Name: Kyra Valentina
Image: http://dreamself.me/full.php?fg=0&ffg=0&bg=0&back=0&hat=10633132&accen=0&face=10537243&hair=10355902&accef=0&pose=0&top=10345816&coat=0&acceh=0&bottom=1032281&shoe=10349084&bodycolor=17000193&action=change&id=0& I'd say Kyra is about 4'9". She smol.
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Orientation: Pansexual, but leans mostly towards females
Mage or Familiar: Familiar
Ability:
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Personality: Kyra is a rather shy girl, but is passionate. She is quiet and may seem introverted, but is really quite the opposite. Once you get to know her, you can see just how happy she is sharing love with others. She-- in her words-- ‘loves to love things’, which therefore multiplies her love ‘by a factor of seven’. A lot of love packed in a petite 16-year-old, I know, but you gotta love what you do. :3 She sees herself as a little bit too rushed in everything she does-- which does happen pretty often… she can also be overbearing, naive, gullible… she’s a little too trusting, and fairly easy to manipulate. She’s also very afraid of puppets.
Biography: Kyra was born into a very average family. Her mother and father both had stable, average income jobs, and her older sister- Lina Valentina- had graduated years ago. As a young child, her mother and father pressed her into trying different things, when all she wanted to do was help other people. As a young child, at first it seemed like she wouldn’t go much of anywhere in life, but her desire to help people became apparent with age.. While her mind grew, her body fell behind, and she is still rather small for her age. Being small has its perks, but when everybody has teased you for it? It’s a little surprising she still has this much passion and hope when she’s been pushed around all through school. Other students calling her a baby, boys and girls alike rejecting her for ‘not being cool enough’- average enough, I know, but when they also steal from you, openly lie to make you get in trouble, and lock you in bathrooms, it’s not as average. She still fuels her days with love, though, for she feels that if nobody gives love to those who need it, then how are we still here? In order to actually join the academy, she had to scrape up the money by doing (more than) a few simple side jobs- babysitting and stuff like that. Her parents helped her out, saving money ever since her sister Lina had graduated, and giving it to Kyra to help her get to the acaedemy. She feels that the more she learns, the better she can help people, and feels that helping people is her purpose.
Likes: Sweet foods, puzzle games, helping other people, cats
Dislikes: Unnecessary rudeness, loud country or hip-hop music, puppets
Points: 0
Proficiency: 4
Intelligence: 3
Athletics: 3
Misc.: She has pupaphobia (fear of puppets).
Quiz Answers:

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First off, some issues with your character’s personality. There’s not a whole lot of it. Can you expand on how she’s selfish? Not only that, but selfish and loyal tend to be on opposite sides of a personality wheel. A loyal person is devoted and goes out of their way to help and stand by those they’re loyal to, even if it puts themselves in harm’s way. Selfish people, on the other hand, look out for number one. They protect their own interests above all else. Please either elaborate and reconcile these two traits, or pick one over the other. Also, pessimism contradicts pragmatism in a number of ways, the first being that pessimistic people see only the depressing points of life, and thus aren’t as thoughtful or logical as true pragmatists. The word you might be searching for is realist, who sees life without the “filters” of pessimism or optimism. In all, please include more of her personality in general.

Now for her history. Expand on her parents. Why was she raised by a single mother? What was her relationship with her mother? Was there anyone else in her early life? You make it sound as though a single mother working multiple jobs is neglectful, and as many people raised by single mothers will tell you, this is not the case. How did she relate with the neighbor, as that’s the person she spent most of her early life with? Please elaborate some more on her early life and give more reason as to why this would make a 5 year old bitter.

Why would she have no good prospects in her town? Rural life is not a deep appalachia dead-end. What are her ambitions? Why does she feel trapped? Why does she want to leave? There is no real motivation or driving force in her backstory. Also, if her parents are divorced, how does she know nothing of her father? It would be one thing if she was a one-night stand baby, but her parents were married! You can’t erase a marriage certificate. Please clarify again on the backstory with the parents, because this does not make sense or match with previous characterization. Additionally, there’s just not enough here on her motives to attend St. Fortuna’s. She might have the grades, but why does she want to go? This is a very prestigious, very strict, academically intense boarding school. It’s not something you decide on a whim. Please give her just more drive and ambition in general. As it stands, this character simply feels too apathetic. That might be because of the confusing and lacking personality, but I have no idea as to any of her motives.

All in all, your character is an outline. It’s a good start, but it needs more, well, character. Flesh out her personality, pick traits that are more coexistent with each other, and beef up her backstory. Clear up the mystery of her father and fix the contradicting details, and give her more drive and ambition. It can take a lot of moxie to leave a helpless situation, and your character is rather lacking in moxie.
Once these changes are made, we would be glad to review your character again. :)

Thanks for clearing that up. And now, *trumpets sound* Great news! You’re accepted! We’ll move your character to the waiting list ASAP. You can post your character sheet in the characters tab, and we’ll give you your partner and power soon!

Much better, thank you for making those edits. *Trumpets sound again* Congratulations! You’re accepted! We’ll move your character to the waiting list ASAP. You can post your character sheet to the character’s tab, and once a new mage is accepted, we’ll partner you up, give you a power, and then you can join the IC with your classmates! Until then, please don’t post in the IC, and if you’re on the waiting list for a over a week, we’ll work out a new arrangement for you. :)