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@Tackytaff Awesome character! Pending the couple minor edits that I mentioned in discord, feel free to post him over to the Characters tab and come out with an intro post. Welcome aboard!
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Hey Pir! Casii lives! I like her and I'm excited that someone finally made a yasoi character. I appreciate the amount of attention paid to their unique culture and lore and how you were able to play coy with their decline. Casii seems fun and complex and I see a good storyline ahead for her. Below are a few small amendments I'd like you to consider. Pending those, she's approved. Feel free to post her in the Characters tab and introduce her to the world.

1) "Should she find an interesting subject of fauna, she will take a few seeds and keep them with her." I think you're looking for 'flora'.

2) One of Great Gran's cognomens may need a touch of shortening. It's a bit of a mouthful.

3) Just a bit of a tonal thing, though I like her focuses: yasoi don't distinguish their magic as much between schools as they do between effects.

4) Yasoi aren't strictly arboreal. They just don't distinguish much between trees, hills, cliffs, etc. I love the image of them growing things right from the great branches of their trees, down the hillsides and cliffsides to the forest floor: all different sorts of plants that thrive in different light and watering conditions.

5) Might use a different descriptor than 'meaty' for human noses from their perspective. It's all in the bridge of the nose and humans have much less of a bridge than yasoi.

Ultimately, those are mostly nit-picky little things. Casii looks great and I look forward to seeing her in the story!
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Anything to revise?

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@jdh97 Okay, sorry for taking so long with this. Life has kept me plenty busy. Below are some questions, suggestions, and ideas regarding your character sheet.

1) Nice prose and evocative imagery. I appreciate the way that you pose questions, rhetorical or otherwise.

2) Revidian as opposed to Rividian.

3) Be aware that, in Quentic Constantian society, there is room for quite a bit in terms of hetero/homosexuality and even polygamy in some interpretations. However, a gender binary nonetheless exists and is strongly normative, as reflected in each of the gods having two aspects: male and female. A character who doesn't clearly fit either acknowledged gender may either simply have their gender and sex assumed or, in some cases, be a point of scrutiny. Overall, we're not dealing with modern western or indigenous conceptions of gender here and I want these interactions to be played out authentically or not at all.

4) "That doesn’t mean the downward spiral doesn’t lie in wait for Vieri elsewhere, it’s just so hard to tell where the ice is thin." - Love the way that you put this.

5) An 8.0 even is boring. We already have a few who are right on the number, too. Maybe an 8.12 or an 8.07, or something along those lines?

6) Avince is the capital of the old empire (think analogous to Rome), so that might be cool to play around with. It's also the seat of the Optimate, head of the Quentic faith: a place where piety, power, and desire meet, intermingle, and clash.

6) lo (place name) type names would very much mark one out as common as opposed to being among the merchant or noble classes and would close some doors. This is something that your character and their parents would be aware of, having grown up in this world.
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3) Be aware that, in Quentic Constantian society, there is room for quite a bit in terms of hetero/homosexuality and even polygamy in some interpretations. However, a gender binary nonetheless exists and is strongly normative, as reflected in each of the gods having two aspects: male and female. A character who doesn't clearly fit either acknowledged gender may either simply have their gender and sex assumed or, in some cases, be a point of scrutiny. Overall, we're not dealing with modern western or indigenous conceptions of gender here and I want these interactions to be played out authentically or not at all.

6) lo (place name) type names would very much mark one out as common as opposed to being among the merchant or noble classes and would close some doors. This is something that your character and their parents would be aware of, having grown up in this world.

3) I suspected this might have been the case, and saw it as what could be a good point of conflict for the character. If you or anyone else have problems with the way this plays out, I will rework the character without any grudge.

6) I was under the impression this would have shown Joruban heritage, my mistake. Could you suggest a fitting Joruban surname in that case?
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3) Just wanted to have everything on the table and, if it's something that you went into with full knowledge of how it might play out, we're cool! I'm hoping we can maintain an authentic voice on this and have it be an intriguing, fulfilling, and thought--provoking character plot or subplot.

6) Yoburu, Bangui, Lohasi, Semenjo, Jahar, Abumi, Zimbasu, Mazenga, Ozumbo, Imangya.
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7-12-22 Updates

Hey all! Dropping some big and long overdue updates today. Please find a list of them below, by OOC Section.

Overall: All Lore section posts are now linked in the opening post for quicker access.

General Magic Lore: Added An In-Depth Guide to RAS Levels; Sensing, Drawing, and Casting Range; Animals and Magic.

World Lore: Additions to 'The Yasoi' and 'Fauna of Sipenta', added Sentient and Near-Sentient Species of Sipenta, Past and Present.

The Nations of Sipenta: Miatto added.

School Lore: All Arch Zeno profiles have been added to Eminent Figures,

Visuals, Maps, and Graphics: Section finally added.
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THE OWL GLASS ORDER

Prologue
This is a story that takes place in Ersand'Enise, a name that sounds like when one sneezes after being brushed by chilly breeze. This is home to the Academy of Thaumaturgy, a place for fancy words and even fancier wizard hats. Across the land of Sipenta, the best and brightest of those born during the double ascendance of Shune the Learner, join the storied establishment's newest cohort. They bring their hopes, their fears, their background, and considerable power in 'The Gift' with them. Into this potent mix of burgeoning opportunity and where lurking peril lies, they step forward, the Magical-Animals known as Magimals.

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1) Religious Lore: The Afterlife, Angels and Demons, and The Goddess Who is Not added. Additional information added to Religious Orders.

2) School Lore: The first two events of The Trials have been added.

3) World Lore: Sirrahi and Eeaiko names added to naming customs.
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@RezonanceV Evander is accepted. Feel free to post him into the Characters tab, and welcome aboard!
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Colette passes through the Queensgate! At the request of the Holy See, the beautiful sword maiden has taken an office in Cathedral Square. How is her sweet little Yalen doing by himself?

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[NPC][Shifty Elf Gang]


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Both of these recent NPCs are great and are approved!
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Karl 1.0 is here, need to expand upon but didn't want people to wait.

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