[OOC] 【Bleach: Souls Adrift】 (Page 3)

First of all, welcome to Souls Adrift, it's nice to see you again Xan and despite some of the below I--and I'm sure the others--would be glad to have ya ^_^

Anywho, on to the review and all that jazz.

【Rekuzan Xero - X-0】@Xan the G
Alrighty. So, I'll admit I have not yet read history/personality (the bio section) since I wanted to see what the zanpakuto looked like first (since that is typically what I need to review more than anything else). I'll take a look at Xero's "Personal Info," once we figure this out. So, without further ado, the zanpakuto review. Bear with me.

Ki-Manipulation. Légion has the ability to disrupt reiryuku like a physical sword can disrupt a physical body, making power leak like blood or Ki-skills malfunction like broken/injured limbs.Shikai Ability
So this is essentially fine and could result in some interesting effects. The problem comes in the area below. Aka, techniques.

Iemo-pi: Xero will launch a spirit wave attack. If it hits a being with spiritual energy, their next use of spiritual energy will backfire. If it hits a spiritual being, the next reiryoku attack from their bodies or skill will either hurt them if it's intended to attack someone else or hamper them if it was supposed to support them by the same extent they expected it to work for them. If it hits a zanpakuto or other 'item' of spiritual energy, then the next reiryoku attack using or channelling through that item will backfire in the same way.
So, I'm fine with the attack being able to hinder or somewhat disrupt someone's ability to access or control their reiryoku. However, what is not okay is the fact that it can essentially cause any attack/ability to "backfire," somehow. This is largely problematic for several reasons.

1.) Mechanically, that...doesn't always work. Some abilities manifest reiryoku and then allow the individual to control that. Causing something like that to "backfire," doesn't...really make any sense. So this wouldn't work on some abilities, for starters.

2.) It's...kind of over powered to be completely straightforwards and honest with you. Additionally, it doesn't really stay with the theme of your ability that you set in the primary description (that being the disruption/manipulation of reiryoku(ki) as if you were causing damage to it in a manner similar to damage caused by a physical weapon to someone's body.

So I'm going to say no to this technique. You can make something that weakens an ability or briefly disrupts their ability to use reiryoku-based abilities, but causing them to backfire or suddenly inconvenience them rather than help them is a no-go.

Seishin Shifuto: Xero will stab the target in the heart in a passing lunge. The poke distorts what the mind feels as pain and what the 'heart' feels as fatigue. In the mind, the user will register lost reiryoku as if it were physical pain. The amount of pain they feel will depend on how empty (as a percentage of their total when full) they are of reiryoku. Additionally, the moment this skill is successfully used, the target will be 'caught up' by this phantom pain for the lost percentage of reiryoku in a single instant, similar to feeling all the strikes from an actual fight all at once. That moment can cause the target to flinch as well as raise hesitation as they use their spiritual energy, since each use of reiryoku from then on will make them feel pain. While this skill is in effect, it is possible for the target to pass out or faint from the phantom pain of energy loss without actually being hurt.
So...no. This doesn't fit with the theme of your ability and it is massively overpowered. It makes any use of any energy at all painful to some degree. I should remind you that reiryoku is a character's equivalent of stamina meaning, living and moving around would also use it up somewhat. That coupled with any zanpakuto ability that uses reiryoku (aka literally every single one of them) and any ability that uses reiryoku (kido for example...and also anything at all that could possibly require energy) makes this completely unreasonable.

I'm sorry if that comes off as harsh. I'm just being real with you since I think anyone deserves that, you know?

Kiai-katta: Xero makes a cut able to cut into reiryoku-based attacks as if they were tangible objects. Whether elements, waves or even vibrations, Xero can physically cut them or stop them with his zanpakuto. If he uses the back or flat of his blade, he can parry or deflect them rather than cut them.

Now this is better, with the only part I have a problem with being the deflection. He's going to need considerable reiatsu and/or physical strength to be able to deflect attacks like that...and that's without considering the effects of any given reiryoku-based attacks. So you may keep his ability to cut reiryoku-based attacks with greater ease than others might, but he can't deflect them unless it makes sense (his reiatsu/physical strength stats would need to be around the same level as the other person's reiatsu stats or higher although I may change this after some deeper thought).

So yeah, those first two techniques are largely a no-go, and part of the third is a no. I would suggest you make a PM with @Ganryu, @Terminal, and myself to work on some edits and alternatives for the direction you could take the zanpakuto. Once we/you work that out, then I'll take a look at everything else and see if there's anything that needs alteration.

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【Les Entrada】



【Inception】
~"Forfeit control... and squirm."~
【Personal Info】

【Name: Les Entrada
【Nicknames: The Ancient One
【Age: Approx. 2000
【Gender: Male
【Race: Human → Plus → Hollow
【Form: Gillian

【Appearance Info: Despite being a Gillian, it does not have the uniform appearance of its kind. While the vast majority of its body adheres to the standard black coloring, it has a mask which more closely resembles a skull. Unlike the typical Gillian, the mask almost completely covers the top half of its face, leaving the lower jaw, mouth, and chin exposed. It has an extremely long tongue, a fact which is hidden due to its mouth extending to the back of its elongated neck. However, it should be noted that Les Entrada also stands at approx. 6 stories in height. Possessing segments of bones lining portions of its body. Its arms are large and bat-like in shape, with thin, translucent webbing between each finger. Which, due to their extraordinarily elongated nature, can also be used as wings. Although it's body appears prominently reptilian, it is also capable of walking upright, upon it's hind legs. At which point, it folds its wings in as to form a sort of cloak. It is at this time that it reaches its full height, on all fours, this height is divided by three. A large Hollow hole is located on its sternum. Large enough to fit a bus through. Les Entrada's skin constantly drips as in is stuck in an endless loop of putrefaction.

【Biography: Although the truth of its origins remain unknown, the terror that is Les Entrada is said to be the accumulation of the first souls which were consumed in Hueco Mundo over the millennia. While its appearance within Huecco Mundo was once common place, with records of its appearance dating as far back as two thousand years ago, it seemed to retreat into solitude roughly five hundred years ago. In fact, its existence would have been passed off as mere myth, were it not reported responsible for the deaths of several shinigami squads over the span of that time. Thus, it eventually became feared by inexperienced shinigami as a pseudo boogeyman among hollows. An unstoppable force which, if met, would devour all. Interestingly, the story was much the same for the hollows. Many of which feared the beast they came to name Les Entrada. Fearing not its form, but its ability to consume from within. Despite having failed to evolve past the gillian state, it remains one of the most feared hollows among shinigami. As of late, there have been reports which claim it now dwells within the human world. 


【Personality: A cold, ruthless, and malevolent force. Les Entrada is a true alexithymic. Completely devoid of love, compassion, and mercy. While it believes the world to be "rotten." Thus uses its abilities as a means by which it can enact its will to rid the world of "unworthy" people. As a monster feared for its ferocity, and often, extreme cruelty, it rarely aims to kill until its target has been completely disabled and humiliated. Hence freely taunts and belittles its opponents, often allowing them to inflict seemingly fatal wounds before healing itself and counterattacking. The only exception being when it is in a starved state. At which point it seems to focus solely on killing its prey as efficiently as possible. It should be noted that this is its most dangerous stage.

Yet, the beast is not simply one of instinct. Possessing a sort of hive mind. Ruled a conglomerate of distinct aspects; Destruction - which fuels its aggression and willingness to engage in combat, Greed - which fuels its desire to consume. Not to be confused with Intoxication - which governs the enjoyment of the act. Loneliness - which pushes it to seek out others. And lastly, Madness - which governs the barbarous nature of all its actions. While these aspects were all once the individual personalities of those it had consumed, each has been warped throughout the ages into the raw characteristics they now embody. Whenever two or more of these aspects come into conflict, decisions are made when one of the aspects manage to rally the support of most of its many souls behind it. 

While it frequently displays exemplary intelligence, the only time this intelligence is obviously recognizable is when it possesses another entity. At which point, provided it is inherently capable of speech, it will on occasion utter simple, yet blunt phrases. Although the words spoken are dependent on which aspect has currently rallied the most support. 

【Notable Traits】
【Likes/Dislikes】
As the Entity that is Les Entrada possesses no specific persona, existing simply to exist, it neither likes nor dislikes anything.


【Defining Traits】
Positive

▲ Confident
▲ Daring
▲ Intuitive
▲ Intelligent

Neutral

☯ Indifferent
☯ Aggressive
☯ Deceptive
☯ Opportunistic

Negative

▼ Cantankerous
▼ Unrestrained
▼ Imitative
▼ Hedonistic


【Relationships】
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 - 


【Capabilities】
【General Aptitude】

Fighting Style:
 
When possessing a host, Les Entrada tends to adapt an incredibly reckless and offensive strategy. Attacking the enemy with the full extent of it's host's capabilities, without concern for their well being. It will even go as far as sacrificing its current host in order to subdue a potentially fatal foe. However, when fighting without a host, Entrada fights much as one might expect from an wild animal. Albeit, a wild six story dragon, but an animal none the less. Often moving to subdue opponents with its massive size and clawed limbs. Although it should be noted that it is proficient in the use of its tail, its true gimmick is its jaw. As Les Entrada rarely resorts to fully extending its jaw, most enemies assume its bite to possess a normal range for its size. Yet, when it does fully utilize the capability of its jaw size, it is capable of fitting the entire width of the average Menos within its mouth.

Reiryoku: 2     
Reiatsu: 1
Integrity: 0

Mask: 2     
Hunger: 1
Rigidity: 5
Instinct 1

Form: 5      
Offense: 3
Defense: 2
Strength: 2

Power: 3     
Hollow Power: 2
Perception: 2

Speed: 0    
Agility: 1
Biorythm: 2

【Specialization】
Novio Cero:
Although it has a very large charge time, Les Entrada launches ceros in the form of a stream of flames. Although these cero maintain the standard red coloring, they look as if Entrada is simply breathing bright red flames. Flames which, upon contact, set the target ablaze. Thus, while they deal less concusive damage than the average cero, they also sustained damage over time. Provided the target remains ablaze.


Cero Envolversa
After preparing as it would for a Novio Cero, Les Entrada can detonate the cero within its mouth. Then, by creating small openings in its mouth along its neck, engulf itself within it. Wearing it as a type of cloak. This allows it to set ablaze any non reiatsu protected substance in its flame.

【Hollow Ability】
~"With him inside me, I am whole."~

Comienzo: When completely subjugated by its aspect of loneliness in the presence of another living being, Les Entrada is capable of possessing it. While it is capable of, in theory, doing so indefinitely, there are a myriad of factors which ultimately effect its ability to do so. They are as follows;   

Possession Timer: The length of time in which it can possess a body before having to make a second possession attempt, subject to the rules below.

Expulsion Timer: The length of time needed to expel it from a soul which is parasitically infested but not under its control.

The relative length of both Timers is dependent upon whether or not the Entrada is currently in combat or not. When out of combat, the Possession Timer is an entire hour long, while the Expulsion Timer is equal to an hour times the difference between its Hollow Power score and either the Victim's Alignment or Resonance (or Hollow Power) score. During combat however, the Soul undergoes extreme stress that shortens both timers considerably. In combat, the Possession Timer is only five minutes long, while the Expulsion Timer is equal to five minutes times the difference in its Hollow Power score and either the victim's Resonance or Alignment (or Hollow Power) score.

If it fails an attempt to take control of a Host, it may make another attempt either once per hour or once every five minutes, dependent upon whether the host body is in or out of combat.

For Possessing Shinigami:

1. Before attempting possession, its Hollow Power score is compared with the victim's Resonance and Alignment scores. If either the victim's Resonance or Alignment scores are greater than its Hollow Power score, possession is impossible and any attempts made result in immediate ejection from the soul.

2. If its Hollow Power score is equal to or greater than the victim's Resonance and Alignment scores, it may burrow into their soul and then attempt to seize control over it. Entering the inner world of the host soul and engagig in mental combat with the owner. For the purposes of combat within the inner world, most of its stats will no longer be relevant since the battle is purely mental, and so its physical attributes and skills are no longer relevant. Instead, Les Entrada must use only its Reiryoku, Instinct, and Hollow Power scores to determine its relative strength, while the Shinigami must use only their Reiryoku, Alignment, and Resilience scores to determine their relative strength.

3. If it the mental battle, they cannot take control of the host soul, and the Expulsion Timer begins to count down.

4. If it wins the mental battle, it gains control over the host soul, and the Possession Timer begins to count down. All of the host soul's spiritual powers are supplanted by those of Entrada's instead, meaning their reiatsu would become caustic and they would gain its Hollow abilities. Entrada would retain only the physical stats of the host body while possessing it.

5. After each successful possession attempt, Entrada may choose to corrupt 1 point of the host soul's Reiryoku. If all of a host soul's Reiryoku is corrupted, they die and are consumed by it. However, for each point of their Reiryoku corrupted this way, they gain a bonus point of Alignment for all subsequent mental battles. It may choose not to corrupt a point of the host's Reiryoku and potentially occupy their body indefinitely if it can reliably subdue the host's mental persona.

6. A Shinigami can only use their Resonance score to prevent possession and to expel Etrada if they have their Zanpakuto. If they are disarmed prior to possession, they cannot use their Resonance score, even if it is higher than its Hollow Power score. If Entrada takes control over their soul, it can discard their Zanpakuto in order to completely get rid of the Expulsion Timer until the Zanpakuto is brought back into close proximity. However, this also means the Expulsion Timer is always running for as long as the host body is close to the Zanpakuto.

7. A Shinigami can only use their Alignment score to prevent possession and to expel Entrada if they have access to specific Alignment techniques. If they do not have access to these Alignment techniques, they cannot use their Alignment score, even if it is higher than its Hollow Power score. Additionally, even if the Shinigami does have access to those specific Alignment techniques, the Expulsion Timer will only run if Entrada does not have control over the host soul.

For Possessing Hollows:

1. As with Shinigami, only instead compare both respective Hollow Power scores instead. 

2. As with Shinigami, but for the mental battle both opponents use their respective Reiryoku, Instinct, and Hollow Power scores.

3. As with Shinigami.

4. As with Shinigami, except its spiritual powers do not supplant theirs. Entrada instead gains complete access to all of their stats, Hollow Powers, and their unique ability.

5. As with Shinigami, except the host soul gains a bonus point to Instinct for each point of their Reiryoku it chooses to corrupt.

6. A Hollow may always use its Hollow Power score to prevent possession and to expel it. However, the Expulsion Timer will only run if Entrada is not in control of the host soul.


Ability Techniques
Hoyo Negro: The technique used by Les Entrada to enter the bodies of its prey. It allows the hollow to momentarily project its spirit essence into the victim, initiating the battle for dominance. The projection always enters the body via the chest, appearing to phase through the spot where their heart or hollow hole would be, and then into their being.


【Current Host】


【Shizuka Tsukikage - Manzurei】


【Pain is the Only Truth in this World of Lies】
~"I fight for myself now."~
【Personal Info】

【Name: Shizuka Tsukikage 
【Nicknames: Shi-Shi, Manzurei 
【Alias: Tomoe Odage  
【Age: 279
【Age Appearance: 24
【Gender: Female 
【Race: Shinigami
【Former Rank: Criminal Exile 

【Additional Appearance Info: Shizuka stands at five feet seven inches, weighing in at one hundred and twenty four pounds. Despite her slender build, Shizuka has wide hips and sizable breasts. Her hair is long, straight and dyed dark blue. Styled with a triangular fringe at the front that barely touches the ridge of her nose. Her eyes are a clear blue. Her lips tinted a pale pink. As Tomoe, Shizuka wears a black sports bra, a pair of black skinny jeans, and a set of low-cut Chuck Taylors. Which are all black. A black sword bag is also always carried with her, in which she keeps a wooden bokken sword. As her zanpakuto was destroyed by the Central 46 following her sentence to exile. 

【Personality:  In light of her sarcastic and witty nature, Shizuka always acts in an intelligent and aristocratic manner. Frequently using honorifics when addressing everyone, ally and enemy a like. A feat which often causes her to appear apathetic towards others, even whilst internally conflicted. Due to her upbringing, Shizuka generally reacts indifferently, nigh arrogantly, to most situations she is faced with. Rarely viewing an opponent, or obstacle, as being worth her time. It should also be noted that in lieu of acts of immediate violence, Shizuka will often resort to sadistic and tortuous means of retaliation when offended. In addition to being a sadist, Shizuka is also a masochist and blood thirsty by nature. She has come to resent the soul society for exiling her to the world of the living so very long ago. 

Reir: 2  
Rei: 2
Align: 1
Zan: 5  
Off: 5
Def: 5
Reso: 1
Hak: 2  
Off: 0
Def: 2
Phy: 2
Kido: 2 
KP: 1
Per: 1
Hoho: 2 
Mob: 1
Resil: 2

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Since we've already gone through the reviewing in PM and whatnot, Accepted. Throw him in the character tab.

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I edited the two techniques you had a problem with.

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Kiai-katta@Xan the G
This is pending full approval, the other two techniques look great. Gonna find a way to balance the deflect bit.

Gonna review the rest of the CS tomorrow :)

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Alrighty @Xan the G. So the only problem I saw was the following:

The only reason he defected from soul society was because his Captain had done so, but for a man like Xero, that was reason enough.
So, none of the current characters "defected" from soul society. They were defeated and kicked out by other shinigami, calling themselves the Junsei. They did not explain their motive/as to why they were doing it and they were not of any known rebel or opposing faction. They are shinigami, just to make sure that's clear.

so yeah, alter that detail and the above post and then I can accept you ^_^

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【Hogo-sha】


【How about you fight me instead?\ /Last Confrontation\ /Hopes and Dreams】
~”For all my friends to live, I must eradicate all villains!!”~
【Personal Info】

【Name: Hogo-sha
【Nicknames: N/A
【Alias: N/A
【Age: He has long forgotten
【Gender: Male
【Race: Human ---> Plus ----> Hollow
【Form: Greater Adjuchas

【Additional Appearance Info: Having evolved to this stage Hogo-sha is oddly unique looking. He seems to have almost a liquid like form, and can move way more differently than most Hollows, moving his body almost like a snake can. On all four he stands at about six feet tall. He is also not very wide at all. Being smaller than a bus but larger than a truck, so roughly about twenty five feet With his tail extended however that goes up to roughly twenty eight feet long. The mask doesn’t seem very large but in truth a majority of it is covered up by what appears to be almost hair. It also seems to have a strip appearance as well, his hollow hole is also on his chest a bit above where his stomach is. It should also be of note that his tail is the only natural hard surface on him besides his teeth, it is also naturally sharp as well and can cut through solid stone with little effort.

【Biography: A hero’s story is never told so easily!

【Personality: A hollow unlike any other, sure there have been those who hunt together and make alliances. Yet he is a different case, he has the drive to protect those that are weak and therefore are nothing more than prey for other hollows. He despises any form of evil and so when a Hollow toys with the weak he tends to lash out and eat them in revenge. His hate also extends too Shinigami who while are doing their job, so at least try to hear them out and not just mercilessly kill them. It’s like they have no clue that some Hollow just want to be left alone and not be pursued by Shinigami and killed by them. This is what drives him to becoming stronger, protecting the good and slaughtering the villains. So when a weaker hollow begs him to eat them so they don’t have to live in fear anymore, it leaves a rotten feeling in his stomach when he grants their last request.

【Notable Traits】
【Likes/Dislikes】
✔ Friends
✔ Helping
✔ Weaklings
✔ Honesty

✘ Bullies
✘ Shinigami
✘ Villains
✘ Eating the weak


【Defining Traits】
Positive

▲ Caring
▲ Quite maneuverable 
▲ Resourceful

Neutral

☯ Merciful
☯ Smart

Negative

▼ Vindictive
▼ Apprehension
▼ Easily fooled by weak hollows for protection.
【Relationships】
NAME: Friend/Rival/Acquaintance/Superior Officer/Nemesis etc
Summary of Relationship. When they met, how long they've known one another, how they feel about them and why.


NAME: Friend/Rival/Acquaintance/Superior Officer/Nemesis/Lover/Spouse etc
Summary of Relationship. When they met, how long they've known one another, how they feel about them and why.


NAME: Friend/Rival/Acquaintance/Superior Officer/Nemesis etc
Summary of Relationship. When they met, how long they've known one another, how they feel about them and why.

【Capabilities】
【General Aptitude】

Reiryoku: 2
Reiatsu: 2
Integrity: 3

Mask: 3
Hunger: 2.
Rigidity: 3
Instinct: 1

Form: 4
Offense: 3
Defense: 2
Physical Strength: 3

Power: 5
Hollow Power: 5
Perception: 2

Speed: 3
Agility: 2
Biorythm: 2

【Specialization】
Relentless Cero
Simple in nature impressive by standards. Hogo-san charges up a cero like normal, but his goo like hair also aims at the target and charges up a cero as well, enabling him to fire off multiple cero’s at once, or firing off a few then firing off some more and then some more all at different times. The more he charges up though the weaker they get. Still if he’s firing off ten, it will still pierce right through you if you get hit by one.

Skill/technique name: Prerequisites
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【Hollow Ability】
~"I’m the perfect weapon to extinct you villainous scum!"~

Ability Description: With his liquid looking body he is capable of forming weapons from his own flesh to attack with. The flesh also stays attached to him and simply takes the form of whatever he pleases. The parts that become weapons density seems to become more solid as well, this does not count for any other part of his flesh he didn’t mold. The ability also takes a few moments to form so you can still get in and harm the spot before it takes shape and solidifies seemingly(Yet even if it does take shape, it’s still his skin and if you are strong enough, it will still cut him.). You will mostly see him use this ability on his goo like hair, as a defensive mechanism for his Hollow hole. An example of him using this is his goo like hair moving and turning into multiple black swords to impale someone. He can also use his body for other various attacks as well, one of which is his signature attack.

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【Name:Hogo-sha】@Oblivion666
Here we go!

First, can you remove the part that says "name" from the top of the CS. Keep the "Hogo-sha," though.

【Additional Appearance Info: Having evolved to this stage Hogo-sha is oddly unique looking. He seems to have almost a liquid like form, and can move way more differently than most Hollows, moving his body almost like a snake can. On all four he stands at about ten feet tall, and on his hind legs that shoots up two feet. He is also not very wide at all. Being smaller than a bus but larger than a truck. The mask doesn’t seem very large but in truth a majority of it is covered up by what appears to be almost hair. It also seems to have a strip appearance as well, the true mystery is where his hollow hole is. Most have never found it due to his entire form being black, but if one were to have enough time, or were lucky enough. They would know his hole is actually in the middle of all the goo like hair. It should also be of note that his tail is the only natural hard surface on him besides his teeth, it is also naturally sharp as well and can cut through solid stone with little effort.
So, as a note, his being at 10 feet tall whilst on all fours is...kind of odd for an Adjucha, especially a Greater Adjucha, which would probably be considerably smaller/more compact. Consider that he'd be 10 feet tall at the back. Which would make him 4 feet taller than a 6 foot man. Take your own height, and then consider how much further up Hogo-sha's back would be from your head.

Additionally, if he stood up on two legs, his being only 2 feet taller than his norm, would make no sense as his height would essentially be the length of his body from hip bone to head, whilst also including the length of the legs he's standing on. Consider that a 10 foot tall creature is gonna have some ludicrously long legs as well and you get a really bizarre, not terribly proportionate, picture.

I'd say make him about 6 feet tall at the back. His height, I imagine, would be considerably taller if he reared up on only his back two legs, but given how his body's put together, I imagine that he can't stand on two legs and keep his balance (due to not enough strength and stability in and around his rearmost legs. So yeah.

As to his hollow hole. It's typically portrayed as just a black circle, but is quite literally a hole that goes straight through some part of a hollow's body. So it would be visible. It might just be small and/or in a place that people don't generally look. So yeah, moving on.

Huh, so yeah, looked everything else over. Your stats check out. The ability is fine, so I guess the appearance and the logistics of that are the only problem I have...which is a weird feeling, but yeah ^^;

So work on/fix that and then I can accept it :)

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Alrighty. Accepted, put 'em in the character tab ^_^

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Alrighty! Accepted, put 'em in the character tab ^_^

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I'm just reading through these posts, I see people have done collabs. If I'm supposed to be with any particular group let me know, if I should be back at base, I have a post idea for that too.

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You were 4th seat? Well guess what, you get to join the Captain Commander's group!

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Okay. In that case, my first post will be catching up to the commander's group.

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I posted. I'm aware I might have taken some liberties in the post, but just as an explanation: the actions of the Third Seat of the Eleventh Division do not need to tie into the main plot at all, I deliberately left it open so you can decide how if at all you would like it to fit into the plot. I just thought it was a interesting way to explain why Xero was late and why no one else in the resistance has spoken anything of it or even seen him.

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Another hollow NPC, in large part.

【'Kage'】
【Suimin Akumu】


【Kage/|\Combat/|\Sueño】
~"Just let me think in peace."~
【Personal Info】

【Name: Long forgotten.
【Nicknames: Kage.
【Alias: Suimin Akumu(睡眠悪夢'Sleeping Nightmare').
【Age: 4137.
【Gender: Male.
【Race: Human-->Jibakurei-->Hollow.
【Form: Vasto Lorde.

【Additional Appearance Info: Standing at 5'5 and weighing 125 lbs, Kage's form is pale and lithe, his mask possessing no holes for eyes or mouth. His arms and legs are relatively thin, and his torso follows suit, possessing relatively narrow shoulders and hips he is not an intimidating figure to look at. Often walking with a slouch—when he does walk—Kage, despite his lithe form, does possess some natural weapons, which take the form of the narrows claws on his hands and feet. Beyond this there is only one thing of note, and this is the jet black, cloth-like material which lays in tatters that constantly drape his form. This tattered garment, as it were, has unearthly properties, its like being so black as to appear that one could fall into it as they would the depths of the ocean...or perhaps the void of space. Additionally, it should be noted that—despite his seeming lack of facial features—the Vasto Lorde is capable of spontaneously opening his mask to form both mouth and eyes. Oddly though...he does not appear to require either to see, speak or even eat.

【Biography: Unknown(Revealed IC, if at all).

【Personality: Kage is a strange enigmatic thing, tending to spend its time sitting wherever it can find solace and the peace that comes with the absence of others. He prefers to be alone, and prefers to go unmolested, as he keeps to himself. In this way he often appears to be quite the lazy bastard, and yet...he has attained a level of evolution that belies that fact. In truth, the hollow is merely a highly thoughtful and inquisitive individual who sees little point in interacting with others of its own kind—largely due to their violent nature. Having attained the height of naturally possible evolution, Kage has lost much of its drive to devour others to obtain ever more power. Instead the hollow binges, often starving himself for a long...long time before devouring hundreds of thousands of hollows in what one could describe as the most calm rampage they'll ever witness.

In all things, this hollow is calm and pensive, being one who takes little joy in activity, finding enjoyment only in the silence of his own mind...and more rarely in conversation with others. Oddly, despite having encountered beings of all persuasions—shinigami included—Kage has almost wholly failed to grasp the reason as to why people might come to hate him. While he fully understands why hollows are hated, reviled, and hunted in general...it just doesn't click for him as to why they must all be treated as such. Still, despite having seen his kin slaughtered by the dozens, he fosters no resentment for either humanity or the so-called shinigami.

As one would think of a being having reached the peak of hollow evolution, Kage possesses a good measure of confidence, but unlike many Vasto Lorde, he does not consider himself the most powerful among his kind and holds little care for status or rank. Instead, Kage puts value in the actions, words, and thoughts of others, caring more about how people see the world than where fate has placed them within it. Beyond this there are few further facts of note about this Vasto Lorde...except perhaps what the hollow refers to only as Sueño.

In short, Sueño is Kage's repressed violence, hunger, and malevolence, which dwells beneath a vast sea of silence and calm. Sueño is seldom seen by the world, and could be considered a separate personality from Kage. Where the latter is a serene and pensive being, Sueño is an instinct driven monstrosity, with little care for the thoughts, feelings, or lives of others. It is a persona bound by instinct and insatiable hunger. To Kage, it is a necessary evil, the antithesis of his typical persona, something which exists to balance him and to keep him sated. Typically, this other persona is only seen in three forms, either when Kage exits a long period of fasting to binge on any and all he can find; in times of great stress or emotion; and of course—though in a more controlled fashion—through his unique ability.
【Notable Traits】
【Likes/Dislikes】
✔ Silence.
✔ Philosophical Quandaries.
✔ Intelligence.
✔ Solitude.

✘ Noise.
✘ Stupidity.
✘ Wanton violence.
✘ Thoughtlessness.


【Defining Traits】
Positive

▲ Intelligent.
▲ Placid.
▲ Understanding.
▲ Forgiving.
▲ Mild-tempered.
▲ Non-judgmental.
▲ Reasonable.

Neutral

☯ Thoughtful.
☯ Introspective.
☯ Quiet.
☯ Enigmatic.
☯ Inquisitive.
☯ Aloof.
☯ Passive.

Negative

▼ Violent*
▼ Cruel*
▼ Instinctual*
▼ Uncaring*
▼ Manipulative – On occasion.
▼ Deceitful – On occasion.
▼ Lazy(?)

*denotes traits associated solely with Sueño.
【Relationships】
Qveenarion: Friend/Rival/Little Enigma
Another Vasto Lorde, one who gained his respect, Kage sees Qveenarion as an intriguing specimen. A Little Enigma, as it were. Something not wholly beyond explanation, but still not entirely understood. He sees her as something of a friend, something of a rival due to their similar nature, but most of all she is kin. She is one of like mind. An odd sort, forced to live and survive, to cope with a torturous existence even if she does not quite see it that way. He hopes that she will survive long enough to outlive her naivety, but he stakes little on the chance knowing how often hollows die...and are subsumed by their next of kin. Nonetheless...it is his wish that she is among the lucky few who escape such a fate. Only time will tell.

【Capabilities】
【General Aptitude】
Fighting Style:

A relaxed and pensive being, Kage prefers not to fight unless absolutely necessary so it stands to reason that his relaxed nature carries over somewhat to his style of combat. Essentially, the Vasto lorde is an almost endless font of energy, primarily using non-physical means to eliminate any threats to his person--or to hunt. He will use the extreme causticity of his reiatsu, his incredible control, and his rather frightening unique ability to defend and attack in equal parts--while utilizing his body only if forced to do so. Due perhaps both to his lax nature and lack of considerable durability, Kage prefers not to use his body at all if he can help it. However, if he should be forced to fight in close quarters his strength will surprise his opponents where his actual skill in melee fails. This when combined with his ability to amplify his physical durability with both his reiatsu and unique ability--in a fashion--can result in a similarly terrifying experience.

Of course...this is Kage's preferred method of combat. Sueño on the other hand prefers to get messy, closing the distance between an opponent and itself to tear into them and anchor them in place, while using Umbral Visage, the causticity/toxicity of its reiatsu and likely more than a few cero to obliterate all those who stand before it. Where Kage is cunning and has a mind for tactics--not that he always uses them--Sueño is a violent instinct-driven monster with a beastial aggression, and a tendency towards unrelenting, overwhelming assaults. In this, as in most things, the two persona are drastically different as one would expect.

Incredible Reiryoku(4/4):
Legendary Reiatsu(5/4): 
Legendary Integrity(5/4):


Incredible Mask(4/4):
Legendary Hunger(5/4): 
Impressive Rigidity(3/4): 
Legendary Instinct(5/4):


Average Form(2/4):
Average Offense(2/4): 
Average Defense(2/4): 
Incredible Physical Strength(4/4):


Impressive Power(3/4):
Impressive Hollow Power(3/4): 
Legendary Perception(5/4):


Impressive Speed(3/4):
Average Agility(2/4): 
Average Biorythm(2/4):


Reiryoku(4):
Reiatsu: 5
Integrity: 5

Mask(4):
Hunger: 5
Rigidity: 3
Instinct: 5

Form(2):
Offense: 2
Defense: 2
Physical Strength: 4

Power(3):
Hollow Power: 3
Perception: 5

Speed(3):
Agility: 2
Biorythm: 2

Total T: 19-1-1-1(16)
Total S: 6+8+4+5+5(28)+5+5+5(43)

【Specialization】
Kosui seiryoku(狡い勢力 'Insidious power'): Mask(4); Reiatsu(4); Hunger(5); Instinct(5).
As per both the nature of Kage's unique power and the way in which he has developed during his time as a hollow, this ability has made itself known. In essence, Kosui seiryoku is the result of a hollow possessing terrifying levels of hunger coupled with dangerous levels of toxicity in regards to their reiatsu. When coupled with an ability to control their reiatsu, this becomes not just a passive effect, which eats away at all around them, and can instead become a directed skill—which is how it now manifests for Kage. This ability effectively allows Kage to easily control the shape and toxicity of his reiatsu, so as to not harm others...or to dissolves them with little physical effort.

Cero distraido('Indistinct hollow flash'): Mask(4); Power(3+); Instinct(5); Hollow Power(3+); Reiatsu(4).
An often fatal ability, Cero distraido takes on the form of a sphere with a maximum diameter of three feet. This sphere spins at a gradual rate, with two small extensions of energy turning as it does so, making its appearance almost reminiscent of a hurricane. Typically a light blue, this cero becomes darker and smaller the more power is channeled into it. When released, the cero briefly creates an intense flash of blue light, before outright vanishing altogether. In the moments that follow, whatever stands within its intended trajectory is violently struck/burned, provided they are strong enough to resist it. Even if they are above this number, so long as their scores remain below 5 they are almost sure to take a measure of damage, which will take the form of chemical burns as if an acid had struck them with the force of a truck. As such, unprepared individuals can be sent flying by the attack, and those too weak to withstand it, will be outright vaporized. While the attack appears invisible, it is detectable as its seeming disappearance is the result of the initial reiryoku being suddenly converted into reiatsu in a violent and directed fashion.

Note: To properly resist this ability and not be vaporized, requires that a shinigami have resilience or reiatsu scores at 3 or above; Hollows on the other hand must have at least two of the following stats above 3: Reiatsu, Integrity, Power, or Form. Some exceptions surely exist.

Cero alevoso('Treacherous hollow flash'): Power(3+); Reiatsu(5); Integrity or Hollow Power 4.
Initializing this technique by first forming a Cero, or in Kage's case, a Cero distraido, a hollow may then pour a significant portion of reiryoku into the attack, condensing it into a tiny marble-sized ball of energy in the palm of their hand. The hollow must then position their hand as if gripping a weapon, before creating a shell with their reiatsu. Once this shell is created the hyper condensed cero may be released, causing it to take the shape of the shell. The cero can then be utilized as a weapon or tool and can be released into a tremendous blast at any time.


More may come.

【Hollow Ability】
~"Step not into my shadow stranger, for within it lies only the Umbral Visage of death."~

Ability Description: An ability seldom used, but always seen, Kage's Umbral Visage, is an ability which is fueled by his reiryoku and the reishi he passively or actively draws to it. Typically taking the form of the tattered strips of jet black material which adorn his form, the Umbral Visage is essentially a construct composed of reiryoku-bound reishi, which Kage is capable of altering in function and appearance. As one would expect of something composed of a hollow's bound reiryoku, the Umbral Visage is a caustic and abrasive thing, sheering away at anything it touches aside from its origin. This ability is thus Kage's primary method of consumption, as it allows him to break down and absorb/devour—though at varied rates—anything which makes contact with the material.

While the above are the most commonly seen traits of Kage's unique ability, they are not the whole of it as the truth lies in the Umbral Visage's ability to alter form as well as its core nature as bound reiryoku. Essentially, due to being a part of Kage's spirit, the Umbral Visage contains a share of his personality, though not the one he reveals to the world. No, instead it contains the much dreaded Sueño. As such, the Umbral Visage may act of its own accord, defending Kage and reinforcing or supplementing his own actions, should he choose—or be forced—to fight. Beyond this, all there is to know as that his Umbral Visage has a set range of 5 meters which it cannot exit. This meaning that his ability cannot detach from his body and act autonomously outside of this field, though it can extend up to 10 meters radius so long as it maintains some contact with his form. Lastly, the Umbral Visage's ability to regenerate, add, and alter its form remains dependent on Kage's own regenerative ability as well as the rate at which he consume reishi—resulting in a higher regen factor in the Visage in comparison to his own body. Beyond this...there is little else to say.

Ability Techniques
Unknown:  Unknown.

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Unknown:  Unknown.

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just to say - I'm not against any collab posts at all, so if I should be in one such group or another, just let me know with a link either here or pm. Cheers.

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