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I'm Ms Roz's assistant. I'm always watching.


But yeah, I do. Currently planning on doing a draconid with that image I showed you. Taking a while due to college tests... but 'll have the CSS done by tomorrow (maybe even today if I'm not tired after I finish studying)
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I'm here but I didn't know if Octoman was accepted or not.
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ok... this was a b****...

I had just finished my CSS, but the internet went down... lost EVERYTHING T_T
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Sorry. I got scared off by the huge character sheets.
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Don't mind me... I don't know but lately I've only been able to write CSSs with 7000 letters or more :-/

Yaay...? I guess
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@13org So there are a great many issues with your character sheet, most of which seem to suggest that you haven't really read the first post particularly well.



The point I'm making is, despite the effort you obviously put in, it's the same situation as Banana's initial character, in that you might as well come up with a new character outright for the amount of stuff you'd need to change to make this one work. And a lot of that is caused by you missing points that were very clearly described in the first post. So, no, Jör isn't accepted.
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Wait was Octo accepted then?
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Aight ill do another one. I swear that i didn't paid attention to the plot and all those things XD I just started writing
Its a bad habit... sometimes I just keep writing... on automatic y'know?
Also, wootz steel is an actual material. its not fantasy
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@13org ...you are not wrong about Wootz steel existing in real life. Shame on me for not factchecking. I will say, however, that Wootz steel actually contains various metal carbides, not carbon nanotubes in particular, and that the process has not only been replicated many times as of 2016 and even before the 21st century, but would likely have been improved upon through use of magic and/or modern technology as of 2041. Hell, maybe swords made of or containing carbon nanotubes do exist as of then. That said, everything else I brought up does apply, and I highly encourage you to change the style in which you write your characters to avoid future disappointment.

@Banana Solaris has a few hangups with your sheet that he'll go over in detail with you later on. Generally speaking, though, the mechanics of helicopter tentacles make it simpler to just give Octo a jetpack, and there's no good reason at the moment why the scientists would let him go after having experimented on him to achieve those results, especially if the time he was released was during or shortly after the Uprising/Insurrection, when soldiers were most needed on both sides.
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I know. as I said before, it was my fault. Usually I write characters always inside the plot and settings, but sometimes I just write without thinking

Especially now that I am in the middle of the tests in the college so...

But don't worry, I will do another CSS. And about the old CSS, i always have fun creating new characters.
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Ok, I'm gonna hold off until I get the true "ok" before moving it to CHAR.
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@Banana: Basically, what BC said. I have two main problems with your character.

1. No matter how I think about it, I don't think the helicopter tentacles are feasible at all. For starters, they come out of Grover's back arranged in a vertical fashion, while helicopter rotors are horizontal; he'd have to awkwardly bend his whole upper body 90 degrees forward if he wants to have any chance of flying. And then there's the matter of freely rotating joints, which might've been somewhat difficult to install. Finally, each helicopter rotor blade is thin and lightweight, not at all like thick cybernetic tentacles; the tentacles have too much mass to simply transform into helicopter rotors. Overall, as BC said, it's honestly much, much easier to just give your guy a jetpack if he wants to fly, and there's no real reason why the scientists didn't just do that instead of trying to make the tentacles work as helicopter rotors.

2. There's no reason why the scientists would just let Grover go free after finishing the experiments, since he's now an individual empowered with dangerous new abilities. At the very least, they'd want to keep an eye on him, if not outright have him serve in their military and what not. Maybe one of the other test subjects went berserk and destroyed the whole facility, allowing Grover to slip away in the confusion; he could've then laid low for a while as said in the profile. Or you could think of something else; there just has to be some reason why he got free after the experiment.

3. Didn't we go over how severely underpowered an M1911 would be in this day and age? The standard army pistol nowadays would be some kind of miniature railgun with significantly more power than modern pistols, or maybe even a plasma blaster. Not a pistol that would almost certainly fail to penetrate even decently well-armored cyborgs and chimeras.
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I'm just gonna leave. I don't feel like my character ideas are good enough now. Not mad or anything, I just don't feel like I'm gonna be good in this whole scenario.

Peace guys.
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Sooorrryyy for the delay. I have tests in the college this week, so things are a little tough for me, plus i'm very tired from studying the entire day...

i'll have my CSS done by tomorrow.

That is... if I can find a good draconian image by tomorrow... For some odd reason is very hard to find them...
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