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Yoinks, knowing me I probably skimmed over it on the backstory but yeah, Alex's parents were supposed to both be witches that ultimately got a divorce. Biological mom is on the run from magical CPS but that can be glossed over. With his father meeting, getting to know, and marrying another witch in Maryland where they moved into a new home and got to make a new life together.

I've added those small and important details but is there anything else that needs to be changed or smoothed over?
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It's good now! Go ahead and put him in the character tab whenever you can C:
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Here is my Witch!


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@sassy1085 HELL YES ANOTHER ENBY WITCHLING I AM H E R E F O R I T 💜
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@sassy1085 HELL YES ANOTHER ENBY WITCHLING I AM H E R E F O R I T 💜


I have never seen you type anything all-caps before so I can tell you're excited XD
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Here is my Witch!


I really love your character sheet! However, I have a few issues with it.

1. The backstory. This is a small nitpick, but I noticed that you said that their aunt and mother 'sent them off' to the coven to learn more magic. The focus of this roleplay is young witches (witchlings) about to be initiated into the coven. You also said 'teachers'- this is not a school roleplay, although it certainly shares some characteristics with one. I would love if you cleared it up a little!
2. The grammar. I would love it if you ran your sheet through a service like Grammarly! With people who use they/them pronouns in the English language, you're supposed to use the third person plural conjugations of verbs instead of the third person singular conjugations, as you did a couple times. This is a common mistake, but I'd love it if you could fix it! Other than this, there are a few mistakes I'd love if you could correct, just to make it a little more readable.



I really like Maggie! You can go ahead and put her in the character tab.
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I fix the grammar and the backstory, I try Grammarly like you say but I also try another grammar service and if there still any bad grammar in there, I'll happily fix it
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I am interested, and well done in composing all of this. I will see about getting a character proposal up in the next day or so.
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I couldn't help but borrow from @WanderingSpirit's very attractive format. I present for your consideration:

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I couldn't help but borrow from @WanderingSpirit's very attractive format. I present for your consideration:



Hey, Rekker! Glad to have you. I like your character sheet, but there is one issue.

Lycanthropy doesn't affect witches. It's okay if you didn't get this, since we discussed it almost exclusively in the Discord, but witches cannot be turned into werewolves or vampires. Being bitten by one does have an effect on them, however- it makes them very ill.
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@canaryrose, Thanks for the input. I will work on coming up with an alternative powerset and history. Been brainstorming with the crew in discord. Will hopefully have an idea by tomorrow.

Leaning toward Druidism. Shapeshifting, Animal companionship/channeling, connection with nature, etc.
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Ok, I've finally got Jeremy here. I've been writing and rewriting it in bits and pieces over the last eightish days I think, so tell me if it's disjointed garbage or anything like that. It's also nearly 3:30 now, so sorry to whoever reads this and tries to make sense of whatever I'm saying. Anyway here he is.

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Take 2!
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@Canaryrose I don’t remember if you ever saw the updates I did to Iris’ sheet, but they’re in her backstory. If you already saw them, oops.
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I like it, but I'd love if you could find a better face claim. That one looks a tad unrealistic.

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@Canaryrose I don’t remember if you ever saw the updates I did to Iris’ sheet, but they’re in her backstory. If you already saw them, oops.


It's fine now. Put her in the Character tab.
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@Canaryrose edited my face claim
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