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I'm just dropping my interest here if there's still room. I was invited by Tobiax, but I'm a little late to the party.
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Adkins is derived from Adam, meaning of the red earth. If this is too indirect of a color-name, I will change his last name to Brown.


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When is the RP going to start? I'm logging off until Monday, and I wasn't able to put together my CS in time, I'm afraid - so I'll be delayed until then. Hopefully I can have it put together by then, though!
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@Ryougu I like it, but you, ahem, accidentally called her three different names? You get a yes.
@Mercurial I like what I've read. Unfortunately, my brain checked out at the longer personality description, so I'll have to get back to it. See no problems at the moment though. I trust it makes sense and isn't randomly absurd.
@AtlasRizeNot bad.
I apologize to anyone whose CS I haven't fully read yet.
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@tobiax
Her name wasn't in line with the color code before, and I see that in some instances I missed it, so that's 2 names. If you mean Diana with the third...That's her weapon, named after the Roman goddess of the moon since a Guan Dao is properly called (translated) a reclining moon blade.
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@tobiax
Her name wasn't in line with the color code before, and I see that in some instances I missed it, so that's 2 names. If you mean Diana with the third...That's her weapon, named after the Roman goddess of the moon since a Guan Dao is properly called (translated) a reclining moon blade.


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@Mercurial
Oh crap, thanks. Can't believe I've missed that one through 2 renamings...
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@tanderbolt I like the character. While having graduated the Atlas Academy technically makes him Huntsman qualified, he seemed to have taken the military route? Either way is fine I guess, based on the outcome. Also, I don't think Atlas has a Court Martialing thing? I don't know, but they don't seem that strict. But that's just me. We'll have to wait for Enter on that.
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@tanderbolt I like the character. While having graduated the Atlas Academy technically makes him Huntsman qualified, he seemed to have taken the military route? Either way is fine I guess, based on the outcome. Also, I don't think Atlas has a Court Martialing thing? I don't know, but they don't seem that strict. But that's just me. We'll have to wait for Enter on that.


If court martialing isn't a thing I guess I could make it a matter of pride, being ashamed to come back to Atlas after having deserted his post. Yes, he enlisted in the military even though he is a huntsman, in the show Winter seems to have taken a similar route.
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@tanderbolt Winter isn't a Hunter because she's a special operative. And he didn't abandon his post,he stayed there.
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@tanderbolt Winter isn't a Hunter because she's a special operative. And he didn't abandon his post,he stayed there.


As his backstory is written, he did eventually leave his post after meeting the scavengers, and without being ordered to retreat he technically has forsaken his duty. Even if the military would forgive him, he has enough bitterness to not want to go back to Atlas.
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@tanderbolt After the conflict was over and retreat orders were given. Being mad at Atlas is fine, but it's a little asenine of a reason, don't you think? Now, your CS was well written, but it's not exactly Remnant flavor if you know what I mean.
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I will write my character up tomorrow. Been a bit busy settling in after the move.
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Okay, here's my contribution to the RP! Thank you for your patience.

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@dabombjk Kyle's not a color, and the age is invalid.

@Tergonaut Personally, I like it. I'll wait for Enter, but I give my half of the approval.
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I can add a color but it wasnt asked for and how is the age is invalid it said minimum of 21
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Actually, EnterTheHero said a minimum age of 22-23 and yours said 18, a minimum means you can't be below it.
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@Lord Orgasmo I can't give approval to your CS as it stands. It has a few glaring issues.
First of all, the fact that your character is exactly Reptile. (As an added note, the original Mortal Kombat game used photocapture for the character graphics.) Second, your character has no clear Faunus trait. Also, the CS is a little too casual, if you know what I mean. And the "weapon's" uses for Dust are just, well, generic uses for (sometimes small) amounts of Dust. The 'disease like an STD' stuff is really unnecessary, and the "I have no one and don't know where I live and no one knows my pain" just rubs me the wrong way. Plus the Semblance you picked is basically a copy of Ruby's, which is against the rules.
And, well, the name dropping of four real-world martial arts, which don't really have too much of a reason to all exist in Remnant at once. Furthermore, they're way too different, and CQC is basically just a meme at this point.
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