[OOC] Fate/Vacuous Radiance

[Over Illusion]

Alright I'm no longer dying so:

@Kalleth
For Saber, please add in Class Skill descriptions before I do a proper look-over. I'm also assuming you're changing some stuff based on what you said in the Discord.

For Nick, why did this tutor go out of their way to find some kid with mediocre circuits and teach them? Were they just weird like that?

Also, as an aside, the General Fundamentals course takes five years to complete, and that was for a guy who was hailed as a prodigy. Very unlikely he'd be able to do it in less, all the more so when you've got all his other stuff.

Keep in mind that the fist wraps will only let you plunder Od, which is very small in how much energy there is compared to mana. Also, I will be blunt in warning you that if you punch a Servant with those on, there is a very decent probability you will explode.

The gloves don't really work the way you want them to as far as the positive feedback loop goes, since the amount of prana you get from punching someone isn't going to be very much at all. If you punch someone, you'll only be getting a few units of prana from them per punch, so you can maybe make the subsequent punch a bit stronger, but the second punch won't be any stronger than the third, and won't be much stronger than the first.

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@ADamnFiddle @Over Illusion What do you think would be appropriate prep time for the hut and the horsemen? I was thinking the hut could maybe be built over the course of a couple days, and imbuing all four horsemen with E-Rank Servant power would take maybe a week.

@Turboshitter

Two days for the hut is fine.

Recall what I said about Servant-tier familiars. Avicebron's, which require 800 year old materials and additional prep, aren't at that level at all, and even Paracelsus's Elementals which require making a philosopher's stone as step one aren't. If you want the horsemen to reach the level of Servants, it'll take more time than the Grail War will last for. I recommend scaling them down so you can make creating them more feasible within the time constraints of the Grail's activity.

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Decided to drop Agüeybana and replacing her with a newer, more well-known Servant of the same class.

So, let's make this Swift and deadly. Presenting another Rule 63'd warrior who fights with a pointy stick: Meet Longinus, better known as that one "guy" who pierced Jesus Christ's waist with his Lance to make sure he was dead.

Longinus

True Name: Longinus
Class: Lancer
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Appearance:



Parameters:

STR: B
CON: B
AGI: C
MGI: E
LCK: E

Bio: In most interpretations of the Christian Bible, Longinus is the name of the Roman centurion soldier who pierced the waist of Jesus Christ during his crucifixion, causing the last of the Five Holy Wounds on Jesus's body. After the events following the death of Christ, Longinus converted to Christianity and was eventually canonized as a Saint by the Vatican many years after his death.

Class Skills:

Magic Resistance: B ~ While Lancer-Class Servants don't usually sport a rank higher than C in this skill, Lancer's direct involvement with the son of God justifies a boost in this skill. At this level, Lancer is completely resistant to most types of modern Magecraft, bar spells at the level of High Thaumaturgy.

Personal Skills:

Saint: A ~ Lancer's acceptance into the Vatican's catalog of saints grants her a sizable boost to her Magic Resistance and increase her Luck parameter threefold (essentially changing her rank in the parameter to E++ or C while she possesses this skill. Any type of mental interference nullifies this skill, lowering her Magic Resistance to D and reverting her Luck parameter to E rank until the effects of the mental interference fade out.

Charisma: C ~ Before she impaled the son of God, Lancer was a high-ranking Commander in the Roman Army. As a result of her experience leading armies, she is adequately skilled at controlling a large group of people.

Noble Phantasm:

Name: Spear of Destiny ~ Holy Lance of Longinus
Rank: C
Type: Anti-Army
Range: 1-30
Maximum number of targets: 1-50

A spear tainted with the blood of Christ. When used as a melee weapon, the spear causes bonus True damage to Servants with an Evil alignment. The spear's true power manifests itself as a beam of Holy-elemental energy that emerges from the spear's head and travels in a straight line in the direction it was thrust, causing Holy-elemental damage to any opponent that comes into contact with it.

So, how about it?

@Gummy1295

Change the description for Saint to one more in line with the canon one.

I'm not sure what "Holy-elemental damage" is for the NP's purposes.

STR to C, CON to C, AGI to B.

While this isn't technically a problem, the lance is kind of a big deal in canon, so you could raise it above C rank if you're so inclined.

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I made an Archer who focused on skills more due to what his legend provided so hopefully he is fine. I believe he is up for review~

Servant

^SERVANT

Name: Ekalayva, the Forsaken Student
Class: Archer
Gender: Male
Appearance:

Alignment: Chaotic Good

^BIO

Personality & History Ekalavya

Heir to the Nisadha tribe and by the time he ascended the throne as their last king, he was also their greatest hunter at the same time. Lost in the wilderness, Archer was taken in where he was raised by the tribe and taught their ways were he learned their ways of archery and hunter exceptionally fast. At the young age of eighteen, the chieftain of the tribe had sent him to learn from the greater masters so that he could learn from the best of the best. Learn the traditional archery form known as Danurveda taught by the on and Guru Drona, it would be the rocky start of his journey that would lead him on his path.

Upon being summoned into the Grail War, he has no opinions about the thing itself as the only Archer-class Servant there is no competition for the title of being the best archer. Being a fairly competitive person, he likes playing the game and feeling the rush of combat which will be suitable enough for joining the Grail War at the very least unless another motive encourages him. While not a bloodthirsty individual, he likes to see if these so-called 'Servants' have the skill to back themselves up and prove that they have the mettle of being summoned. He only hopes his Master is as capable of proving themselves to him and if not then he does not have to give much value on their opinion.

Despite his firm beliefs, he is not a boring stoic but likes to have his own fun and entertainment to pass the time. Not telling the truth but neither lying, he likes to tell dance around the question and give vague answers that would lead to nowhere. Along with his behavior eventually, ends up with him being sarcastic and playful despite sometimes it not being proper during the moment at times. If he is the one giving advice, it often is brushed aside as a snide comment that his previous behavior had built an expectation of what to receive from him until they learn the mistake themselves. In the end, whether he wins or loses the War doesn't matter to him so long the trip between start and finish was enjoyable then it was worth it.

Despite some exaggeration in his legends, his relative anonymity leaves him remaining true to who he was truly in life. Being a simply extremely skilled archer but never was granted the honor of wielding the Divine Construct, Pashupata, or ever managing to defeat the god Krishna in his lifetime. All he was in his story was a simple little cog, collateral, something that was needed to be tended to as the gods set the stage for their chosen heroes. He during his life time had the potential to become a exceptional heroic spirit on the level of his pantheon's choices like Arjuna or Karna but this is where he popped up in the end.

Weapon: His Bow primarily

^PARAMETERS

STR: B
CON: C
AGI: A
MGI: C
LCK: E

^{CLASS SKILLS}

• Independent Action A: Ekalavya is a hunter who can prowl and wait for hours until the perfect moment presents itself. Using great Noble Phantasm would indeed increase energy consumption and require assistance from his the reserves of his Master, but outside of that, he can take action without them. With Rank A Independent Action, it is possible for him to stay in the world for around a week without an anchor into this world.

• Magic Resistance C: While born in an age before the decline of mystery, he never dealt with magic in his legend. With this rank, he is able to cancel spells with chants below two verses but cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.

^{PERSONAL SKILLS}

• Instinct B++: A refined sixth sense that developed during his life as part of being the matchless hunter in his clan that allowed him to follow his prey. It is more suited for tracking rather than use in combat, allowing Archer to predict the movement of his opponents without penalties to his vision or sight at its full potential. Given that he is pursuing a target this skill is gets a plus modifier along with another plus modifier is given when that target is unaware as well. After the first round of entering combat, this skill loses all modifiers to it but is still capable of reducing penalties to his sight and hearing by half.

• Vitrification B: A skill that is an intrinsic requirement into being a hunter of any kind and more for a great hunter to have. It allows Archer to blend into his surrounding, reflecting his ability to stalk and approach various kind of game and fell them before they knew the bow was drawn. It is an ability that can emulate Presence Concealment to a degree at [ C Rank ] and more effective the farther away the target is from Archer. If no hunter could disguise their intentions, all the sensitive animals of the land would flee from the intruders on their homes.

• Clairvoyance C+: At this rank, Archer is able to see at far distances and track fast moving objects without a problem so long it is within sight. With the combination of the Instinct Skill, Archer is able to obtain a plus modifier when trailing his target with his eyes that can pierce through invisibility if he sees them transitioning or signs of their presence. Within reason, mundane obstruction such as shrubbery and vegetation are treated as if they didn't count in hiding a tracked target or partially negated. It is an ability that hunters have with their eyes that can follow game into the wilderness while in the chase of game.

^{NOBLE PHANTASMS}

Name: Danurveda
Title: Stolen Lessons of Knowledge
Rank: B
NP Type: Anti-Unit (Support)
Range: -
Maximum Number of Targets: 1
Description: Despite rejection from his preferred teacher Guru Drona, Archer took it upon himself to continue in teaching himself and self-improvement. Beginning a disciplined program of self-study over many years that honed his skills under the watch of interested Gods. With time, he became an archer of exceptional prowess, greater than Drona's own student Arjuna in what was settled in a contest. After his victory, he was accepted as a student for many years which is this Noble Phantasm crystallized as his skill and dedication.

His achievement gave him the skill 'Uncrowned Eternal Arms Mastership' at [ A Rank ], as the representation of the self-taught way that Archer learned his skills. To those who do not know the true identity of Archer perceives his parameters are seen as one rank lower and his skills are seen two ranks lower than what they actually are. With the self-teaching that he placed himself under, he pushed himself to be the best student even if his teacher did not recognize him officially and from that dedication, he received the skill of 'Wisdom of the Guru (False)' where he learned all the techniques of his teacher's advance military arts at [ C Rank ].

Name: Dakshina
Title: The God's Sundering Renewal
Rank: A
NP Type: Anti-Unit (Support)
Range: -
Maximum Number of Targets: 1
Description: A testament to Archer's dedication to not only his teacher but the craft of archery, even if he would be opposed to reaching his full potential. After the defeat of Arjuna, his teacher Drona asked for his thumb, a request that would destroy his form of archery if he meant it. He did and thus Archer gave his thumb to Drona who received the idea from the Goddess Krishna who wanted to decrease Ekalavya's strength and making him a weaker opponent not only after he defeated the Goddess' favored Arjuna but for the future that could come from him. The opportunity only served to strengthen Archer and grew from such a setback, being a person who enjoyed the journey rather than the destination.

After his offering to his teacher, he relearned how to wield the bow both hands and once more properly that bestowed him the skill [ Eternal Arms Mastership (Bows) ] at [ A-rank ]. Crystallizing the growth that bloomed despite the spite placed upon him that pushed him forward to making himself even greater. His skill in Archery allowed him to perform extraordinary feats that wouldn't be possible, defying what logic would dictate as impossible or difficult such as bending around corners or arcing in directions simply from his own skill. As a side effect though, his Luck Stat has been decreased significantly through the divine intervention within his life negatively.

^NOTES

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Hopefully Archer isn't too over the top, if anything needs to be changed, just shoot me the areas that need revisions to them~

@Italicized

Instinct isn't seeing the future, it's feeling the future. I recommend removing it and sticking with Clairvoyance.

Vitrification isn't blending into the environment so much as just mental interference protection by being so calm; the emulation of PC is more akin to something that arises from the plus modifier in not!Kojiro's case, so remove that bit.

The first NP doesn't feel justified in being an NP given that you're basically using an NP slot to get two extra Personal Skill slots. I'd recommend removing Instinct, redoing Clairvoyance accordingly, and subbing in Uncrowned to the then-open slot.

I don't really see the point of the second Noble Phantasm, since Eternal Arms Mastership just prevents mental interference from messing with your fighting skills, but Vitrification blocks out mental interference already, so it feels very redundant. Also the same issue as above applies in that this is basically just using an NP slot as a skill slot. As an aside, even EMIYA can make his arrows into curveballs, so something like that is fairly standard for Archers.

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I've been busy recently, so I've missed some things, but looking back it seems like a few people are quite against Achilles. Maybe I'll switch him for another hero.

@ManyThings

Don't feel obligated to by any means; neither Fiddle nor myself have any objections with him from a balancing perspective. If you would like to then you're welcome to, but yeah listen to your heart.

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I expect to have my Master application done soon. I've ran into a few issues, but I guess that everything shall be alright by this weekend.

@Kuroyomihime

Neat.

[Gummy1295]

@Over Illusion

]1. I'll change it right away.

2. I originally meant the skill to use True Ether-elemental damage, but even though it's been tainted with the blood of Jesus Christ, I think it would make his Noble Phantasm far too strong for the Master or the Servant to handle. I'm keeping the long-range, Excalibur-ish beam of light, but I'm a lot more comfortable changing the element of the Noble Phantasm's attack to Fire, with bonus damage to Evil-alignment Servants.

3. That's workable. I'll get it done right now, as well.

4. I think I'll need to ask permission before increasing this NP's rank to anything above B. The Holy Lance is indeed a relevant artifact in Modern Christianity, but would it be fair to raise it to a rank rivaling or nearing that of Excalibur? Or would that be too powerful for this iteration of the Holy Grail War?

[Over Illusion]

@Over Illusion

]1. I'll change it right away.

2. I originally meant the skill to use True Ether-elemental damage, but even though it's been tainted with the blood of Jesus Christ, I think it would make his Noble Phantasm far too strong for the Master or the Servant to handle. I'm keeping the long-range, Excalibur-ish beam of light, but I'm a lot more comfortable changing the element of the Noble Phantasm's attack to Fire, with bonus damage to Evil-alignment Servants.

3. That's workable. I'll get it done right now, as well.

4. I think I'll need to ask permission before increasing this NP's rank to anything above B. The Holy Lance is indeed a relevant artifact in Modern Christianity, but would it be fair to raise it to a rank rivaling or nearing that of Excalibur? Or would that be too powerful for this iteration of the Holy Grail War?

@Gummy1295

True Ether isn't an element, it's just a type of magical energy. If you're giving additional damage then I'll need a metric. I'd also appreciate justification for why it's stronger against Evil-Aligned.

Longinus is viewed as in the same light as Rhongomyniad according to the latter's sheet, so I personally wouldn't have any issue with placing it on the level of Rhon. Of course, prana cost would scale with that as well. Best to check if Fiddle has any objection to that himself, though.

[Gummy1295]

True Ether isn't an element, it's just a type of magical energy. If you're giving additional damage then I'll need a metric. I'd also appreciate justification for why it's stronger against Evil-Aligned.

Longinus is viewed as in the same light as Rhongomyniad according to the latter's sheet, so I personally wouldn't have any issue with placing it on the level of Rhon. Of course, prana cost would scale with that as well. Best to check if Fiddle has any objection to that himself, though.

@Over Illusion

Rhon is ranked at A++, according to the wiki, so I'll take the risk of giving it the same ranking as a tentative. If Fiddle thinks it's too strong, I'll edit the post accordingly.

Also, I'll erase any mention of the bonus damage. I was under the assumption that this buff is standard for holy figures such as the Saints.

With that said, any other observations?

[Cojemo]

Heya, I'm interested, though I have a question. As far as what is known, is anyone making another Archer or Rider Servant, as those are the spots I'd be interested in.

[Jangel13]

Hey I'm interested in joining and I created a character sheet. Please help me if their are issues with him:

Servant-Date Masamune

Name: Date Masamune

Class: Saber

Gender: Male

Appearance:

Alignment: Lawful good

Personality: carefree but determined he has the single idea to unite the land under the rule of his clan. However knowing that japan is no longer in the warring states period and is already unified he became carefree thinking that the job was already done and he simply didn't live long enough to see it come to fruition he is grateful he was able to follow Toyotomi Hideyoshi in his quest to unify japan during the time. He is now a wandering soul and wants his single wish, until then he is happy drinking sake and fighting worthy opponents that are able to take on the one eyed dragon of Ōshu.

History: Date Masamune was a warrior of great renown and was fearsome to his enemies. He was a great military leader and eventually created one the largest fiefdoms in japan. He had lost against Oda nobunaga in a battle because he had control of rifles and was able to decimate his cavalry forcing him to retreat. He was an arrogant person when he was faced against Hideyoshi when he was told to follow under him and when he came to him after delaying it as long as he could wearing his finest expecting to be executed but instead was spared. From their he followed under him to help unify japan and he created a port bringing in the emissaries from the christen religion using diplomatic relations to show good intentions. He died at the ripe old age of 68 but he still wished he could see the unified japan with his men.

Weapon: Summoned with his armor and iconic crescents moon helmet and his sword which had the symbol of the dragon on the scabbard

Parameters:

STR: A= Date strength is unsurpassed by most as he is able to go toe to toe with great generals on the battlefield in single combat. The few that can beat him are the ones with luck and strategy on their side.

CON: A= Date has a great constitution allowing him to take several deadly blows and keep fighting so long as he has an arm to fight with he will continue to push forward in an attempt to win.

AGI: A= Date was known in his younger years to be athletic and allows him to dodge and block blows with relative ease so long as he can see the attack coming. However his blind side is a major handicap.

MGI: B= Date used his great strength of will and spirit to fight forward. He has training in using his sword and is able to create enough magic to use his noble phatasm even if it will take a lot out of him and his master

LCK: D= Date is not very lucky as he seems to let his pride become arrogance and get him in the way of his destiny. He will push forward and not let luck decide the outcome of his fights

Class skills:
*leadership A= his leadership as a powerful daimyo of old. His leadership urges those who he fights with to push hard against the enemy. His loud cry for war rallies his allies to fight. Increases his own attack strength and those of allies.
*evasion C= Date has trained his body hard to avoid attacks and keep his sight on his enemy. He remains aware of his blind side and is able to use his good eye to a greater degree and dodge attacks

Personal Skills:
*Charisma A= Date is very charismatic and has won over those in his court. He remained stoic and prideful even when facing enemies that would kill him. He proves this by going to hideyoshi after he delayed a response and was able to survive being executed.
*diplomat B= Date was a great diplomat and is proven with his ability to allow the Christian missionaries to come to his port after he convinced those of his court to lift the ban on Christians entering the country.

Noble Phantasm(s):
Able to use his sword to summon a blue flame dragon to his aid aiming it at his enemy to destroy them.

Name: Fire of Ōshu

Title: date maru

Rank: A

NP Type: Anti-Army

Range: 3

Maximum Number of Targets: 100

Description: Summons a dragon from his sword scabard that comes out of his sword the detailed dragon that was smithed in The design of the sword itself emerges from The sword to appear at his side. The dragon is dark blue and made from blue fire and stands 3 stories tall and roars as it stands next to Date. When he summons it and says "go Date maru!" and he thrusts his sword forward and the dragon strikes straight through destroying any enemies in its path that are unable to block it or dodge it.

[Over Illusion]

@Jangel13

Class: Saber

Justify qualification for the class.

We have two sheets currently in contention for the remaining Saber slot, so your odds of getting in are low.

STR: S

S is not a rank.

CON: A

AGI: A

MGI: B

LCK: C

Please justify parameters of this level.

Class Skills: Saber class abilities allow him to use his dragon blade to destroy his enemies in a spectacular fashion. He has the ability to summon his dragon spirit to help him in a fight.

These are not Class Skills.

Personal Skills: Certain abilities a Heroic Spirit may have, such as Charisma, Artistic Talent, etc. Keep close to the legend; modifiers are temporary rank ups, not a rating of how good it is. Limit of three.

This is empty. This should not be empty.

Noble Phantasm(s):
Able to use his sword to summon a blue flame dragon to his aid aiming it at his enemy to destroy them.

Name: Fire of Ōshu

Title: Wrath of the one eyed dragon!

Rank: EX

NP Type: Anti-Army

Range: 3

Maximum Number of Targets: 100

Description: Summons a dragon from his sword that comes out of his sword and appears by his side. The dragon is dark blue and made from blue fire and stands 3 stories tall and roars as it stands next to Date. When he summons it and says "go Wrath of the one eyed Dragon!" and he thrusts his sword forward and the dragon strikes straight through destroying any enemies in its path that are unable to block it or dodge it.

Why does having a title with the word "dragon" in it give him an EX-ranked Noble Phantasm where he summons a dragon?

On the whole, I will be blunt in saying that this sheet baffles me. Very serious revision will need to be undergone before it is properly eligible for consideration.

[Turboshitter]

Alright here’s my re-revised version of Baba Yaga:

Caster

"Hmmm... I wonder if I can get Master to eat this clump of spiders disguised as an apple..."

Class: Caster
True Name: Baba Yaga
Gender: Female
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Height/Weight: 243cm/136kg

Personality:

Baba Yaga is... fickle. Unpredictable. A wildcard just as likely to help you as she is to hinder you, it can be difficult to get a grip on what Baba Yaga is thinking or what she’ll do next. She’s far from crazy or irrational, but appears to be operating on logic and morals completely alien to normal people. Perhaps a consequence of extreme old age and advanced boredom, Baba Yaga bases most of her decisions on momentary whims and gut impulses, helping those who she likes or those whose goals she sympathizes with, and punishing those she dislikes or who she thinks it’ll be most amusing to punish. Basically, her moral code runs on brownie points and whatever Baba Yaga thinks might be funny at the moment. The one consistent thing about Baba Yaga (besides boredom) is that she’ll always honor a promise, and a Master’s contract is no exception. Strange as she may be, those who can take a minute to understand Baba Yaga might, just might be able to make it through the Holy Grail War with her in one piece.

History:

An ambivalent and highly ambiguous force for good and evil in Slavic folklore, most of Baba Yaga’s past is shrouded in mystery, and the exact nature of her being remains unknown. Is she a witch? A goddess? The Earth Mother herself? Or is she just an emissary? No one knows. The only thing that is known, to her Master only, is the reason for the legends regarding her appearance. While she was once a beautiful woman in her youth, as opposed to the hag-like figure most people know her as, her appearance became distorted in legend due to her extremely long legs and her great height, which made her appear as though she could touch the opposite walls of her hut at once (we’re talking some real Bayonetta/Hachishakusama shit here). Over time these features became exaggerated, and as her face grew older with more warts and wrinkles, the image of a spiderlike old crone took hold. She hates this image of herself however, and would kindly remind her Master that her legs are beautiful and go all the way up and no farther, thank you very much.

Stats:
STR: D
END: D
AGL: B
MAG: A
LCK: B
NoPh: A+

Class Skills:

• Territory Creation (A): Construction of Baba Yaga’s Hut, which is superior to a Workshop, becomes possible.
• Item Construction (A): Capable of making healing potions that grant limited immortality.

Personal Skills:

• Divinity (D): Worshipped as a minor goddess or avatar/emissary of the Earth Mother by some, Baba Yaga is guaranteed the bare minimum protection afforded to a goddess.
• Familiar Creation (A): Baba Yaga can create a multitude of complex familiars including reanimated skeletons, floating disembodied hands, talking skulls, and three horsemen named “Day”, “Sun”, and “Night”. The latter three serve as her emissaries when communicating with the outside world becomes necessary, and are marginally stronger than the average familiar of their shape and size. Though they do not possess enough power to fight on par with Servants, all three together are more formidable than most human mages.
• Emissary of the Earth Mother (A++): Baba Yaga is commonly associated with the Earth Mother and is attributed with control over the elements as well as animals, plant life, and the weather. While her ability to control the weather does not allow her to do much other than dictate the day’s forecast (because she lacks access to Koschei the Immortal’s island of Buyan, the home of the winds personified), her command over the raw elemental forces is excellent, giving all her elemental attacks a Rank Up in effectiveness. She can also make plants grow and speak to animals, but Baba Yaga was never much of a gardener.
• High-Speed Divine Words (B)

Noble Phantasm(s):

• Name: Baba Yaga’s Hut
• Title: The Chicken-Legged Castle
• Type: Anti-Army/Anti-Fortress Bounded Field
• Rank: A+
• Range: 1-99
• Description: Baba Yaga’s mobile hut, a magical fortress made from rough-hewn stone and yew that walks on a thousand chicken legs like a millipede. Capable of walking, running, and even jumping hundreds of feet in the air, the hut is a mobile magical weapons platform powered by an inexhaustible mana reactor core (similar to the one found in Prelati’s Spellbook). Amplifying her magecraft like a Temple and supplying her with a small but inexhaustible trickle of mana to supplement her own reserves, Baba Yaga’s innate magical abilities increase to the point where prolonged, continuous use of Anti-Army magecraft (i.e. gratuitous beam spam) becomes possible. When it decides to settle down in one place, fences made of human bones pop up all around it, skewering any unwanted intruders who attempt to enter without Baba Yaga’s permission. The hut is capable of taking as much damage as it can dish out, requiring an Anti-Fortress NP to completely destroy it (since it is itself a fortress), and any damage that it sustains in battle can be fixed with the aid of the trees of the forest, which aid Baba Yaga in the construction of her hut. Outside of the forest, the hut’s self-repair function is inhibited by the corresponding distance from nature, but it can still rebuild itself, albeit slowly, by harvesting materials in the surrounding area. There have been times when Baba Yaga’s hut has been made from a variety of scraps and patchwork materials, and with the addition of its many skittering legs, its appearance takes on a chaotic, almost protean feel, like a living thing. If this metaphor is to be taken literally, the mana reactor core is its heart, and if it is destroyed or stolen, the hut loses all its power and collapses into a pile of stones, twigs, and junk (also chicken’s feet).

• Name: Mortar & Pestle
• Title: I’m Not the Average Witch!
• Type: Anti-Unit, Anti-Army (when used in conjunction w/ magecraft)
• Rank: D
• Range: 1
• Description: Baba Yaga’s vehicle of choice for when leaving her hut becomes a necessity (this can be in case of emergency, a need for stealth and subtlety, or just plain boredom with Baba Yaga). The mortar and pestle she normally wields in her kitchen increase in size in an instant, becoming a witch’s staff and flying chariot rather than mere kitchen implements. The mortar can fly at speeds greater than modern commercial aircraft and achieve similar heights, while the pestle becomes a Mystic Code capable of amplifying Baba Yaga’s magecraft to a degree suitable for short excursions outside the defensive perimeter of her hut. Both can change their dimensions freely, allowing the pestle to extend almost indefinitely and the mortar to carry an infinite amount of junk or passengers (probably junk). While neither are exemplary Mystic Codes in and of themselves, their notoriety, utility, and synergy together makes them worthy of their rank as a Noble Phantasm.

[Over Illusion]

@Turboshitter
Apologies, Fiddle and I will review this when the color has been changed so as to harm our eyes less.

[Cojemo]

@Over Illusion Is there anyone in contention for the Archer/Rider spot left open on team blue?

[ADamnFiddle]

@Over Illusion Is there anyone in contention for the Archer/Rider spot left open on team blue?

@Cojemo

Not to my knowledge~

[Turboshitter]

Alright here’s my re-re-revised version of Baba Yaga:

Caster

"Hmmm... I wonder if I can get Master to eat this clump of spiders disguised as an apple..."

Class: Caster
True Name: Baba Yaga
Gender: Female
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Height/Weight: 243cm/136kg

Personality:

Baba Yaga is... fickle. Unpredictable. A wildcard just as likely to help you as she is to hinder you, it can be difficult to get a grip on what Baba Yaga is thinking or what she’ll do next. She’s far from crazy or irrational, but appears to be operating on logic and morals completely alien to normal people. Perhaps a consequence of extreme old age and advanced boredom, Baba Yaga bases most of her decisions on momentary whims and gut impulses, helping those who she likes or those whose goals she sympathizes with, and punishing those she dislikes or who she thinks it’ll be most amusing to punish. Basically, her moral code runs on brownie points and whatever Baba Yaga thinks might be funny at the moment. The one consistent thing about Baba Yaga (besides boredom) is that she’ll always honor a promise, and a Master’s contract is no exception. Strange as she may be, those who can take a minute to understand Baba Yaga might, just might be able to make it through the Holy Grail War with her in one piece.

History:

An ambivalent and highly ambiguous force for good and evil in Slavic folklore, most of Baba Yaga’s past is shrouded in mystery, and the exact nature of her being remains unknown. Is she a witch? A goddess? The Earth Mother herself? Or is she just an emissary? No one knows. The only thing that is known, to her Master only, is the reason for the legends regarding her appearance. While she was once a beautiful woman in her youth, as opposed to the hag-like figure most people know her as, her appearance became distorted in legend due to her extremely long legs and her great height, which made her appear as though she could touch the opposite walls of her hut at once (we’re talking some real Bayonetta/Hachishakusama shit here). Over time these features became exaggerated, and as her face grew older with more warts and wrinkles, the image of a spiderlike old crone took hold. She hates this image of herself however, and would kindly remind her Master that her legs are beautiful and go all the way up and no farther, thank you very much.

Stats:
STR: D
END: D
AGL: B
MAG: A
LCK: B

Class Skills:

• Territory Creation (A): Construction of Baba Yaga’s Hut, which is superior to a Workshop, becomes possible.
• Item Construction (A): Capable of making healing potions that grant limited immortality.

Personal Skills:

• Divinity (D): Worshipped as a minor goddess or avatar/emissary of the Earth Mother by some, Baba Yaga is guaranteed the bare minimum protection afforded to a goddess.
• Familiar Creation (A): Baba Yaga can create a multitude of complex familiars including reanimated skeletons, floating disembodied hands, talking skulls, and three horsemen named “Day”, “Sun”, and “Night”. The latter three serve as her emissaries when communicating with the outside world becomes necessary, and are marginally stronger than the average familiar of their shape and size. Though they do not possess enough power to fight on par with Servants, all three together are more formidable than most human mages.
• Emissary of the Earth Mother (A++): Baba Yaga is commonly associated with the Earth Mother and is attributed with control over the elements as well as animals, plant life, and the weather. While her ability to control the weather does not allow her to do much other than dictate the day’s forecast because she lacks access to Koschei the Immortal’s island of Buyan, she can also make plants grow and speak to animals.
• High-Speed Divine Words (B)

Noble Phantasm(s):

• Name: Baba Yaga’s Hut
• Title: The Chicken-Legged Castle
• Type: Anti-Army/Anti-Fortress Bounded Field
• Rank: A+
• Range: 30
• Description: Baba Yaga’s mobile hut, a magical fortress made from rough-hewn stone and yew that walks on a thousand chicken legs like a millipede. Capable of walking, running, and even jumping hundreds of feet in the air, the hut is a mobile magical weapons platform powered by an inexhaustible mana reactor core (similar to the one found in Prelati’s Spellbook). Amplifying her magecraft like a Temple and supplying her with a small but inexhaustible trickle of mana to supplement her own reserves, Baba Yaga’s innate magical abilities increase to the point where prolonged, continuous use of Anti-Army magecraft (i.e. gratuitous beam spam) becomes possible. When it decides to settle down in one place, fences made of human bones pop up all around it, skewering any unwanted intruders who attempt to enter without Baba Yaga’s permission. The hut is capable of taking as much damage as it can dish out, requiring an Anti-Fortress NP to completely destroy it (since it is itself a fortress), and any damage that it sustains in battle can be fixed with the aid of the trees of the forest, which aid Baba Yaga in the construction of her hut. Outside of the forest, the hut’s self-repair function is inhibited by the corresponding distance from nature, but it can still rebuild itself, albeit slowly, by harvesting materials in the surrounding area. There have been times when Baba Yaga’s hut has been made from a variety of scraps and patchwork materials, and with the addition of its many skittering legs, its appearance takes on a chaotic, almost protean feel, like a living thing. If this metaphor is to be taken literally, the mana reactor core is its heart, and if it is destroyed or stolen, the hut loses all its power and collapses into a pile of stones, twigs, and junk (also chicken’s feet).

• Name: Mortar & Pestle
• Title: I’m Not the Average Witch!
• Type: Anti-Unit, Anti-Army (when used in conjunction w/ magecraft)
• Rank: D
• Range: 1
• Description: Baba Yaga’s vehicle of choice for when leaving her hut becomes a necessity (this can be in case of emergency, a need for stealth and subtlety, or just plain boredom with Baba Yaga). The mortar and pestle she normally wields in her kitchen increase in size in an instant, becoming a witch’s staff and flying chariot rather than mere kitchen implements. The mortar can fly at speeds greater than modern commercial aircraft and achieve similar heights, while the pestle becomes a Mystic Code capable of amplifying Baba Yaga’s magecraft to a degree suitable for short excursions outside the defensive perimeter of her hut. Both can change their dimensions freely, allowing the pestle to extend and the mortar to grow larger as long as Baba Yaga has the prana to do so. While neither are exemplary Mystic Codes in and of themselves, their notoriety, utility, and synergy together makes them worthy of their rank as a Noble Phantasm.

[Over Illusion]

@Turboshitter

As I said previously, please remove the rank-up on elemental attacks from the Personal Skill.

As I said previously, please change the range on the hut.

It's worth noting that you can call the prana furnace "inexhaustible" but it's really not, otherwise the Counter Force would break you over its knee.

The pestle cannot extend indefinitely as shifting it like that will require prana expenditure.

The mortar cannot carry an infinite amount of things as that would be Spatial Quarantine.

@Jangel13

Review of the revised version coming shortly, I must first increase my BAC.

[Jangel13]

@Over Illusion just finished

[Over Illusion]

@Jangel13

Review for Masamune

Hey I'm interested in joining and I created a character sheet. Please help me if their are issues with him:

Okay, using the wrong "there" isn't the best start, but it's cool, I believe in benefit of the doubt.

Name: Date Masamune

Class: Saber

Please justify why he qualifies for the Saber class to begin with.

Gender: Male

Gross.

Alignment: Lawful good

Gross.

Personality: carefree but determined he has the single idea to unite the land under the rule of his clan. However knowing that japan is no longer in the warring states period and is already unified he became carefree thinking that the job was already done and he simply didn't live long enough to see it come to fruition he is grateful he was able to follow Toyotomi Hideyoshi in his quest to unify japan during the time.

What is this sentence?

Is that an attempt to hurt me?

He is now a wandering soul and wants his single wish,

Thank you for informing us as to what this is.

Oh wait.

until then he is happy drinking sake and fighting worthy opponents that are able to take on the one eyed dragon of Ōshu.

Poor bastard.

History: Date Masamune was a warrior of great renown and was fearsome to his enemies. He was a great military leader and eventually created one the largest fiefdoms in japan.

Okay.

He had lost against Oda nobunaga in a battle because he had control of rifles and was able to decimate his cavalry forcing him to retreat.

This is quite possibly the best summarization of history I have ever read.

I mean that in the worst way.

Weapon: Summoned with his armor and iconic crescents moon helmet and his sword which had the symbol of the dragon on the scabbard

What happens if I break it in the vicinity of a Beyblade?

STR: A= Date strength is unsurpassed by most as he is able to go toe to toe with great generals on the battlefield in single combat. The few that can beat him are the ones with luck and strategy on their side.

I've been holding back from making syntax comments, but like, okay, serious question.

Are you real?

I'm inquiring because I'm unsure as to if you are real or if you are a construct designed by a malefic deity who wants to make me cry.

Anyway, let's look at the canon Servants with A STR.

-Girl who is literally a dragon and not just nicknamed after one.
-Self-Suggestion Trap.
-Chops hills in half for fun.
-Literally punched planets and they exploded.
-Excalibur is his arm.
-K I N T O K I
-Monsters beyond human limits.
-Mad Enhancement

Seeing a pattern?

The pattern is that "I am strong for normal people" holds no water.

This is literally you just saying a thing and assuming I'll accept it.

Nobu's STR is C.

STR to C.

CON: A= Date has a great constitution allowing him to take several deadly blows and keep fighting so long as he has an arm to fight with he will continue to push forward in an attempt to win.

The same as above.

There is nothing in his legend that means he should have a high CON, let alone one at the A rank.

I won't explain this in depth because honestly, I don't think any of what I'm saying is going to reach the end result of this profile becoming acceptable.

CON to C.

AGI: A= Date was known in his younger years to be athletic and allows him to dodge and block blows with relative ease so long as he can see the attack coming. However his blind side is a major handicap.

This is not justification for an A rank parameter.

Same as above.

I'd hope you're getting the idea by now.

MGI: B= Date used his great strength of will and spirit to fight forward. He has training in using his sword and is able to create enough magic to use his noble phatasm even if it will take a lot out of him and his master

Being trained in how to use a sword and being determined does not make you hold more magical energy.

Also, okay, it's not "magic". It's magical energy, or prana, or maryoku, or 魔力, or any of those. It's not magic. Don't call it magic.

LCK: D= Date is not very lucky as he seems to let his pride become arrogance and get him in the way of his destiny. He will push forward and not let luck decide the outcome of his fights

I like how you've like

managed to

totally misunderstand what LCK does.

Fiddle even said in the CS that LCK is "Ability to defy fate".

If you're saying "fuck you, destiny" then that would be high LCK.

That said, I do agree with a low LCK.

So keep it as it is, but know that every time you type a sentence, Tim Berners-Lee cries.

Class skills:
*leadership A= his leadership as a powerful daimyo of old. His leadership urges those who he fights with to push hard against the enemy. His loud cry for war rallies his allies to fight. Increases his own attack strength and those of allies.
*evasion C= Date has trained his body hard to avoid attacks and keep his sight on his enemy. He remains aware of his blind side and is able to use his good eye to a greater degree and dodge attacks

...

Okay, buddy, have you read FSN?

Have you watched the anime?

Have you read that garbage heap known as the wiki?

Because the wiki isn't this bad, and the wiki thinks Counter Magic is a thing.

This isn't a class skill.

So, I'll try and break this down for you.

A class skill means a skill inherent to the class container.

In other words, skill that all Sabers have.

Let's look at all the Sabers in canon to see who have the CLASSIC CLASS SKILLS of evasion and leadership!

...

Oh.

None of them do.

That's because the Class Skills are Magic Resistance and Riding.

I'd keep going, but I like to think I have more class than that.

You know, class.

C L A S S

*Charisma A= Date is very charismatic and has won over those in his court. He remained stoic and prideful even when facing enemies that would kill him. He proves this by going to hideyoshi after he delayed a response and was able to survive being executed.

Charisma A is like

Iskandar and Emperors.

Date Masamune is not like

Iskandar or an Emperor.

The Charisma skill is not being a smooth talker, it's leading troops.

Even a stopped clock is right twice a day, but you're somehow six hours behind so you're always as wrong as possible.

*diplomat B= Date was a great diplomat and is proven with his ability to allow the Christian missionaries to come to his port after he convinced those of his court to lift the ban on Christians entering the country.

What is this skill

What is any of this

All around me are familiar faces

Worn out places, worn out faces

Bright and early for their daily races

Going nowhere, going nowhere

Noble Phantasm(s):
Able to use his sword to summon a blue flame dragon to his aid aiming it at his enemy to destroy them.

It sure is a good thing that image is royalty-free

I sure wouldn't want to get sued

ahaha

aha

ha

they said dying wasn't supposed to hurt like this

Name: Fire of Ōshu

Title: date maru

Rank: A

NP Type: Anti-Army

Range: 3

Maximum Number of Targets: 100

HERE WE GO AGAIN

Description: Summons a dragon from his sword scabard that comes out of his sword

I was joking about the Beyblade thing and it actually happened holy shit

Also jesus christ this english

Anyway, uh

So.

A Noble Phantasm's a recreation of feat or a crystallized legend.

Now, I'll confess I'm no Date Masamune expert, so correct me if I'm wrong, but uh.

I don't seem to recall him summoning a dragon.

I don't recall this at all.

I just remember him being nicknamed "the one-eyed dragon".

I didn't know nicknames gave you A rank Noble Phantasms.

Really makes you think.

Oh yeah, as an aside, there are Western Dragons and Eastern Dragons. I'm assuming this is the latter since I'm like, 90% sure Japan's eastern.

And you, uh, might not have noticed since I'm not wholly sure you read the banlist or are capable of doing so, but eastern dragons are banned.

So uh, yeah.

Please stop.

the detailed dragon that was smithed in The design of the sword itself emerges from The sword to appear at his side. The dragon is dark blue and made from blue fire and stands 3 stories tall and roars as it stands next to Date.

Soshite tsudoishi STARDUST

Hyakunen me no MEZAME NI YOBARETE

When he summons it and says "go Date maru!" and he thrusts his sword forward and the dragon strikes straight through destroying any enemies in its path that are unable to block it or dodge it.

Okay, so.

Here's the crux of it.

If I ignore your writing quality, your misunderstanding of mechanics, your ignorance of the banlist, and your utter failure to utilize the character sheet, then there's nothing.

If I ignore this profile's flaws and try to pretend they aren't there, I literally cannot conceptualize that without making your post utterly blank.

Failure is built into the essence of this character.

Denied with the twitch of the right eye, a half-hearted laugh, and the soft sound of crying as the lights dim.

I will not accept future reapplications.

Please have a good day, but not here.

[Over Illusion]

As an aside to everyone else present, I want you to know that you shouldn't worry about this happening to you. None of the other apps thus far have warranted the level of response that this one has. You're all wonderful and I hope we can have fun together~

[Jangel13]

Well damn that was needlessly hurtful. Fine have fun good luck with your rp

[Cojemo]

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Not to my knowledge~

@ADamnFiddle

Yay! I have 3 Servant ideas, and funnily enough one of them matches with Achilles and is an Archer, but isn't Chiron. If you don't mind, i'm gonna throw out a very quick idea of who I'll roll with, and if you want you can pick which of the 3 I'll play. I may as well get @Over Illusion to look as well.

The first is Paris in the Archer class. Abductor of Helen and driving force of the Trojan War, as well as the one who shot Achilles' heel. He'd be cowardly and preferring to fight from the shadows (having low rank presence concealment), though he'd follow his word and be upfront about his cowardice. He'd also be a ladies man, and one of his NP's would be able to bewitch any single female he chooses with a magic resistance of C or lower. The other would be a shot that will always hit his opponent in their weakest spot to make them culnerable, but not kill them. This comes from both his battle with Diomedes and Achilles. Straight up I did not intend for him to tie into other characters, but it'd be quite interesting to have Achilles killer on the battlefield.

Second would be Sinbad the Sailor in the Rider class. Unlike how he's often portrayed in media as a skilled adventurer, my interpretation of him makes him a loudmouth who, while decently skilled, only managed to survive out of sheer luck. I'd give him EX rank luck. He'd be bombastic and engage in fights where he's clearly outmatched sheerly for the thrill, and have no fear of death. At the same time though, with most of his ventures leading to his crew mates dying, he'd have a strong bond with his master and do his best to assure their safety. His two biggest NP's would be one where he can procure any mount (car, motorcycle, etc...) and turn it into a D class NP, and if he crashes it making an explosion equal to a C rank attack. This is based off how he never actually kept most of his mounts, and the one common thing among them is that they crashed in spectacular fashion. His second would be the manifestation of his luck on his seven voyages, and act similar to Heracles' God Hand. Basically, if there would be a situation where Sinbad would die, destiny would change itself and erect a situation where he escapes this fate, giving him the chance to counter attack or escape. This could be his opponent losing their footing or sneezing, the attack simply missing by a hair even if it shouldn't have, or other possibilities. Of course, this only activates seven times.

Lastly would be Saint George the Rider. I won't describe him too much since he already exists, but I will say my reasoning for having him here is because of how many over the top and extravagant Servants there are currently as far as personality goes, so he'd be a good counter to that. Plus, I just think he's an awesome Servant and his focus on defense would be another great juxtaposition. Oh, and the place where most of my family lives is named after him which is cool.

So yeah, those are the general ideas I have. Any question or whatnot you can ask for clarification, and if you already have preference you can just tell me. Sorry if you'd prefer I didn't do this, I just really love discussing ideas for things, especially Fate.

[Over Illusion]

<Snipped quote by ADamnFiddle>

Yay! I have 3 Servant ideas, and funnily enough one of them matches with Achilles and is an Archer, but isn't Chiron. If you don't mind, i'm gonna throw out a very quick idea of who I'll roll with, and if you want you can pick which of the 3 I'll play. I may as well get @Over Illusion to look as well.

The first is Paris in the Archer class. Abductor of Helen and driving force of the Trojan War, as well as the one who shot Achilles' heel. He'd be cowardly and preferring to fight from the shadows (having low rank presence concealment), though he'd follow his word and be upfront about his cowardice. He'd also be a ladies man, and one of his NP's would be able to bewitch any single female he chooses with a magic resistance of C or lower. The other would be a shot that will always hit his opponent in their weakest spot to make them culnerable, but not kill them. This comes from both his battle with Diomedes and Achilles. Straight up I did not intend for him to tie into other characters, but it'd be quite interesting to have Achilles killer on the battlefield.

Second would be Sinbad the Sailor in the Rider class. Unlike how he's often portrayed in media as a skilled adventurer, my interpretation of him makes him a loudmouth who, while decently skilled, only managed to survive out of sheer luck. I'd give him EX rank luck. He'd be bombastic and engage in fights where he's clearly outmatched sheerly for the thrill, and have no fear of death. At the same time though, with most of his ventures leading to his crew mates dying, he'd have a strong bond with his master and do his best to assure their safety. His two biggest NP's would be one where he can procure any mount (car, motorcycle, etc...) and turn it into a D class NP, and if he crashes it making an explosion equal to a C rank attack. This is based off how he never actually kept most of his mounts, and the one common thing among them is that they crashed in spectacular fashion. His second would be the manifestation of his luck on his seven voyages, and act similar to Heracles' God Hand. Basically, if there would be a situation where Sinbad would die, destiny would change itself and erect a situation where he escapes this fate, giving him the chance to counter attack or escape. This could be his opponent losing their footing or sneezing, the attack simply missing by a hair even if it shouldn't have, or other possibilities. Of course, this only activates seven times.

Lastly would be Saint George the Rider. I won't describe him too much since he already exists, but I will say my reasoning for having him here is because of how many over the top and extravagant Servants there are currently as far as personality goes, so he'd be a good counter to that. Plus, I just think he's an awesome Servant and his focus on defense would be another great juxtaposition. Oh, and the place where most of my family lives is named after him which is cool.

So yeah, those are the general ideas I have. Any question or whatnot you can ask for clarification, and if you already have preference you can just tell me. Sorry if you'd prefer I didn't do this, I just really love discussing ideas for things, especially Fate.

@Cojemo

Paris is fine in theory, but the justification for the first NP is shaky. The second one would involve Apollo interference like how Phoebus Catastrophe does, as an aside. For Sinbad, justification for the first NP.

The second NP's sublimated into EX LCK so that's pointless, and the effect itself is a no for balancing.

George is fine.

[ManyThings]

@Over Illusion Damn, did you get stung by an ineptly-made CS as a child or something?