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@Mae I absolutely love the intensity of the CS. It's perfect! Haven't seen something like this in awhile, very refreshing.
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@Mae There we go, original post should be updated. I got rid of untouchable and added a skill that will definitely need to be checked again. Hopefully I put enough shields around it so that it cannot be abused. I also expanded upon the original bonding idea and added a skill that only works if a bond is refused. We shall see how all that turned out :D
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Finally finished her! Hope everything is okay. :) @Mae
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@Mae

So here she is... More or less finished I've adjusted the Leaf On The Wind, tried to correct the Harmonic Tier and specified one person for Death...



About the Threefold... It's not really a timelimit sort of thing... It's action and consequence thing, sort of you do the crime you do the time. Maybe limit it in some other way...

P.S. Goddammit, this is why I usually begin with an image search first. Finding an image to fit the character post creation is damn near impossible, or I'm just too picky Also why no short hair *cry*
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@ihinka Alas, I understand that feeling all too well. I always make that mistake and suffer it's consequences. :)
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@ihinka Would you elaborate a little more on threefold? Is it supposed to affect the actions someone is doing the moment it is used? We were kind of under the impression it was concerning future actions. Hence the time limit (Because giving someone permanent karmic retribution on all their actions can get silly xD).
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@Melo More like she can select an act/deed and invoke the threefold law for that one act.
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@ihinka Can this be any act the person has performed in the past? Must Blaine have seen it or only have knowledge of it?

Just trying to get the specifics down here xD
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@Melo She must know about it fist hand or the knowledge about it must be unimpeachable. If she invokes the threefold unjustly, she will suffer its consequences. So I would imagine she would only use it for acts she is certain beyond shadow of a doubt are deserving of it. Lets say the further back an act goes, the more the certainty of it will fade, so she would avoid using it on past acts.
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@ihinka Sounds much more reasonable and specific now. I like it a lot more! :D
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@MeloThe funny thing is, that's how it actually sounded in my head Sometimes I forget to speak with my 'out-loud' voice
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@ihinka I totally believe you intended for it to be like that. But yeah, specificity is the key sometimes xD
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[hider=Magus/Xanuun/Dark God of of Pain, Suffering, and Gripe WIP]


⍚Magus20 Male Hetrosexual
"Only time… Time heals all wounds..."

𝔐y 𝔐ortal 𝔬𝔦𝔩


[ ⍚ ] A P P E A R A N C E

Magus stands tall at about 72 Inches and weighs 200Lbs. His long thick Black hair can cover his whole head, but is usually brushed back to reveal his face to others. His jawline is sharp and his face looks soft and quite beautiful, as intended. His bright blue eyes contrast against his pale white skin as so does his dark red lips.

When his curse begins to inflict his body, the first symptoms appear in his eyes. They lose their brightness and become completely dull. Shortly after they will fade away to white and then an all consuming black. Then dark deep lines begin to mark his face almost as heavy wrinkles around his face, including his eyes, mouth, cheeks, and forehead. Finally his whole body begins to look like a shriveled mess as heavy fabricated wrinkles appear.

[ ⍚ ] P E R S O N A L I T Y
Magus is quite a simple man in his mortal form. He desires very little from life, just living day through day. He is never happy it seems, maybe a smile might paint his face once or twice a day from a dark thought or a good joke. The usual tired frown is worn on him even the luckiest days. He isn’t necessarily sad, just… He would call himself a ‘realist’. Realising there is very little things in the world that can cause anyone of permanent happiness, only things that give a person temporary happiness. In his eyes people are born, work, pay taxes, and then die, usually in a way they didn’t want.

Magus doesn’t hide this fact ethier. Most interactions with him for the first time, he seems serious at times, very prideful with his work, cynical, and honestly quite sad. He is still a person though, and finds happiness in his work or in his personal or family achievements. Although it doesn’t last for very long. His motivation is produced from just himself. He never had much growing up and nothing was ever promised to him, but to take care of his love ones. He feels that their is something more for him in life and just waiting to find it. Maybe it will never come, but if so, it just another part of life then.

He still can be considered as kind and gentle by his Family. Always going out of his way to help the ones he loved. Never really bearing much hate for the outsiders, just general indifference. Making his personality strange to the outsider who might see his interactions with the ones close to him. Expecting cynicism and harshness, but seeing kindness and a general happy vibe.


[ ⍚ ] B I O G R A P H Y
Magus was found in the woods alone and crying. Found by what became his Father in a hunting party in the woods. While some would consider that a blessing to be saved at such a dangerous situation, for awhile Magus wished he was just eaten by the Wolves.

He grew up with his adopted Mother, Father, and four Sisters. His appearance was strange for his fathering Clan, being a very pale child with bright blue eyes and long black hair. While his clan’s natural skin color was dark brown with Hazel eyes and curly hair. Him being so unique, had him subjected to much prejudice and bigotry by his fellow clanmates. The fact that he was found in the woods didn’t help and was deemed ‘cursed’, even when bad luck or misfortune didn’t really follow him. His adopted Mother and Father found pride in this and raised him lovingly even with that hate from the other Clan members.

His father gave him advice that shaped his overall life style: “All is temporary, what brings you sadness will not last forever and what brings happiness will eventually end or even change. If you can’t be accepted by your looks, then be accepted by your skills and personality.” This sparked a desire to become one of the strongest and most skilled in forestry. Bringing the most food and meat than any other clansman can muster in a single hunt. At this point he finally earned his place in the Village, even if it was just for what he brought and not for his existence.

After turning the age 19 he decided that he could do better on his own. While he would never admit it, he held great hate for his Clan and wished terrible things upon them in the future. A hate his couldn't reliably explain. All but his beloved family of course. So he offered them to leave with him, of course to his displeasure, they declined and instead wished him good luck in the road ahead. His father gave him his family’s heirlooms that were to be passed down to the first son of each of this family. While technically not his true child, his Father gladly passed down his Family Bow and Hunting knife. Magus took his it with pride and left his Clan, never turning back.

Memories Retained: Ignore for now


𝔐y ℑmmortal 𝔖𝔬𝔲𝔩



⍚ Xanuun Dark God of Pain, Suffering, and Gripe Male HetroSexual ⍚
DARK GOD


Pain... What do you know of pain?
Xanuun the creator of pain, he only knows pain.
Everything experiences pain, but it fades as everything does.
Not Xanuun. His pain is eternal. Suffering beyond any mortal concept.
I fell down the dark trench of pain.
I was greeted by a mighty beast.
Xanuun was his name.
Surrounded by suffering souls. Some begged for mercy while some begged for more as the pain had stolen their sanity. He only spoke once to me. In a deep roar he spoke out.
"Pain is only temporary... but here... pain is forever!

-Exerpt From 'The Trench of Despair' Epic Poem


[ ⍚ ] G O D L Y A P P E A R A N C E
Xanuun sits upon a great throne in his realm. Surrounded by Long Spires that have branches, where men impaled and suffering. His Skin is thick like leather and a Crimson red color. He adorns armor Pauldrons, Greaves, and bracers crafted from Bone and Metal. Atop his head, he dons a huge crown of Thorns, crafted by human flesh and bounded together by soul string. He has not two, but four arms, usually two rest on his thorns while the other two feed or used for interaction. His eye are ruby red and somewhat minuscule compared to his huge maw, filled with hundreds of hooked shaped teeth. Some say he stands as huge as 1500 meters while other times he can be depicted at about 100 feet.


[ ⍚ ] K N O W N F O R

  • Know as the Dark Lord of Pain
  • His curiosity with the Mortal Realm
  • Hated by some God and Goddesses for him giving them judgment in his realm.


[ ⍚ ] F O R M A T I V E M O M E N T S I N H I S T O R Y

Xanuun wasn’t technically created by anyone specifically. From his knowledge or anyone's else for that matter. He was born from the cumulative pain of all the pain and suffering. Being almost the righteous punishment to those before they are sent to the realm or underworld that fate had given them. Xanuun sits in his self created throne in the realm known as the ‘Trench’. The realm could be visited only by breaking down his mighty Gate that contains his realm or by asking for entry. Xanuun doesn’t really get to many visitors.

God and Human. Those that cause great suffering to others would serve punishment with Xanuun before being consumed by him and sent off. They would suffer for what seems like a lifetime, never numbing from the pain. Hung choking off spires for the least offenders or Being impaled and wrapped in thorns for the worst. After their toll was paid, he consumed them, gaining strength from the stored pain in their body.

After long, Xanuun began to talk to these cursed. Learning about Humans and even offering a break from the Pain for a story. Xanuun found the Mortals quite interesting, their lives a lot more exciting and fulfilling then his own existence. He never asked to be here, just always was since he could remember. So he explored outside his realm to learn more about the Universe.

Almost a Millennium later he followed several other Dark Gods through with other Immortals. Some to find power, Xanuun to find Purpose.

𝔐y 𝔊ifts 𝔚𝔦𝔱𝔥𝔦𝔫


[ ⍚ ] S K I L L S E T

  • Hunting: With his skills he has developed over childhood Magus is a Fine Hunter.
  • Forestry: Spending so much time in the woods alone as a child. Magus has had a natural affinity for Nature.
  • Sadness: Every stranger that cast their gaze at Magus, usually feels a subtle sadness. Whether for him or themselves.


  • Feel No Pain: Since Birth, Magus has always had a high pain tolerance. When true pain is inflicted on him that would kill a man or cripple him, he usually can can shrug it off.
  • Marksmanship: With a Bow, knife, spear, or cup he can hit the target with it. Magus has a sharp eye for aim and a good arm to follow through.
  • Quick Reflexes: Almost moving as if he could see the Future. Magus with a Knife is like a Tornado of Blades.


[ ⍚ ] ]A B I L I T I E S

Life Force: (ignore for now)

Suffer Siphon
Yes...Yes! Let me feel your pain!
Gripe:
When used Magus may feed off the physical pain felt by of others. This will replenish his stamina and vitality.

Torment:
Magus can make the target relive the most traumatizing life experience they had. The mental pain shown in their face and movement.

Suffer:
Magus will temporarily gain strength and speed through the Mental and Physical Pain of the others around him.. The stronger the pain and the amount of people the stronger he will become.


Shared suffering
Only through hardship do bonds grow
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Pain Link: Magus links with others and is able to absorb their pain. Magus Feeling the effects rather than the ones that are linked to him.[/color]

Shared Suffering:
When linked to another, the Magus may give them the ability of Gripe. Healing them instead of Magus.

Soul Proxy:
If an ability is used by a linked target, Magus will spend Life force to cancel out their ability. [/indent]
The Dark Lord of Pain
The Time of Reckoning is upon you!
The Transformation:
Magus will start assuming a smaller sized version of his Godly form. He will grow to a height of Nine feet, hair falling out, his skin will become a leathery Crimson, and two more arms will spread from his original. His strength being that of four men.

Crown of thorns:
A smaller version of his crown of thorns will be adorned on his head. The half meter long Thorns can be fired at targets, attempting to impale them with the three inch thick If a mortal is hit they will almost always die from the Pain the thorns will inflict. To a immortal it is possible to take away life force for a single point if not removed fast enough.

Through pain comes strength:
Mighty Spires of Agony will arise from the areas surrounding Magus. With them painful screams of trapped souls will be impaled on each Spire. A chorus of cries of mercy and of pain echo, fueling Magus. He can use the Spires as an infinite pool to siphon pain from. Maxing out the full potential of his other Abilities. After Magus’s death, the area will forever contain spirits of those who were called and for centuries their hallowed screams can be heard in the wind.


[ ⍚ ] I N V E N T O R Y

  • Bow and Arrows
  • Hunting Knife
  • Leather chest piece
  • Map
  • Long sleeve woven shirt and Leather Pants



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@Mae @Melo I got my CS done and ready for review. I'll work on the short description of his Original clan when after the CS is good to go.
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@Mae Actually, most of them are pretty much exactly like what you've said right now.

Already fixed the skillset.

About her old tribe, the Wulfing, sure. I'll give them a proper description.
Her position on the old clan was indeed The Walküre. But regarding the Craenak, she doesn't have any position on their tribe yet. The two tribes know each other, and have a good relationship, but she still doesn't know if she will indeed start her own small tribe, together with her warriors or if she will enter the Craenak. Her principal objective is formally announce the extinction of the old Wulfing tribe, both to other clans and to the Wolfrahg. What will happen after that, largely depends on the Wolfrahg's reaction to that.

PS:originally it was the Craenak, but idk if there will be any PCs playing as that tribe, so I've changed it to the Wolfrahg tribe (since they are also coming from the northern mountains)

PS2: made some changes on her abilities. Including clarifying some things about Gungnir's summoning. It may be easier to understand now.
Oh, and I've included another bit of old norse mythology on her CS.
The heart of Ymyr, or more specifically, a fragment of it.
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@Mae@Melo Here we go! Special shout out to Melo for all his help ❤




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Just thought I'd place this here. It still says apply for a tag and I thought this looked interesting, so why not join? If I'm too late, I understand. Still a work in Progress but should be done soon.

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Okay. I think My CS is done.
All changes have been made, abilities have received a major reshuffle and revamp.
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