

But he also knows Kane. Not well, of course, but they were both Commander Knights - a rank only held by fifty or sixty people in the order. He knows the dude's brilliant, and young, and idealistic. Even if that idealism died in Royce long ago, he can still understand it. He won't hate Kane, but he's also not in a hurry to argue for reinstatement of his knighthood.

Also - are we in agreement that Kane and Royce are different people? :P
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@Nicktrano This is much better. I can see the distinctions between the two characters much better now. I understand Royce's demeanor very well and I get more of how he thinks. Accepted!

EDIT: And yes, they do act much differently from each other, though a few of their key traits (their morality, the fact that they care about their men) are similar. And yeah, I'm cutting off Knight of the Ram members now.
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Sweet. As I was editing I could kind of see why what wasn't clear to me was seen by you. I just hadn't yet put all of my plans for how the character worked and acted to paper yet. And there were a couple places where I used the wrong word for what I was trying to convey.

Also, I'll add the times and stuff to it in editing later on, Spoopy. I just wanted to get this thing finished tonight.
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I'll add Royce to the OP soon. Do you have a post perspective color for him in mind?
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Uhh... I guess I'll take this orange.

Varrick Tuldar from Blood Debt and Royce Agathon of Knights of Melarus get to have the same color! Yay!
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Alright, he's in the OP.

Aaaaaand Anna is up! IC will go up tomorrow. Goodnight, everyone.
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Made something in a jiffy. Originally submitted it via pm, but forgot to add cogms, so just gonna slap it down here. I fulfilled my promise of absurd mount.
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The character herself seems fine, but you were right about the mount being absurd. I'd call for a vote, I'm not sure if I could accept Thel with a clear conscience. Were the dire wolves not good enough? That's something I think I could accept.
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Thought I'd just drop my updated sheet here :)
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