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I think that your character will need some adjustments before he can be approved. Here are the points you'll need to address, in no specific order:

- Make the text more readable. There are quite a few grammar mistakes as well as typos, it makes your writing confusing to decipher. We don't require a high level of linguistic skills,however, more readability would be appreciated.

- There's no such thing as mana circuits (if that's what you meant by "man circuits") in this setting. Unless that's a very specific characteristic of your character's power it doesn't need to be mentioned.

- That personality section is unnecessary as well. For this RP, we'd prefer to see the characters personalities in action, rather than in their CSs. A matter of "show, don't tell". Using the Sample post to showcase your character's personality would be much more appreciated.

- We prefer if you do IC posts, as well as the Sample, in the 3rd person. 1st person posts are disorienting because of the change in perspective from a character to another as well as giving the false impression that your character was any degree of protagonist status when compared to the other PCs which is rather undesirable.

As soon as you have addressed those issues, the CS will be ready for a second round of evaluations.
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@KoL Ah my apologies. I was rummaging through a couple of the previous sheets and I saw some with a personality so I thought it was a nice touch. One the flip- side, everything else will be updated as soon as I can ponder on some of mistakes and make my adjustments. Thank you, though!
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I am giving @floodtalon until morrow to respond, he has been on, but has made no post, if he doesn't respond I will have a reaction up tomorrow night at the latest
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Roland really wants Reiko to teach him a special lesson, doesn't he?
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He's in school to learn, isn't he?
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Maybe the Shapeshifter dismissed the centaur a little to fast lol, I think we could have fun together... Or expelled... Whatever comes first lol cuz that's her thinking too, so Miss Reiko might have to teach the special lesson to Liz too, though I doubt it would stick, she's to used to doing her own thing, and that's what she will do lol
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Roland is a human. Duncan is the centaur. But yeah the administration would probably hate those two of they started associating more. Oh the shenanigans they would get into.
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Fixed. Hope this is better.
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@Awesomoman64I apologize, I mixed them up, and yes let's disturb the teachers
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He's fine by me. Await KoL's opinion.
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He's alright. Move him to the CS tab and then you can post IC.
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Thanks! I'll get on it as soon as possible
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I am giving @floodtalon until morrow to respond, he has been on, but has made no post, if he doesn't respond I will have a reaction up tomorrow night at the latest


Will post within the hour. Inspiration has been low on my end lately. If I don't end up posting feel free to just move on.
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So just to get an understanding i have to react to KoL recent post? That's what advancing the story correct? It's not a character specific thing.
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So just to get an understanding i have to react to KoL recent post? That's what advancing the story correct? It's not a character specific thing.


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Just make sure you arrive at the school first 😂😂

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Sounds good take your time
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Reiko. Is VP not the Headmistress, just thought you should know lol
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How is it in every RP our characters somehow end up rivals of some sort?
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