@Invader Len Finished my edits! Ready to have Elena examined once more!

@13org
I noticed in your cs also that he neither "cares for the rules or hierarchy" and was making poor grades. The academy would have disciplined him hard for that, especially since his family name was known but it sounds like he never had to deal with the consequences for his behavior. The military is about order and discipline and if he wasn't showing either of that then they would have taken disciplinary measures against him.

@Holy Grail Reviewing now! :)

Sylvie - "average height"

she's 5'6"

@Holy Grail Good job at fixing up her backstory, however, you left her previous backstory in her personality. Edit that, please. :)

Fixed (I hope)@Invader Len

@onenote

But he had. his body is well trained mainly because he had to train real hard.

"fruits of the incessant training sessions (many of those were punishments for not following orders or being lazy) he had to pass through"

It's neck and neck folks. The checkered flag is out, and both 13org and Holy Grail are on their way to a victory. Unfortunately, only one can claim the title of Champion. Who will it be? Stay tuned for results.

@Invader LenFIXED!!!

@Holy Grail Your cs is good except for one thing we need you to clarify. Why wasn't Elena's mother not living with her and could only visit her?

Welp, i think i lost this one :-/

@fishguyRighto, fixed.

@onenoteFixed that too!

@13org

Don't give up, the worst that can happen is you'll be placed on the waiting list.

We should probably put this link in the first post:

Height List

Things are certainly heating up

@SunsetRoses

Idk... i think i would get a little lost y'know?

So....how is everyone doing today?

His face got cut deeply, almost cutting his eye, making him blind. Luckily for him, he didn't suffered any debilitating injury.

Can you explain this for me? Was he blinded? Was he not blinded? Please clarify.

Also, how was this allowed by the school? Assaulting another student and causing these injuries is worse than a student being lazy or disrespectful. Why did the other students hate him for his attitude? Things just don’t add up. Additionally, wouldn’t the other students be hurting themselves too, by tackling him onto a fence?

In addition, onenote does have a point. How had he done so poorly at the military academy and not been expelled yet? His attitudes, laziness, and grades combined would be enough to get him kicked out, regardless of how well he performed physically. I understand you want him to be rebellious, but I don’t see how he’s going to do much better at St. Fortuna’s with his grades and attitude.

I understand you want your character to have scars, however, we are not comfortable with the two scenarios offered. Might I suggest a car or transport accident, an unfortunate tumble while hiking, or an accident with a wild animal instead?

@Holy Grail Congratulations! You’re accepted! You get an athletic ability, Enhanced Healing! You heal from injuries at a supernatural rate, allowing you to get back up to fight more quickly! It still hurts, however, and serious injuries will take more time to recover from! In addition, you can still be killed by serious injuries, if the damage is done faster than your ability can repair. Currently, you heal from minor injuries, like cuts, bruises, and gashes, in a matter of 6 hours. With training and help, however, you can begin healing from more severe injuries more quickly, and speed up your rate of healing! Definitely a good ability for a fighter!

@Invader Len

I see. but the spots are filled already, aren't they?
I don't know if it would be of any use if i fixed it.

About the blind thing, it was a typo.
It should be "almost making him blind" but i was literally rushing to try and get my character accepted.

He wasn't expelled because his family was very influent. That and his good physical were the only things saving him from being expelled (I believe I explained this on the CS)

About what happened with the other students? he doesn't know. He was sent to the hospital after that.