Mistress Dizzy said
Yay!How do I start?
At this point just sort of jump in and introduce your character how you see fit. Once that's done we'll see if we can give everyone a sort of goal to keep the roleplay going.
RoflsMazoy said
I don't think I'll be using the crossbow guy now, because I can't come up with a good story for it but still, I got some other characters instead.Kreiss would probably give quests to do with defending a place, or some kind of army stuff, you know how army guys are.The Old Guy would probably give quests investigating nearby ruins and also maybe bandit loot caches and stuff like that.
The second character made me laugh really hard "age: old?" and seems quite fun but he's a bit iffy. Since there are so many unknowns about him it's hard to say if I can accept him or not (and also f this were a submission for the actual Project Shadow it would be sent back to you since the artist couldn't draw something not described) So see if you can make him remain mysterious without being so much so that he's an issue. (also nice idea on the hole because game wise it would mean you didn't have to pay for an entire building to be drawn, just a hole and sign)
The first character, Kreiss seems like a good one. First time someone wrote their abilities in a way that seems very game like and in a way I can picture being in the games. That being said there are some issues.
1) You state he can move quickly but yet one of his abilities involves carrying five shields around that he can launch. That's very much heavy. (Either that or they appear out of thin air which is a bit too much magic...unless once again he was lifting them from somewhere)
2) The second ability is a bit confusing, the shield blocks and heals but is somehow weaker than a normal shield?
3) Some typos and such (You called the White Cross, White Knights. Some of the characteristics seem more like a thought than a characteristic, and so forth) nothing bad enough to keep the Cs from being accepted just needs some work.
Overall the old man needs some more specific details and Kreiss needs his abilities touched up a bit and clarified how they work.
Good job and I look forward to seeing both of the characters one day make it in Project Shadow