Yeah, the whole idea of making a Caster out of a not-so-popular mathematical figure who's only about 250 years old didn't seem to fly with me, especially considering the other submissions on this thread. I needed to kick it up a notch, so I decided to submit for a Lancer slot instead—someone much closer to home, if you get the idea.Name: Agüeybana
Class: Lancer
Gender: Female
Appearance:
Alignment: Lawful Good
Personality: Kind-hearted, humble, and honorable. Dislikes unnecessary conflict, but she's too quick to place her trust on those who claim to be allies.
History: Agüeybana, whose name translates to "The Great Sun" is the most powerful of the Taino caciques, essentially ruling over the entirety of the island of Boring (Known today as Puerto Rico, following the island's colonization by the Spaniards). Upon the arrival of Christopher Columbus in the year 1493, she greeted the incoming foreigners and accepted them into her tribe. The two clans managed to keep a short-lived, yet close, friendship, only to later be betrayed by the more technologically advanced Spaniards, who forced Agüeybana and her people into slavery. Eventually, the Taino tribe as a whole decided to rebel against the Spanish army and fought a climactic battle against them, with Agüeybana leading the charge. During this skirmish, Agüeybana was struck by a rifleman's bullet and died shortly after from the resulting injury.
Weapons:
Stone Spear ~ Essentially a rudimentary Lance made by binding a sharpened stone to a sturdy enough wooden shaft. Deals bonus damage against animals and beasts, but is inherently ineffective against most types of armors.
Atlatl ~ A primitive long range weapon that launches Spears with much greater speed and distance than a regular javelin.
Parameters:
STR: C
CON: B
AGI: B
MGI: D
LCK: E
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance - D+: Under normal circumstances, Lancer only has enough Resistance to cancel Single-Action spells. However her Protection from the Wind skill boosts this rank to A when a Wind-Elemental spell targets her.
Personal Skills:
Charisma - B: Lancer was able to watch over the entire island's worth of tribes with little to no conflicts, and successfully managed to unite thousands of able-bodied warriors in a rebellion against an enemy army despite being at a clear disadvantage.
Warrior of the Forest - A: Lancer spent her entire life learning how to hunt prey in the dense rainforest environment of El Yunque. Her senses are drastically boosted while in similar environments, and she receives a buff in AGI when climbing trees.
Protection from Wind - A: A blessing from the Taino deity Yukino, given to Lancer in order to counter the powerful storms brought by the evil good Juracán. At this rank, no living magus is capable of fazing Lancer with any sort of Wind Elemental magic.
Noble Phantasm:
Sleeping Giant's Spear ~ Yúcahu Bauga Maórocoti
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit/Anti-Fortress
Range: 1/2-50
Maximum number of targets: 1/50
Description: A blessed spear used for religious ceremonies, with a shaft carved from the Maga tree and a spearhead carved from a holy stone artifact. Agüeybana brought this spear to the battlefield during the Tainos' climactic clash against the Spanish conquistador Ponce de Leon and his army.
As a Noble Phantasm, this spear can manifest itself by having Lancer's Stone Spear transfigured into its true form. While in this state, the spear grants Lancer the ability to ignore any armor or shielding that the target Servant has equipped, essentially forcing the target to defend while only taking his/her innate CON parameter into account.
This Noble Phantasm can also be used in conjunction with Lancer's Atlatl. If Lancer were to launch the spear in its true form using the Atlatl, the Lance will obtain the properties of a magical explosive, with the spear violently releasing all of its concentrated mana in the form of an explosion, with the spear at the epicenter.
Immediately afterwards, this Noble Phantasm will revert to its original state as a Stone Spear, and must be either recalled with Magecraft from Lancer's Master or picked up from wherever it could have landed. Lancer must then wait until her mana is restored back to its maximum level before the transfiguration can be repeated.
(EDIT: Fixed the parameters and skills at the GM's request. The description for Lancer's Noble Phantasm has been completely rewritten to suit her origin story a little better. As of the moment I'm writing this footnote, I am ready to submit this sheet for review.)
As for the range, I worded it that way because even if a target is out of range, both her NPs are highly mobile and can simply reposition.
@Gummy1295
Yeah, must have missed that, my bad.
Remove the modifier from Magic Resistance. Like Fiddle said, Protection from Wind covers that already, so there's no need for it.
Please justify the defense nullification aspect of the spear, as well as the thrown attack. Are there historical anecdotes or anything like that you're pulling from?
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If this was the case then every Rider's NP would be 1-99.
For the Bounded Field, it should be the range of the Bounded Field itself. You can use Bloodfort as inspiration, but since it's a hut it should be a decent amount smaller.
For the mortar and pestle, range should be 1, since it only affects itself and Caster.
@Gummy1295
Yeah, must have missed that, my bad.
Remove the modifier from Magic Resistance. Like Fiddle said, Protection from Wind covers that already, so there's no need for it.
Please justify the defense nullification aspect of the spear, as well as the thrown attack. Are there historical anecdotes or anything like that you're pulling from?
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I'm sorry about the Magic Resistance modifier, I totally thought I got rid of it.
Actually, yes, there is documentation of this Heroic Spirit actually existing. Like I mentioned in the History section, I loosely based her off of the original Arawak/Taino Chief of the same name... And I turned him into a girl, but that's nothing new to any Fate fan.
As for her spear, I had to make it up with bits and pieces from Puerto Rico's mythology and culture, since there is no recorded instance of a particular spear used by Agüeybana. The components of the transfigured spear—the wooden shaft carved from the Maga tree and the stone head carved from a holy artifact (zemi)—all come from materials that actually exist. The Maga tree produces the sturdiest wood out of all the island's endemic trees, and its flower is currently Puerto Rico's National Flower. The zemi are small stone sculptures that bear the faces of the Tainos' holy deities.
The Atlatl is a real weapon used by actual Native Americans that launched short spears using leverage as a long-range alternative to a bow and arrow. I'm personally not sure if the Taino people had access to the weapon, but it's a characteristic weapon of the "Indians" that were also conquered by Columbus.
As for the throwing spear, I admit to making it a shittier copy of Gáe Bolg...
@ADamnFiddle@Over Illusion
I'll fix the formatting and make the translated skills less awkward later. Will do a full Personality tab, too. It's 4:30 AM at the time of posting because I live in an inferior timezone.Assassin"My blade is yours, Master. May it execute all who are guilty."
True Name: Charles-Henri Sanson, The High Executioner of France
Master: Pending.
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Height/Weight: 175cm / 65kgStats
STR: D
END: D
AGI: C
MGI: D
LCK: A
NP: BClass SkillsPresence Concealment: D
Class Skill of the Assassin Class. The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant. Hides one's presence as a Servant. Suitable for spying. A low ranking of Presence Concealment unbecoming for an Assassin to the level that a Servant can infer one's presence at once. Although summoned in the Assassin class, the act of assassination is near impossible for Sanson.Personal SkillsExecutioner: A++
A Skill that increases damage towards those who have perpetuated crime or committed some other atrocity to which would brand them under the societal confine of the label "Evil". In other words, this Skill allows Sanson to deal increased damage to Servants of the Evil alignment. Also, a Servant will make themselves a potential collateral of the ability as well if they also meet the aforementioned condition for the increased damage. Severing evil by means of evil; the ultimate judgement act.Medical Techniques: A
Modern medicine that surpasses the medical technology of those times (in which transmission proliferated) in a few degrees. Still, this Skill does not make a comparison by modern standards, instead determining by the standards of the age in which the Servant lived. This ability allows for the user to possess a much more advanced knowledge of the human anatomy compared to what would be considered modern in their original era.Human Anatomy Research: B
A Skill representing a concept placed on the 'other side' of execution techniques and medicine. Sanson did not neglect researching on where he could hurt the human body without killing, without leaving prognostic symptoms. Putting it in another way, it means he understands where it is okay to injure. Obtained through studying the best ways to decapitate someone with one strike.Weapon
Sanson wields a T-shaped Claymore bearing the inscription Epée de Justice. A sword designed to execute others via beheading, used by the Sansons to carry out executions before Charles-Henri created the guillotine. The three holes in the the T-shape made a screeching noise if the swing wasn't completely straight, as a reminder for the executioner to strike true on the first blow and make it painless.Noble PhantasmLa Mort Espoir
Death is Hope For Tomorrow
Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: A
Range: 1 ~ 10
Maximum Number of Targets: 1
The embodiment of the true execution tool, the guillotine. The chances of death are determined not by resistance to curses or good fortune, but whatever or not one can defeat fate with a strong mentality. A so-called Mental Interference type Noble Phantasm, Heroes with anecdotes of being executed rather than dying in battle undergo a disadvantageous check. The guillotine manifests when the true name is invoked within mid-range, pulling its target and holding them in place through shadowy arms. One second later the guillotine will fall. Here, judgement is made. If the target fails the check, the guillotine falls without change and one is decapitated.
STATUS
Class: Lancer
True Name: Cú Chulainn
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Personality: Fiercely proud, fiercely loyal. Defend your own, defend your principles, defend your pride.
Summoned in a War for the Holy Grail, Ireland's Child of Light shows a laid-back side outside of battle. He has no wish to make on the so-called 'omnipotent wishgranter'. Content with his life as it was, he seems rather intent on 'just having a good time', through fighting the other heroes summoned for this battle royale as well as enjoying his stay in the modern world. He will go as far as showing that same side to those that should obviously be enemies, claiming there is nothing wrong with bonding over drinks and making merry together even if they'll have to kill each other when the mugs are empty. Simply put 'this is this, that is that'.
Of course, he has no intention to lose even if he ends up liking those people that would be his enemies. To begin with, he is not unfamiliar with 'killing the ones you love' as being the duty of a hero, and he sees the battles to be fought as something where one puts their will and pride on the line. As someone who defines himself through that pride as a hero, the will to obtain a decisive victory comes as a matter of course.
As far as disposition towards the Master is concerned, though he may be unprofessional in terms of addressing them, one should not consider that a sign that he does not put too much stock in the relationship. Rather, if one manages to get this troublesome man to acknowledge them as such, they might want to consider their word as good as law. Though he naturally prefers the type that isn't too serious for their own good or orders him to do underhanded things, which he heavily dislikes, he is nonetheless bound by his own honor and principles to obey without question.
The core of Cú Chulainn is, thus, pride and unwavering loyalty.
Perhaps as an aside, if he does have an actual problem at some point, this guy is, as you might expect, the sort to just pretend it isn't there until it goes away. To complete the phrase from a few paragraphs prior 'he is intent on having a good time even when the world is intent on not letting him have a good time'.
Fundamentally, he can be said to be a man who understands the 'inherent unfairness of the world'. Justice, injustice, they are just words. All that matters is sticking to your principles and that which you believe in.
He lived and died as a hero, his wish from the very start, fighting people he did not wish to fight, killing people he did not wish to kill and slain by an unreasonable woman due to his own unreasonable promises, yet shows not even a lick of regret for what some would consider a life chock-full of wrong turns. If anything, he is the sort to just look back on it and laugh himself silly.
Rather, it is because he can at least do that much that he is sure it was a life worth living, a life worth not regretting. Killing his dear friend, killing his own son. . .and yet, and yet, it is fine. So long as Cú Chulainn still holds to that pride as a hero, so long as he still makes that the core of his identity, then their deaths had meaning. Even if they were sad, they were not meaningless.
He had already passed the point of no return from a very young age, at least according to himself. 'I'll be like that shooting star, using up all my brilliance, and then I'll disappear' was something he once said in his youth, and a promise he followed to the end. Doubtlessly, as one of Ireland's greatest, the trail he left behind was nothing short of dazzling.
After he stepped on so many things to get there, it was the only thing it could have been.
History: I think we all know it by this point, no?
Weapon: His crimson spear Gáe Bolg, crafted by that Queen from the Land of Shadows from the bones of a powerful sea monster. Cursed, bloodthirsty and doubtlessly a first-rate weapon to go with a first-rate legend.
PARAMETERS
STR: B END: C
AGI: A MGI: C
LCK: E
CLASS SKILLS
Magic Resistance: C. The ability to negate magecraft that seeks to directly enact effects on the 'self'. Rather than the Resistance of magi, it's more accurately compared to a threshold. He can nullify magecraft of Rank C and below in this manner, though he remains susceptible to Grand Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
. . .You were expecting more? Well, according to him, this is all he needs anyway.
PERSONAL SKILLS
Divinity: B. Divine Spirit Aptitude. As the son of the great god of the sun who governed every skill, Lugh of the Dannan, and a mortal woman, Deichtine, he displays a high Rank.
Disengage: C. The ability to break away from combat. He shows an excellent ability as far as seeing through battle situations is concerned, and he can withdraw effectively should a battle situation be deemed as unfavorable. Furthermore, it possesses the bonus of returning battle conditions to a 'turn one' state upon utilizing the ability. He is excellent for scouting and hit-and-run attacks.
Though commanding him to not to engage properly might net you a sullen look.
Protection from Arrows: B. An ability he was born with, the capacity to defend against long-range attacks as a matter of course. Even in situations where the shooter is impossible to see, his eyes will track the projectile and he will deftly avoid or deflect it, even if it is a Noble Phantasm. However, he is not able to employ this skill to avoid attacks that have a wide range or weapons that simply happen to possess long reach.
Battle Continuation: A. Capacity to survive despite injury, and the ability to retreat to ally territory upon defeat. As his legend tells of the time he tied himself to a rock to hold off an advancing army three days before finally dying, Cú Chulainn displays the highest Rank in the Skill. He can be doubtlessly called 'first rate' when it comes to surviving, and if it is a matter of holding the enemy off or fighting defensively, he is surely an unsurpassable wall.
Rune Magic: B. The ancient Magic Crest of Northern Europe, he obtained all eighteen and their meanings from his teacher, the Witch from the Land of Shadows, and he is able to devise an impressive array of effects, ranging from augmenting the Rank of his weaponry to defenses against high-grade Mystic Eyes up to even a shield that can block a great Noble Phantasm using their power. His ability with magecraft is enough to qualify him for the Caster container, perhaps due to the custom that warriors trained in that land must be proficient in terms of martial skill and magical ability both.
That said, he much prefers to be in possession of his spear, and he doesn't particularly use them unless he has an actual need to.
NOBLE PHANTASM
Gáe Bolg: Piercing Death Thorn.
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit
Range: 2-4
Maximum Number of Targets: 1
The crystallization of Cú Chulainn's ability with this spear, sublimated into a Noble Phantasm in and of itself. Created by Lancer for his own purposes, it is, in essence, a karmic curse that stands as something 'half a step away from an Authority', easily perceived as a 'sure-kill strike' even while Lancer prepares to activate it. Upon speaking the name aloud, the spear engages a reversion of causalty in order to 'without any doubt, pierce the opponent's heart'. While the normal order of events would be 'the spear was thrust, so the heart was pierced', the effect turns it into something more akin to 'the heart was pierced, so the spear was thrust'. The fact that the opponent's heart 'has already been pierced' becomes set in stone, and the act of thrusting the spear can be called a formality to show the world that they are dead, the weapon twisting impossibly in order to reach its target through the shortest route. Furthermore, upon successful piercing, it will annihilate the body from the inside with its thousand thorns.
An unreasonable ability belonging to an equally unreasonable man, inherent toughness or skill matters not. Should there be nothing handy to prevent the curse from hitting or the target be unable to back out of range before activation, the only way to truly avoid it is through succeeding in a Luck check and possessing sufficient skill to avoid the thrust both.
Furthermore, even if one manages to avoid a fatal blow, the wound will still be cursed and unable to heal so long as the spear exists, and the activated effect of the Noble Phantasm is terrifyingly efficient, to the point of being usable even six times in a row.
That said, it isn't a problem if you can survive with your heart destroyed, no? The greatest enemy of this spear, those who don't die even if they are killed.
Gáe Bolg: Striking Death Flight.
Rank: B+
Type: Anti-Army
Range: 4-40
Maximum Number of Targets: 50
The second use of the crimson spear Lancer wields. In this case, it is a full-out deployment of all of Cú Chulainn's magical energy in order to unleash the curse to its fullest extent as an Anti-Army type of attack capable of blowing away enemy hordes like nothing, comparable to a missile in terms of use and causing a great explosion upon striking the target.
This is the original use of the spear as he was taught, rather than something he came up with later in his life such as Piercing Death Thorn, and it is also one of the things that enshrined him in legend to begin with, a technique to overwhelm and decimate an entire army rather than efficiently dispatching single warriors. He boasts of this one's capacity to slay the enemy as well, and even if the enemy is agile or possesses a powerful body, the range, precision and speed of the throw combined with the power and range of the explosion itself makes it no less of a 'sure-kill' than the thrust version, if in a different manner, unless one is properly equipped to deal with this use, as well.
He thinks that there are only two, conditionally three people in the entire world who are able to exceed his ability when throwing it and his distance record.
That should do it.
@ADamnFiddle
@ADamnFiddle
Has there been a second Saber yet? I saw Mordred was here, and thought 'how about that other big traitorous knight?' I've been thinking of playing him for a while now, and he's pretty easy to fit into the one NP, three skills mould.
(Apologies to Tite Kubo)Name: Ganelon
Title: The Paladin of Treachery
Class: Saber
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Personality: A cynic to his core, Ganelon is a pragmatic man who despises pretension. He has no regard for the concepts of loyalty or honour, and will happily betray any Master who sends him on a suicide mission. To Ganelon, a 'hero' is nothing more than a murderer, and a 'traitor' is someone unfortunate enough to be on the losing side.
He doesn't attempt to hide his cynicism, but will often frame it as humour when talking to people he's trying to deceive. He likes to poke holes in other people's philosophies, but hides the level of venom he often feels for them. If he were to meet a 'true hero', someone without the flaws that his peers had, he would attempt to prove them wrong, to bring them down to his level.
Still, he doesn't desire revenge, or to undo the past, or to destroy others. His wish is for a world without hypocrisy, a world where murderers aren't glorified, where traitors aren't vilified. Perhaps, such a person longed to be a hero, once. But he has long since forgotten such a pointless wish.
History: The treacherous villain from The Song of Roland. He is the titular Paladin's uncle, and though not often counted among the twelve peers, was also a member. Upon being volunteered for what he considered a suicide mission - taking a message of peace to the Muslim forces in Spain - by his nephew, Ganelon secretly swore vengeance upon him and Charlemagne's court. Instead of delivering the treaty, he sent a declaration of war, and then offered to betray the Franks, plotting to kill Roland. After the battle, Ganelon's treachery was discovered, and though he defended it as legitimate revenge, he was found guilty. He was then gruesomely executed, torn apart by horses.
Unrecorded by the histories is Ganelon's part in Charlemagne's earlier conflicts. While most of the other Paladins took part in romantic adventures, Ganelon served as Charlemagne's black ops Paladin, one who assassinated and massacred any who opposed the king. For somebody who had seen the dark side of such a 'hero', Ganelon grew to despise the hypocrisy of those who surrounded him. Those who called themselves heroes, but rampaged across the country. Those who called themselves Christian, but massacred thousands. Such people were as deserving of death as those they visit it upon.
Weapon: The sword Murglais, his Noble Phantasm. His second sword is nameless, a gift from Valebrun, that he uses when wishing to disguise the nature of his Noble Phantasm. He also has his warhorse, Tachebrun, though it is not a Noble Phantasm.
Parameters:
STR: B
CON: B
AGI: B
MGI: C
LCK: D
Class Skills
Magic Resistance: C
Cancels spells with a chant below two verses. An essential skill for a Paladin of the Saber class, though it seems his lack of piety has reduced the rank somewhat.
Riding: B
Most vehicles and animals can be handled with reasonable skill. This does not extend to Phantasmal species. A natural skill for a knight.
Personal Skills
Golden Rule: C+
A skill reflecting the rewards Ganelon received for his betrayal of Charlemagne. Under normal circumstances, acquiring moderate amounts of money is possible, but after betraying another, Ganelon's fortune regarding wealth will spike massively.
Instinct: C
The ability to identify the optimal course of action during a fight. For Ganelon, the ability is limited, and mainly used to discover whether a certain fight can be considered a suicide mission. He can easily tell if an enemy is one that is 'impossible' for him to overcome.
Espionage: B
The ability to make one's presence fail to register as hostile. The perfect skill for a 'traitor'. Ganelon's hostile intent is very difficult to discern, until he attacks or makes his plan known.
Noble Phantasm
Murglais: Black Brand of Death
B-Rank Anti-unit
Targets: 1
Some say that Murglais was once a holy blade, blackened by Ganelon's oath of treachery upon the relics sealed in the blade's pommel. This is not the case. Murglais, now and always, was a tool for efficient murder. No matter how bright the sword might seem, no matter how pure the wielder, it is still simply a way of killing others. This is the concept that the sword embodies. Anyone viewing the drawn Murglais can tell that it is not a hero's weapon, that it is a cursed blade, nothing more than a tool of murder.
Upon striking the enemy's flesh, Murglais leaves a black mark on the target. If Murglais touches the mark for a second time, the target will die. A high luck-check may prevent this, as might certain skills, but otherwise, the target simply perishes. It is a weapon more suited to an Assassin than a Saber, more to a spy than a paladin.
@Over Illusion
If you're looking for some historical explanations for Agüeybana's Noble Phantasm, I've come up with a few.
Defense Nullifying Effect ~ The original Taino tribe would go into battle wearing little to no clothing or armor. Just like the description of the Noble Phantasm states, the spear would be able to even out the disadvantage by ignoring the opponent's armor... As if they were riding into battle bollock naked.
Explosive Throwing Spear ~ Fun fact: The English word "hurricane" comes from the name of the Taino deity of storms, Juracán. You can see where this is going already. Instead of a rapid release of concentrated mana, a large Wind-elemental shock wave or a cyclone could be materialized instead.
(Lemme know if you're buying this shit.)
Justify Instinct.
Keep in mind the NP's a curse and will be fucked by anti-curse stuff of a sufficient grade.
