[OOC] Invincible - Chapter I : Origination

[twave]

Yup. Were were the first collab up and we didn't beat around the bush.

[Kirah]

Yeah I read the post, I just hadn't realized they had actually come into contact with the guy with the sign.

[twave]

Oh. I was trying to get people together. I figured them walking toward the get with the sign was enough.

[Didos]

I thought we were all getting picked up at different times.

Anyway, I felt the posts were open-ended enough to just skip past the whole finding the dude with the sign.

[twave]

Ah. Leave to the island same day. Got it.

[Nevermind]

Are we ready to move on? I'll mostly skim over the guy with the sign thing. Just mention we all found the guy.

[Kirah]

@t2wave I think where I'm getting confused with your post is it is unclear which Point of View we're in. I have found that this is often a problem with collab posts that aren't in one strict POV. Don't get me wrong it can be done in such a way that it flows well. In this particular case a lot of the issue comes with the pronouns. There are two females, which is bound to happen a lot in this rp. I have found it easier to read, and even write collab posts in a single POV. If you have to write it in two (or more) there needs to be some clear definition of when the POV switches. Or a bit more distancing between the current POV and the person they are looking at. Even a line between the two characters would help.

[Write]

@Nevermind I think that'd be best!

[twave]

I would have to think about that for a while. I am not particularly adept writer. I fail to be able to work out in my head how to make it less confusing without constantly repeating the same details. Or never do a collab again. Yeah, I'll probably never write a book outside something technical.

[Kirah]

@t2wave I'm not saying don't write! Learning how to write takes a ton of practice, and reading. Please don't feel like I'm saying it was awful, it wasn't. The post was just a bit hard to tell who was being the POV character when. I think the line breaks, or shoot do a collab with me, and I can show you some tricks that I've learned.

When you write a post in one POV it helps to be in an editor of some sort, be it titanpad or a Google document, even if you have to do it back and forth in PMs it can be cleaned up to be in one POV rather than switching. That way you can work out how the whole post fits together with your partner. I normally just give stage directions on what my character is doing, and then let the person who is writing the POV character edit it to be from their character's POV. It doesn't always work, sometimes it looks bad, like in our last post "eyes lit up" sounds awkward and forced, and that's because I wrote that. It isn't in McHaggis' voice so it's clunky.

Believe me working with tight POV is hard, professional writers spend an unbelievable amount of time and energy trying to get it to work right.

[twave]

@Kirah I do not think I have ever gotten a critique on my posts here. Generally I use a different structure that breaks things up better. But in this case I felt it would look cluttered with all the back and forth. A detail that apparently bothers me more than a sloppy post.

[Nevermind]

Working on a post for the IC. Not sure when it will be up. Can't promise tonight.

[Valhalla]

Hopefully before the IC post is out, Cryptiic and I will be finished with our collab. If not then I'll include a small plane scene, and then follow up with a reply to current events.

[Nevermind]

Hopefully before the IC post is out, Cryptiic and I will be finished with our collab. If not then I'll include a small plane scene, and then follow up with a reply to current events.

@Valhalla

Sorry, I wasn't aware you weren't finished. Haven't really had time to check back. IC will be up tomorrow.

[Valhalla]

No need to apologize. It's been a couple days since any movement and I understand people are probably getting antsy. If need be, I'm sure we can always post our collab after the next IC post and then just wait till' others reply before posting again.

[McHaggis]

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[Valhalla]

You could put a placeholder up ^^ Especially since the end result is everyone meets up with the Smith sign person, so it won't change much, yeah?

@McHaggis

Ooh! Good idea! Would that be alright @Nevermind? That way the IC doesn't have to be postponed any longer. (:

[Nevermind]

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Ooh! Good idea! Would that be alright @Nevermind? That way the IC doesn't have to be postponed any longer. (:

@Valhalla

Sure, but still, the IC will most likely hit tomorrow. Mostly due to the fact I got 2 hours sleep last night and I would preferably like more than that tonight. But I'll try.

Edit: Yeah, sorry guys. I got some of the post done but I'm gonna have to pussy out. Will be up tomorrow, though.
Reminder: once we get there, it will be a lot more open! Much more interaction and freedom to do whatever you like.

[twave]

Broke up my post to hopefully make it easier to read.

[Cryptiic]

Post Updated. :)