[OOC] Phoenix Wing (A Fairy Tail RP-Always Open, Open)

[MarshiestMallow]

Blargh

Probably not gonna get the next day up until tomorrow

[Lugubrious]

Integrity, a characteristic necessary for good leaders, is the ability to continue to do what's right when nobody's watching.

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Woah hold your horse there bucko. I certainly wasn't thinking anything sexual when I bite peoples hands, and considering that people bite as an attack in good ol anime logic. I saw it as nothing more than a humor laugh it off situation, not "oh kinky;)" Yet if peoples first instinct was to treat it as a sexual situation then thats kind of sad. Mostly if they read they would see they are currently annoyed by each other.

@Oblivion666

I only brought up the kinky bit saying that it was a possible interpretation that I didn't think was the case. My first guess was the correct one: that they're childish. Just so you know, there's a world of difference between the opposite of serious and the opposite of mature.

[Burthstone]

@Lugubrious

While you're on the subject of examining characters, I'm curios as to how mine come across.

Mostly as to what their personality seems to be, as that's kinda the more important part.

[Oblivion666]

Integrity, a characteristic necessary for good leaders, is the ability to continue to do what's right when nobody's watching.

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I only brought up the kinky bit saying that it was a possible interpretation that I didn't think was the case. My first guess was the correct one: that they're childish. Just so you know, there's a world of difference between the opposite of serious and the opposite of mature.

@Lugubrious

Zephyr is neither. He's doesn't find that fun. Hence why he drew on bandits faves with prince

[Lugubrious]

@Lugubrious

While you're on the subject of examining characters, I'm curios as to how mine come across.

Mostly as to what their personality seems to be, as that's kinda the more important part.

@Burthstone

I have no complaints so far. I've only really interacted with Mark, who seems rather normal and decent despite his guild, and Grant, who is about as evil as I imagine you intend him to be.

[Burthstone]

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I have no complaints so far. I've only really interacted with Mark, who seems rather normal and decent despite his guild, and Grant, who is about as evil as I imagine you intend him to be.

@Lugubrious

Glad to know that my Villain char comes off as evil.

Normally they come off as regular jackasses, just with weaponry.

[Jangel13]

Well I got nothing until the next day

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@Raijinslayer Have you seen gate yet? its awsome

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@Raijinslayer Have you seen gate yet? its awsome

@liferusher

there are people like this that just slaughtered everyone

[Oblivion666]

@liferusher So you want Ike to visit Isla?

[CitrusArms]

As long as everyone's asking, how's my writing?

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@liferusher So you want Ike to visit Isla?

@Oblivion666

sure thing

[Lugubrious]

As long as everyone's asking, how's my writing?

@CirusArvennicus

Burth's the only one asking, but I have no complaints about your writing either. You characterize decently well, with enough detail, strong verbs, and varied sentence structure to keep it interesting, and you clearly pay attention to your grammar, punctuation, capitalization, and spelling. You sometimes switch between past tense and present tense for no immediately obvious reason, which can be somewhat jolting, and you still use a bunch of passive verbs that could be changed into anything more interesting without too much difficulty. All in all, you're a good Casual writer. Fun to RP with and exhibiting competence, but perhaps in need of more editing to make sure everything's the best it could be.

[MarshiestMallow]

I'm not going to ask cause I'm on my phone most of the time and it has a mind of its own to changing words and things.

[CitrusArms]

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Burth's the only one asking, but I have no complaints about your writing either. You characterize decently well, with enough detail, strong verbs, and varied sentence structure to keep it interesting, and you clearly pay attention to your grammar, punctuation, capitalization, and spelling. You sometimes switch between past tense and present tense for no immediately obvious reason, which can be somewhat jolting, and you still use a bunch of passive verbs that could be changed into anything more interesting without too much difficulty. All in all, you're a good Casual writer. Fun to RP with and exhibiting competence, but perhaps in need of more editing to make sure everything's the best it could be.

@Lugubrious

That makes sense. They're all first drafts.

As for the tense switching... I think I use it as action vs. reaction? I don't notice tense all that much, myself. x:

Well, it's not that I don't notice it. More like... I dunno. *shrugs*

[Remram]

I'm not even going to ask about my writing. I know I suck. xD

[Lugubrious]

I'm not even going to ask about my writing. I know I suck. xD

@hatakekuro

Tell yourself that, and you will. You must have some pride in yourself in order to improve.

You write compellingly. There's seldom a dull moment, with the unique characters you've introduced. One reason our various characters seem to interact so often is because I enjoy playing with you--we enhance one anothers' characters via their interaction. It's never just filler with you, and that is admirable.

If I had one criticism, it would be not posting with Enma or doing the super-secret-plot-thingy related to him yet.

Oh, and @Everyone, it might be a bit early, but there's going to be a pretty awesome plot thingy happening with Frenzy Plant immediately post-timeskip. Will definitely be a good time. As always, I'd be happy to see more characters in my guild.

[Remram]

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Tell yourself that, and you will. You must have some pride in yourself in order to improve.

You write compellingly. There's seldom a dull moment, with the unique characters you've introduced. One reason our various characters seem to interact so often is because I enjoy playing with you--we enhance one anothers' characters via their interaction. It's never just filler with you, and that is admirable.

If I had one criticism, it would be not posting with Enma or doing the super-secret-plot-thingy related to him yet.

Oh, and @Everyone, it might be a bit early, but there's going to be a pretty awesome plot thingy happening with Frenzy Plant immediately post-timeskip. Will definitely be a good time. As always, I'd be happy to see more characters in my guild.

@Lugubrious

Thanks. That means a lot. I don't have the greatest confidence in myself so it helps. ^^;;

And I did post Enma at the party already and I'm working on that thing now.

[CitrusArms]

I remember hearing once that reading good books can help you write better. Perhaps it's something I should do more of. I just got done with 1984 and Fahrenheit 451. I think I might read Dune, next...

[Expolar]

@Lugubrious
If you're still in the mood of critiquing. What do you think of my writing?

I don't know how much of my posts you read, but I would like to try and improve. Any comments would be nice to hear.