MFP#5 - Sleep (Voting and Feedback)

[Loksfjoer]

Welcome to the Voting and Feedback round for MFP#5!

Voting and Feedback guidelines

• Please take your time to read through all the entries before voting for your favourite work. The reasons you base your vote on are up to you, as long the vote isn’t based on whether or not you like the author.
  It would be nice if you could share why you voted for a specific work.
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• The entry with the most votes will win, but in case of a tie a Contest Mod will cast the tie-breaker vote.
• You can vote for entries and post your feedback in this thread, but if you rather have your vote and/or feedback be anonymous you can PM it to @Calle.
• The voting period deadline is April 29th, 9:00 CET, which is 7:00 server time (both times are in a.m.).

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The Entries

Reapt

Sleep is majesty,

With every morning,

And every sunset,

My virtue lasts,

From the days past,

To the next future of my life.

The grace,

The honor,

The pious endeavor,

Sleep isn't a wonder.

By @Sebastian D

Sleep is hell

I looked upon the baleful clock and sneered at its crimson face, my expression defiance made manifest and clear.

I would not sleep tonight nor any other night, my health be damned, for I knew what awaited me there in that long and unending dark…

A horror beyond horrors, beyond mortal imagining.

For sleep, that closing of one’s eyes and resting of one’s head, is more than just a break in the endless stream of life’s consciousness…

Sleep is Hell.

By @ZAVAZggg

I always loved to watch you sleep

I always loved to watch you sleep.

Every night, when you drifted off, I would stay up to watch you sleep. Each morning, before you rose, I would get up to watch you sleep. You looked so peaceful, lying there so still and composed. I would creep around on the tips of my toes, trying my hardest not to make a sound. You were so beautiful when you were sleeping, I never had the heart to wake you.

Until I did.

And then you saw me.

And then you started to scream.

Our Dream

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My sweet dreamy prince, when I first spotted you, I knew that we were met to be.
Your golden hair shine like the sun, while your eyes are blue as the sweet sea.
I walk with you everyday after class, after school, after your club and then we have our alone time under the pine tree.
My hearts skip a beat when I'm around you, you make my sad life feel so calm and carefree.
Sometimes I wonder if you and I will ever free.

When I sleep however, I dream on what our future is going to be. You, me, getting marry, enjoying the sunset while drinking our green tea.
We would run around in star-like field, laughing in glee.
While the sun is rising, we hold eachother hands, saying I love you and then wake up, finally like a unhappy bumblebee.

I want to hold hands with you, without eyes looking at us like we are some disease.
I want to take you somewhere, somewhere that is not this reality.
Our true reality will be free, no eyes looking at us with hate, no yelling, just you and I with our gravity.
I would be your knight and you as my sweet prince, where we can run away, away from our reality that is called our tragedy.

For now, we will look away from each other and keep our mouth shut, before anyone will show their brutality.
I will keep my shy persona on while you keep wearing yours, even if both of us feel very unhappily.
In our dream world, we will ride in the purple clouds, without thoughts on our minds, riding on a place that's called our home, our land, our sanctuary....Our Dream.

By @sassy1085

[Kalleth]

I vote for I always loved to watch you sleep. Love a good bit of horror.

[Shovel]

My vote goes to Reapt. Really like the rthyhm.

[spicykvnt]

I feel like my cat wrote "I loved to watch you sleep"

[Silentfeather]

I love the one that is "I always loved to watch you sleep." it is terrifying to me to wake up and see someone staring at me while I sleep. I vote for that one 100%!

[BangoSkank]

Gotta vote for the "I always loved to watch you sleep" one. Solid.

[Loksfjoer]

Voting will end in about twelve hours.

[Loksfjoer]

The voting period had come to an end and with no additional votes, the winner is I always loved to watch you sleep with 4 votes.
Congratulations!

[Kassarock]

Thanks for the votes everyone!

[Zmija Sebastian]

@Shovel Thanks for your vote.